SwaRon OS :Need You Now ...(current track) last part pg- 14

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Deepika

@_Deepika_

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Posted: 11 years ago

Hey Friends...Here is a new OS..its on current track..SwaRon misunderstandings..the baseless fight and carelessly handled characters forced me to write this ..i didn't like the outcome ..still I hope you all will like this OS... plz bear me with the mistakes..didn't get time to proofread ...😊

When I start writing emotional stuff I can't stop myself...It became very long ..so posting in 2 parts...next part will be posted soon ...

I really can't thank you enough..my readers have been my biggest support...thanks for
all the love and support guys...i am touched ...

Thanks to My Partner(Nehal) ..for her help and support...😳..Love u Partner 🤗..

Thank you so much Meera...without you ...it was impossible to complete this OS ...🤗

Thanks Smarty(Payal)...for suggesting this song ...to write a sad OS ...that OS is still pending ...this song fitted aptly for this situation 😳🤗

I hope you all will like it...SPEAKERS ON 😳

Pain ...was evident in those brown orbs...which were mirroring his miseries...his broken self...why she was doing this..to him...to them...their relationship..all those promises ...unspoken..unrealized ...all those moments of love ...which make their love ambrosial...Why everything has to be so complex between them...why can't they just behave like normal people in love...why situations and people around them affect their equation to this extent ...her avoidance...her anger was driving him crazy...where was the girl who promised to be with him in all the ups and downs of life...who was positive that their love will conquer any obstacle...where was the courageous girl who confessed her feelings for him in front of his strict father...who stood like a wall between him and all the sorrows..who fulfilled his dreams with utmost care and warmth...where was "his Sharon"...

He was at fault as well...he over-reacted...without empathizing with her ... he spoke those words he never meant...his wounded self-respect...his broken heart ...his mortal pain provoked him to hurt her that moment...without thinking about her condition he accused her of being insensitive about his feelings...he didn't know that she was searching for him whole night ...without being concerned about her health ... he cursed himself for not being able to see her swollen eyes ...her drenched clothes...and above everything her bleeding heart...

How could you Swayam...how could you...you claim that you can read her like an open book ...you didn't even try to understand her feelings...how could you say those hurtful words to her...

I really doubt Sharon...me aur meri feelings tumhare liye kuch mean karte bhi he ya nehi...
Jahan kuch bolna hota he wahan tum nehi bolti...jahan nehi bolna hota he ...wahan bolte ho...
Sharon Rai Prakash ko ek entertainment..ek toy boy chahiye tha...aur mujhse jyada tumhare isharon pe kaun nachta...

His own words were hammering his ears...every statement tore his heart ...his fingers turned into fists out of frustration and he smashed his hand on the glass table in front of him...it started bleeding profusely...still the wounds of his heart were more painful...

I can't let you go Sharon...i just can't ...we can't fall apart like this...our love won't get defeated so easily...he made a promise to himself and her...

" Bahut acha lagta he jab tum mera naam leti ho"
"tum bahut special ho ..humara pehla kiss bhi bahut special hoga"
"tutne nehi nehi dunga tumhare dil ko"
"your wish is my command"
"I know you better than u know urself"
"kya tum aur me hum nehi ho sakte"
"I will make you fall in love with me "
"You are mine."
"Why are you pushing me away?"
Agar ek line me bolna he toh..i just want to say..I love you...
Kal ke baad me tumse dur nehi reh sakta ..
Meri dream aur tumhari reality finally same he...

His angelic voice was ringing near her ears...his voice..his eyes..his smile ...she was laying on her bed...recalling their moments of togetherness..his unending love...how things went so wrong between them within one day...their love is not so fragile to be broken by one storm...it has evidenced its metal in the worst surroundings ..he never left her alone even when she pushed him away..and she left him all alone when he needed her...the most...

She stood numb when Rey insulted him..questioned his pious love...his commitment..their trust...their relationship...how could she?

He was broken...hurt...enraged...his love didn't utter a word when his so called best friend questioned his integrity..the slap was not just on his face...its mark was imprinted on his dignity...so what if he spoke harshly to her...she could have kept her calm and comfort him...but she reacted so insensitively ...instead of reassuring him with her love and care she questioned his feelings for her...she tried to prove him wrong...questioned his love...doubted his feelings...

Her already bloated eyes ...were reflecting her guilt..pain...her love...she knew ..he needed her...she is the medicine for his broken heart...his wounded existence... her touch would melt his concentrated wrath ,frustration ,pain...she just craved to run upto him and embrace his pains that moment...her heart was bursting due to pain and guilt...pain of being away from him...guilt of hurting her love...

Tak...tak...tak...tak...

She jerked up from her bed...hearing the noise...her eyes traveled across the room to find the source of the sound...the view in front of her eyes broke her heart into thousand pieces ...

CHAPTER -2

CHAPTER- 3

i know its super long..don't know what exactly i have written as wrote in a flow ..sorry if it made u sleep...

hey guys how was it? ...good ...bad ...very bad..boring ... plzzz do comment.. i will wait for your comments and feedback

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Deepika

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Posted: 11 years ago

Hey Friends ...🤗

thanx a lot for liking my work... i love reading your lovely comments..please continue commenting as they are my sole inspiration for writing ...will be waiting for ur comments and feedback(positive and negative all are welcomed)

Thank u all for liking my previous OS ...😊The response and comments u all have given for the previous OS inspired me even more..thanks a lot for the detailed feedback...its means a lot to me...i am really sorry for not responding to them individually ..its just that I don't want to put a Thank u for ur beautiful comment..due to time constraint i am not able to reply...they are the driving force behind my write ups...ur love and support😳...

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Deepika

@_Deepika_

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Posted: 11 years ago

besties

Himani(My Rockstar )😊

Di [>:D]

M late as always ...and i knw aap bht gussa hoge...par as u knw...m not active on IF...fir bhi m really sorry 😔
coming to the OS..it is awesome hamesha ki tarah...so very well written...swaron's pain is clearly visible in ur words...amazingly written...u knw how much i love u and ur writing...cant express in wrds...par humesha late comments me...
kher back to OS...pls update soon and mail me first...i want to read it first.
aur kuch samaj nai aa raha...aap samajh lo bas...
Love u a lot ❤️
ur RockStar

surbhi(my miss positive)😊

~Need You Now~
Title ^_^

My Knight In Shining armour 🤗❤️🤗
You're back! *So Happy*

Hukum you always leave me spellbound with your writing, the voltage of emotions which you present is just awe-inspiring and i am trying to be a decent writer like you. Seriously i mean the way you have showcased the emotions of swayam and sharon, its astounding. The way you play with the emotions one can only sit and wonder how man How?? :o
Dil ko chhu jaate hai aapke words ❤️

Loved the thought process of SwaRon, they are behaving like grown ups here atleast. I wish this could happen in the show but i am super glad that you wrote this. Out of so many tracks and situations you chose this and here you are back with a bang!
Yeah don't lose this writing streak in you, keep showering us with such beautiful write ups.

Mai kuch zyada formal nhi ho gyi yaha o_O

Hukum Je Baat ;)
Aapne mera naam roshan kar diya aur bhi zyada! Bas aise hi kill karte raho aap, fir apan sab direct SwaRon land mei milenge :-X
Sry lame ^_^

Love You DD, this was fantastic.
And yes update soon!

Sakshi ekansh (My pagal❤️)

didu

cliffhanger

OMG ye kitna superb hai

its so so so so emotional

i was feeling the pain with each of the passing word.. angelic likhte ho aap...

heart touching

seriously.. abhi i am feeling the pain even more...

my didu is best and you understood them so well...

cvs ko padhao aur realize karwao

love you so so so much didu...

<3 <3

Shrutika (My Sweetest heart)😳

deepu di 🤗

thanks deepu di...know u will be surprised ki thanks q bola...woh isliye because agar mood acha bhi na ho toh aapke works padke woh acha ho jaata hai...fir chahe woh os oh yaa poems...bohot achchi wali feeling aati hai 😃 🤗☺️

bhale hi yeh os sad tha but still apki writing dil ko sukun deti hai 😳

n iss os k baare mein kya kahu...jaise ki meiene kal hi aapse kaha ki aapki writing se saare scenes visualise hone lagte hai...saare scenes yaad aane lagte...kuch magic hai aap mein n aapki writing bhi *magic* *magic* *magic*

filal yahi kahungi

joh swaron k pyaar ko redefine karein

pahuncha de joh swaron dreamland mein humein

sab jagah karein aapna magic spread

jisse padhkar ho jaaye hum red

swaron fans ka ek hi sahara

deepu di ka write up pyaara

aapko dher saara pyaar...n hugs 🤗 🤗 🤗...n yeh sab mujhe return mein bhi chhaiye 😉

n kaan pakade...no no uthak baithak karke sorry...pagal hun mein joh isko padne mein itna time laga diya...sorry once again di

luv

ur shru

Tania 😳

aaahhh...dii dii dii...this is real Deep SwaRon!!!!! I just loveee for this epic piece...

though i dont watch d3 regularly now a days bt i try to keep track abt all the events happening...so I can fully understand that u wrote it fresh few days back.

Now coming to d OS...I loved the way you started with swayam...u r always at world class level when it comes to expressing deep emotions n pain...so thumps up!:) Then the part where u beautifully explained the glass seperation btw dem...the way you described the dual meaning of that was just awesome...

Then all the epic n heavenly dialogues from lover boyyy...aahhh...as i was going through...all those situations were flashing in my mind...love swayam..

Then their cofession n the way u explained the reason of all those behaviour of them...the way u write their heart out..the way you righty put up both the personalities in all ur writings is just amazinggg... love you dii

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sneha singh

@swaron9113

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Posted: 11 years ago

res

unres
1stly m really sorry for such late cment.
Bt kya kru time he ni milta. 😭

itna late cment kr rhe hun islia compation ke lia poetry me tarif kr rhe hun.
I knw it's super lame bt i write ths spcly for u hope u lyk.

Hothono se laga ke rakhte hai, chahne wale tumhe.
Apki tarif kisi shaksh ke mohtaj nahi.
Jo shabd dil se nikale ho tumhare,
wo kisi panno pe likhe alfaz nahi.

Badi gehrai chupi hai, inn shabdono me,
ye shabd hai koi raaz nahi...
Likhte jao aap likhte jao,
ye kahani hai, koi saugat nahi,
pdhti hun jab bhe ye mazma,
lagta hai koi geet hai,
jo besaaz nahi.

Hum bhe hothono se laga ke, rakhnge aapko hardum...
Koi na kre apki tarif itni kisi ke aauqat nahi.

These lines was for ur amaging write ups.
Nw ths is my personal view about you.

"jab bi chali kalam apki in panno par...
Tanha the ye panne unme koi awaz nahi,
jindagi di hai aapne inn panno ko...
Jitni bhe tarif kru magar irsad nahi."

btw once again m really sowii di for such late editing.

Hope u lyk my way to appriciate ur writing.

Nd plz update fast nxt chappy.

Edited by swaron9113 - 11 years ago

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Rachel

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Posted: 11 years ago

res

unres..

sorry sorry sorry for being so late😒

as usual superb...u write very beautifully di...amazing...

the emotions were so beautifully penned down..

loved it..

sorry once again for being late!

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Meera

@MirageSwaron

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

Res
*Unres*

Deepu 🤗 u know very well that from the day you wrote your first work on SwaRon, I have been a diehard fan of ur writing...trust me when I say as many other fans of ur writing will agree... the pleasure is all mine...I sincerely believe that when it comes to expressing pure romance in SwaRon, very few can touch u...at least jo bhi mera dil dekhna chahta hai tum mujhe dikha deti ho...

The beauty of this OS as always lies in the flow of thoughts and really it is best that u kept it natural bcoz it reflects the thoughts as they come to the mind...u r not writing here - u r actually expressing there...we all know that Swaron is a couple who do things in intensity - be it love, conflict or difference of opinion...and when they do feel sad, happy or whatever emotion, they have seen enuf ups and downs yet ... and would definitely go all out about thinking not abt the spur of the moment but about everything in totality - they are mature, not rash, a senseless argument which happened in a moment of anger cannot stunt their capacity of reasoning, and their love is too powerful to b overdone by a petty spat...it was wonderful the way u enlisted all the memorable dialogues Swayam ne bola hai Sharon ke "shaan" mein as well as the reasons why they need to see the other person's POV bcoz that is love - where nothing can b one way - and love is committment where both pepl have to resolve to put the other above them - that is the only way both can get a fair deal - looking forward to the next part soon

P.S. I hope the response u have recieved would have put u at ease by now re...and as an addendum, tumne mujhe apne reading hibernation se temporarily bahar aane pe majboor kia hai...so I owe an apology to all those who I hav not responded to...

Edited by MeeraSwaron - 11 years ago

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Marium

@pehlanasha.

Inactive

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Posted: 11 years ago

reserved.

I will unreserve it on sunday, please?

And Deepy i beg you that remind me, OK? 😳

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-TanHaVruShan-

@-TanHaVruShan-

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Posted: 11 years ago

Unres. .
Di first toh mein shocked thi to c ur os but super happy bhi thi u know y 😉
Obviously cos ur os r always a treat to read n i love them all..

Well yeh update itna bhi lengthy Nahi tha ki u divided it..
N cliff hanger ki tarah end kar diya yaar. .
Yeh sab writers aise Kyun karte hai 😡

Aapka os always takes me to some other world only..
I get totally lost in it. .
I don't know y i was almost crying while reading it was so touching. .
D way u explain their feelings na no1 can do. .
It was just out of d world. .
Very amazingly written di. .
Loved how u penned down dono ka pov, their pain, their emotions. .
I could so easily connect to it. .
Thanks a lot for writing dis one di. .
Waise bhi ab show se toh Kuch expectations bachi nahi hai 🥱
Pls pls update next part soon. .
Waiting for it. .

Edited by Shilpa_SwaRon - 11 years ago

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Swathi

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Posted: 11 years ago

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What have you written Deepu...

I really dont know why my eyes are filled with tears reading this OS...

and you just left the OS midway hanging...😡

even though it is lenghty you must have completed in one shot... joh feeling abhi mein face kar rahi hu , yeh toh nahi hota...

i must say very well written deepu

Edited by swathi_swaron - 11 years ago

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