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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#521

Originally posted by: Rumadiv
Awesome... unexpected twist but nice twist... do continue n U ve penned it well... waiting for next update

Thank you so much for this 😃

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#522

Originally posted by: swathiinduru
The only feeling I felt after reading the part👏 this s for u proved ur self an amazing writer. Felt bad for kavita 😕happy that rog died😡 he deserves that.and for swara and sanskaar😭😭 wat can I say sanskar proved once again that he s knight their love s very pious and pure felt like crying after reading last chapter janki and ragini shouldn't get away after all the evil things they had Don e😡 they both deserve some severe punishment😡😡 so r u planning their death if so can u show their punarjanm where they can have peaceful life would love to read their rebirth story also😊 ll be fun to read even I dnt miss ur story like that😊 waiting for the update eagerly update soon lot's of love swathi

Swathi dear 🤗

Oh wow- am so thrilled with your verdict on my writing and am super grateful- thank you!! 😳😳. Yes all those things happened in the mammoth 33 as you say. I note the request that if in death some sign of hope for SwaSan somewhere in the future in a different age would be welcome 😊- let's see what I have in store for you guys 😃.

Thanks again for your kindness and love!

Love,

Shruti x

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tootiefrootie11

@tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#523

Guys 🤗

I am working hard to catch up on comments but it's been difficult with other commitments at the weekend too and now I need to start on 34 in the week, i.e. at least start the detailed plotting etc which I then use to create each chapter so please bear with me like always. A huge generalised thanks to all of course and much love,

Shru xoxo

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DivineDarkness

@DivineDarkness

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Posted: 9 years ago

#524

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

😆😆 Am I dead because it wasn't as cruel as you thought or because of what happened at the end?! 😲😆 Glad you enjoyed it though!

Love,
Shru x

Both.. Me being someone who believes in non violence felt this is not that cruel 😲🤪

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NITI VYAS

@nut-kut-86

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Posted: 9 years ago

#525

Aap thik ho na.maine 3-4 chapters pe baat nahin ki aapse.aur jab karni chahi tho yeh.sach mein aap shakespear ending dene wale ho isme.though yeh bahut diff hai.bas ab aage dekhte hai.mai kabhi movies die at end wali pasand nahin ki.aur royi bhi nahin.par isme ab aur romeo juliet mein aant mein royi thi.par still hopeful.aapne bahut saalon ke paschaat royi hu kuch padke.u r jst too good.aapne veer ko jhakmi kar dia.phirse rona chalu.

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#526

Dear Shru,

Finally unres page 64.😭😭

love,

Nyna

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Nynaeve

@Nynaeve

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Posted: 9 years ago

#527

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

I haven't actually read The Sign of the Broken Sword- love that quote there, totally apt for Janaki. Maybe I should order the book and save that treat for post DK?! I have fixed what will happen to Janaki and you will see that in 34:)

Shru xoxo

Dear Shru,

You should order the book - Complete stories of Father Brown by G K Chesterton. (The Broken Sword is one of these stories in this book). Short and sometimes tiny stories about a priest solving mysteries of crime rather than those of the Universe😉

love,

Nyna

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Kamala

@Kamala05

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Posted: 9 years ago

#528

Words are not enough to express my feedback . I was literally sitting on the edge of my seat . The scenes were very sensitive yet you handled it efficiently . I am so eager to read next part.

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shamina

@Sakkiyah

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Posted: 9 years ago

#529

Sruthi, my friend
After a long interval,i read whole the parts.
It was well executed.
It was filled with the eternal love of Swara and sanskar.
Waiting for your next update.

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Shivani Priyam Kumar

@Meself

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Posted: 9 years ago

#530

Chapter 31

And so begins the tale of valor and murderous accuracy to conquer the mightiest of enemy ahead. I have had a penchant for military planning and war, especially of the bygone era. Plots, counter plots, gory scenes of torture, loyalty and betrayal and good persisting over evil...these are the stock materials that have governed and still continue to govern the our breathing days. I loved that you have incorporated this one key aspect so subtly into the story. It never has come across as too forced nor does it stands aside...it blends along and that what I love the best about this one tale. You have woven an intricate tale with something or the other happening in some corner but they all a distributaries of the main meandering river and gel well with the main plot.

So Sanskaar has decided to starve the forces into the Baadigunj fort by cutting off of all supply trains and reinforcement caravans. That is one smart move...no man however great or lethal can continue for long without adequate supplies to his tanks, also at this moment the fort of Baadigunj would begin acting as an enemy losing in for the rebel forces. I have to give it to our brilliant general on this one!

And now the old chasm opens with a lot of deep dark secrets finding their way through into disturbing and stirring the souls of those alive after an unpleasant skirmish. You know I have always found Lakshya as a weakling, someone who was forced to man up to situations at hand when he was hardly ready. And in here it was very well visible. Had Lakshya let cat out of the back some odd years ago this entire entrails could have been prevented. All Lakshya had to do was put faith and trust in his brother and let him know what vixen Kavita in reality was. All those years of treacherous waiting and suffering could have been prevented and maybe the equations that are so very tense at the moment could have been better as well. That is a very wishful thinking...'if only'.

And the alarm bell rings loudly for all to hear and act accordingly to. So Sanskaar gets the final piece of the puzzle that lets him know that Kavita wasn't all that he had held in his waking memories. A tough and major blow without a doubt. A man such as him who lives honor forces himself to see the world in the same state and he suffered because of the same, as I said if only he could have pulled himself off the track at the right time a lot of mishaps could have been prevented!

On the other hand in the home ground or should I say the enemy ground...Swara is caught and caught into a trap badly. I loved that you have drawn parallels between Ramayana and the tale of Dark Knight. Just like Sita was caught in the spell of a golden deer, Swara too is caught in a chasm that only spells doom for her. The articulate letter and a brilliant build up around the same sufficed for a golden deer and the poor girl was caught in the same. I could never have imagined that Janki would turn into such a turncoat. Damn! I can't even understand why the hell did I have such an unhealthy fixation over Shramishtha for so long especially when at one moment I did have a flicker of doubt over the supposed two sisters playing Draupadi and Subhadra!

So the Sita Haran happened and our Jatayu in Pawan was brutally assaulted to almost breathe his last. I have said this before and I am wring it again that please let Pawan have a hero's farewell. He is too precious a character to go down in oblivion.

This crisis now has set the stage for the final showdown that is upon us! I will be back wit more!