Aj Jaane Ki Zidd Na Karo - A ShraMan OS - Page 9

Originally posted by: anukulgr8

Res
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Unress

Finally..IF ne permission de diya...
So as I was saying tere is update ne mujhe rula he diya...😭
I dont cry on reading emotional stories(self control karti hu..😆)
par aaj toh tumne mera self control ka chakna chuur kar diya...😆
Kya update tha yaar...Sad story...😭
Itna rulaneke liye sorry...

Sacch tumhari baat nahi maani maine tissue box lene ki aur pachta rahi hun...😃
And that dialogue creation of urs...Hayye...Sahi tha and totally true...👏
Thanks!

Coming to the update...It was heart-wrenching..💔
when she confessed to him I was like..Wow ..Awesome..Love u Sumo...
But that crash..🤢🤢It just made me numb...
It took me sometime to come out of the trance..wipe my eyes and start reading again...
It was totally awesome...👏
I'm glad you liked it so...

Tum ruk jao jaate jaate, sajhde mai jhuk jaaon.."

"Ek baar keh do ruk jao, sau baar ruk jaoon.."Haaye...Isne toh mere selfcontrol ke tukde tukde kar dale...😭

Jab bhi thandi hawa tumhare baalon ko sehlaye, samjh lena mai hoon. Jab bhi barish ki boon tumhe chooaye, ah.. samjh lena mai hoon. Jab dhoop kuch zyada tez ho, samjh lena mai hoon. Jab mujhe mehsoos karna chaho, apne dil par haath rakhna, dhadkano mai mai hi miloonga. Awesome lines..Felt the pain in them...😭
and the last...those children...that was so cute...Shravan was not there n still sumo was happy...talking with his picha...that was so beautiful
Agar saach kahu toh ye jo ending ka para tha na..ye maine bohot pehle imagine kiya tha...like when I saw EDKV first..
All in all..It was a sad, heart wrenching, beautiful, marvelous,...M out of words..
*I can predict that aftr readin the above line tumhare maan me aayega ki inna likhne ke baad bhi m sayin m out of words..*🤣
Par kya karu..Jitna likhu utna kam hai...

LOL... Thanks again!
Loved it n enjoyed it totally...
Do come up with new ideas soon..(as always)😳
Ya let's hope...

Love,
ANU😊

Originally posted by: pal655

I couldn't complete the whole is as I choked because I was crying as hell and I have so many things to say so even cant just res. But it is beautiful and hell emotional. O god. But as we know love never ends. Truly explained in this piece. Kudos to you zoya di

Originally posted by: -AnnieQueen-

Zoya love 🤗
Riyu 🤗

Such a beautiful OS
I am not a fan of sad endings and I completely get what you are trying to say
But still happy endings give hope you know
And to live we need hope a lot of them
Enough of it

I get it😆
I'll talk about the not so happy one first
It was beyond emotional and tragic
I would never want ShraMan to end like that
But still it was painfully beautiful

Thank you!
And the happy one
I also have a complaint about this one Zoya
I was expecting a love making scene at the end :/

I don't do explicit hon.. And insinuations are present only where I feel the scene would be better with them...
But it wasn't there:(
Koi na ending toh acchi thi
But still I would loved a love making scene 😆
Keep writing more

Deal!
Love you bro 😃

Originally posted by: CarpeDiem_

Adhoora hoke bhi,,,Hai ishq inka kamil...!

oh! my heart... took me all the guts to finish reading...😭

Tried sooo hard not to visualize Shravan like that... #Pained...

Aman,Ammar n Ammara complete them...❤️

Exemplary writing !

Originally posted by: orion23

Honestly the way Namik has breathed life into Shravan, its impossible not to imagine him there...

And that makes it worse...

Thank you so much!!!

Originally posted by: maddy_edkv

Oh god I'm Dann late.sooo sorry for that. Maaf kar paogi mujhe😉.

Coming to the update, I didn't read the sad ending one yet.actually today's been a bit low.so I didn't want to make my m ood go down. I have read the happy ending one and you slayed it as always.the pain they both had been through is evident in every line.i always love the way you write them.I will give the sad ending one a go tomorrow.

Keep writing more and thanks for the pm.

Hope your cousin is getting better<3