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Posted: 12 years ago
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Sun rose in the beautiful valley of Jaigar, the rays of light falling on the distant hills made it look more beautiful than ever. There was a time, the people of this state used to chirp happily like the birds who fly in the sky every morning for their work. The farmers farming in the field, the ladies helping the man in the sowing or in different vegetable plantations and the miners or merchants going out for their business without any hesitation. Jaigarh was known for its peacefulness and warm hearten people. But present day situation had changed. Many were scared to go out, children were strictly restrained from playing outdoors and the state and its outskirts were guarded heavily by King Rudraksh's soldires. Peace had definitely been disrupted here and people felt like they were cursed.


Udayveer Singh and Vedanta Singh sat on the edge of Kaveri hill, in the outskirts of Jaigarh, while their horses stood nearby.

Udayveer: So you will slay off the head if you find that sick killer huh? Even if she is a woman?

Vedanta: Of course i will do what my duty says me to do. I am a Kshatriya (Warrior) by birth. Duty is first to me. But why are you asking me the same question again and again with that irritating and all knowing smirk of yours.

Udayveer: Ohh common Kshatriya Vedanta. Don't hide from your close friend ehh..We both know among the two of us only one can control his emotions and be firm, when it comes to WOMEN!!.

Uday said with a stress on the last word and with a naughty smile annoying Vedanta more.

Vedanta: So you think only you are the saint when those Apsaras dance in the court and try to seduce you?..i know what naughty thoughts hover in your mind.

Udayveer:..ahaha...Nice answer my friend but here we are talking of a Killer, a brutal and sick murdered who kills people in a horrifying manner..Imagine a woman with magnificent beauty, who is not ordinary, but very different from the rest try to please you, satisfy you and you are almost looking forward to your future along with her, suddenly in the middle of the night cut open your stomach with your own sharp sword!!...What will you...


Vedanta: Stop it!!!...That's enough Knight Udayveer. Hold your tongue. How can you have such a ghastly imagination!! This is not at all a joke anymore


Udayveer was really enjoying this...He could see how his friend had a smile on his face and was lost in that beautiful woman's imagination, when all of a sudden it was ruined by the scary Stomach Operation!!


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A few miles away from the state of Jaigarh, lay a huge and beautiful house, which would not be wrong to call a small palace with a beautiful garden, trees and fountain to add to its beauty.
Anyone who looks at the house would be attracted to meet the owner of it. The place was a very quite one, as it was in the outskirts, but the house was not at all silent. A beautiful female voice could be heard singing classical music and a girl of almost equal age was dancing breathlessly to the tune of the music that was played by the other girl. Both were quite young and ignorant of any earthly hassles, and were lost in their art of music and dance.


A girl was combing her long hair slowly and listening to the sweet voice of her sister. That brought a smile to her face as she closed her eyes and felt it. All words would fall less to describe this beauty. She was an exquisite creation of the almighty. Her long dark hair with a few hanging curls falling on her waist, her big dark eyes, where anyone would be lost if looked at them once, those long lashes which could mesmerize anyone when blinked, the dimples that played on her pouting lips along with the plum colored cheeks that could make anyone's heart melt at her one sight. It was a beauty that you can never be angry with, but that you feel ready to crush yourself and get mingled with the nature for giving such a pleasant gift to the mankind! Manyata Kumari was that sort of beauty, a shy yet elegant, soft spoken yet never hesitant to speak for herself and her sisters and very polite and loving to the young and the old.


She was getting ready for her morning puja and wore a white and red ghagra-choli with the white flowery necklace, a bracelet and a white garland which complimented her attire very well.

Jainandini came up rushing to her door and bang open screaming excitedly

Jainandini: Did you listen Jiji?...I got back my lost taal and i didn't make any mistake today.

Manyata: Yes Jainandini..You sang very beautifully today. Mother must be proud of you today.
You will become a famous gayika(singer) one day.Now lets perform the puja. Call everyone.

Jainandini nodded with a smile and left


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Vedanta got up to leave as he was too tired and anoyed of Udayveer's teases, but he was stopped from moving further

Udayveer: Alright i am sorry. But to be serious, i wanted to tell you that be it a man or a woman, we have to follow the king's strict orders. So don't fall weak on time.

Vedanta: Why are you so sure that the person is a woman?...How on earth is woman such ruthless? Wooman are the most delicate and beautiful creation of God. She can think of love, care and family, but never of killing people in such a harsh way. I don't agree with you...

Saying this he left the place without waitiing for Udayveer to accompany him. Udayveer sighed and retreated back to his home too as it was almost sunset, and evenings were risky and the prime time for the serial killer to hunt its target.



Done with this Chappy finally. Sorry for late update but i had power issues frenz...will try to be fast next time😊
Edited by sweet_gargi - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: sweet_gargi



Hi andy...my Viva was ok...they screwed me n i struggled for 4 days n its finally over..pheww...so m trying to make myself relaxed by writing something, n as i had told u earlier that i will write this SS, m writing it now.😊

lets see how it goes..

so when would be get our next chap. U know i just cant wait for such suspense stories
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Wow! Wow! Wow! U updated just when i asked u when.
the chapter was really beautiful...
loved everyline of it...
udayveer is that suspicious guy who looks only at eveidence, he listen to his brain rather than his heart ... thats indeed an advantage, i must add.
manyta and her family atmospere seems nice... i wont say much about killer as i dont want ot break your suspence..😆 but i really loved that killer😳
looking forward for the coming chaps
Edited by andy.a - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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GAARGI...BEAUTIFUL START.REALLY LOVED IT.WELL WRITTEN.

LOVED HOW U DESCRIBE JAIGARH N ITS PEOPLE.IN MOST OF D STORIES UV IS MAHARAJ OF JAIGARH.DIS IS ONE EXCEPTION.HE IS A KNIGHT.

LOVED D WAY HOW UV ANNOYED VEDANTHA.POOR GUY .SCARED HIM SAYING ABOUT STOMACH OPERATION.NOW HE WILL THINK TWICE BEFORE GOING TO A WOMAN.

LOVED D WAY HOW U INTRODUCED MANYATA N HER SISTERS.J IS A SINGER.DEN WHO WAS DAT DANCER.
IS MANYATA D MURDERER.

LET US SEE HOW D STORY PROGRESSES N UV CATHES D MUDERER.ENJOYED D CHAPTER SO MUCH.

TRY TO CONTINUE SOON.THANKS FOR PM N FOR STARTING NEW SS.




Edited by ...anju... - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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very well done, wonder who the killer is and their true motive
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: adventure_gurl

very well done, wonder who the killer is and their true motive


Thanks dear...You will come to know the killer very soon😊
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Edited by ...anju... - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: ...anju...

GAARGI...BEAUTIFUL START.REALLY LOVED IT.WELL WRITTEN.

LOVED HOW U DESCRIBE JAIGARH N ITS PEOPLE.IN MOST OF D STORIES UV IS MAHARAJ OF JAIGARH.DIS IS ONE EXCEPTION.HE IS A KNIGHT.

LOVED D WAY HOW UV ANNOYED VEDANTHA.POOR GUY .SCARED HIM SAYING ABOUT STOMACH OPERATION.NOW HE WILL THINK TWICE BEFORE GOING TO A WOMAN.

LOVED D WAY HOW U INTRODUCED MANYATA N HER SISTERS.J IS A SINGER.DEN WHO WAS DAT DANCER.
IS MANYATA D MURDERER.

LET US SEE HOW D STORY PROGRESSES N UV CATHES D MUDERER.ENJOYED D CHAPTER SO MUCH.

TRY TO CONTINUE SOON.THANKS FOR PM N FOR STARTING NEW SS.



GAARGI...BEAUTIFUL START.REALLY LOVED IT.WELL WRITTEN.---Thanks Anju😳

LOVED HOW U DESCRIBE JAIGARH N ITS PEOPLE.IN MOST OF D STORIES UV IS MAHARAJ OF JAIGARH.DIS IS ONE EXCEPTION.HE IS A KNIGHT.---Ohh ya i wanted to make UV different this time...actually this plot suddenly popped in my mind so thought of putting it in words😆

LOVED D WAY HOW UV ANNOYED VEDANTHA.POOR GUY .SCARED HIM SAYING ABOUT STOMACH OPERATION.NOW HE WILL THINK TWICE BEFORE GOING TO A WOMAN.---Yes he will definitely..Uday is very naughty n he enjoyed creating problems for his friend

LOVED D WAY HOW U INTRODUCED MANYATA N HER SISTERS.J IS A SINGER.DEN WHO WAS DAT DANCER.
IS MANYATA D MURDERER.----Manyata and her sisters are masters in fine arts like music, dance and paintings...n as for Manyata you will have to wait for the next chapter to know who is the murderer😊

LET US SEE HOW D STORY PROGRESSES N UV CATHES D MUDERER.ENJOYED D CHAPTER SO MUCH.---yes lets wait and watch

TRY TO CONTINUE SOON.THANKS FOR PM N FOR STARTING NEW SS.---Your welcome anju and thank you for the lovely comments🤗




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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awesome start gargi...👏👏👏...lol the entry of Manyata was too much well described, and i loved each n every word in it...😊😊😊.. J a singer hunh now thats a change😃...
Uday thinks vedanta would fall in front of beauty but seems like on contrary Uday is the one to fall😆..loved how he teased vedanta...
waiting to know how the story unfolds..continue soon😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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beautiful update gargi...
loved frendship between uday n vedanta.
i cud imaginer uday describe the how the crime must be taking place,to vefdanta with beautiful descriptive language, hand gestures and expressions
loved manyata's description
even J n manyata's relation seems positive.
cant wait for next chap nthe mystery to unfold
this is so magical!
do continue soon. thanx fr pm

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