Originally posted by: Sakura24
Dearest Shru,
Firstly congrats on the new thread, I hope this will soon be filled with some of your finest works.
That chapter, dear lord, how effortlessly everything flows. It was so wonderful to read. You know this is what I enjoy the most about any story I read, the point where the walls are built on the foundations laid down in the initial chapters. You have managed that wonderfully.
The way Ragini has embroidered her tale is praise worthy, I mean she is such a sly serpent and now have the track set for her to spread her slimy lies. So she has made a traitor out of her innocent sister. God job, I do hope she will enjoy this momentarily success before the skies come crashing down on her.
Swara on the other hand is thrown in to utter confusion. That was portrayed perfectly. For me, she is on a journey of a life time, hopefully of understanding and a hunt of truth...would she discover love on the way as well? I am as curious as you can hope someone to be.
However what I admire here is the way you have managed to keep her princess image intact, she still behaves the way one would hope to see a princess behaving, nice touch there.
The best part, plotting, cunning, smart and strong Sanskar. Finally after his mask was ripped off. I enjoy this portrayal so much that the past week when I had no internet to read DK I couldn't sleep. You have turned me in to an obsessed fangirl!
Did the old man really saw a wee bit more than he let out, it seemed he did realize the young man was not entirely truthful, but had no dark intention so he played along. It was a treat reading the interactions between the all seeing wise old and the perceptively smart young, good job!
So Swara failed in her attempt to find freedom. Sanskar needs to have a word with her soon, not the usual blackmailing and threats but some truth he can spare which would make her less weary of him perhaps?
Can't wait to know what awaits them beyond this chapter. Continue soon...
loads of love,
Sakura
Saku dearest 🤗
Your lovely comments have made my Saturday much brighter and as ever, thank you hugely for that! Thanks also for the good wishes on the thread, always needed and much appreciated.
So glad you think this flows, as you will well know that is always a challenge with a FF right?! I am grinning madly that you like the way the plot foundations have been laid. I agree that without this, the whole structure is somewhat shallow or can easily totter and I do worry about it so thankfully you think it's not an issue here!
Ragini got what she wanted in the short term- her hated sister out of the way and the only other person who could expose her away too! Yes, it wasn't enough she branded her character-less, not traitor is added onto her supposed list of crimes too 😡. And yes, she can enjoy her day for now! 😉
Swara- indeed, she's been thrown for every loop there is and understandably trying to digest it all. Her journey- well, here comes my challenge I guess! 😃 Ah you think I am keeping the image as it should be? Glad!
Awww- really?! Seriously, Saku I find it incredible you like this so much! Am seriously overcome 😳😳.
The canny old man I think had a pretty good idea of the real identity of the stranger professing to be a mere trader and as you say, he trusted there was no mal-intent so played along. Our connect comes to play again! I am just thinking through a potential conversation to come that makes Swara if not trust Sanskaar, at least be a little less jumpy and freaked out around him! I mean she has the signs she needs but I thought it would be too much to make her immediately get them given what she's been through but I will have to bring that out fairly soon!
Love you Saku xoxo
Mangal Lakshmi
Bade Achhe Lagte Hain
