Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed

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Reshma Ahmed

@Perpetuity

Rocker

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Posted: 8 years ago

#131

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WOW! WOW! WOW! Yeh baht baht baht jyada nonu tha. Shravan's convo with nimmo 😭 It's heart breaking. So many years of pain. He has put his heart out for nimmo to count the pieces she and everyone has made of it. You penned it so so beautifully. Just amazing. Agr show mein iska 1 % v dikha dete to yeh halat na hoti humare show ki 😔 It's fab zoyi. You always do an amazing job while penning down Shravan's emotions. Every dialogue stabbed a dagger in my heart. It's so bloody emotional. Thanks so much for this yaar. Dil k armaan ab isse hi pure krne hai. But who's complaining. It's so much better that it can't even be compared to what we got. Love love love ya 🤗

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neverlandspirit

@neverlandspirit

Dazzler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#132

I seriously am at loss of words...i read both the chapters now and i cannot find words to tell you how beautiful and achingly mesmerizing this was.

I loved how you portrayed a subtle progression in their relationship despite it being a Circumstancial Marriage. There is this little Magic in everything you write and baby you should take a bow. YOU ARE TRULY AMAZING!!!

Loved it beyond words.

Kudos to you

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Zenab

@Duskyylilac

Sparkler

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Posted: 8 years ago

#133

next update wow
issbaar I'm on time
Zoya Api jhappis 🤗
Awesome update as usual 👏
I'm liking cute moments between Shraman
He is broken totally Sumo will give him so much love that he will forget all the pain and loneliness that he faced in last 12 yrs
Keep writing Api ab toh IF writers ka Sahara hai

Lots of love ❤️

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an_chau

@an_chau

Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#134

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Zoya, this was everything and more I was hoping for! This ending plays out many of the scenarios I had literally tormenting me 😆 since the end of the show... that Shravan-Nirmala convo was LOVE, girl... Your piece is giving me the closure that was denied by the cvs 😕

Stretch it out, please, soul sister!

😛

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castile

@castile

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#135

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Do I have words to express my feelings after reading this beautifully written update that no doubt each and everyone of us here wanted to see live on our screens?
I can try but so sorry my ability to express and my vocabulary is pretty limited...

The whole chapter for me went from...
😒

😆
😳
😕
😭

The whole chapter was mind blowingly awesome 👏
Every emotion seamlessly and magically woven together ❤️

Shravan's hand on Sumo's head, comforting her was
(That's me and my bae 😳 )
ShraMan's banter 😆 😳
Shravan- 'Aaj keh diya hai dobara mat kehna...'
And ofcourse 'Motu zyada apna lagta hai' 🤗
And Ram finally realizing that his son's happiness lies with his Sumo...(where is the wise-sage-with-a-halo-on-top-emoji? I can't communicate without emoticons!!)
And yes I had expected Sumo to call him Papa from Day 1 without any prompting... 👍🏼
Shravan is such a cute man-child! I wanna give him a bear hug where he finds it difficult to breath!! 🤗
"Haaw! Papa! Aapki bahu mujh pe domestic abuse kar rahi hai aur aap bol rahe ho continue! Ek din hua shaadi ko aur party badal li!" 🤣
Domestic abuse?! Seriously?!! 🤪
And then of course Mama Malhotra had to make an appearance
But it is necessary... All three of them had to see what their individual actions have done to Shravan. How bad they have hurt him, the depth and the damage had to be barred in front of them in its rawness...
The whole Nirmala-Shravan convo was just so achingly raw that I could feel something breaking right then 💔
Cut to ShraMan at night...
'Pakka?' 😭 🥺

This is how it should have progressed but yes #PhootiKismat
But man you are one amazing writer and I dare anyone contradict me here!! And no I am not trying to flatter you! Nope that's just not my domain...
Waiting for the next update and we trust you to balance out the sad and the fluff stuff...!

P.S. So sorry for the late as well as long @$$ comment! Hehehe

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Izza

@memories_im

Inactive

Posted: 8 years ago

#136

This is beautiful Zoya!

I love this! Shravan's pain was conveyed perfectly! Would love to know how Sumo makes amends now. Continue soon :)

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seabeauty

@seabeauty

Voyager

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Posted: 8 years ago

#137

That was a good update!!

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dhanyata

@dhanyata

Navigator

Posted: 8 years ago

#138

😭😭 Our Poor Shravan !!

But thisss is the Sumo we always wanted to see !!!! Sumo who knew shravan in and out, saw his vulnerability at every stage, understood his pureness in heart. She only knew how much he hates women and the real reason behind it. She also knew he loved her. She only knew he is being manipulated and she should've been in a position to foresee that he is been misguided.

Knowing all this, in the show, she never took a step to care him a bit, instead found new ways to hurt him *Heights of negativity* *Sigh* 😡

You are just brilliant, you brought the pure love and care out of her, the real innocent sumo full of love that we saw in the initial episodes. Much needed thing to heal our shravan.

Also, ramnath's self redeemption track makes sense here.

Finally, whatEVER we (as fans) wanted to ask Nimmo on her face, were delivered very well by Shravan. 😆😆. Awesome dialogues. Keep up the good work.

Thanks for the pm.