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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Chapter 25:



Bin mausam baarish eh😉 Looks like the universe is conspiring to bring these two together😳 and look where even her feet took her😳


So both Janaki & Shomi have guessed what lies in their daughter's heart & with the wisdom age & experience brings they are right to assume that if allowed to follow her heart, it would just lead to more heartbreak for Swara But then the heart wants what the heart wants...bhawanaein hai, inhe chupaya jaa sakta hai, dil se mitaya nahi ja sakta😉


How weird that Swara now feels lonely inspite of being surrounded by her family when on the other hand in that desert land with only her kidnapper for company she was strangely content & never ever lonely!😳 Janaki's little girl has certainly grown up. She doesn't want to sleep with her mum any more😆 She would rather be left alone with the beautiful dreams of her dashing Prince😳 though unfortunately the night just brought more nightmares for her


I am glad Sanskaar has kept his own men to guard Swara. Knowing what all Ragini is capable of & how foolishly trusting the Gadodias are of her even after knowing her truth...this was necessary. And now the poor baby isn't eating, isn't sleeping, is crying most of the time & talking to the puppets. The girl has got it bad!


I am happy Swara doesn't assume that Sanskaar hasn't sought her out for so many days because he doesn't care. She is just sad...that can be corrected with just a single zalak of his😉 but she doesn't MU his absence. That's imp!👍🏼

Sugar lumps for Veer😆 😆 😆 Bahana accha hai😉 Good to see that Swara has found a friend in Uttara. She can serve as a good messenger between SwaSan if need be😉 Veer reared a little when he thought she would stop & pet the other horses 🤣 Horse & master both are equally mad 🤣 but horsie did manage to make Swara smile after so many days😳 So while Swara doesn't get lucky, Uttara does😉😆 Both brother & sister are determined! They will not be ignored😆 Here Uttara trying her best to get Pawan to talk to her with no success though later Sanskaar getting a lot of success!☺️ Pawan teasing Swara was fab but Swara is no less. she got her badla in the end😆 I am surprised Uttara let her go that easily after that. I had thought now this girl wont let her leave till she had all the details out of her😆

Sujju did what Sujju does best👏 Spread misery & talk nonsense in general🥱 Not even worth commenting over🥱 But then we must thank her for forcing Swara away to flee from there😆 otherwise how could she have met Sanskaar Ma ho toh aisi😆

This is the boldest scene you have ever written so far☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ Sanskaar has no patience for Pawan's teasing😆 Ek din Pawan iske haath se maar jaroor khayega aise hi isko pareshan karta raha toh😆 Like the parched land was lapping up the rain, finally Sanskaar caught sight of Swara & must have felt the same relief😳 Finally I found a similarity between your Swara & show Swara...both can ruin an excellent romantic moment by opening their mouthsMeri Ma! Uski poori baat toh sun! Sanskaar bhi kuch kam nahi hai...kya bakwas karta rehta haiMain baat reh gayi baju main...kya ma baap bhai behen chaha chahi kar raha hai😡 Though chalo atleast he is willing to fight for his love👏 Himmat -e-marda, toh madat -e- khuda XOXOXO Lets see what he does next


Lanny dearest 🤗

I am glad you liked the unseasonal rains- I know how much you wanted a rain scene so this is in many ways attributable to you 😉. Yes the Universe too wants this love story so much 😆

The mothers are getting what lies behind their once baby daughter's changed behaviour and sudden maturity I guess. Love the quoting of those lines here- perfect!!! 👏👏

Another perfect observation- that feeling of being lonely when surrounded by crowds or your own- a sure sign of profound change and here it is obvious what the change is down to. Yes, in that rather deserted landscape with only them two they were totally content and she never had a minute except when he left her that morning to get away from his own feelings (as if that was going to work!), to feel isolated or alone. And sleeping arrangements- now that she cannot have her prince she cries into her pillow looking upon Mohan sometimes and pining away- she won't want her mummies to see her .

She does have it bad doesn't she? And I felt that Sanskaar wouldn't risk her with Ragini around especially as he has drawn that snake out of its hole so soon on re-entry too. Plus his own men there gives him more info about her too and more scope like we just saw in the garden. Sanskaar is nothing if not the perfect opportunist in such matters 😆😉

Ah on that separation point- yes, see I think they deep down know the other one cares but they're of course all mixed up and don't know the real reasons/ extent of the feelings. But she does know he cares for her- she just mistakes that for friendship/ perhaps some attraction although she doesn't get all the nuances of that too. But I don't want them going so wrong as to think that the other is totally indifferent.

I am so glad you liked the PaRa/Swara scene. Poor girl- any excuse to make to see not just Veer but his master. And yes I felt it would be nice to give Swara a genuinely well intentioned friend in her future SIL 😉. I said to someone else that Uttara reminds me slightly of the pre-Sanskaar Swara- happy and bubbly and cheerful. I so wanted Swara to get a little of her own back. Pawan has taken so much fayda with both SwaSan being so desperately in love to make fun all the time and now it's high time some payback was begun 😈. Maybe Uttara did get more details- I just write it or maybe she's saving that for next time 😆😆

Sujju- you already didn't have much hope from her. See she's not bad- just a rather short sighted woman, typified by her own constraints and she reacted exactly how I expected her to. She doesn't want a "complicated" relation for her now star son. So she did some damage. But as you say, if it hadn't been for her, our Princess wouldn't have run away the way she did 😃 to be found!

Pawan ka pitna seems a real possibility 😆. Ah the bold scene- well there's many in my head but I've told you dilemmas about those 😉 Arrey- we have to disagree. This Swara let the whole thing that had to happen before she said anything! In the show- it never gets anywhere near come on! Here if they BOTH hadn't stopped we would need to have jumped to a shotgun wedding 😆 For Sanskaar, i thought it errrmm quite sexy that he had to ask her to make him stop as he knew that what he wanted to do needed the marriage first 😆. Abh ke liye- itna bhi bahut hai, let's leave them some scope for next time 😉 I felt a determined Sanskaar in full on action mode would be fun so let's see! I love that saying.

Love ya,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: nut-kut-86

Umeed hai aap thik hogai hogi .phir bhi thoda aur rest lijiye ku ki dawai hame thoda jyada kamjor bana deti hai.i mean aapki bimari thik ho jati hai par hum weak feel karne lagte hai.ab aaye chapter par swara ki udaasi padhi nahin jaa rahi.uski dono maa ko chinta hai k unki beti ka pyaar use kahin nahin le jayega.par uske pyawr se judaai use jeene nahin dega..swara aur uttara dost badhiya hai.swara ko uttara ki crush ke bare mein pata chal chuka.aur pawan ne ache se swara ko sanky ka haal bata diya aur thodi taang bhi khich li.ab yeh kya uttara ko bhi pata hai swasan ke dil ki halat isliye who pawan ka saath de rahi thi .ya sirf saath dene ke liye.and veer wow uska mention hi mujhe khush kardeta hai.ab pawan ko pata nahin uska pala swara se pada hai.taang kichne ka badla taang khochne se milega.phir bhi who sidhra nahin sanky ki taanng khicha.aab use kaun bataye ki filhaal sanky problem mein hai isiliye use jawaab nahimil raha warna use idhar bhi ans mil jatai.aur who baaris ka rimantic scene bahut hi khush karne wala tha.and swasan marraige bahut hi dilschap.lag raha hai.chalo phir milte hai tab tak aapna khyal rakhhiyega.


Hey Niti 🤗

You are totally right- a lot of my issue is now after effects plus the pain from the muscles in my ribs. Thank you for asking.

Swara was really pining away no? Yes indeed, the mothers would fear that such love would only lead to heartache as they are women constrained by society, families and so much more of a political nature. I felt Swara needs a nice friend, given her evil sister and their current status so who better than her future SIL? 😉
Haha, glad you liked the interaction and teasing and undercurrents with the whole PaRa and Swara sequence in the stables. Pawan is enjoying to the max- first Swara and then Sanskaar- as Lanny said, woh pitne waala hai!! But Swara got her own back a little too! Glad you liked the rain romance too!! Yes, see you soon again and thank you as ever for this!

Love,
Shruti x

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: .FairyDust.

Shru! 🤗

Just taking a break from studies and dropping in for a moment...well I simply HAD to!
The last few chapters are WOW ❤️❤️
I've been meaning to comment since few days and I'm finally doing it today! It may not be a long comment but it's sincere just the same!

I may sound like a parrot as everytime I comment I tell you this 😆 but I cannot help it! I don't know how you do this, write the way you do. You seriously transport me back to that medieval era and it's like I'm standing there as an audience to all the things that are unfolding, it's just such a surreal and brilliant experience!

And I love my Sanskaar in this one, well most of your characters are my favs, like Pawan (who is second to Sanskaar, in this FF and my heart too 😆😳) , Annapurna, Janaki, Swara, Uttara ( woah and She and Pawan? That's so cute 😳)but Sanskaar as always takes the title!

I love everything about his character in this FF, especially how he knows he loves Swara irrevocably and will NOT let her go away for fear of what people will say 😳. His strong will and determined nature reminds me SO much of my old Sanskaar from the show, how he too gave two hoots about what the world thought of his love for Swara! He never let anyone disregard his love for her, even Swara herself! And our prince here is going the same way (well of course he will he IS Sanskaar after all 😳) and looks like he's going to do much more!
"You will be mine Swara", this dialogue says everything about his character that I love and some ❤️. I cannot wait to see what he does

And also, I'm so glad you're keeping the focus on SwaSan than on Ragini or any of that drama because seriously I CANNOT stand Ragini 🤢.

I have a lot more to say about the various twists and developments, but I'll just suffice saying that you're doing so well with this one, especially considering your not keeping well at all these days, but that's not hindering you from giving your best to DK! <3 You literally take us on a ride to that time with your words and make us experience it all with the characters..and then leave us wanting for more, which is what a good and successful writer does, which you most definitely are 🤗

The story is at such an interesting point now, it's so gripping and the wait till the next update is really torturous (Yeah that's me subtly requesting you to please update soon 😆😳).

Eagerly awaiting the next update!

Lots of love,
Yukthi.


Yukhti!!! 🤗🤗

OMG- I was so over the moon when I saw this! Can't believe you came and posted such fab comments whilst still so busy with studies!! Thank you hon!! Mmmwah for this!

Awww- so glad you loved the last few instalments. And you don't sound like a parrot- you are singing the sweetest song so keep going pls! 😆 It makes me feel really good to read if someone feels that the authenticity of the period setting is being maintained and that I am doing something to bring it to life. It always plays out very vividly in my head but there is always the worry about whether it is actually being depicted properly or not.

Our Sanskaar ❤️ How can anyone not love this man? 😆- oh you are in the Pawan Deewanis FC too?! My my- the man has gathered so many admirers! 😆 I am glad you like the PaRa angle just come in recently 😉. I felt we needed some more love angles here!

I hate men who would give a toss really about people- except of course like here, where he only restrains himself for her sake as he does understand how tricky the situation is for a girl in her position. Yes indeed- the old Sanskaar in the show- the one who got things done and didn't give 2 hoots about "women's world issues"- I don't mean this in a sexist way at all! I wanted here that he finally decides enough is enough and we get to see the determined man who now wants to go after what he wants, even if his lady love is being all confused and somewhat hesitant. Ah- I think you might enjoy whatever will happen next although it won't be as straightforward as one would expect with the way this ended 😉.

I don't want the focus on unnecessary SR drama- Ragini is poison and I don't want Swara and her playing happy sisters even there we will see some more of her to come- cannot be avoided.

Thank you so much for these words Yukhti, you made me feel so much better. I would have liked to have been a few chapters ahead but each one takes a long time and I would rather not compromise on the quality to rush them, so it was one this week. Have yet to start on the next- the health issues complicated things more. But I know broadly what it will contain so will start in the week and hopefully it will be up at the weekend. The comments on the writing and the vote of confidence in me- 😳😳❤️. Speak to you soon!

Love you,
Shru xoxo

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: a_uma

Hi Shruti.. I hope you are better now.. 😃.. please take care of yr health.

Totally awesum.. Chapters 22 to 25.. 👏... sorry I was not able to post before this..

The story has moved forward in leaps and bounds... Swasan coming closer and that kiss... ☺️ .. acknowledging their attraction for each other.. but before they could give voice to it.. and declare their love for each other, disaster struck in the name of gossip.. .. swara misunderstanding sanskar's hasty act of applying sindoor on her forhead.. and he in turn misunderstanding her rejection..

What was a exploratory meeting between Adarsh and Sanskar turned into a full-fledged hero's welcome for Sanskar..👏... the old misunderstanding suddenly wiped out.. hope it stays that way.. and no new problems crop up for Sanskar.. will we know who is the actual traitor in the family ?

As feared, Swara had to bear the woman's burden of proving her innocence.😡... but thankfully, Sanskar stood by her and made sure that everyone knew the true facts of her kidnap and not the one embellished by Ragini..

Ragini is a cool one.. even after exposure she has decided to brazen it out and keep chanting her innocence..😡 creating doubts in the mind of the family esp. her father and Laksh.. I have a feeling that she will soon be caught in her own web of lies.. 😈

Gratifying to see the Rana acknowledge his mistakes publicly and welcome Sanskar back whole heartedly.. Ragini up to her dirty tricks again.. but this time her own mother is not buying it.. 👏

Lastly, Swasan... love the way you have potrayed their feelings... each missing the other and remembering every word, every moment which they spent with each other.. .. even the heavens conspiring to make them meet.. and when they did they couldn't stop their mutual passion.. 😳.. but unfortunately the misunderstanding continues.. if only sanskar would openly confess his love and swara would believe him.. ..

Also want to know about how Sanskar will retrieve the remaining parts of the map..

Waiting eagerly for your next updates..


Hey Uma 🤗

Thank you for asking about my health- am working on the being back to 100% 😃

I am so pleased you liked the development in the story and where it has now got to. I felt that despite the constraints between them, SwaSan should have their share of interaction and progress in their story so even if they are not simply getting together easily, there is still a lot ongoing there. The first kiss almost got them to a mutual confession but often in life things only happen when the time is right and for them, that was not it. I didn't want them to "solve" this with a sindoor ceremony without either really undersigning deeper what they mean to each other.

Yes Sanskaar is now in the clear for the family and the kingdom. As to no more problems- errr, with it being DK that cannot be promised 😉 but even if there are problems we shall hopefully see why and what they are to be able to enjoy their eventual resolution. As to the mystery of the other traitor who helped Devendra- yes, definitely that will be revealed and there too there will be some interesting angles I hope.

It is always the women who do bear the brunt of such unjustified censure but Sanskaar had told her he would restore her and he is trying to do that. His start was to make sure he took the blame for his own actions and also disclosed Ragini's but of course she was not going to cave in so easily and she didn't. Ragini did what she thought was her only option. Let's see how her lies and plots play out.

Glad you liked the confrontation sequences and Ragini getting a slap.

Happy that the SwaSan sequences, including the pining and culminating in their passionate encounter in the rain made you happy 😃😳. Ah yes a confession would make it easier but I don't like things too easy- it makes people not really value them I feel so here some more tests need to be given IMO 😉.

As for the Map- there is only one part they don't have - the one for the Gadodias, that is with the Rathores so getting that back is rather tricky and the only way is to wage war against them. I will weave all the different threads in as best as I can soon:). Thank you for these lovely comments.

Love,
Shruti x

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: jasw

My heart was thudding too(just like Swara's) while reading the last part of Ch25! 😳 The setting was perfect, read the earlier reference ..so this was kind of a turning point in their life earlier. Both Sanskar and lakshya, were fascinated and attracted to Swara. And Sanskar's protectiveness towards Swara already kicked in(covering her in biggest blanket😆), though he realized this much later!

I sooo loved their conversation! Swara's question "What r you doing here?" and Sanskar's reply "Well It's nice to see you again too Swara!" 😆 Perfect understanding by Sanskar about Swara's turmoil! 😳 And then the kiss! Heart-warming, earth-shattering, desire-driven kiss! It was natural given the love they both have for each other! I kind of expected this when they met after the tense few days. I loved Sanskar's determination about their future. 'You will be mine Swara'.

Will be waiting for the day when their misunderstanding clears and they realize how much they love each other. Till then will be enjoying their interactions in your words Shruti.


Hey Jas 🤗

I see that I raised temperatures for some and heartrate for others with 25 😃. Ah, you did revisit the description in 3? Indeed, that was the whole wanting to cover her with a blanket chapter 😆 and a turning point for sure, the story rather diverged from there I felt.

And again, well spotted on the word play there- a mix of Sanskaar's trademark sarcasm with his intuitive understanding. I loved the adjectives you used for that kiss 😳- I felt like what I wanted to show came across. And yes I wanted the "go getter " Sanskaar now in action, turning his attention to the most important battle he should fight 😊. There will be a happy day at some point and until then thank you so much for your patience and for loving the story!

Lots of love,
Shruti x

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Originally posted by: mayasingh

Loved chapter 25...

Great going... Love your write-up and the way the story keeps on progressing...
Still no idea who was the inside traitor...
Apart from Adarsh or Parineetha no one else has any motive..

Hmmm Sanskar in full hunting mode... And his target is Swara..
Loved the dialogue where he says he loves her enough for both..

Eagerly waiting for next chapter..

Regards
Maya


Dear Maya 🤗

Thank you so much. So glad that you loved 25. Ahhh- it makes me so happy to read that you like the way the story is moving on. Ah the inside traitor- that will come too and I like to think it will be interesting. Lots of people have of course thought of Adarsh and yes he does have the motive. Haha, yes hunting mode is on and this time for a very important treasure! You liking that dialogue made my day! I meant to start on 26 today but am so tired and still recovering so will have to pace myself.

Love,
Shruti x
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Originally posted by: mayasingh

Hi Shruti...

Just wanted to say that I feel... No I am sure you are a brilliant writer...
And I hope you keep this up...love your write-up...


Hey again Maya!

Awww- this is seriously such a nice thing to say- am so humbled and grateful that you think me worthy of such praise 😳😳

Love again,
Shruti x
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

well written..👍🏼


Thanks Mystic 😃
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Originally posted by: piccola1

Sinfully and unforgivably late, Shru..but not responding to this superbly angsty, intense (and oh so frustrating) #25 was making me unhappy..especially when you're doing this when still unwell. Do get well soon !👍🏼


The much awaited meet of our royal sweethearts was rain to my parched Swasan soul..as much as it was for them. That the situation has got far worse for our princess - oh she is safe now and with her family, but she was far happier when far away with her prince - only made my heart go out to her. She has suffered far too much..from being betrayed by her beloved sister, being kidnapped by a declared traitor, being assaulted by ruffians and even worse at that D scum's hands...she braved it all ..like a true hero.

What sustained her thru it all, after the initial trauma, was her own courage and the deep sense of rightness she felt with Sanskaar. She felt protected, cosetted, cherished when she was with him. And even when thibgs went really bad, she unconsciously leaned on him to gain strength and fight back.

He was her anchor. And I feel, today she is totally adrift..because the turbulence is far worse. Now she is among her own but more alone than she ever was..and her anchor is denied her as well.

Loved your powerful writing that moves these characters off my screen..to flesh and blood and make me want to lock them up together till they sort out their differences!

LOVED Sanskaar's determination to make things right for his Swara..He has a tall task in front of him. With a traitor around, he holding the key, a Mom who detests his beloved, his Swara very much still at risk, and this MU going on..all his bravery and intelligence is going to be needed to sort it all out. On an aside, while that passionate kiss was delightful, can he talk and make her listen to him ? Its so frustrating to see them so at odds !

Good luck to him! Knowing our Prince, he will win nonetheless! But I want his fiesty Princess by his side as he unravels it..please? Cant bear to have her so unhappy!

Was this last interlude witnessed by someone..I hope its not going to make it worse!

Absolutely loving DK. Its gripped my imagination.😃 so much so that every Swasan loving character is now a loved one..be it Veer or Pavan or all of the Prince's bravehearts ! And Swasan are a delight to read about.

Get well soon ! And God Bless you for making so many people happy with your gifted writing.👏

Love ya🤗


Pic sweetheart 🤗

There is no late in this context so please don't worry on that front at all! What you have written made my weekend so much brighter (we had much rain!!) that I am so grateful! Thanks for your well wishes!

I was feeling parched too and hence that meet had to happen. Absolutely right about Swara and her state despite being reunited with her own. What Swara found with her Prince in that loneliness was so profound that its absence now is what is really causing her to be bereft . She is a true hero, and with her own true hero she belongs 😳. She went through so much but being together made her overcome it with such resilience. You are so very right about the total symbiosis of their relationship- he was her rock, her succour, her reason for a lot of her growth too. And yes not having him there (although she does and doesn't know it) is making it all come undone for her .

The road ahead is paved with so much, all of which you so accurately summed up- you are right, it is a tall order! But Sanskaar doesn't balk at challenges and when it comes to his Swara, he would do anything. Now that he is determined to win her, he would want to go after that aim with his purposefulness directed there despite all the other things he needs to deal with too. As for talking, they do need to but it's not so easy as not only do they not get time alone but they have so much pent up, when they did meet they get distracted with dealing with all those raw emotions. See I think it all very well to know that rationally you need to talk but when you are so involved and living through all that, a lot of times your logical responses are totally absent. Such is the case with them - it won't be like that forever, but for now, its only been days since they got back after ALL those massive events so the talking not happening is perhaps somewhat understandable?

Ah you fear someone may have seen them- let's see if you are right 😉.

Awww- I can tell by that penultimate para how much you love DK and it makes me so glad, I can't describe it! And for saying what you did about my writing 😳😳, I am truly overwhelmed and humbled- thank you Pic!!!

Love you too xoxo


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Shru... long time no see 😆🤗
Today my rail gadi reached till chapter 9... 😆 So here I am... Shru... from the bottom of my heart ...I wish to see this story on book shelves. I am still at initial stage of the story but touchwood ... this is the best of your work till now. Your writing is at all time best here in this story.. So enchanting and descriptive. Even though the character's name are same as the show but you have given them their own distinct personality. And at this point.. you have made me fell in love with SwaSan all over again... I am still reading more but till now my most favorite chapter is chapter 9. The reason I loved this chapter so much is that you showed your Swara is a human ..and have a breaking point... The confrontation between SwaSan was so well written.. strong and impactful. About Sanskaar... I have told you before but I will say this again..no one can write Sanskaar as good as you.. and this dark knight... I am so in love with him already... You have written an enigma Shru.. which I would love to discover more about as I move my rail gadi forward 😆. Apart from SwaSan, Ragini and Annapurna's characters are written so amazingly. Loved their strong personality even though in case of Ragini, its negative but I am loving the way you're shaping her up.
For now thats all... I may be super late for with my comments but know this... I love your story ... this one in particular. Keep rocking...
With tons of love,
Nitzy 😳

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