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awesome update.., swara-sanskaar together forever

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Unres @ 62 sweetie

Resss 😊

Shru 🤗 🤗

What a consummately spun chapter this was, bringing the dramatic, pulsing narratives of the preceding chapters to a very well spun, finely honed close. We've seen to our discomfort, otherwise well thought out tracks in the serial get shoddily handled towards the end. But here---it was all so well tied in together, so wonderfully handled. The pace, the nuances, the conclusion you had devised for the characters. 👏 👏 All through my repeated readings of this chapter, though I kept feeling a tad nostalgic about DK drawing to a close, I also felt so very happy and ---for want of a better word---serenely content about the way it was being brought to a fitting close. You deserve a large round of this: 👏👏👏

As to the just desserts Janki, Ragini and Kaveri faced---I was reminded of the profound saying by Henry Wadsworth Longfellow: """Though the mills of God grind slowly, yet they grind exceeding small; Though with patience He stands waiting, with exactness grinds He all."

I feel no pity whatsoever for Janki. The true, grotesque tragedy of her situation, as she herself now understands, is that she was by far a foolish woman. This wasn't a crime of passion, an impulsive, thoughtless act. It was a coldly schemed, vilely planned attempt at devastation and murder---not once, but several times over. And that too, the plot was aimed against a young girl who had considered Janki as her own mother (and had, perhaps, even loved her a tad more than she had loved Shomi). Not to mention, that Shomi herself, had treated Janki with nothing but deference and affection. Shekar himself, though he obviously loved Shomi more than he loved Janki, held his first wife in tremendous esteem. It was she who was the chatelaine of his household. As far as medieval marriages went, this was far from unusual.

Janki was entitled to resent the arrangement. She was entitled even, to decline to accept Shomi and Swara, to treat them from the beginning with scorn and coldness. But it was her duplicity and deceit that truly sticks in one's craw. She wanted everything: her image as a long suffering, self sacrificing first wife, making the supreme sacrifice to ensure her household remained together. But within that facade, an ugly bitterness bubbled and boiled.

Would Ragini have turned out better had Janki been a truer person, genuinely the Janki she was pretending to be? We shall never know the answer to that hypothetical, shall we? She was weak and conniving herself, and resented having to "share" what she thought was exclusively hers, with her elder half sister.

One feels a tremendous rush of protective affection and sympathy for Swara and Shomi. Two very well meaning, selfless souls, who both adored Janki and Ragini---but were mercilessly stabbed in the back.

So many nuances you had put into this chapter---that moment between Durga Prasad and a commanding, strong Annapurna (I loved her in this Fic!); the way Annapurna calmly tells Durga Prasad that she would always hate Kaveri Roy, and never be able to forgive her. The Rana himself, cedes the "management" of that aspect of their problem, in the very able and determined hands of his queen! She is definitely the stronger, more admirable of the two. Sanskaar's soul mother!

Kaveri---well, her conniving, serpentine plots are now at an end. Apart from grasping at whatever chances for materialistic enrichment which came her way, she was a horrible mother, literally pimping out her daughter. Kavita was not exactly an admirable character herself, but she at least did love Sanskaar in her way, and did (howsoever transient that emotion might have been); strive to assist Sanskaar and Swara in the end.

Kaveri, on the other hand, though her sanity is now ebbing, remains vile and selfish. One wonders if she would take those doses of poison Annapurna informs her she has placed in that house where she is held under arrest? Or would she cling on, too cowardly to take that step, and perhaps even hoping for a reprieve?

Really loved the character of Durga Kansal aka Dadi saa. 😊 Liked the way you tied in her background with the phase when she'd cured Annapurna's severe ailment, all those years before. The way she fought to save those 3 vitally important and beloved lives was heroic indeed. And we owe her (and you!) a large debt of gratitude. Sanskaar, Swara and Pawan are too precious to lose, na? 🤗 SwaSan deserve long decades of happiness together, lead a sterling life filled with laughter and contentment; have many mini Sanskaar's and Swara's (maybe they can name them Varun, Veer, Shiv, Shruti, Vani and Vaibhavi)? 😆 😉 Birth control not being exactly available in those days---large and happy families, you see!! 😳 😆

And likewise, a very long and happy married life is due for Pawan and Uttara, too! Tell me something Shru---if SwaSan are the Dark Knight and the Mermaid/Nymph Princess; what titles do you plan to bestow on Pawan and Uttara? 😉

The way Uttara got so mad at Pawan trying to practice with his sword, even though he hadn't recovered his full strength, was so very wife like!! Pawan was positively spooked! 🤣 And though he still tries to maintain a circumspect air, Pawan has accepted the way he feels about Uttara, hasn't he? And her love for him doesn't seem too much of a secret either. Sanskaar, distracted thoiugh he is by his own all consuming adoration for his beloved Princess Swara, cannot but see the equation between his sister and his comrade in arms/ soul brother. At least, I think so. 😊 I guess he would be happy for them; he is hardly a man to let narrow social prejudices stand in the way of their genuine happiness---especially since he knows what a fine man Pawan is. Right? 😊 Or is that to be revealed in a spin off fic?

That little nugget was so profound Shru. About how Swara and Sanskaar were initially at death's door---since neither wanted to live if the other died. Believeing the other to be dead, they wanted nothing else than to join their very life, their very soul, in the hereafter. The Gadodias and the Maheshwaris had to repeatedly speak to their inert forms, urging them that they had to cling to life, to recover since the other was fighting for life, too. Amazing touch there. 👏 👏

Lakshya---respect for him in this chapter. Fickle and callow he might have been, and always found wanting, compared to his much more illustrious, gallant and heroic cousin. But hidden within all those layers of juvenile behavior and spoilt brat airs, was a steely core of honor and family feeling. After those misgivings between him and Sanskaar had been laid to rest, Lakshya really demonstrated why he and Sanskaar had been so very close. He did adore and hero worship Sanskaar; and his utter revulsion towards Ragini made for compelling reading. He had begun to love her truly, and for any father, casting aside his wife when she was to shortly bear his child, would not be an easy decision by any stretch of the imagination. But though he was caught in the throes of a dielemma, his stand was clear---he would treasure and care for his baby once she or he arrived, but he was just too disgusted with Ragini to accept her now, if ever.

Curious to see how this progresses in the epilogue. Ragini did have that impulse towards a fleeting sense of remorse, and did try to leave some word with Pawan as to where she had gone. But it was not really a remorse powerful enough to make a full reckoning of hers and Janki's sins. She had a similar pang of remorse earlier too, when Swara had been taken away by Sanskaar---but that didn't last too long, either. The moment the news of their return came in, Ragini reverted to her poisonous jealousy and resentment.

In a way, the most horrible indictment against Janki and Ragini, is the fact that they were unwilling to reconcile themselves to Sanskaar and Swara's honorable return; and the fact that Swara would become a Maheshwari daughter in law, too. They wanted Ragini to enjoy that position untramelled, to not have to share that honor and affection of the Maheshwari royal household with Swara. Whereas Swara herself, though she was the aggrieved party, was willing to let bygones be bygones, and though not revert to a close, sisterly bond with Ragini, at least maintain a civil politeness, as long as Ragini did not attempt to harm Sanskaar!

Therein lies the difference between a Sanskaar, Swara, Shomi (and I dare say, Uttara, Ram, Annapurna etc) on the one hand; and Janki and Ragini on the other. The latter two's conscience and soul have been so warped by a venomous spite and jealousy, they had no perspective left, no impulse towards family feeling, empathy or even a feeling of humanity. Sad, but there it is...

As an aside, I loved the Sujju---Shomi bonding. 😊 Ram getting a tad nervous at the thought of the two ladies commiserating and weeping on each others shoulders, was both deeply touching and a tad humorous! 😉

Loads of Love,

---Viji

Res 34

Sruthi,my friend.
The update was amazing one.
The previous part was filled with sadness.while reading the update i was searching for sanskar and swara.what happened to them.
But for one thing i am really happy that my guess was right.i always doubted the character of janaki.but in this update my doubt was true.she always had a hidden face.
And ragini,she already spoiled her sisters reputation.then she supported her mother in this cheap plan.
Pawan's friendship,Sanskar is a blessed person.he havea soulmate like swara and havea friend like Pawan.
While reading i was sad.because their was no swasan.
You made the surprise till in the end.
I lost my hope.but atlast they were safe.
They fight against all the odds.and won the battle.
Thanks for durga for saving Pawan,swara and Sanskar.
It was beautiful update.

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

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