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Posted: 9 years ago
Dearest Nyna 🤗
I am replying to previous comments here and am so sorry I am wrapping them all up in one for ease 😳. At least this way, despite being briefer than usual, I'll reply and not be feeling bad for my continued delays!

So responding first re 31-

I noted the 😡😡 😭😭 for Pawan 😆, there was lots of that but that's DK for you- take the "good" with the "bad" 😆. Yes the brothers talking was necessary to totally lift the veil from Sanskaar's eyes. And I note the tiredness with letters, but kya karein, emails and texts toh tabh nahi the 😆. Hopefully the later chapters answered all the questions 31 raised? Ranjit was a gentleman and true Rajput as it turns out- thought the Maheshwaris deserved a break! 😊

Yes, there were no letters to Pawan etc, Janaki's ruse and she killed that maid as you saw later through her FB. She was the mastermind all along I am afraid. Ragini was far from blameless, but when she accidentally stumbled upon Sanskaar's truth Janaki helped her use it and the intent was always for Swara to be killed by Sanskaar but Ragini made an "error" there much to Janaki's frustration. And yes, seeing how low her mother could fall, as delivering Swara to Devendra was too much even for Ragini spurred that half hearted and half measures help she gave Pawan. Still too little too less.

You were very right about the symbolism etc of the scene with the chain and whilst it was torn from Swara, Sanskaar's best friend/ soul brother got it and bought Sanskaar time and also delivered the message. Yes Pawan and SwaSan's ultimate fate hangs in the balance so let's see.

I haven't actually read The Sign of the Broken Sword- love that quote there, totally apt for Janaki. Maybe I should order the book and save that treat for post DK?! I have fixed what will happen to Janaki and you will see that in 34:)

And as ever you leave me with a perfectly fitting line, this time for my Lionhearted 😃

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Absolutely the effect I wanted with Janaki. I have loosely modelled her from someone from my past and trust me, there are people like that who exist and I had the misfortunate of being associated with one 😊. It felt rather odd writing it out and I think I have been fair to her as much as I could.

Yes Ranjit was both a real Rajput and gentleman. All true including the stroke of luck with the child - all combined to help get the knight where he was most needed and thus stop Devendra in time as you saw but at what cost is still to be seen. Sanskaar was as you say refusing to give in as he couldn't so he did what he knows how to do- fight on.

Annapurna is in action but as you say whatever bargaining chip even if she found it didn't help as you saw on 33. That was Sanskaar's battle and in a different way Swara's and only they fought it. The person summoned is important, I will reveal in 34. Absolutely loved the analyses of both women I consistently called Queens throughout and for ages drew similarities with, which I still stand by. Then came the differences and yes of course its all about choice- you choose what side you pick and what comes before it can influence that but free will can triumph that and in Annapurna's case it did, Janaki's case not.

Hmmm, wait and see what happens re Pawan 😊. Dead or alive he will hopefully leave a lasting impression. I did give Devendra the end I felt he deserved. It wasn't noble, far from it and the last blow was struck by himself as I didn't want Sanskaar to do that honour, his little chopped pieces were satisfying to write about. Wait to read Janaki's fate.

Loads of love always,

Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: krishuuu

Res baby...😭

Unres

Shruuu sweetuuu...😊

Hello sweetheart 🤗

Sorry for extremely late unres...uthak bathak for that...😭

Don't please, as I will have to do double and I am too tired 😆

Busy busy ...

Coming to chapter 31...it was heart wrenching...after swara assault chapter..this was by far much painful chapter...😭

Yes 31 was angsty but you had more of that in 33 too- way of DK sometimes

Starting with lakshya n sansku confrontation...finally both brothers had an heartfelt talk..n cleared soo many misunderstanding...sansku mind has grown a seed of doubt regarding kavita intentions...felt happy for them...😊

Yes exactly a much needed clarification was needed there and Sanskaar is smart enough to only need some of the truth to piece together the rest 😊

Swara the naive one...how easily she is manipulated...she trusted the women ...she considered her mother but she backstabbed her n handed her over to creep n cheap Devendra...hate him n her..whatever reason for her hatred ..how can she do that to other women...😭

Swara is naive but to be honest you can't blame that for her being taken in by Janaki- that woman was clever and Machiavellian, everyone was fooled by her 😡

Pawan...he was diverted...from his path but he annalyze quickly of foul play n headed back to mahesh mahel..only to witness a death of helper...concerned pawan confronted ragini n she blurted half truth..but pawan did not realise the trap n went to save swara n queen janki...for his utter disbelief he was shocked to see Devendra..n tried to save swara but was backstabbed by janki..n brutally injured..i cried a lot for him..never wanted anything happen to him...sushena death was soo painfull for me..ii could not bear pawan death..but now know he ia alive...phewww😭

Pawan had done what a spectacular hero would, which he of course is and yes he is alive for now 😊
Loved uttara n pawan brief moments...😳

Glad you did, there seem to be many PaRa shippers now 😃

Sorry again ..for short review...😭

Simply loved it..was painful chapter but still...😭

Waiting for more

Hope you loved the rest that came up to and including 33!

Love
Talia😊



Dearest Talia

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Krishnabhisarik

Oh god!!! I had this feeling that something was very very wrong, it wouldn't just be ragini, but this was a shocker!! A kind of expected one, but a blow nevertheless...😭😭 Please please don't kill Pawan😭😭😭 but the way you described the fight scene was totally M.A. (mashallah😉) I get this 'baahubali' feel whenever i read your action sequences, and TBH i absolutely LOVED those.. So..😃 After so manyy revelations in this chapter, now I'm thirsty for their outcomes.. I'm already cringing at the thought of Swara in that rascal's clutches, but I'm also very much hopeful of a positive turn (fingers crossed?)😕😕 ohhh can't wait for the next chapter, out of curiosity, excitement, anxiety😕 Please update real soon😃

Love,
Akshata😊


Hey Akshata dear!

Yes, I threw in plenty of subtle and not so subtle hints about impending doom . You know what happened with Pawan, I had a lot of crying and some anger too but I did there what I felt a hero like Pawan would 😊. And for the MA praise- mmmwaaah. Wow! I haven't watched Bahubali but I know how amazing its meant to be so 😳😳- thank you!!! I know you have read 33 so will reply to that as soon as I can manage.

Love xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: piccola1

Finally caught up, after simply aeons, with DK and the forum ..and what a superb twist in the tale you have designed Shru ! 👏

Thank you so much Pic dearest 🤗

Loving the power play of the Queen bees, the cloak and dagger play by Janaki via Kavita, the Lakshya-Sanskaar rebonding, the Samant's continued loyalty (I do like him), and the extremely beautiful, deft touch to the Pawan-Uttara blooming love !😳

What really stood out for me, and hats off to you for your brilliant writing, was the Annapurna and Swara dialogue. That Swara could keep her faith in her love despite the deliberate instigation, speaks eloquently of the strength of the love and trust she has in her Prince ! A truly brave abd true Princess for our valiant knight.⭐️

I am so pleased you loved all those elements and the different threads I tried to weave in, sometimes with difficulty, sometimes not so much. As it progressed the story was being refined as much as I could manage so it heartens me to read a take like yours 😳. Some things I was sure of always- SwaSan will not let each down and fail any tests of trust 😳

Janaki's perfidy, her complete transformation from oh too good to be true to her evil current, was, to me (as I'd written in an earlier post) not unexpected. She had good reason to be negative - angry and unhappy and jealous. But the extreme hatred that is revealed was indeed shocking in its very intensity! Especially so, because she not only betrayed Swara- she deliberately pushed her to a fate worse than death, knowing how depraved Deependra is. That is heinous and hateful and wipes out any trace of sympathy one can have for a wife cheated upon. She deserves no mercy.😡

You were amongst the first to crack the Janaki twist and you were rather definite about it so I did credit you that before too 😃. I hope the layers I unearthed there helped make sense of her, never to justify her of course as I don't want anyone to do that, but to simply show her twisted mentality and where it came from

I liked that you had Ragini finally yield to the pull of her conscience - again I dont know about redemption - but her better self did prevail. Thank God.😲

Ragini- she was half hearted in that too but then let's see what you think of the fate I give her in 34 😊

Chapter 33 will be tough am sure. Cause we have our Golden girl in the hands of a barbarian..it makes me fearful of what we may have to read. Yes our K9night is riding hard to catch up..am keeping my faith in you to get him there well in time !😊

33 was harder than anything I've had to ever write and hope you will read and find it comes up to the mark 😳

Eager to lap up your next course ! And more than willing to wait for it Shru. It whets the appetite...and we will relish it more for that whetting !

So take your time! We will build our appetites with the aromas wafting from your literary kitchen !😃

Tonnes of love Pic for your love and appreciation, it truly helps keep me inspired 🤗

Lotsaluv, Pic.🤗


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Originally posted by: krishuuu

Shruuu love...

Chapter 32 was fabulous...loved it...

Sorry for late reply..life is hectic nowadays...

Coming to chapter...janki..i felt soo pity for this women...such troubled past...she bear soo much...was longing for her husband love..but shekhar fell for sharmishta...which broken her more..n converted her into cunning women...but for her husband love she accepted sharmishta n swara...just that her husband stay with them..wanting to gave him heir..but God gave her ragini..n again all her dreams shattared...she wanted good life for ragini...n swara...too...but due to lakshya stupidity...she was again lost to darkness..planned n schemed to such low levels..handing swara to devrndra was one of most heinious acts..she even killed that innocent maid...what ur insecurity ..jealousy..hatred turns u into a devil...even worst...felt bad for her ..but this was not right move...

Sansku my baby..glad he got annu letter n immediately figured out..something is fishy n planned to return...but came across bad news on his way...nearly lost his friend n swara...cried soo much to see him in pain...his cries for pawan..entire scene was breathtaking...n pawan was alive..he disclosed swara whereabouts...n he safely send him to mahesh mahal...hope pawan lives...loved uttara n pawan scene..her desperation for him was soo sweet..loved...it

Dying to know what happens next...hope swasan live n stay together happily..they suffered alot in life...

Update soon baby...

Love
Talia


Talia dearest

Very very interesting- you are the first to actually say you felt pity for Janaki! I tried hard to explain where she came from and it seems you got that and as credit to your clearly very kind heart (much like my sweet Swara 😃) you still find compassion- 👏👏. Yes of course it doesn't justify her, nothing can but at least it explains some.

I knew seeing Sanskaar like that would be really painful for you and many others but the DK has certainly had his share of pain and trials. Pawan would not let go of life as he had a mission and he passed on crucial info to his friend. Let's see what happens in the end.

You might have read 33 so will wait for what you thought 😊.

Love always,
Shru xoxo


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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: divya2913

Wow superb dear, loved it, have to wait for some more days for the next update to see who will rescue our love birds


Thank you so much Divya! Sorry about the wait, will try to be as quick as I can but often the detail I like to include makes it time consuming too

Love,
Shruti x
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Originally posted by: manasie23

Chapter 33
Shruts how you manage to write an update this long is seriously a wonder... I am woaah.. hats off

And you made me cry okay oky you did warn me but still you made me cry... poor Swara... she had to bear all that torture but her pure soul, it even managed to change the likes of Kavita...

And Nooo Veer is severly injured somewhere where, where can I go and cry my heart out?! and no my Swara and Sanskaar cannot sorry will not die before exposing Janaki's true face...

Will be waiting for the next update and sorry for eating your head for this update


Manu 🤗

Haha- I told you I like to bore you all but thanks for the kindness with which you described the length 😳. Ah yes that crying was unavoidable there, I knew you would . That is my Swara- she can melt the hardest heart 😊. Veer . Errr re SwaSan . I won't say much - can't make any promises *ducks for cover*

Love,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: DivineDarkness

What the hell Shru you are so DEAD 🤬 you know what the chapter is not that cruel as you said..Rather than being horrified or appalled I enjoyed this chapter..


😆😆 Am I dead because it wasn't as cruel as you thought or because of what happened at the end?! 😲😆 Glad you enjoyed it though!

Love,
Shru x
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Originally posted by: kriti_sologar

nooo swasan cannot die...I have been a silent reader until now but chapter 33 forced me to comment...I wait impatiently until u update each chapter...but swasan cannot be dead...they still have to get married...ohh my now I feel like crying...somebody has to save them...anyways this was an awesome chapter...well u guess kavita felt guilty enough to save them one last time...she oddly enough in her own way loved sanskar...but it made me so happy seeing devendra die but not swaan please...anyways awesome update n cant wait for a new update...this cliff hanger is going to kill me...


Hey Kriti 🤗

Wow- a silent reader who commented- you don't know how happy that makes me!! Thank you!!! Errr- I can't make any promises about SwaSan, some think I will and some think I won't, you will know soon. Not that this means anything but I genuinely don't think death parts true soul mates 😊, some loves are beyond the physical. Don't cry!! So glad you loved this chapter despite the angst 😳. I will try and update soon!

Love,
Shruti x

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: blindassassin

Hi shruti

I am a silent reader of thw forum but I feel it will be injustice to a great writer if don't pen two words of appreciation for this great work. I am a voracious reader but never expected a story of such class in the forum. Thanks for the beautiful treat u present us every week wishing everyday was a saturday😆

Do continue to write even after u wind up DK

Veena


Dearest Veena 🤗

I am seriously so thrilled that so many silent readers have commented after 33 😳. I am no great writer but your kind words have been the highlight of my weekend- a massive thanks to you! And I am truly humbled you think so highly of my offering! I will work hard to deliver the next instalment by the next weekend like always 😳 and will hope you will again share your view on that!

Lots of love,

Shruti xoxo

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