my fan-fic... - Page 18

Hey Poonam...a real nice part...but a suggestion...just post a thread or something informing that you have updated the fan fiction cause I dont think if anybody is checking this thread frequently to see if its getting updated or not.......guess thats why I'm the only one replying....

very very nice parts..i had to catch up a lot i must say.......but then it was really nice.....not nice beautiful!! 👏

very nice ff a_b ,plz update da next part soon ......
waiting 4 de next part .........................
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hey, nice to c ur responds. thnx sia and anum. n thnx parvatisrikant for the advice. heres the next part...

Some time later, they all meet in their hotel restaurant for lunch.
A: bhabhi, aap comfortable to hai na? Aap chahe to ab bhi aap bhavri ke saath shift ho sakte hai…
M: arjun, main thik hoon. Don't worry. I'm quite comfortable (glancing at Suraj, who seems to be lost in the menu)
S: I'm hungry… tum kya order kar rahe ho Arjun?
Manasvi makes a sound, which sounds like a grunt to Arjun and a groan to Suraj.
S: whats wrong Manasvi? Any problem?
M: nahi…
A: hey, ab kuch order kijiye.
They order their food. After lunch, Suraj talks to the hotel staff.
S (to the manager): bhaisaab, aap yaha bonfires arrange karte hai?
Manager: yes sir.
S: kya aaj raat ka program ho sakta hai?
Manager: sure sir. Bas aap yeh bata dijiye ke aapko kaun si cheezo ki zaroorat paregi.
Suraj gives him the list, which includes food, drinks, music, and other stuff they need.
S: aur haan, iss baat ka pata mere parivaar waalo ko nahi pata chalna chahiye.
Manager: ok sir.

Then, suraj joins the others.
M: kahaan the tum Suraj?
S: kuch nahi Manasvi, ek phone aa gaya tha…
M: kiska?
S: arre, tum to abhi se meri patni ban gayi… office se phone tha. Kuch papers missing the.
A: kuch serious to nahi hai na?
S: nahi arjun, woh papers mere drawer me the.
Suraj feels really guilty for lying to Manasvi and Arjun.

They visit all the tourist attractions in Mount Abu. Later, they get back to the hotel and take a few hours rest. At around 7:30 in the evening, suraj calls arjun's room.
A: hello…
S: arjun
A: jee bhaiya…
S: arjun, ek kaam karo, hotel ke peeche ek camping site hai. Tum aur Bhoomi waha par aa jao.
A: lekin bhaiya…
Suraj hung up.

S (to Manasvi): manasvi, chalo mere saath.
M: kaha?
S: behas mat karo. Come.

hop u guys lik this part. there r many surprises waiting...

thnx for the comments. heres the next part.

He takes Manasvi to the camping site where the hotel had arranged for a bonfire party on Suraj's request. A fire was lit, music was going on and lots of food was kept in the side. It was dark, and the weather was very cold. Manasvi had her shawl on, but she could sense Suraj shivering under his t-shirt. Just then, Arjun and Bhoomi arrive.
A: bhaiya, yeh sab kya hai?
S: arjun, aaj raat maine yaha camping karne ka socha. Koi problem to nahi hai na?
B: arre nahi bhaiya. Koi problem nahi hai.
M: tum dono apne sweaters laye ho?
B: haan bhabhi.
M: accha huwa, kyun ki Mr. Suraj Goenka apna sweater kamre mein hi bhool gaye hai…
A: bhaiya, it's so cold. Aap ko thand nahi lag rahi hai?
S (lying): nahi to… kitni acchi weather hai.
(Looks at manasvi, who is standing with her arms folded and looking at Suraj like she was going to eat him up altogether in 1 piece)
S: so shall we proceed towards the fire?
A: yeah. Lets go bhavri (puts his arm around bhavri's shoulder)

All of them sit around the fire and start warming themselves. Suraj, who isn't wearing any thick clothing, is literally shivering.
M: Suraj, are you ok?
S: yeah (chattering his teeth) I am f-f-fine.
Manasvi stands up and moves towards Suraj. She sits near him and puts half of her shawl around him. Suraj, who is quite shocked at this, can feel the heat from the shawl and from Manasvi's body.
S: um, Manasvi…
M: kya huwa?
S: um, nahi. Kuch nahi…

On the other end, arjun is lying down with his head in bhavri's lap, and bhavri is busy playing with his hair.
A: bhavri…
B (fiddling thru his hair): hmmm…
A: kya kar rahi ho?
B: kuch nahi. Time pass…
A: KYA??? Mere baal (hair) tumhe time pass karne ki cheez lagte hai??
B: uh arjun… itne hyper kyun ho rahe ho itni chhoti si baat par?
A: yeh chhoti baat nahi hai bhavri. Itna romantic atmosphere hai, aur tum time pass kar rahi ho?
B: to aur kya karu arjun?
A (getting close): kuch nahi (puts his arms around her waist) bas aise hi baithi raho.
B: arjun, bhaiya aur bhabhi dekh rahe hai.
A: bhavri, unki bhi shaadi hone waali hai. Yeh sab to common hai na…
B: uh. Tumhare saath behas karne ka koi faida nahi hai!
A: how unfortunate ke tumhe yeh baat aaj pata chali…
S: arjun, bhoomi, kuch music rakhu?
A: wow bhaiya, sure… Issi ki to kami thi.

Hope every1 lyks this part.

hi every1, heres the next part. hop u like it.

Suraj has arranged for slow and romantic music. The first slow that is played is "mann ki lagan" from paap.
"Lagi tumse mann ki lagan, lagan lagi tumse mann ki lagan." With this, arjun tightens his grip on bhavri's waist.
"Gali gali ghoome, dil tujhe dhoondhe, tere bin tarse nayan." Suraj gives Manasvi a peck from under the shawl.
The song creates a sensational environment, with arjun teasing bhavri, and suraj looking at manasvi continuously.

Then, another romantic song is played. In this song, both the couples have a dance around the fire. The song is "Aaj kehna zaroori hai" from andaaz.
"Aaj kehna zaroori hai, aaj kehna zaroori hai ke tumse pyar huwa hai." Suraj has his arms around manasvi's waist, and Manasvi has her head rested on Suraj's shoulder.
"Badi mushkil yeh doori hai, badi mushkil yeh doori hai, ke tumse pyar huwa hai." Bhavri jumps as arjun tickles her.

The next song sounded quite boring at first, but it proved to be the best time Manasvi had ever been through. The song was "teri deewani" from the album kailasa.
"Preet ki lat mohe aisi laagi, ho gayi main matwali. Bal bal jau apna piya ko, ke main jau vari vari. Mohe sud bud naa rahi tan mann ki, yeh to jaane duniya saari, bebas aur laachar phiru main, haari main dil haari. Haari main dil haari."
A: bhaiya, yeh kaunsa song hai? Maine to yeh gaana kabhi nahi suna…
S: just listen to it arjun.
"Tere naam se jeelu, tere naam se marjau… tere naam se jeelu, tere naam se marjau, teri jaan ke sadke me kuch aisa karjau."
Suraj stands up and takes Manasvi somewhere where A-B could not see them.
"Tune kya kardala, mar gayi main, mit gayi main, ho ji haan ji, ho gayi main, Teri deewani, deewani."
Suraj brings her so close to her that there is hardly any space between their noses. That's when Manasvi understands why Suraj had kept that particular song. Her heart starts beating like it had never before. Suraj has his hands on her face and she has hers on his chest.
M: (in whispers) suraj
S: hmm.
M: aur kitni deewani banaoge mujhe?
S (smiling) itna, ke tum mere bagair ek pal bhi na reh sako.
M: woh to waise bhi nahi reh sakti…
Saying this, she hugs Suraj tightly
S: bas Manasvi, mujhe aur kuch bhi nahi chahiye. Hamesha issi tarha mujhse pyar karna.
They stay in that position until the song gets over. The next song brings them back to their senses. It was bhavri's favourite song, "mere humsafar" from refugee. S-M come back and sit in their positions, while this time, its bhavri's turn to get romantic with her favourite song playing.
"Mere humsafar mere humsafar, mere paas aa mere paas aa *2."
Bhavri goes and sits as close to Arjun as she can. Arjun is quite surprised, but he doesn't stop her.
"Hame saath chalna hai umra bhar, mere paas aa mere paas aa mere paas aa."
She holds Arjun's hand tightly and gives him a kiss on his cheek. S-M don't notice this. They are too busy in themselves. It was quite a long song, but throughout the song, Bhavri and Arjun were busy getting romantic with each other.

None of them realize when the time flies. Finally, when Suraj checks his watch,
S: OH MY GOD!
A (shifts his gaze from Bhavri to Suraj): whats wrong bhaiya? Kya huwa? Why did you shout?
S: arjun tumne time dekha? Its 2:30 man. We have to go to bed…
A: oh, pata hi nahi chala. Lets go.

heres the next part...

They all go to their rooms.
In A-Bs room, when they enter,
B (who seems to be breathing smoke out of her mouth and nostrils): arjun mujhe bohot thand lag rahi hai.
A: I know bhavri, come.
They go over to the bed and arjun comes close to bhavri.
A: ab kaisa lag raha hai?
B (smiling): mujhe aisa lag raha hai, ke aap bohot romantic ho rahe hai…
A (in a low tone): accha! I admit, aaj main bohot romantic hona chahta hoon…
B (almost whispering) maine mana nahi kiya...

In S-Ms room, when they enter,
M: Suraj…
S: hmm
M: aaj, waha tumne jo gaana rakha, mujhe bohot accha laga…
S (trying to tease her): kaun sa gaana Manasvi?
M: Suraj, woh, teri deewani…
S: oh woh, woh maine nahi rakha tha. Mujhe to pata bhi nahi tha ke woh kaunsa gaana hai.
Manasvi gets quite upset at this. She looks away from Suraj, who is planning to tease her more. He is doing something with his phone, and then, Manasvi gets a missed call. She picks up the phone to see, a private number.
M: yeh kya? Suraj, dekho na!
S: kya hai Manasvi?
M: koi private number se mujhe missed call de raha hai…
When Manasvi was saying this, Suraj has his phone behind his back, and he dials Manasvi's number again. Her phone rings.
M: dekho, phir se…
S: relax Manasvi, hoga tumhara koi deewana…
Manasvi looks at Suraj angrily. She keeps on getting those missed calls the whole night. She is not able to sleep, while Suraj, who is next to her, is pretending to be sleeping soundly.

Next morning, Manasvi keeps on receiving the same missed calls in her phone, which makes her more worried. Later, when all four of them meet at the breakfast table,
S: good morning arjun, good morning bhoomi.
A n B: good morning bhaiya…
S: how was your night?
A (to bhavri's surprise): awesome, mindblowing, too good yaar!!!
All of them are shocked at this reaction of arjun. Arjun, who notices Manasvi's eyes, asks
A: bhabhi, is everything fine? Aap ko dekh kar aisa lagta hai ke aap poori raat nahi soyi…
M: haan arjun, actually baat yeh hai ke kal raat se koi mere phone me private number ke missed calls de raha hai. Suraj kehta hai ke koi pareshan hone ki baat nahi hai, lekin mujhe bohot darr lag raha hai…
A: bhaiya ne sahi kaha, darne ki koi baat nahi hai bhabhi.

sorry for not commenting earlier yaar.........this ff is really sweet....had me blushing all the time 😳 .......continue soon 😊

hey everyone, sorry for not posting for o long time. heres the next part.

S (smiling): dekha manasvi, maine kaha tha na…
Arjun, who notices the smile on Suraj's face, understands what he has been up to.
B: lekin bhabhi, agar koi aap ko pareshan kar raha hai, to phir uss number pe phone karke pooch lijie ke woh kaun hai…
A: bhavri, agar yeh itna aasan hota to bhabhi ne yeh pehle hi kar diya hota.
B: lekin issme mushkil ki kya baat hai?
A: bhavri, yeh private number hai… iss ka matlab yeh hai ke jab koi tumhe phone karta hai, to uss insaan ka number nahi dikhta hai.
B: oh! Accha. Ab samjhi.

Later in the evening, all four of them are sitting in A-B's room, chatting.
A (in Suraj's ear): bhaiya, ek baat bataiye, yeh bhabhi ko jo missed calls mil rahe hai, woh aap kar rahe hai na?
S: um, woh, nahi to… main aisa kyun karunga?
A: bhabhi ko pareshan karne ke liye…
S: arre arjun, main Manasvi ko pareshan kyun karunga???
A: BHAIYA!!! Tell me the truth…
S: ok ok arjun. Haan, main hi Manasvi ko private number se missed calls de raha hoon…
B: yeh kya chup chup ke baate ho rahi hai?
A: uh, kuch nahi bhavri, main to bas woh, uh, bhaiya ko salaah de raha tha ke shaadi ke baad apni patni ke saath kaise behave karna!
B: ACCHA! To tum batao, ke shaadi ke baad apni patni ke saath kaise behave karna chahiye?
A: um, main keh raha tha ke, apni patni ko kabhi rulana nahi chahiye, aur uski har itcha ko pura karna chahiye, aur usse hamesha khush rakhna chahiye, AUR USSE PRIVATE NUMBER KE MISSED CALLS DEKE PARESHAN NAHI KARNA CHAHIYE!!!
Manasvi looks at Arjun first, and then at Suraj, who seems to have covered his face in his hands.
M: kya kaha tumne???
S: kuch nahi Manasvi, kuch bhi to nahi… (gestures Arjun to keep quiet)
A: NAHI! Main yeh keh raha tha, ke woh bhaiya hi hai jo aapko private number ke missed calls deke pareshan kar rahe hai!
Manasvi looks at Suraj very angrily, but instead of storming at Suraj and asking all sorts of questions, her eyes fill up with tears and she runs out of the room. Suraj, who has totally broken down by now, is trying to console himself. He looks at Arjun angrily.
S: GREAT GOING BRO!
Saying this, he storms out behind Manasvi. Arjun is dumbfounded as he had not expected such reactions from neither Suraj nor Manasvi. On the other hand, Bhavri is looking at Arjun like he has done some crime.
B: iss tarha batane ki kya zaroorat thi Arjun…
A: accha, to ab ghalati meri hai? Aur jo bhaiya ne kiya woh? Woh bhi to bhabhi ko pareshan karte hai!
B: aur tum mujhe pareshan nahi karte? Tab to bhaiya aa kar tumhare raaz nahi kholte hai!
A: maine kab pareshan kiya tumhe?
Bhavri is just ready to strike him with a hundred incidents when Arjun has made fun of her, but
A: ek minute! Iss waqt hum kyun fight kar rahe hai? Lets go and see them.
B: nahi arjun, yeh unke beech ka problem, woh dono khud sort out karlenge.

thts it. hope u like it.