SuKor OS: Izhaar. - Page 3

Originally posted by: Aradh_27

A huge thank you to everyone for commenting! Haven't had a chance to go through all of them, but I'll reply to all of you guys individually soon!

And since my excitement knows no bounds and I've been spamming posts, thought I'd spam mine too!!

THE NEW PROMOOO!!!!!

Something tells me I'm going to find it verrry hard to not write a little something based on all of it next week.

Originally posted by: Immaturebookie

OK first off you are such an awesome writer 👏 and I love everything you write *Fan song plays as BG music*

Every emotion was perfectly captured in one frame whether it was a battle for love, to feel it, to deny it and finally to accept it against all odds

You're great and do keep producing great content😳

Originally posted by: ashuz123

It's so amazing dear... One of the best story I have ever read on sukor 👏 All emotions of suraj & chakor portrayed perfectly.. Loved this .. Plz do right more 😊 👏

Originally posted by: nycgal

Aruuu!!! A big hug and thankyou!🤗

Have I told you are one of my favourite writers here??? This , like your other stories , is awesome..

I got emotional reading this and cried a little ..

You have captured their emotions so well ..there were so many emotions interwoven so well..

and THAT kiss...❤️😳.loved it..my mind went into the gutter right away..

I look forward to more of your work..

Originally posted by: -GrilledCheese-

this was so beautiful! fabulously written!

Originally posted by: ipkrr

Aradhana - well done. I was worried that this one would appear forced or premature - but you managed to justify the scene with the sequence of the dialogues and build up of the scene. I really liked how you handled his understanding of her plight as a bandhua...and apology for not doing anything to help when she was young...this needed to be addressed before everything else and it was really the first injustice - he had ever dealt to her...even though it was indirect. Liked the way you wove in so many different components into the scene... the kiss challenge, paratha hari chutney, his drinking, his relationship with his father...the game they play to mask their feelings...so effortlessly.

Also the progression in visions - chidiya to young Chakor to the older one...and the reference to the chidiya dialogue..subtle but connected. Your style of pulling together a scene with so many subtle underpinnings is really fantastic...especially when the scene is flowing as seamlessly as yours does on the surface without feeling disjointed.

So again...well done!! 👏

I did feel more connected to Suraj's love than Chakor's...because the justification for it is more. And also noticed ... the sudden usage of English in the end ... with regard to Suraj's thoughts...the bed. That was sudden :)

Keep writing!

Originally posted by: SukiDakanya

Aradhana THIS is what I am dying to see on screen...

I love your Suraj and Chakor they are 3 D in your words. ❤️

I never realized how much goes into writing a story... and how much authors want to hear about their effort. So for an overexcited fan after today's episode I re read your series and realized 2 lines was to paltry for how much your story gave me... so on to it...

The dream sequence was little reversal of Chakor's Karvachuat dream - Love that there was no Imli no Vivaan

How he tells my Chakor and when he wakes up the 1^st thing is he needs to see her.

KN's Torture on Suraj was not just the physical branding and isolation but also the words of mockery instead of the praise Suraj always wanted from him. Just gets to me how good you make them to be 3d. Throughout his back story threads so well...

When Chakor sees the brand, there is such a tug of war between his pride and his need for her empathy.

"Wound them with words. Identify their weakness. Target it. Make them hate you. Push them away.

I was back to using old tactics."

This Suraj, while being a hero never completely loses sight of his suraj-y characters( -.- idk how to describe it) the little sarcastic comments... the way he calls chakor's mother kasturi and questions her upbringing of chakor.

Suraj and Chakor have this little dance, they have feelings for each other but their pride sort has them go back and forth. Like they can hug each other but talking about feelings ... that to honestly... has them putting walls and guards up.

So as always Chakor takes the 1^st step, so so true to her character...and she applies balm hoping to soothe him mentally and physically, when her insecurities get a little less, suraj just blazes away with you cheated now kiss me properly...

I like the fact that suraj corrects himself and doesn't say the word bandhua... it's become a real idea in his head... whearas in the serial it's still quite an abstract ideas. He is able to share that with her about being a bandhua in such a kind and gentle ... I understand you I have walked miles in your shoes...

When she is scared he steps and tears the walls and when he is scared, he has taken to much liberty she sets him straight.. Like the kiss he asks... and the little one she bestows on his hand.. and him toying with her mangalsutra... just so many many details... I read it again and again

Aradhana, you need a hug ... big bear ones...

Your Sukor, just always has this muchness to them...

- Cheshire Cat

Originally posted by: ..chotu..

Aradhna!

I totally loved it. I read it for like 3 times. You had put a lot of heart in it and indeed its one of the best here in the forum. The dailogues were amazing. And their feelings were very well described. It was just beautiful. Infact I am speechless right now and struggling with my keypad editing my words agaian and again.

I waiting for this since the day you started Bandhua and you told that something in cooking up in your mind.

Its always a treat to have a new OS from your side. Hope you do write more.

Originally posted by: paridhi9797

Okay...it took me exactly one hour and ten minutes to read this...
You ask why???

Because I read each line for a minimum of three times!!!

And THIS...is Injustice okay
You must not write so damn good, got it? 😡



And NO, I am not exaggerating it..

Enough of my ranting... 😆
Aradhna this was so so so...I am not getting the right adjective 👏
I literally shed a tear while reading this 😭
The passion,the love,the longing,the izhaar all were expressed so exceptionally well that it was just heart warming to read

Love you for this dear ❤️
Keep writing more 🤗