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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#501

Originally posted by: hp_2006
Hey Shru..🤗

Hope you are feeling better now..😊Take care and get well soon..But still you are updating for us, that is a great feat..Take a bow, dear..👏

Ok so now I am going to comment for Chapters 21 and 22..

Both were superb and mind blowing..Loved every bit of these two updates yaar..😃😃

The funfair was really a refreshing reading experience..It was as if I was present at that colourful place..You described everything so well..So our princess realized that she is in love with her Prince..😳That particular moment was so Wow..!!
I just can't explain my feeling when I was reading that part..

I really loved the way Sanskaar took care of her..and their cute banters and fights..Sanskaar's jealousy when she asked about Pawan was so funny..😆By the way Shru, I don't know about Swara, but I really am falling in love with Pawan now..❤️😳😳especially after reading this 21st chapter update..😉

Really loved the big surprise planned by Sanskaar for his lovely princess..And the puppet show they put up for her..Pawan's dialogues were so fun yaar..I just love him..!! ha ha..😃😃

And Swara is again scared..aha..naughty girl..She wants Sanskaar to be with her again, that night..😉

At the beginning of Chapter 22 I was expecting a kiss..Situation had been so ideal, but our ever sanskaari Sanskaar..aaarghhh..!! He had even felt her emotions, but still..😛

And then the scene that followed was so beautifully written yaar..The way she dressed up for him, the way he felt when she was looking so radiant..Such a picture perfect moment..Wow Shru..It was amazing..!!😳

And then that kisss...aaahhh..Great man..!! Really hot..!!☺️

But again, wrong timing for Adarsh's forces to arrive..😲

Thank God, now all the misunderstandings about Sanskaar have been cleared..But still I have a strange feeling here, Shru..It all feels too good to be true..I don't know why, but I am having some doubts on Adarsh..May be I am wrong, though..
Well, I leave everything to you, you are the writer..😊😊

But I felt so bad for Swara, she heard all the wrong things about her..Poor girl..! She is so heart broken now..😭

But Sanskaar was at her side, immediately trying to reassure her..But still he couldn't..She is really hurt and she even didn't allow him while he was trying to apply that sindoor to her forehead parting..Poor Swasan..Now what will happen yaar..😭

Waiting for Chapter 23 with much curiosity😊
Love
Naina🤗

Hey Nainu 🤗

Thank you so much for your comments and for the well wishes for my health. Yes my obsession is off the charts so sick or not, I can't stop thinking and writing DK 😆.

I am so pleased you loved both 21 and 22. The funfair was meant to provide them with some much needed relief and hopefully also buffer us with some happy moments too for the coming chapters. So happy you liked the realisation sequence for Swara- I wanted it to be this moment that made sense for the reader and yet appealed to them:).

Sanskaar is sooo caring no? Really makes every woman want a man like that huh? Hahaha- another one down with Pawan fever! 😆 Shruti Lannister called out first for him but there's a line formed anyway! Some excitement in store for you Pawan deewanis soon 😉 So pleased you loved the puppet show and the mad antic by those two to cheer Swara up 😆.

Swara is as addicted to Sanskaar as he is to her now and their ninth time routine has become special to them so no wonder she didn't want it to end 😳

Ah you are greedy no?! 😆 You wanted a kiss as soon as they woke! But challo koi nahi- patience has its own rewards. So you got a kiss but only a little later. I am thrilled you loved that whole sequence ending with the kiss so much 😳

And yes kabab main haddi Adarsh 😡 but challo I only sent him na 😆. See you are just one of the majority who all think Adarsh is a villain so let's see whether your doubt there is right or not. 😉

Swara- the poor baby! But as you say no matter what she has Sanskaar and he's going to let a MU stop his support of her. Hope you will have read and enjoyed 23 😃. Hope the next few chapters will be exciting for you!

Lots of love as ever,

Shru xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#502

Originally posted by: Vini224
Shruti
I was expecting more disagreements between Swasan after the last chapter but thankfully it didn't happen.I don't think I could have taken anymore problems between them at this stage.I felt much better after reading this chapter even though the MUs have not cleared .It would have been impossible for them to sort things out without causing more harm to Swara's reputation.

So after a long time SwaSan had to sleep in different tents and were unable to sleep without each other's comforting presence.Miss those beautiful nights and mornings where they woke up in each other's embrace .All because of Adarsh and his men, just hate them.So just for that Adarsh is a bad guy for me even if he doesn't turn out to be the traitor but I still think he is.

Sanskar receiving a hero's welcome was heartwarming and also loved how Sanskar made Swara and Pawan recieve the welcome due to them.So another love story is going to brew between Pawan and Uttara.Cant wait for that.So what is going to be their shipping name?

Loved how Annapurna welcomed Swara without hesitation,if she had shown any hesitation things would have turned very awkward.She is a true queen.So a knowing look passed between Annapurna and Sujata at Sanskar's smile at Swara,wonder what role they would play and whether they would accept Swara for Sanskar has to be seen.

I loved,loved how Ragini was in turmoil at Swara's return.But so shameless of her to act as if nothing happened.But I guess she needed to do that hoping her truth wouldn't come out.She must have thought Swara would not reveal her truth but she didn't realize that now she has to reckon with Sanskar in anything that relates to Swara.

Can't wait for Sanskar confronting Ragini.I'm so looking forward to it.

Dear Vini 🤗

Thank you so much for the as ever super fast res and comments, so touched. No no I knew everyone was freaking about fights and more MUs and all but that wasn't the way I wanted this to go. Yes totally- they cannot talk in the midst of Adarsh's men- already Swara's name has suffered so much and they cannot risk more. They are safe with Sanskaar's men but the others cannot be relied on.

Yes that night was their first as such apart after the first one in the Haveli and there too he had tucked her in No wonder there was no sleep. 😆😆 I see you are determined like some others as to Adarsh's culpability- damn you all are persistent 😉 so let's see where this goes!

I think Sanskaar so deserves this credit now- after the terrible injustice, no matter how understandable it was, it now needs redressing. Yes I wanted Sanskaar to prove again how incredibly loyal and moral Sanskaar is; he will never forget his friends in his good times if they stood by him in the bad. The Pawan Uttara ship name has been coined by Lannister as PaRa 😆❤️

Annapurna is a consumate politican- she wont risk public drama and she knows how stubborn Sanskaar is. You are right to be cautious to see how the women will react in the future - hope whatever happens will make sense given the characters seen so far.

Ragini is such a piece of work na? Exactly as you say- what else could she really do? She knows her sister is really gentle and also the fact is she relied on the fact that they couldn't make a huge fuss there and then but of course Sanskaar doesn't play by the rules! I hope I don't disappoint you with the confrontation and after!

Love,

Shruti x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#503

Originally posted by: Krishnabhisarik
First things first, how are u? I hope you are better and recover super fast😃 Now..Oh oh oh.. Where did u stop!! Super awesome confrontation coming up.. Can't wait.. But coming back to the update.. How awesome was the way u portrayed their emotional conflict!? Duty bound in one direction and love bound in the other.. Such restless hours..😭
I hated (though it did make sense) how they wanted to resolve the issues but couldn't coz of their own unresolved confusion and of course no suitable opportunity, . but absolutely loved the way you wrote it.. 👏
Also how sanskar doesn't let the awkwardness seep into the necessary, like the ride and welcome.. And such amazing values he has, he neither forgot swara nor pawan when the time came to share the respect and honor.. Touching part that was..
Swara's transformation into the mature and dignified princess that she anyways was at her core before but which is prominent now was so smartly inserted through Annapurna's eyes.. Her journey has been full of emotional mental and physical trials, she is dealing with so many doubts, and still she has her head held high.. I like your Swara, innocent but not dumb, instead generous, elegant and different ... ⭐️
And everybody noticed Sansku's overflowing love for swara😆
Pawan and uttara
Gosh i wrote too much..😳 But am super eager for chapter 24...
Take care dear😊

Hey Akshata 🤗

I was so trilled to read your lovely comments and your kind PM too. I am trying to get better but it seems like the viruses love me a lot 😆 I am so pleased you loved the update and liked the portrayal of the emotional conflict between SwaSan. Loved how you summed it up- duty bound vs love bound 👏. The hours were agonising indeed

See just that with Sanskaar- I know I served up a MU between these two but neither of them are going to suddenly get a personality transplant as such because of that. Sanskaar would still put Swara first - and also do his duty like managing his men etc. I love how you commented on his values- he would never forget his friends and whilst Swara is so much more than that she is that too.

I am really pleased you liked me highlight that transformation of Swara's- she left a girl and came back a woman. I had originally shown her through Annapurna's eyes on arrival so thought it fitting we see her again that way. You are right- she has been through much this girl and I cannot tell you how much it warms me to hear praise of her portrayal 😳. The adjectives you have used are such balm to me- thank you!!

Difficult to miss Sanskaar's obvious interest no? 😉 Haha- happy you like PaRa!

No no it's not too much- it's perfect!! I will start working on 24 tomorrow.

Loads of love,

Shruti xoxo

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#504

Originally posted by: dilwali
Hi Shruti
i hope u r fine now
as usual this update was as brilliant as i expected and at this point story is so emotional n I m waiting for moments when swasan will be united n I m anxious after Ragini's truth will be revealed how everyone will react n story has reached to that point where we are anxiously waiting for next updates but I ll say to u that while giving us updates do take care of your health
lots of love

Hey Kawal 🤗

Am getting better but still not a 100%- thanks for asking for these comments too 😃. So pleased you loved the update. Yes the next sequence with Ragini's reveal by Sanskaar will be challenging as it remains to be seen whether they are believed or not. I'll try and be quick with the next part. Thanks again for the well wishes for my health dear.

Love,

Shruti x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#505

Originally posted by: Sanya17
i hope at least ragini's truth comes out now it is high time things start setting back on their right place there have been too much mess and some more things are yet to come out I think there is someone from the family is involved with that leach devendra have you planned how many parts are left now actually on one side I don't want this story to end on the other side I want it to end without unnecessary draggings, confused me😆
Both of them are in pain because of the misunderstandings 😭 but swaras entry on maheshwari palace gave me grihaprabesh type of feeling😛 I want to ask you one thing can you read minds when slowly I have got convinced that pawan is positive and he is like a brother to sanskar he really cares for sanskar and ready to take any danger for sanskar I started to want pawan and uttara as a couple but haven't told you, in this part when I realised that you too have the same thought I was so surprised do you have mind reading power how did you manage to know my wish he too will not remain single for too long😭 what will happen to his admierers 😭😉😆 anyways I always wanted a sweet nice kind hearted good girl for him and in my mind I always imagined uttara to be that girl I will like them as a couple

How are you now see you in the next part

Hey Sanya 🤗

Take a deep breath and relax my dear 😆, let the story play out. Regina's truth is a tricky thing and as for the "mess" that is all part of the story and planned. I promise you turn by turn matters will get addressed one way or the other. I haven't fixed exactly how many parts yet. I sort of have to allow flex for the story to not be compromised. I would think a minimum of 30 if not more 😃. Do you feel the story has dragged so far? 😲 I would be really sorry and worried if so and I hope not! As for the story- see I have the full plot fixed in my head and all the different angles, only the finer details and some parts which will come nearer the end are still not set in stone for me. Try to enjoy the tale if you can 😃

Yes there is a MU and ah yes I see what you mean- where Sanskaar ensures she is greeted as a bahu in the show? Hahaha! you wanted this for Pawan?! 😆 Yayyy!!! Another shipper for PaRa then! Not that this story will be about them but I see so much potential there so couldn't resist a little side love story for now!

Great mind connect there huh?! I am sorry to disappoint all you girls 😆

I'm a little better thanks, hoping it will improve more! See you after 24!

Love,

Shruti x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#506

Originally posted by: Javeria3991
awesome update
interesting end of the update, although i think Sanskaar will reveal all the ill doings of Ragini but i think no one will believe.
Can't wait to read more.
Get well soon and update at ease

Thank you Javeria! So glad you liked it. Ah- I see you think that no one will believe SwaSan as per the show- reasonable assumption given our dear Ragini's skills at acting 🤢 Hope you will like what I do next! Thanks so much for your well wishes!

Love,

Shruti x

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#507

Originally posted by: chandanagimsy
di di this was amazing...loved it to the core...omg can't wait for next part now...upcoming dhamakha wow...

Hey Chandana dear! Thanks so much! So glad you liked this part and hope you will enjoy the coming confrontation too!

Love, Shruti x

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Sanya17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#508

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Hey Sanya 🤗

Take a deep breath and relax my dear 😆, let the story play out. Regina's truth is a tricky thing and as for the "mess" that is all part of the story and planned. I promise you turn by turn matters will get addressed one way or the other. I haven't fixed exactly how many parts yet. I sort of have to allow flex for the story to not be compromised. I would think a minimum of 30 if not more 😃. Do you feel the story has dragged so far? 😲 I would be really sorry and worried if so and I hope not! As for the story- see I have the full plot fixed in my head and all the different angles, only the finer details and some parts which will come nearer the end are still not set in stone for me. Try to enjoy the tale if you can 😃

Yes there is a MU and ah yes I see what you mean- where Sanskaar ensures she is greeted as a bahu in the show? Hahaha! you wanted this for Pawan?! 😆 Yayyy!!! Another shipper for PaRa then! Not that this story will be about them but I see so much potential there so couldn't resist a little side love story for now!
Great mind connect there huh?! I am sorry to disappoint all you girls 😆

I'm a little better thanks, hoping it will improve more! See you after 24!

Love,
Shruti x

Arey don't worry dear I don't feel the story is dragged I was just saying I don't want this story to end that's only possible by dragging right that's what I was saying that I don't want it to end but I don't want it to be dragged either

Edited by Sanya17 - 9 years ago

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#509

Originally posted by: Sanya17

Aha! Like that- in that case, you have nothing to fear 😃 I hate dragging intensely. There is just a lot of ends to bring together and tie up plus dealing with SwaSan so perhaps in the next 6-10 chapters it will all come to an end but it will still be a lot to cover in there so hopefully that will keep you going a while 😃 x

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shamina

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Posted: 9 years ago

#510

My friend Shruti 🤗

The update is really awesome. By this update you gave me a ray of hope for swasan.

The previous update was really painful for me. The pai. Sanskar and swara faced was unbearable.

In the beginning of the update the pain was there.

The love of swasan is mutual. But at that time sanskar suddenly took a big step and for his sake she not allowed him to fill her forehead with sindoor.

Swara's behavior hurt him. But it was painful for her to.

After the events they can't sleep peacefully.

Swara was thinking about the events.

She loves him from her bottom of her heart. But for his reputation it is necessary. Swara knew about her condition. The people will blame her and she will a culprit for them.

After so many hurdles sanskar got his life. He find out the real traitor. But by her he will lost it. It is not bearable for her.

Her mind always want to marry him, but her brain is not allowing her.

Love is a strange emotion.

And sanskar was also heart broken. He was not ready to accept the rejection.

They understand each other. They love each other

But the circumstances are really hard for their love.

The whole family was happy for sanskar's arrival. And the people of his country was waiting for the arrival of their hero.

In the journey sanskar and swara never tried to talk.

The situation was also not right. The entry of laksh make the situation more hard.

Sanskar got his family. But he was not happy. Because it was not completed.

Ragini was unhappy after hearing about swasan arrival. Her plans badly failed and she was fearing about the after effects.

The arrival of sanskar was a heart touching scene. He cleared all the misunderstanding between his family and find out the real traitor. He is good warrior, who always won the battle.

And he also remember about swara's help for his mission. Without her his mission was impossible.

And he said about Pawan. His real friend.

And swara was happy to see her family,

Ragini beautifully acted her bechari character, swara was silent, but sanskar gave a good reply.

Eagerly waiting for your next update

Thanks for the pm

Edited by Sakkiyah - 9 years ago