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Posted: 6 years ago
#11
Thats a lovely one Sukor 123. on twitter feeling overwhelmed.
Thanks for reading my stories.

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I read all stories All stories are amazing & beautifully written I wish if these stupid makers visits India forum then they will get better ideas and our show never ruined like this and I also wish u are the part of udaan team u have such an amazing writing skills


I also read some analysis on Sukor & Suraj on India forum & I really like to read ur analysis specially on Sukor romantic episodes it was just amazing

Beautifully written Loved the brotherly bond between Aayansh & Arjun & also roses are too cute
Loved our caring,loving Raghav babu A beautiful story with RagKor moments & also suspence factor Eagarly waiting for next part

Thanks a lot dear


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Posted: 6 years ago
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PART II


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Raaghav and the boys were happy that things were falling in place and Chakor was working out her schedule with Girija, the other mansion staff and with the baby sitters.

The next day Chakor went to the school and gave her consent to join back but on flexi hours and the Principal was way too happy!!!! She asked for a weeks time to join as she wanted to get on to her fitness which was a bit difficult now, but Raaghav was supporting her and helping her out.

While the academics side is closed after the examinations, the school admin was working on the events of the sports day which was scheduled for next month and the other events were being conducted through the week.

The staff and the teachers were very happy to note that Chakor is back to coaching but Rohan and his friend Lalit were not too happy but pretended to be. Chakor said she will chart a schedule for all the children who were taking part in the various events.

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Getting back to fitness was not so easy as due to her post delivery of the twins her physic was bit rigid. But she was determined to work around quick but it was not as she expected.

She wanted the boys to join swimming early morning as that was very warming up so the boys would go to the swimming pool which was in the plantation along with Ramu Kaaka who would escort the kids to the pool.

The first of the session was not so easy for Chakor. It was really tiring... She was not flexible enough. She was bit upset as she did not anticipate. She could not do the basic stretching too and got tired within minutes. Tears were ebbing...

Walked in Raaghav with an energy drink in his tracks and sleeveless T...

How is it going he asked offering her the drink!!

Not too great Raaghav I think its not as easy I thought... She was feeling a bit low.

Hmmm not to worry, giving her the drink, he went to the corner of the room and he fixed a hammock made of ropes attached to the ceiling with an exercise ball.

He played a soft music... Kissing her on her forehead, held her hands and very soothingly swirled her around and brought her to the corner. He was trying to kiss her which made her bend backwards holding his shoulders. He held her very softly holding her under the neck and supporting her back which made her do the back stretch pose... It eased as he was holding her... eyes on her locking, he slowly made her sit on the exercise ball holding both her bands... With the music, she was on the ball and the bounce was making her do the half down exercise... he slowly tilted her fully backwards leaning on the ball... slowly she was bending back with the support of the ball and he was holding her feet which was on the floor. Supporting her legs with his, he went over her and made her hold her hands under her head and rise above, she could do it with ease as the ball was supporting her and he was holding her too... In all this he did not move his eyes from hers and was placing soft kisses on her forehead and eyes to ease her. You are doing so great and beautifully he kept saying in her ears.

He held her and made her squat with her legs on both sides of the ball and press her legs against the ball which was flexing her calf muscles.. It was slowly relaxing and she was getting the grip and hang of it... She smiled... Raaghav this is really easy and relaxing... I never knew about the ball... He was making her stretch herself raising one leg while placing her other and he was balancing her too... He said I saw this in London and brought one for you but had packed it only today inflated. Thank you she smiled...He turned her towards the ball, making her press the ball with both her hands while balancing the feet on the floor and he then held her hands behind making her to press the ball with her chest to strengthen the shoulders.

He lay down to do his push ups making her lie on his back and it was easing her in stretching to do the push ups. It was already 45 minutes and they were sweating because of the work out and also of the constant body heat... He turned lay flat on his mat and made her lie down on him. She was sweating, in tracks, her T was stuck to her and lying on him was making her blush... He was in his track, sweating, his stuck T was revealing his well toned torso and as she was lying on him completely things were turning a bit hot too. He asked how is it , how was the stretching and naughtily asked how about a proper work out wiping her sweat with his towel which was on the mat and holding her tight as she was on him... She smiled thanking him saying no work out girk out... lets get out as the boys will be coming and the roses would have woken up.. He smiled saying Sure Maidam but the trainer needs his fees. Acha she smiled .. looking into his eyes ... Kissing him subtly on his lips and getting up.

He then carried her as that was his weight lifting for his biceps and placed her in the hammock in which he made her do her simple twist exercises. She was amazed and wondered how he made her feel at ease and she was feeling flexible too. He said do this for another two days and then she can get on with the gym machineries. They had a good hour of stretching. Thank you Raaghav she said wiping his sweat... Need to bathe now, Shall we! He winked... Keep quiet! she pinched... It was sweet, lovely, though their biological needs were aroused but not all needs will lead to lust... They got ready for the next as the boys were returning from their classes and the roses were up and both were playing with Raaghav climbing on his chest. He was playing with them while Chakor brought milk and he was feeding both while Chakor went to take care of the boys.

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Chakor kissed the girls waved them bye and went with the boys to the school.

Raaghav was with the girls and when the baby sitters came he told Girija and went to the Plantation.

The processing was starting and he was busy in that .

Chakor along with the other staff and the PT master met the students who were taking part in the sports activities and was planning a schedule for them.

She was briefed and was also informed that the the sports uniform, shoes and socks were sponsored by a corporate firm which was also into Tea Plantation and was doing it as a part of their marketing strategy.

The students were very happy in seeing Chakor while Rohan and Lalit were not so happy but did not show anything.

She was getting the name list for the various races...

As she was charting out the exercise regime, the PT master along with the poen was walking towards the room which was having the items for the students.

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Not all sponsors are good!

Not all corporate practice good sports!

Corruption and hatred sometimes are reared in the young minds

Will righteousness succumb to hatred?

Edited by sumsukor - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#13
Thanks Sritama for the insta comment
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Fantastic 👏👏❤️d stunning training session😳❤️d way Raghav made Chakor comfortable n train..their postures😳beyond amazing ☺️traing blended with cozy romance so innovative, interesting n enthralling Sumi di☺️👏wish we could get such a scene in Udaan.. last part was quite intriguing..eagerly waiting to see how dis sponsorship thing & rivalry saga unfolds n how it affects Ragkor & d boys.


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Posted: 6 years ago
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Thanks so much Mahsa for your insta comment
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My Sumi dear Awesome Superrr amazing Well Writting dear 👏👏👏loved it those dialouges of raghav and Chakor, than he played a soft music Kissing her on her forehead awww😳😳he is trying to kiss her and made her bend backwards holding his shouldersl👏👍🏼Such a Magical, I am imagine Our MeeJay😳they are both aced it in every Scene, more Excited and waiting for the next update dear👏👏

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Posted: 6 years ago
#15
Thanks so much Sukor123 for your lovely words on twitter
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Fantastic as always Training session was simply outstanding with RagKor cozy romnance & the way Raghav comforts Chakor was just superb Day by day with ur writing I become a big fan of Raghav
Loved our nighty Raghav who never leave a chance to romance Chakor Last part was full of suspence Let's see how things unfolded & how it,s affect on Ragkor & boys Waiting for next part

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Posted: 6 years ago
#16
Interesting update👏
The training session was amazing with Ragkor romance😳
The last part was very mysterious😲
Let's see how Ragkor & boys will tackle the situation
Waiting for next
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Posted: 6 years ago
#17
Uff sumi its again fantafab ka baap👏👏
The fiery training session is sooo innovative...loveddd it
... without being explicit it has hit the bulls eye!!!

Raghav toh is now like the epitome of how a life partner should be! loving him immensely...my wish of getting him home is still intact😉😉 Infact becoming stronger by the day.

And the suspense in the story is like the cherry on top😳

Thank you for updating so quickly.
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Posted: 6 years ago
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Sumi dear 🤗

Thats again, very nice part to read.
Ragkor moments are getting better and better😳☺️...

Thats a nice scene to write on, sumi, I knew when i read in last part where he says,we will workout together ,that something of this sort , ragkor moment may comeup.


But the way you wrote it, I mean the circumstances that made this to naturally happen was ❤️, I mean he did this to help her, where she is struggling to be back on track, loosing her confidence, he made her do it and regain her confidence with ease. Raghav is such a sweetie..omg he is getting lovable to the max.

Indeed a fab scene and thought, new one, which makes me wish we could had seen something near to this on show , having a minimal yr or 2yr leap with chakor focusing on career.. but nope..no use in wishing that on tv.

now our wishes are fulfilled through your writing sumi dear. thanks a lot.🤗

I just loved right from his forehead kiss to sooth her and then the way they did exercising and not to forget even the final moments were he teases for real workout and she brushes his idea with a slight kiss.


Then the process you explain, each and every time, in detail , i love that.

final statement on sponsors, corporates and sports , again an intriguing end...

this concept I am liking it. dealing with sport related issues.

waiting eagerly to read next part.
thanks for this sweet fast update
Edited by LuvSSever - 6 years ago
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Posted: 6 years ago
#19
Thanks SmitaSharma for that lovely comment on twitter
Am really feeling so happy...



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Part 1
Another fantastic story & it's title is also superb. Loved this awesome family more & more. The boys are so adorable & so matured in such young age. When Ar was practicing Aa too was with him though in sleepy eyes but didn't leave him alone. Their fraternity is commendable.
Loved Raghav for how he understands the boys hesitance & gave them assurance that he will take care of everything & then encourage & motivate Chakor to go back to her first love, the racing track ,seeing that her eyes shine with joy as he didn't want his eagle to be caged. I was always amazed by him & surprised to see how easy & quickly he has arranged everything from making the mini gym to the play area & the racing track for his birdie to become the eagle . Indeed he is a magician, not only on Chakor but has done magic on us too.
You have maintained a very good balance between the romantic & emotional scene. I loved the part when Chakor was moving her hands over the bed missing her warmth & their morning romance under the quilt & lastly the mother- son equation.
Part 2
Woww I just loved the wonderful romantic practice session. Raghav is such a wonderful husband, a sweet person that one can find in a million. Loved the part "In all this he didn't move his eyes from hers & was placing soft kisses on her forehead & eyes to ease her". Thoroughly enjoyed the hot exercise period, Chakor's new trainer, his style of asking for frees, the weight lifting by carrying her, sharing her responsibility to feed the angels .

You always give equal attention to every small things, the detailing which I like the most. It seems the whole scene is happened in front of my eyes. My happiness increased visualising Meejay in all this. Lets see how the situation turns worse & how they will handle it. Thank you.

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Posted: 6 years ago
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Originally posted by: 77nikita

Uff sumi its again fantafab ka baap👏👏

The fiery training session is sooo innovative...loveddd it
... without being explicit it has hit the bulls eye!!!

Raghav toh is now like the epitome of how a life partner should be! loving him immensely...my wish of getting him home is still intact😉😉 Infact becoming stronger by the day.

And the suspense in the story is like the cherry on top😳

Thank you for updating so quickly.


Nikkiii thanks so much deary

training 😳😳 thanks its MeeJay need to think out of box and I am really really so happy that it is well accepted. feeling so relieved.

To be honest few asked knowing my love for my dude how is that I am now writing RagKor. But I thought I should take this opportunity to speak out my heart.

Yes my dude has risen above and I have awarded his sacrifice with the highest award and made peace. But Suraj will always be my Dude... but life has to move on...

But what made me go ahead was that the interviews of MeeJay where they were so happy and looking forward to take the journey of RagKor, where they felt there was so much potential and they themselves were bit dissappointed with the leap and this gave me the consolation that yeah I am right on my story with RagKor and i could visualise them in writing my story,

As you all know me, more than story (well very recently I started to write story) its my emotions and feelings that I pen down,

But for all your appreciation, likes, comments and encouragement I could not have come this much too.

So a BIG BIG THANKS TO YOU ALL.

He he Raaghav yes yes epitome of everything and everyone is loving him... taking him home!!! well that you have to handle the GD...😆

suspense hope I am able to keep the intrigue...

Thanks so much Nikki

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