Eagle ..Goal.. Finish Line - Completed page 16 added a missing para! - Page 5

Originally posted by: Ankita38

Hey dear!

You are an awesome writer.

Can you write a ff on sukor also which will be slightly different from the serial.

Originally posted by: Kavi.Gollapudi

Superb updates👏... sorry am commenting after a couple of chapters...Dear you've definitely hit the writer's switch in you nd it brighter by the day... Awesome updates..🤗

Everytime I come to forum.. I check whether u updated the story or not ...I'm missing ragkor more and more ur stories are my solace now I'm missing them terribly those disgusting makers ended ragkor story abruptly 😡

pls write more I want to see possessive or jealous version of raghav 😉..can u plz write possessive raghav

Originally posted by: 77nikita

Sumi another marvelous, amazing piece dished out👏👏

I am in awe of the way you cover various points... right from taking blessings(including girija and ramu kaka) to the way Aa listens to chakor without questioning her to the shoes theory to the catapult to the way Ar helps Rohan👏 to the Rati angle to Ar remembering aditi to the lunch for shyaam all and mohit👏 (hats off for remembering those poor souls!) to chakor pointing her finger and raghav holding his ears to the convo between her and Aa to the torso stare😉 to the small but very important bit( to the wall holding her waist is cherry on top)...as much as the husband has the right to admire his wife in all ways the wife should also admire her man and also express her willingness or refute if she is not in her best...

In short a fab, lovely amazing update... thank you for doing it so fast.

Originally posted by: katheriene

Interesting update👏

Chakor & Aa act smartly to protect Ar👏

Finally the ugly truth about the sponsors is out😡

Let's see how Ragkor will end this

Loved Ragkor's moment & the family time😊

Waiting for next

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

Sumi dear🤗

Just loved it again.

So much happening and finally somewhat revealed what the sponsors are upto with kids.

Love how Chakor and Aa tackled things. I thought Ar and chakor will make a good pair and make me look forward but Aa and chakor was a lovely combo, i loved their team work. Aa is a cutie good soul, wanted good for his bro, helped mom but wanted to tell his brother, feeling bad to hid from Ar but sametime a obedient boy listening to his mom.

Chakor finally on track.

Aa kissing chakor on eyes, Raghav questioning him and Aa replying mom is becoming more beautiful, raghav winking at chakor on tht, chakor blushing..aww i could imagine.

Among all , I love the small small happenings in life you add in story and nuances you add to character.

i love how he took food to her, they had together, and ofcourse the not so hot😉 but hot lovely workout session and the lines on women being so..

The small moments they have besides their busy schedules are always my fav... everytime as you say not all lead to or endup in lust..i too love subtle romance, so i loved the workout session and besides being busy, they never fail to be in each other's warmth..thats love.

I love your essays and even small detail you wont miss in yours. even why Rati was added to list at last, her background you explained.

what is upto with Rati, intrigued to know and poor rohan, what awaits him and Ragkor&family waiting to see

Originally posted by: LuvSSever

On real tracks... 501 back?

I am zooming and zooming and seeing it Sumi.

That would be a dream come true moment😃.

without you , how shall our dreams about RagKor can come true🤗

PART V

PATHOS - BUT WILL EAGLE FEAR?

The day dawned and dawned many ugly truths, facts.

The principal of the School was so shocked to realise about the happening. He was personally looking into all the events the next day. He was not aware of the ugly truth.

There was barricades along the tracks and the bushes were checked.

A high desk was placed on the side of the track which had a curve for the long sprints by the sponsors. This was not in the plan but the principal could not say anything as the money given to the school was huge and all the expenses of this event was taken care by them and he did not see any danger as it had only a huge metal board advertising the tea brand facing the east.

Karnad was checking the shoe box of all and found Ar box missing. He could not find it and asked Lalit who was not aware of it.. He did not know about similar box as he was asked to carry the box. On the day of the semifinal he was indeed very very upset and felt bad when Arjun helped Rohan and Chakor looked at him but did not scold or tell anything to him when she called him to her sports room. All she said to him was, Lalit I know you did this because you want your friend to win, but who asked you to do she asked, he said I don't know mam there was a chit in my bag saying me to hit Arjun and if I don't I will be beaten. I got scared.. Sorry mam, she said its ok but never do things which will hurt others and degrade yourself. You can go she said.

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The boys were getting ready for the final day... Ar kissed Raaghav... he left with Chakor to do a warm up, but before leaving he looked into Raagahav's eyes..

AA slowed looking at Raaghav, Whats it young man?

Daddy, Lalit tried to hurt Ar, I don't know why mummy asked me to change the shoes. I am getting scared daddy.. he hugged Raaghav...Will you come for the finals today. I know you have work but... I did not tell bhai anything..

He said I will be there at the right time. Wished them good luck and went their ways.

He drove thinking...Hira Laal how low can you stoop?? He called the plantation giving instructions.

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Rohan was crying... feeling ashamed... Hurt due to his act and also due to his injury. He said I cannot run today...

His father was there saying you have to run. I cannot he said its hurting. Walked in the old devil Hira Laal, held the father squeezing his arms looking at the boy.

You have to and you better win. You have no choice he said else I will hurt your father. He asked his man to take care of the father and he left to the sports council.

Rohan was taken to the school felt so embarrassed to see Ar. Ar asked how he was, that hurt him more. He said thanks I am fine...He could not see Chakor. She asked him why he is running inspite of his injury. I am ok mam but there were tears. She called Raaghav.

It was late morning and sunny...

Karnad couldnot find the shoes and he informed Hira Laal. He fumed in anger called his guys who were at the school.

Chakor was watchful. Aa was looking all sides as he was very worried for Ar. Ar was fine and fully focused as he did not have any idea of what was happening. He was looking at Chakor and the finish line. In all he had to win 4 races and 2 field events which he had already won to win the overall championship. Rohan was in 2 races with Ar and two with others and 2 field events. He was lagging behind in points but it was close.

The semifinals was nulled as there was injury and they had to run the finals.

It was the first finals they were on their marks when the gun was shot. Ar sprinted fast it was a cake finish for him. Rohan inspite of injury did well though his pace was slow.

It was the last finals with both Ar and Ro in it. They were on their marks when the men came to the sign boards. The race started it was 400 mts long sprint. The track curving at a point.

Ar was sprinting fine, pacing good with Ro behind, he had difficulty but his fear was making him sprint, but could not go faster. Chakor was watching it.. Ar was coming near the curve when his vision blurred something was flickering, he had to slow when Rohan picked pace, Ar heard a voice, Ar run ..close your eyes and run straight... raged the Lion opening Rover's window screeching halt and opening it. One jump and punched on the guy holding the sign board the board and the guy fell on the ground. Ar open and run he heard, Ar opened his eyes, he saw Rohan ahead but only few yards, he looked sideways saw the Rover, he ran, doubled his pace, ran fast, past Rohan, the crowd was cheering, AA was jumping... Raaghav was holding the guy in in his strong hands throttling him. Dare harm my son, maar dalenga tell me who sent you else I will not hesitate to run my rover over you and push you down the hills. His eyes was red, raging terribly. Tell me, He shouted. He quickly made a call to Govind.

The race was over, Arjun won it all, Rohan was crying in pain. The police saw Raaghav and ran to him holding the guy. Chakor ran and hugged Ar, I am proud of you she said. AA hugged him tight. Chakor quickly went to Rohan and was holding him. Raaghav came running, hugged Arjun and kissed him. He told Chakor to take care of the boys and Rohan too. He said Maidam you were right! As always!

She smiled. Rohan was crying terribly... he saw his father coming to him... papa... I am fine he said, Govind was beside him.

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A small fb

When the sign boards were placed she felt it weird and called Raaghav who quickly got on to his Rover and called and checked with his marketing team who deals with signboards. He realized that metal ones are tilting ones and was placed purposely in the curves facing east as the metal side can be tilted towards the sun rays hence reflecting glare on the runner that is Arjun. the glare would blind the eyes, so he asked Ar to close the eyes and run straight and knowing his voice Ar just listened to him and when he saw the Rover he knew the Lion was there...

The guy spilled the truth that Rohan's father was being held and hence Raghav called Govind to go to Rohan's house alongwith his securities. By the time he reached the devil's man had left the father so that he is not picked upon. The sign boards guy did not know who told hims as he just acted upon. Though it was known that Laal was playing dirty still there was no proof.

The police took him into custody.

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Ar was extremely happy and so was AA, it was jubiliant celebration and Ar was awarded the overall championship. Rohan got the runner up. He went and apologized to Arjun and so did lalit. Ar was sweet and so was AA who shook hands with them, Friends, sorry they said... its ok as we should not water our hatred... Looking at Chakor who was smiling with pride. The boys hugged each other...

They were driving back

Daddy... Ar just hugged him, thank you for coming.. AA was excited you know bhaaai...daddy came vrooommm like a hero in the Rover, opened the doors and just jumped and kicked those guys...dushum dushum ha ha clapping,,,,, Daddy you are Suuuper daddy, holding his biceps... How did you know he asked... Hmmm Ask your Eagle he said... Mummy how you know to solve everything... hugging her kissing her in her eyes...OOoiii, arey rehne dho Raaghav Baabu... I will kiss my mumma you cannot do anything.

Girija and the whole Mansion was in happiness... the boys were enjoying themselves with the roses...

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Maidam, you are smart...But you are the hero without you I don't know what would have happened. She smiled at him.

Raaghav but I am worried, something is bothering me. Worried about the ugliness. What all is done for publicity for money, staking goodness, innocent children's life...

Hmm he side hugged her... the roses were sleeping on him... while they were cradling them... they placed them in their beds...

I need to prepare the schedule for Rati...

arey maidam break lagao... this is our bedroom... Hamara barey mey socho... I want my birdie... Nuzzling her...

Hmmm sorry, hugging him... I have a demo for sorry tooo... demo memo kuch nai chahiye, sojaa she said ...

Ok Maidam, they went into their warmth hugging each other..kissing on his forehead. ok no demo atleast a kiss... .. i just gave you... arey idhar nahi touching his forehead, idhar dena chahiye pouting his lips.. idhar... lo gave a tap on his pout.. awwwh ...budda kissed him subtly on his lips. ab kush she asked... hmmm ab keliya isssey hoga... hugging her tight .

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The school was closed for the vacation. Chakor was concentrating on Rati's schedule. She was pacing well and was getting well with the family too. The boys loved her, she spent time with the family, but the devil was eyeing her. It was only one month for the National marathoning ... For the first time Sport Council of HP was facilitating it and Shimla was gearing up for it...

Rishab plantations sponsored Rati's expenses.

Neha was fuming at her residence. How did she enter...

She was shouting at Hira Laal. Do something, she is a good sprinter and now Chakor coaching her she is sure to win...

Don't worry first let her run. Wickedly smiled the devil...

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No Raaghav this cant happen... She cried, palpitated... Its my responsibility... What will I tell her when she wakes up. She was shattered..

Are you a coward... Get into the system, into the drainage if you want to clean screamed Raaghav... Don't talk big...

You decide what you want to do, You do else I will do, in my style... Raaghav ka tarrikkaaa se hoga !!! his eyes was Red...

Sorry it cannot be done... Its too late ...its closed...

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There is pathos - but will the eagle fear, Will the Lion tear...