Aj Jaane Ki Zidd Na Karo - A ShraMan OS - Page 7

Originally posted by: Perpetuity

Res. This will be a long res Zoyi. I will be able to unres it next month only I guess 😔

Originally posted by: Crazypiya

Awesome
The way your potrait their emotions just just outstanding

Thank you!
Now come to the song
One of my most fav song...
And the way your used it..
Each and every lines.. The meaning.. M just spellbound..

Mine too!!! The song has such depth its insane...
How can u write some sooo beautifully
I have read a lots of yor writing
But believe me this is one of the best os i have ever read..

I will have to agree there, I love this one the most, with the not so happy ending!
Hats off to you dearrr

Thanks!
Muaah muaah for presenting such an awesome piece..

Originally posted by: LubSha

No words. So happy to read this. I had tears of happiness in my eyes, and that speaks it all. Would just say thank you for writing this.


Lubna.

Originally posted by: Nik03

Wow!!!! What u have written zo...no words to describe how much i loved it...

Thanks so much Nik, but I suggest you call me zoya, cause if Prii (Priyam) catches wind of anyone calling me Zo she looses it... It's her name for me😃 Don't mind haan...
The hurt,lonliness,helplessness,pain of shravan touched my heart...n the song suits d situation perfactly!!
Loved how sumo took a stand 4 her love ..exactly what we wanted to see in d show but 😭 Hate u sony😡
How much i miss shraman!!!!Just wanted to see shravan getting all that he deserved n sumo supporting n taking a stand 4 her shravan... 🥺
but u made it far better than what i have imagined it to be 👏

I'm glad I could do justice!
Loved it Dil se!! ❤️

Honoured...
With love
Nik

Originally posted by: pinky.padda

absolutely brilliant

totally loved it

superb

Originally posted by: Faith28

Absolutely brilliant!!👏 I love dark stories too😉 But not at the cost of killing the hero/heroine 😆 Ending humesha happy happy honi chahiye😃 And thank u for not killing shravan😲 Loved it... Waiting for somemore romantic OSs😳

Originally posted by: 0Bella0

OMGGG dark story finally
Me danca
reshhh
Hey how is your bro sista I m sure he'll be fine he has all our prayers dear

Originally posted by: Pravas007

Can you convert it to an TS or SS?

Originally posted by: dhanyata

Ho...ho...ho !!! 😃 Marvellous update...it was freaking superbbb. Feeling better whenever I realize my other friend-fans are not pleased just like me with the shraman's portrayal off-late in the show and are re-writing them in most possible better ways👏.

Thanks so much!!

Sumo's reaction after all that happened at preekar wedding night is one of the worsttest things happened in the show.😡 I am very very grateful to you that you managed to erase those scenes from my mind and replaced them with one beautiful scene as in your writing.

Glad I could...

I loved every monologue of sumo, her turmoil about their friendship relationship status right then. Her fear when realizing some stranger at the park are all penned nicely. it turned out to be shravan.😲

Hahaha ya, I love drama😆

Though not romantic, shravan's doings to sumo there showed his pain, his fear of loss, frustration😭

You got that right, it wasn't supposed to be romantic, he was forcing himself on her, no matter how wrong that is, it was his frustration that he thought Suman would understand...

Of course, shravan is a genuine, loyal lover. He can't harm sumo whatever it may be.

Agreed..

When he said " At least I'm calling you Suman as off yet."

This was exactly the situation at the show, if she married adi, never one can imagine that they would meet, talk..or be friends. Everyone at tiwari's know that still just they are okay with it along with sumo.😭

True that, it would have been tormenting. I dread to think what the CVs had planned if the show wasn't getting over😆 Itna raita phela diya tha, aur kya kya karte pata nahi...

How he cried after dropping sumo at tiwari killa, poor boy, still believed that his harsh words would make sumo speak her heart but failed. I couldn't stop crying along with him there. Because that very moment again reminded me of Sumo of the show. So harsh and she would have definitely did this, just go and shut the door.

Ya she would have...

But you brought her back. Just loved their union there and their dialogues at her room ( he started being naughty...😛)

Naught Shravan was the best!

P.S. It pained just by only reading your note, that you wrote shravan's death. JUST CANNOT TOLERATE THAT AT ANY COST. After losing so much, he can't just lose his life as well. that too giving his everything to Aditya😡. NO WAY. He deserves his happy life, his family, his Mom'S LOVE, his sumo. Shravan should live happily.

Well life ain't fair.. People don't deserve a lot they go through. Happy endings sirf fictional hoti hai.. Life is all about not so happy endings... And I have posted the other one too. No matter how painful that is.

You are sooo Good, u realized the effect and changed the ending for us and for you. Thanks a lot😊

I didn't have the guts to post it earlier, my own shortcoming. But I'm glad I did post it. I loved the other ending! It was deep...

P.P.S It may look like am comparing original show's scenes with one's here, but can't help. We always craved for something like this, and as you re-write them in the most desired way (just as continuation to the original) am expressing my feel like that.

That's okay...

Expecting another dhamakadhar update from you soonish.

Originally posted by: Safire

Oh,NO!! You can't do this😭