Tere ishq main-Deewani (MG Ss)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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hello friends...i am here again with my new ss... this idea was came in my mind so couldn't control on my fingers...and the result is here.. i don't what will be future of this story...only i know about the start of this story..don't know about the future...



Tere ishq main-Deewani

prologue

Tere Ishq Main Sudh Budh Khoi

Haal Na Jane' Koi!

Tere Prem Ki Sej Pe Soi

Meri Birhan Rooh Bhi Roi

Main Tau Ho Gayi Re Diwani

Saeyyo! Ho Gayi Main Diwani

Kaisay Main Katun Gi Tanhai.. Ki Ratein

Diwane Dil Ki Kuch Diwani Si Batein!

Phir Yaad Piya Ki Aai'

Meri Aur Barhi Tanhai!

Mere Mann Ki Lagan Tu Jane

Mere Tan Ki Agan Tu Jane

Main Tau Ho Gayi Re Diwani

Saeyyo! Ho Gayi Main Diwani

Jal Gayi Meri Duniya' Jal gayi Sab Barsatein

Diwane Dil Ki Kuch Diwani Si Batein!

Phir Hijr Ke Mausam Aye

Ik Piyas Si Jalti Jaye

Ik Pal Na Soi Aankhein

Meri Tujh Bin Royen Aankhen

Main Tau Ho Gayi Re Diwani

Saeyyo! Ho Gayi Main Diwani

Mil Gayi Khak Main Sajan.. More Sapno Ki Baratein

Diwane Dil Ki Kuch Diwani Si Batein!

Diwane Dil Ki Kuch Diwani Si Batein!!!

a girl who is very chirpy, fun-loving, living her life fully, loved her daarji a lot..always be happy in day & night but she became very sad early in the morning...from the age of 11 she used to came on the hills and sat there for an hour..and sang only one song daily...but what happened with her that made her sad early in the morning then after morning she became normal..and live her happily...she wanted to become a physiotherapist but become a surgeon..why? what happened with her...

a boy who lived in london, came to shimla for a project and his life changes...he started to love a girl but something happened between them and both got separate...what happened with them...just a misunderstanding,, he took that little misunderstanding in a big way and left her...


part-1

a girl is sitting on the hills in shimla...early in the morning around 6 am in a pleasant weather...her voice is echoing everywhere...hiding herself between the large rocks...closing her eyes & some tears are shedding from her eyes...and rolling down from her cheeks...resting her head backward on the large rock...remembering her mother and singing a song which is taught by her mother in her childhood...


Dil ye bechein ve

Raste pe nain ve

Dil ye bechein ve

Raste pe nain ve

Jindari behaal hai

Sur hai na taal hai

Aaja savariya

Aa aa aa aa

Taal se taal milaao

Taal se taal mila



a 22 years old boy is visiting the valley in the same time clicking snaps of large rocks and clouds...he was standing on the top hill and watching the dangerous view of a rive that is came out from the hills...the flow of the river is very heavy..if anyone fall in that river can not be saved...

he heard a sweet voice of a girl who is singing in her painful voice... that is echoing again and again everywhere and fell in his ears again and again... he turned & looked here and there finding the girl... but the girl is no where... he is following her voice but the girl is no where...she hid behind the large rock so that no one can see her... he became restless and her melody voice is so soothing... touching his heart deep... he is unable to find the girl... the girl stop singing the song... and he also stop himself for searching her... but after some time the voice again fell in his ear...

she is again singing in her melodious voice but she is still no where..

Saawan ne aaj to mujhko bhigo diya

Hay meri laaj ne mujhko dubo diya

Saawan ne aaj to mujhko bhigo diya

Hay meri laaj ne mujhko dubo diya

Aisi lagi jhadi sochoon main ye ghadi

Kuchh maine kho diya kya maine kho diya

Chup kyon hai bol tu sang mere dol tu

Meri chaal se chaal milaao

Taal se taal milaao

Taal se taal mila

.he is unable to find her...he became restless but what he can do... her voice stopped...he composed himself and sat on a rock...again clicking the snaps...the weather is very pleasant but suddenly sky starts thundering...in very loud sound..he immediately put his camera in his bag..and wore the rain coat that he is carrying with him because he knows the weather of shimla changes in a minute...clouds became dark gray & air changes in a heavy storm...girl became afraid...and rain started...heavily...she stood up and now quite visible but only her head...boy saw her head behind the rock...he stood up... girl starts moving with her tiny steps...wearing white annarkali suit with chudidaar...and the dupatta is on her head covering her face fully...boy starts singing...


mana anjaan hu mai tere vaaste

mana anjaan hai tu mere vaaste...


girl stopped hearing his voice...he also stopped singing seeing her stop...but she again starts move so he also again start singing...

mana anjaan hu mai tere vaaste

mana anjaan hai tu mere vaaste...

mai tujhko jaan lu

tu mujhko jaan le

haan iss dil ke vaaste..

but after hearing his wordings, her heart starts thudding fastly again her chest...she clutched her suit tightly from the side ways and start running fastly...

he ran after her for a while but she ran very fastly and he was also carrying his bag...and she is very aware of these hills..very well knew that where to move n how to move on these rocks...how is calling her again for stop..but didn't know her name nor he saw her face..and same as with her..she didn't saw his face..only heard his voice that was filled her heart...like he is the one who made for her..but she is too small for all this..only just 18 years old...

he shook his head..she vanished in some minutes and he is unable to see anything in this heavy rain and view of hills became more beautiful because of the rain & chill heavy air...the heavy sound of leaves of the trees filling the valleys more...he is not hearing properly due to this voice of trees which are blowing in heavy storm... he move back to his way and the girl running & running fastly with the double speed of hers...panting furiously...get back to her mahal...


daarji-puttar, aisa kab tak chalega..?

girl-kaisa daarji?

daarji-tu kab tak aise hi hills par jaati rahegi...?

girl-jab tak mera mann karega..aur waise bhi daarji aapko isse koi prob thodi na hai..i know

daarji smiled at her...she kissed on daarji's cheek and went in her big room not less than a princess's room...after some time servant came in her room

servant-princess, daarji aapko bula rahe hai breakfast ke liye..

girl-told to daarji, princess is coming.. he nodded and went back...

on he other hand boy reached at his home...and his dadi panicked after seeing him whole drenched in he rain...she told him to take shower and get ready...



tell me friends hows this?
should i continue this or not?
waiting for your response..
neha

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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsome but after reading the little proloung it seems that ki ye thodi sad story hogi agar maan geet ko chod ke chala gaya to i hope ki mera assumption wrong ho aur kuch acha ho write next part soon dear waiting eagerly
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Posted: 13 years ago
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congrats on new ff
awesome concept
continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow
congrats on ur new ff🤗
intrstng...
cont soonnn😍


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Posted: 13 years ago
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congrats on new ff
awesome concept...loved it
continue soon
Edited by -Nilam- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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First:

Congrats on new FF!!

It's the first time i'm reading your work.

The prologue is awesome. I really liked it...

part 1 is beautifully written. The beginning was sad. Why was she crying? He heard her singing and followed her voice.. that's so cute!!!! When she stops singing, he stops searching and when he starts singing she stopped walking.. Aww I really love that part. The end was nice. Is she a princess or is it her nickname? I have a few more questions..

- What happened to her mom? (Is she death?)
- Is it a sad story? ( I love emo/sad stories :D )
- When are you gonna update?

PS

You're an awesome writer⭐️ keep up the good work!

Add me to your PM list..

and update soon.. can't wait to read more

PPS

Can you make part 2 longer?


TC











Edited by Amadora - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsum prologue luv it
eagerly w8in 4 da update x
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Posted: 13 years ago
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lovely concept
great starting
continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
#10
hiii
awesome update
loved it
loved maaneet
loved da song
interesting concept
cant wait 4 more
con soon
thanksss
plzzz do pm me😊

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