SuKor OS: Izhaar. - Page 2

Okay...it took me exactly one hour and ten minutes to read this...
You ask why???

Because I read each line for a minimum of three times!!!

And THIS...is Injustice okay
You must not write so damn good, got it? 😡



And NO, I am not exaggerating it..

Enough of my ranting... 😆
Aradhna this was so so so...I am not getting the right adjective 👏
I literally shed a tear while reading this 😭
The passion,the love,the longing,the izhaar all were expressed so exceptionally well that it was just heart warming to read

Love you for this dear ❤️
Keep writing more 🤗

Res.

Unres.

I will not say sorry for the late unres. coz I had already told you.

I got so scared when I read the first few lines, wondering that, was KN really successful in telling the world how he made a slave out of his own son? Bare chested, for the world to see his mark?

But then he imagined her, white as an angel, soon tainted red by the devil. Dream mingled with a nightmare.

Phew, thank Daak Baba that it was a dream-mare.

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Weak, pathetic, emotional fool.

God, no. Suraj, you are not. You are strong, admirable and very smart. And being emotional is fine.

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I was like, drink? Already? I felt proud when he accepted that he wanted it, not needed it. (Do I sound like Chakor?)

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He removed his shirt and I was like, hey, there was no 18+ warning above, where is this coming from?

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Seven days. You have seven days. *in that creepy voice* (could not help myself)

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All sharam, haya was forgotten as she saw the mark. Had to touch it, touch him, to know that she was seeing a nightmare. Gosh, she cried. For him. As if cursing herself for being late. For not being able to save him. For everything. And she hugged him for dear life, which was sucked out from her as soon as she had seen the mark. And he hugged her back because God knew how much he needed it.

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She believed him as he said all that. And it hurt. So much. He was being Jagat Pita for a change and God it hurt. Did she secretly hope that he had done all this just for her? Had she, for one second, felt light headed after hearing that someone, no, Suraj, had given his freedom for hers? But still, she cared. For him.

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He tried to push her away but she is stubborn as hell. And she knew it. Their reasons were same, but they thought otherwise. Sad. But still, they talked about the past. Snatching some snippets and laughing on them. Loved that conversation.

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His words had started to hurt her immensely. The nickname he had given her was like a taunt to her face, reminding her what she thought she did not deserve. Love. His love.

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He told her about his dream? I did not think he would but he did. And he apologised. And they cried. A boundary was crossed.

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Galti.

Some bold galti that was Mrs. Rajvanshi. Sorry, serious mode on, guttermind mode off.

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He snapped. Told her he did everything for her. *sigh* Told her why he did that. And she soared. That was her udaan. But she was scared so she stepped back. *sigh again*

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Inaam!

As soon as Suraj had said about Chakor cheating, I was like, why didn't he mention the inaam? Where is the inaam? I want the inaam! And there it was. In their eyes.

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And he snapped again. Told her why he was doing all this. *sigh* Told her why he had to that. And she breathed. This was her landing. Her destination. And she was not scared anymore so she took a step forward.

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There it was. My analysis. Freaking almost six damn hundred words. I LOVED ALL OF IT SO I COMMENTED ON ALMOST EVERYTHING. Dialogues were so real and heart-touching. And the ending was perfect. I said na, you write in reality. And I love it everytime.

-Sanu

Awesome!

Fentastic os dear...loved it...and each and every dialogues dil ko chu gaye. ..😳 thank u so much...

wow...wow
so nice os
beautifully written
keep writing more
sukor's emotions were excellently portrayed

Ur os s amazing. . . The suraj character in this os and actual suraj character seems very similar. . . . Sounds like real story of udaan... Kaasssh udaan me in ye dikhaya hote. . . Very sweet. . And Sach bole tho mere dil bahut bhaari bhaari say feel ho raha hein. . .

Loved it Aaru! Was waiting for this update! 🤗

Aradhana THIS is what I am dying to see on screen...

I love your Suraj and Chakor they are 3 D in your words. ❤️

I never realized how much goes into writing a story... and how much authors want to hear about their effort. So for an overexcited fan after today's episode I re read your series and realized 2 lines was to paltry for how much your story gave me... so on to it...

The dream sequence was little reversal of Chakor's Karvachuat dream - Love that there was no Imli no Vivaan

How he tells my Chakor and when he wakes up the 1^st thing is he needs to see her.

KN's Torture on Suraj was not just the physical branding and isolation but also the words of mockery instead of the praise Suraj always wanted from him. Just gets to me how good you make them to be 3d. Throughout his back story threads so well...

When Chakor sees the brand, there is such a tug of war between his pride and his need for her empathy.

"Wound them with words. Identify their weakness. Target it. Make them hate you. Push them away.

I was back to using old tactics."

This Suraj, while being a hero never completely loses sight of his suraj-y characters( -.- idk how to describe it) the little sarcastic comments... the way he calls chakor's mother kasturi and questions her upbringing of chakor.

Suraj and Chakor have this little dance, they have feelings for each other but their pride sort has them go back and forth. Like they can hug each other but talking about feelings ... that to honestly... has them putting walls and guards up.

So as always Chakor takes the 1^st step, so so true to her character...and she applies balm hoping to soothe him mentally and physically, when her insecurities get a little less, suraj just blazes away with you cheated now kiss me properly...

I like the fact that suraj corrects himself and doesn't say the word bandhua... it's become a real idea in his head... whearas in the serial it's still quite an abstract ideas. He is able to share that with her about being a bandhua in such a kind and gentle ... I understand you I have walked miles in your shoes...

When she is scared he steps and tears the walls and when he is scared, he has taken to much liberty she sets him straight.. Like the kiss he asks... and the little one she bestows on his hand.. and him toying with her mangalsutra... just so many many details... I read it again and again

Aradhana, you need a hug ... big bear ones...

Your Sukor, just always has this muchness to them...

- Cheshire Cat

A huge thank you to everyone for commenting! Haven't had a chance to go through all of them, but I'll reply to all of you guys individually soon!