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Posted: 6 years ago
#21

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear 🤗

Thats again, very nice part to read.
Ragkor moments are getting better and better😳☺️...

Thats a nice scene to write on, sumi, I knew when i read in last part where he says,we will workout together ,that something of this sort , ragkor moment may comeup.


But the way you wrote it, I mean the circumstances that made this to naturally happen was ❤️, I mean he did this to help her, where she is struggling to be back on track, loosing her confidence, he made her do it and regain her confidence with ease. Raghav is such a sweetie..omg he is getting lovable to the max.

Indeed a fab scene and thought, new one, which makes me wish we could had seen something near to this on show , having a minimal yr or 2yr leap with chakor focusing on career.. but nope..no use in wishing that on tv.

now our wishes are fulfilled through your writing sumi dear. thanks a lot.🤗

I just loved right from his forehead kiss to sooth her and then the way they did exercising and not to forget even the final moments were he teases for real workout and she brushes his idea with a slight kiss.


Then the process you explain, each and every time, in detail , i love that.

final statement on sponsors, corporates and sports , again an intriguing end...

this concept I am liking it. dealing with sport related issues.

waiting eagerly to read next part.
thanks for this sweet fast update


Uma thanks thanks so much deary...

Thanks dear that you liked the new concept... the training its RagKor and (MeeJay) had to rake my dumbo brain... i like subtle romance so blended it😳... He is her pillar...

thanks again for liking this concept of corporates... sponsors we always wanted the show to deal with this sports issue aspect na...

Let me try to deal it. Hope I am able to keep the suspense..

Thanks again

fast update he he thanks to my Boss and the Leadership who were too busy through the day so I had some peace...😆


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Posted: 6 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: katheriene

Interesting update👏

The training session was amazing with Ragkor romance😳
The last part was very mysterious😲
Let's see how Ragkor & boys will tackle the situation
Waiting for next



Thanks so much Sonali

Happy you liked the training session.

Lets see how they tackle the situation which is going to be difficult but they are Lion, Eagle and the cubs will fight out sure...😉
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Posted: 6 years ago
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PART III

Pondering

Chakor along with the other staff and the PT master met the students who were taking part in the sports activities and was planning a schedule for them.

She was briefed and was also informed that the sports uniform, shoes and socks were sponsored by a corporate firm which was also into Tea Plantation and was doing it as a part of their marketing strategy.

The students were very happy in seeing Chakor while Rohan and Lalit were not so happy but did not show anything.

She was getting the name list for the various races...

As she was charting out the exercise regime, the PT master along with the peon was walking towards the room which was having the items for the students.

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The PT master and the peon Karnad were walking towards the room which was having the sports items.

They checked the items and took the uniforms for distribution while the shoes, socks were always given during the events and were taken back at the end of the day as the shoes were procured from a very leading brand and the sponsors felt that the students will not be taking care of the shoes as they were too young and the sports shoes were indeed costly and had ways of maintenance.

Karnad was the poen but a little greedy (he was the one who helped Kishore in helping the boys details). He was entrusted to give the shoes and socks which were kept in boxes with names and roll numbers written on it during the sports event and taken back after the event.

The sponsors were the Laal Plantations which were competitors in the domestic market but was always into heavy advertisings and marketing and was always sponsoring sports activities be it at school levels or interschool and district levels or even at the highest level.

They were also active in the Board meetings but Hira Laal the Founder was always eyeing Rishab Plantations as inspite of their heavy advertisings, brand ambassadors etc they were not able to be the No.1. There were union issues too within their plant as their workers were always comparing their salaries and benefits with Rishabs which were always high above with satisfied employees and also very loyal though they never were into high advertising but were always high in their quality. Shyam Laal & Raaghav never believed in getting ambassadors and high cost advt as he and Raaghav felt their quality of products should bring in the customer base but were actively participating in social service related activities and was giving back to the society through their lodges and also taking care of certain educational and social welfare activities. They never approached young children to advertise their brands.

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Rohan and Lalit were in the same class of Arjun and Aayansh. Rohan always was bit snobbish and always wanted to compete with Arjun be it in studies or sports. Ar and Aa always stood the toppers and were always the teacher's pet due to their discipline and behavior. Lalit was tagging behind Rohan as he was from a rich family and his father was also having businesses. Lalit was typical that bratty type and Aayansh never liked Rohan and Lalit as he felt they played behind games. Even when Rohan talks or asks any doubts in any subjects Arjun would help him and clear doubts while Aayansh never liked. Rohan would take help and tips from Ar and pretends as though it was his.

Rohan sometimes acts rude with the other students especially with Ria who is a cute friend of the boys and Arjun has even picked his collar as he spoke lie and grabbed her water bottle. Arjun was a fair one but never tolerated any lies and never feared anyone if they are wrong but otherwise he was very brilliant, smart and helpful. He was into sports while AA was into sketching, painting, and singing, but one thing the bros never left to cheer each other.

Chakor drafted the exercise regime of the children and she was helping them in with their sprints.

She was indeed surprised that the Laal Plantations were giving the uniforms but taking away the shoes and socks after the track events. She was told that the sponsors had been sponsoring for past five years but never used to take the shoes and socks. The shoes, socks were of same colour from a good brand.

The boys and girls were practicing their warm ups before the start of the race. Aayansh would not participate much but was always with his bro to cheer him and help him with his needs and in his words, "I just don't want these two near Ar.

It was one of the days where the heats of the various races were held.

Arjun had come first in 5 out of 7 races ( in the heats) two races Rohan won it. There was three more heats, a semi final and finals for the 100 mts and 200 mts and 400 mts sprints.

Arjun with other boys were ready in their uniforms and were standing in their markings when Karnad brought their shoes and socks. Lalit brought over Ar. Aa was asking as to why Lalit was bringing while Karnad was there. Lalit said he was helping Karnad as he cannot carry all the shoes.

Chakor encouraged the boys at the markings and moved away after wishing good luck to them. 100mts race Rohan was not there as he had been qualified for the semi through an earlier heat. It has to be noted that Ar and Rohan were indeed ace runners but Ar pace was far head

The PT master blew the whistle and the race took place. Arjun just sweeped it and qualified for the semi finals. Chakor was very happy and ran and hugged him.

The next was the 200 mts final heats. Arjun and Rohan were in the markings. The boys warmed up. Given the socks and the shoes. The race started... Arjun was leading while Rohan was behind him... things were going fine, when Arjun's pace slowed a bit and by the time he could stabilize and pick up Rohan went past and finished the race. Arjun was terribly upset and chakor who was noticing this was surprised. Though Ar and Ro were qualified for the finals still Arjun could not understand why he slowed down. He was upset. The socks and shoes were collected back and the day was over... The next races were scheduled in the next two days.

Chakor picked the boys and was driving back home while Ar was very quiet and was in tears. Its ok Arjun its just heats and it happens Chakor said we should be a sport as winning and losing is common in sports. But mumma you are right I know its common but how is that I pace slow when I run with Rohan but in the other races I am ahead. I feel so demotivated ma.. She said maybe Rohan is faster... but she had her own thoughts but kept quiet. Ma I don't like Rohan or that Lalit said Aa... No AA that's not right, donot water hatred in your young minds she said. Sorry mumma said Aa.

The girls were jumping to see the bro but Ar was so upset that he did not play fine with Ad and that little rose was looking upto him pouting cutely. Ar kissed Ad and went to their room with tears.

Chakor changed and had lunch. She asked about the boys but Girija said they did not come. She was thinking through. She went to the boys room.

Aa was trying to console Ar... Hugging him its ok bro... its not ok Aa, how can I fail in a simple heat I am not going to participate day after tomorrow he said. Chakor walked in she carried their lunch... mumma I am not feeling hungry Ar said, Aa pouting cute, bro I am dam hungry please lets eat he said. Chakor just hugged Ar and was feeding both Ar never give up so easily. Its sports, winning in one race and loosing in another is common, but as you say let me see why it is happening... in the evening lets sprint and check out. And you are a brave bold one, why do you think you will be defeated, you will loose, never think you will loose, you have to aim high, set your eyes on the finish line and your thought should be only reaching the finish line albeit whatever trouble you are put through. Sometimes our minds get tuned to when certain things happen frequently but if we win over that we will emerge winner. And you are OUR SON, my smarto intelligent mature one. Lets deal with it I am there not to worry, you will not be a looser. Ar smiled, he was happy... Wiped his tears yes mumma I am your son will never let you and daddy down. We shall see in the evening he said, kissing her... Thank you ma... AA was so happy he gulped his food and was getting ready to nap a little!!!

Chakor walked to her room thinking... the roses were napping... She went through the sprinters pace record and found that Ar indeed was timing very well as against Ro but in the race with him he was indeed timing few seconds low... She closed her eyes thinking, playing through...

Chakor got a call from Rathod asking her to coach a sprinter Rati who will be participating in the National marathoning which was coming up in the next two months. Rati is good sprinter representing Himachal. Her nearest competitor was Neha. She accepted it.

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Chakor was with the boys at their mansion ground and she was clocking his pace. He was really good.. She asked him to run immediately without a time gap and still he maintained his pace. She was internally happy with his stamina but why is the lag and what is she missing to see?

Leaving the girls with the babysitter she went to school and the ground.

She checked the room which had the socks and the shoes and found all the boxes were marked with the participant's names. She went to the rack where fourth standards shoes were kept... She was surprised looking at something..

The sports ground was in the hilly side and the tracks had bushes beside them. She went through the tracks and checked around the bushes too.

She got a call from Rathod and was told that Rati will be meeting her tomorrow at the Sports Council in Shimla.

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Raaghav was very busy at the plantation as the processing had started with the new machines. The marketing team and the processing experts were with him and Shyam Laal. The marketing team also gave the information that Laal Plantations was sponsoring the sports events not of the school but also the next National marathoning too. Raaghav was surprised as why school as children at junior level donot drink tea. And with regards to national level he know they would as Laals would stoop to any level to be in the limelight. The night when Raaghav's car broke down had the nasty hands of Laals goons but Raaghav brushed it aside.

Chakor was calling him as it was late... He told her he will be there soon, smiling Kaaka said bitiya must be waiting without eating go soon Raaghav. He was proud and went by his car once Mohit assured him that the processing is going fine and he will oversee it.

Chakor was at the dining thinking through, when he walked in and back hugged her. What are you thinking so much he asked...hmm nothing... she said come fast for dinner...Yes Maidam...in a minute placed a subtle kiss on her temple and ran up to change.

They finished dinner and were in their room balcony resting on the diwan... So how was the day he asked resting her on him... how is your workout going on he asked... nuzzling her... Looks like you are going to make me go more crazy with those curves setting in...rubbing her waist.. Hmmm Raaghav .. she was in deep thought... He turned her around sitting beside... Maidam whats bothering? Arjun???? is he ok??? She said hmmm but something is fishy Raaghav, about what he asked... about these sponsors, etc etc... I found two boxes named Ar... but why??? One is his pair which is given to him for other races while there is one new pair and that is the one given when he runs with Rohan... But why?? It's the same brand and same size sneakers but??? Its afterall a school sports... who is this Rohan??? Whats his background... Raaghav asked: do you suspect something... anything harming our sons...His eyes was turning red... No I don't know I am unable to lay my finger but tomorrow is the final and I shall see to it...I have something in my mind but not sure if its that for sure... she went to her side table and switched on the laptop... Raaghav you go to bed I shall come in few minutes.

He looked at her... What she asked... He kissed her on her forehead... I am proud to see the eagle he said...thanks to you she said... But ... need my my own birdie too pouting cute...

Just few minutes she said... he kissed the roses... he missed their playtime as he was busy...

Changed into his T, got into the bed and was waiting for her looking at her surfing the laptop. He smiled for he knew she will not join him unless she finishes her last line...

He slept. Chakor smiled at the same time said Ar, na you will not fail in anything... You will reach the finish line... looking at the laptop.

The birdie sneaked into the quilt getting the warmth from her Lion and he cuddled her close tight to him and she went inside him...smiling, kissing her goodnight... I love you into her ears... eyes closed.

It was in the middle of the night, Aditi was wriggling waking up, he quickly got up placing chakor beside very slowly and went and picked his rose, aditi what happened, did you do wee, aawwh dadda awwhhh she was kissing him with her sweet little lips, feeling happy seeing daddy... he changed her diapher, took her to the balcony so that Chakor is not disturbed, showed her the moon, gave her some water and was cradling her on his chest walking down the room... Chakor was wriggling... he smiled... you cannot sleep without my warmth... he went to the bed, made aditi lay on his wide toned chest who was happily sleeping with her legs on both sides with a smile, Chakor raised to on his shoulders with eyes closed he was patting the child on his chest while soothing and hugging the child beside him. He was bewildered as who was looking cuter, the one who he cradled or the one who cradled him...

Both were in sweet slumber... the happy family slept on the bed...

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Yes mumma, will do said Aa... Walked behind Lalit and Karnad...

It was a stone from the catapault from the bushes...

Missed the target and hit hard...

Thud and rolled ... he stopped turned back.

She was shocked ...

Young minds corrupted for marketing??? Is it good???...

Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#24
Sumi lovinggg it😳
I just adore this chakor... how we missed this attitude in the serial... for the last few months she was only crying😕😕 The convo with the boys is just great...

No AA that's not right, donot water hatred in your young minds she said. 👏👏

I also want to know why Laal plantations are sponsoring school events when kids don't drink tea👏👏What a point. Super...

And aayansh ...I just want to go and hug and kiss him... such a cutie pie brother 😳... the way he says I am hungry... lets eat...ha ha ha

Awww the aditi and chakor wala scene is just fab...I could almost imagine the baby on his chest and chakor beside him...my mind is weaving its own story of the quilt😉😉

Keep updating whenever you Get time.
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Posted: 6 years ago
#25
Thaks Sukor 123 for that lovely comments
And very sweet of you to mention you look forward to my updates.
🤗

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I am waiting for ur update & here it is Nice update 👏👏👏 Loved our detective & active Chakor Loved the RagKor light moments 😳 Loved the family moments

Raghav cute moments with little rose is awesome

A good update with full of suspence ,thriller & some light family moments ☺️
Eagarly waiting for next

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: 77nikita

Sumi lovinggg it😳

I just adore this chakor... how we missed this attitude in the serial... for the last few months she was only crying😕😕 The convo with the boys is just great...

No AA that's not right, donot water hatred in your young minds she said. 👏👏

I also want to know why Laal plantations are sponsoring school events when kids don't drink tea👏👏What a point. Super...

And aayansh ...I just want to go and hug and kiss him... such a cutie pie brother 😳... the way he says I am hungry... lets eat...ha ha ha

Awww the aditi and chakor wala scene is just fab...I could almost imagine the baby on his chest and chakor beside him...my mind is weaving its own story of the quilt😉😉

Keep updating whenever you Get time.


Thanks so so much Nikkiii... your comments mean a lot .

Yes Chakor has to be our chakor chatur naaa...

thanks you liked the mom and sons convo. Yes kids minds should not breed hatred na.

yes me too like 😳 AA very much my cutie pie... he acts his age kiddo...

Aditi and Chakor yes my craving in the show with Saanvi and chakor on him hmmm...

😆😆 story of the quilt he he he weave weave and give us a good piece too 😉 but as of now no MOODS as there are lot of perils... but still RR never miss a chance to flirt though... which she likes and me too


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Posted: 6 years ago
#27
Thanks Sritama for the insta comment
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Very interesting & intriguing👏👍🏼great to see our active Chakor is back😳loving d way she is suspecting foul play & trying to get to d bottom of d matter n d way she encouraged Arn Raghav as always so supportive, caring&lovingloved d way he managed d little rose n took care of her & Chakor in d nighteagerly waiting to see how will Chakor reveal d whole conspiracy n expose d culprits..
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Posted: 6 years ago
#28
Sumi dear 🤗
I read before, copied some lines and replied a long post, I thought it posted but seems it got lost in virtual space😕

No probs😊, I am always ready to relish again what I read.

Just loved the Chakor in entire part. Reasoning and reaching till last line as you mentioned is what chakor is known for. which we have been missing for a long time.

Loved the way she handled the boys,that moment with boys, feeding them and making them understand, I can visualise. same time she is looking into whats the issue, getting deep into it and also hving her time with Raghav and cuties too.

Ar and Aa are growing upon us. just loving this fiction family. poor Ar, upset and his cutie bro Aa beside his side, supporting, consoling him. And our lion and lioness is there na, dont worry arjun.

This sponsoring and issues related to it, why even sponsoring school children, what Rati and Neha as to contribute, I am intrigued and eager to read all those.

Now coming to the one I loved.
"I am proud to see the eagle he said...thanks to you she said... But ... need my my own birdie too pouting cute..."

i just love Raghav more and more, yes Raghav we are proud to see our eagle back too, thanks to you and yes we need to see your birdie too now&then.

he knows she wont come until she reaches last line, and he slept..aww cute

Then the scene followed, I just loved it visualising MeeJay. Raghav handling Ad, and making her sleep on his chest
patting the child in chest and soothing ,hugging the child beside❤️
thinking who was more cute, the one he cradle or the one who cradled him..aww cute..

with their happy slumber , I went into happy mode visualising them too.

Thanks dear, nice update, waiting for next.



Edited by LuvSSever - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#29
Interesting update👏
Loved this Chakor getting to the root of the problem which was missing from the show👏
Loved Aa & Ar they are adorable, Ragkor are there for the lions
The last part was cute, Aditi & Chakor were babies & Raghav handling them
Loving the detailing of everything & the mystery element 🤗
Waiting for next
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Posted: 6 years ago
#30
Thanks SmitaSharma for those lovely words on twitter

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Part 3: It's become very interesting. You have maintained the thrill, the suspense very well. Loved the intellective Chakor who was suspicious about fraudulence in sports. This issues have become a commonplace in sports world. I'm happy that you have focused on this matter although it is a Rag-kor story.
I loved the mother-son bonding, the way Chakor comforted & encouraged Ar & make Aa understand that no one should be hated. The boys are so adorable, so matured that no praise is enough for them.I must appreciate Raghav for upbringing them with such a good education, culture, ethics, good values, discipline.
Loved Raghav, the loving, caring, helpful, supportive husband & father. He always loved & appreciate Chakor's attitude of not giving up easily, always supports her, raising her morale. And yes, you never forget to keep Rag-kor romance in between the whole disturbance and anxiety although it was very small but necessary which I loved. This is the speciality of your writing. You have always put all the ingredients. Loved the line "you can't sleep without my warmth " and his cuddling the baby. It was so soothing to see them happily slept on each other's shoulder. Waiting for the next update.

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