Mil Jaate Hai Jo Bane, Ek Duje Ke Vaaste- Alternate ending - Completed - Page 16

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Well comparatively I am new to IF . And after joining i came to know about few names one was zoya and now I see why. Your are an amazing writer . Kudos to you 👏

I am so much relieved after this story. I was not happy the way CVs in edkv has put all the blame and apologizing part for shravan. He was the one most hurt too but no one got that. Thank god you came out as our saviour.

I really wish your were the dialogue writer and the CVs too. This edkv os much better than what we got.



Thanks for writing this

You should be the creative head😊

Awww , he kept his hands on her head , so cutee I can't.

Thus was amazing and it was what the majority of us wanted to see. Shravan's pain, his anger, his guilt and his love 😳 the way you described his POV was perfect 👍🏼

Zoya...superb...update...the much needed realisation of sumo and nimmo of shravans pain

Originally posted by: orion23

Thank you!!

Will do🤗

Thanks for the reply dude!! 😊

Brilliantly written Zoya...this made me really emotional, especially Shravan's confrontation scene with his mother...this is what we had all been waiting to see...you have beautifully portrayed the insecurities and emotions that Shravan had gone through and finally Sumo realizing what Shravan had to endure...after reading this, missing EDKV more...waiting for your next part.

Thanks for this chapter zoya. I was just in search of chapter like this where shravan's pain is described and not portraying him like reason behind all the problems in ShraMan relationship. I'm really thankful for this chapter. I just loved it.

Man, this was magical!! JK Rowling se magic udhaar leke love mei transform kar diya!! 😳

So beautifully you portrayed the missing love amidst all the pain and bitterness. This was something I aas craving to watch onscreen after marriage. This awkwardness, this brimming love and that angst.Sigh!!

Nevertheless I relished the written words, taking in each and savouring them.

[Hey CVs, you lurking around here, then olease hire this awesome author for a season 2 with Nimik ⭐️ ]

Suman was distraught by her broken dreams which pierce her time and again. Shravan's guilt was so poignant. Woh dost ab bhi zinda hai kahi. And the silent apology and forgivevess scene was sheer brilliance. What a visual treat. Khamoshiyaan pyaar se jeet na saki balki pyaar ban gayi.

And both realising that every obstacle is worth it. Indeed, the togetherness would be so fulfiling after this.

What followed was absolutely hilarious and intense at the same time. The innate care in Shravan oozing out along with his whacky sense of humour plus Sumo's hormonal disbalance.
👏 👏 Aur kya chahiye!!

Awiee that 'Motu bit was cho cute. 😳 Them reminiscing together... 😃

Ramu's realisation was so powerful. Even the subsequent jolt that all needs to be in open.

Loved Suman thinking to make the moong daal ka halwa. I was actually expecting her to make it in the show after that fight but she had to make that godforsaken daal!!
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Sumo ke side ka pyaar bhi umad-umad ke dikha!! 😃

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And there goes the power-packed, skyrocketing, Dhoni ka world-cup wala Sixer!! ⭐️
This scene was a masterpiece!

You know, just a few minutes before I had ranted against Shravan on 'Connecting the dots' thread about him being a misogynist and a gadhe ki aulaad.

The feminist in me had started breathing after being deprived of Shravan all this week.
But bam! She simply wept and drowned herself in Shravan's pain. Hereafter officially, she is never gonna raise her head whenever Shravan is concerned. 😆

All these bloody people especially Ramu and Nirmala do not deserve Shravan. Even Sumo has been portrayed so heartless at times that I dont know what should I feel about this ' love story'.

He showed the festering lessions of his wounds and everybody was left charred. What about hwho bears it day after day after day? And yet rises again to face it anew!!

Nirmala comes across as the most worthless in this saga. Woman, you still care about Chomu!! 🤢 She should be officially renamed KAANDLA.

Shravan slayed. What sass, what pain. Each dialogue was a gem! Namik would have nailed it!! 😭

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Sumo sees the mask, now she sees it!! His facade of happiness!! Sigh!
And Shravan's pain... this wonderful man does not deserve it! Itna dard... freaking hell!!
The pain has made him so numb that he has to trigger it with his alcohol to feel something, anything!! 😭

Sumo weeps for her Chashmish, her love. I adored the way she handled him, trying to erase his pain.

And the moment he said 'Godi mei sar rakh ke so jau' - my heart broke!! 💔

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