my fan-fic... - Page 12

hi every1, lovely response! no recaps.
Arjun and bhavri are hugging each other, suddenly shaku calls out to bhavri!
S: bhoomi, bhoomi...
B(trying to free herself from arjun's arms): aa rahi hoon maaji!(to arjun) arjun chodo na! maaji bula rahi hai!
Arjun leaves her and she runs out of the room.
A(to himself): meri jhalli!

Bhavri enters the kitchen. Shaku tells her to help her in setting the table for lunch. Bhavri does so! Just then shefali enters.
S: bhoomi, aah mera pet(stomach)
B: kya huwa bhabhi?
S: mere pet mein bohot dard ho raha hai!
B: woh is liye kyun ki aap ne subah se kuch nahi khaya hai!
S: haan... aur phir yeh mera pehla karwa chauth hai!
B(laughing) bhabhi, yeh mera bhi to pehla karwa chauth hai!
S: uh... ah! main kamre mein jaa kar thodi der rest karti hoon!
B: thik hai bhabhi!
A few minutes after shefali leaves, manasvi enters.
M: kya kar rahi ho bhoomi?
B: table set kar rahi hoon bhabhi!
M: main kuch help kardu?
B: are nahi bhabhi(putting the last plate on the table) lo! ho gaya... kitchen mein chaliye, shayad waha koi kaam ho.
M: haan chalo!

that evening, before the moon is seen, arjun and bhavri are in their room and suraj and manasvi in their respective rooms.
In A-B's room,
A: bhavri, yeh chand kab niklega? mujhe bhookh lagi hai!
B: dekha arjun, karwa chauth ka vrat rakhna koi aasan baat nahi hai!
A: tum to aise bol rahi ho jaise tum saalo se yeh vrat rakhti ho!
B: haan arjun! main yeh vrat pichle teen saalo se rakhti hoon...
A: kya...(jokingly) kis ke liye?
B: arjun! masti mat karo... tumhare siwa aur kis ke liye rakhungi?
Arjun becomes emotional and goes near bhavri. Just as he keeps his hand on hers, they hear a shout from outside: chand nikal gaya hai!
Bhavri runs out of the room.

Meanwhile, (ie, when arjun n bhavri r in their room, suraj n manasvi are talking to each other from their own rooms by phone)
S: pata nahi manasvi, yeh chand kab niklega?
M: kyun, bhookha rehna bhaari par raha hai kya?
S: nahi manasvi, lekin tumhari aawaz se aisa lagat hai ke tum bohot kamzor ho gayi ho!
M: mujhe kuch nahi kuwa hai suraj... main bilkul thik hoon... waise ek baat batao... hum ek doosre ka vrat kaise torenge?
S: very simple manasvi!(he tells her the idea that arjun told him)
M: idea accha hai suraj, lekin hum pakde gaye to?
S: uski fikar tum mat karo... saara intezaam arjun ne kar liya hai! woh sab kuch sambhal lega!
M: thik hai suraj...
And they hear the same voice that arjun n bhavri heard: chand nikal gaya hai!
M: suraj, chand nikal aaya hai! ab main phone rakhti hoon. bye!
S: bye manasvi! aur phone rakhne se pehle meri ek baat sunlo!
M: haan suraj jaldi bolo...
S: i love you!
Manasvi shys away and hangs up the phone.

Thats it guys... tomorrow is the big day... oops, i mean big nite... if u know what i mean!

wow simple and lovly dialouges. 👏

wow........... its rocking yaar 👏
kya baatein ho rahi hain dono couples ke beech... 😉

waiting for tomoro.. 😉 the big day... o nahi..big nite na 😉 😉

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hi ppl, heres the next part... hope u like it... no recaps.
Every1 is getting ready for going to the terrace for the ceremony. All the ladies are preparing their pooja thalis. After a few minutes, they all leave to go to the terrace. Arjun also orders shakti, preeti and shruti to come upstairs with them to see how the ceremony is done.He also takes khushi with them. Vishakha is out with her friends and Aksh is simply not interested in the happenings in the house, so he is sleeping.
When arjun is taking every1 away to the terrace, he signals suraj to inform manasvi to get a puja thali for her. Bhavri has delibrately kept an extra thali ready in the kitchen for her. When arjun signals to suraj, suraj gives manasvi a missed call. Manasvi sneaks out of the room and goes to get the thali from the kitchen.

Back in her room, manasvi is looking at the moon when she hears suraj's voice from behind. She immediately, without looking at suraj, lifts up the strainer(i donno if thats the right name for the thingie that u see the moon and ur husband through) and looks at the moon for a few minutes... and then she immediately turns in suraj's direction and sees him. They stare at each other for a really long time. Manasvi comes to her senses when she hears a grumble from her tummy. She does suraj's arti first, and then...
M: suraj, pani pilao na...
Suraj gives her water. After she drinks it, she gives the same water to suraj to drink.
M: ab prasad khilao...
Suraj does as he is told. Manasvi also feeds suraj after he feeds her. then, manasvi puts the thali aside and, to suraj's surprie, gives him a tight, but warm hug.(i can imagine that)
Just after a few minutes, they hear a knock on the door. Both get scared. When manasvi goes to open the door, he sees arjun and bhavri at the door. She feels greatly relieved.

Meanwhile, upstairs, on the terrace, every1 is getting ready for the ladies to begin. Finally, the ceremony begins.
Baisa, Shaku, gunvanti, shefali and bhavri, all look into the strainer to the moon for a couple of minutes and then to their husbands who are standing right next to them. When bhavri looks at arjun, he tries to flirt by winking his eye at bhavri thru the strainer. Bhavri, in turn, makes a bad face at him and gestures him to stop behaving childish. Then, they do the arti!
All the couples, except mansen and yuvraj, feed each other the water and prasad ie, all the couples except these two have been fasting for each other.
After the ceremonies, every1 decides to stay upstairs and relive their past memories. Arjun finds this as a bad idea and he excuses himself and bhavri from them and comes downstairs.

Once downstairs, arjun want to go to their room, but bhavri suggests that they go and meet suraj and manasvi first.
When they reach manasvi's room, arjun knocks on the door... manasvi opens the door and feels relieved.
A: kya huwa bhabhi, itni ghabhrai huwi yun hai?
M: mujhe laga ke shayad koi aur hoga!
B: bhabhi, hum aap ko batane aaye the ke upar sab khatam ho gaya hai! sab log kisi bhi waqt niche aate hoge!
S: to phir mujhe lagta hai ke mujhe chalna chahiye...
A: haan bhabhi, hume bhi chalna chahiye... (nudging bhavri) kyun bhavri?
Bhavri stays quiet but goes 😳 😳 😳

After they leave, suraj heads straight for his room, and so do A-B.
Once in the room, bhavri is busy with setting things right, as the room is in a mess because of the hustle and bustle going on since morning.
A: ahem(to attract attention)
Bhavri knows what arjun is trying to do, but she deliberately looks the other way and pretends not to hear him.
A: AHEM AHEM...
B(jokingly): kya huwa arjun, cough ho gaya hai. Koi dawa doon?
Arjun does not reply but stands up and goes near bhavri. Bhavri sees this and blushes.
A: haan bhavi, dawa ki mujhe bohot zaroorat hai! aur filhaal mujhe lagta hai ke meri dawa tum ho!
B: arjun!!! 😳 😳 😳
Arjun goes near her, and takes her in his arms. He makes her lie down on the bed... and u guys know what happened next, so i guess i dont need to explain in detail... and i guess all the readers wud faint if i did.

Thats it for now... Good nite

wow!! thats really good.......i completed reading all in one go just now and didnt get bored for even a second......so beautifully written......and what more could i say very very very very nice 👏

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beautiful as usual yaar 👏
u write real bautiful..thats the word coming into my mind rit now..its just all sooo beautiful... 👏

it was 2 good i really liked the update
whats further cant wait 2 know

arre yaar... plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz update soon........
how can u keep me waiting so much yaar... i'm desparate to read the next part......
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