DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF- DELETED- AN- PAGE 1- PLS READ - Page 8

Originally posted by: Apudeep

Wow,I am intrigued with kings and Queens and this background totally suits Sanskar. Your style of writing is different from what I've read in this forum. SO excited to read it. I have a request to you , can you write something on the settings just like " Wuthering Heights " was written. I love Bronte sister's works. I know that Sanskar is Heathcliff, in his own way. Best wishes 👍🏼.

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Nice update Shru. I started giggling at that description of Swara...a body spilling out😆😆 it describes her exuberance perfectly😆

In everyone century Sujju has to be 🤢 As crass as ever. So she is more of a mother here to Laksh thenWonder what nonsense this ma beta jodi will get into in the future🥱

I liked that you kept that scene from the show where SwaSan feel each other's presence😳 Wonder what news Sanskaar is waiting for

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

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Hey Shru dear...🤗 🤗

First off, loads of jhappis for that special mention in the intro. I was really very touched. I am always eager to lap up anything you write, and if that encouraged you to pen this piece in this different genre, then I'm so very glad you felt I had motivated you. 😊

I don't know if I have mentioned this before (I guess we did discuss this over scraps, when you were writing the despatches series), I am a HUGE fan of historical fiction and movies.

I have gorged on Sir Walter Scott's Ivanhoe, Quentin Durward; as well as Sir Howard Pyle's Men of Iron. In the Indian setting, I LOVE reading up on Indian History. My favorite non fiction (but narrated stupendously, bringing out all the derring do and chivalry; as well as the sordid plots and intrigue of the era): Is Abraham Eraly's Tha last Spring: The Lives and Times of the Great Mughals.

I also loved The Mountain of Light by Iradj Amini---detailing the tumultuous history of the emperors and dynasties who possessed the Koh I Noor diamond. A factual and lovely read.

Apart from these non fiction works, I guess there isn't too much really frontline Indian history fiction writing. Indu Sundaresan is the only author I can think of (Feast of Roses, The Twentieth Wife, Shadow Princess), but I am not too much of a fan, really, as she tends to get facts woefully wrong. I remember reading an edition where she'd mixed up the names of Akbar's Mother and his Chief wife!!!

Anyway, I digress...what I was trying to get at, is that there is a dearth of really wonderful Indian historical fiction writing, and I am so glad, that you have decided to try this genre for this SS. I am really looking forward to it.

Your descriptions for this prologue had the "Shru mark" which I always associate with your pieces. Your trademark intensity and attention to detail. I could really imagine the dank, forbidding darkness of the dungeon, sadistic Bagri actually deriving pleasure from the torture he's inflicting on Sanskaar. 😡 🤢

Torture is anyway abhorrent, but here, to make it worse, there was the definite feel that it wasn't just meant to be a deterrent to Sanskaar from his attempt to escape. Bagri wanted to inflict that pain, that lashing on him.

And Oh God, Sanskaar----the way you described the whipping being inflicted on him, I was actually involuntarily frowning and clasping my hands tightly in distress.

The line which stood out for me in this prologue, was your description of Sanskaar's blazing eyes, the windows to his defiant, magnificent soul. As you put it: " Eyes blazed like twin torches, pinpoints of silent rage and flaming abhorrence" 👏 👏.

He isn't really mad, is he? Is that an act put on by him? But then he wouldn't be showing so much defiance and attempts to escape isn't it? I get a sense its just a proforma excuse given by Rani Sahiba Annapurna Maheshwari, to engineer his release?

And again, our shared fascination for the sheer aura, regal bearing and depth of character of this lady comes to play. Saku, You & I have all delved into Annapurna's nature in various ways in our works, and its such a pleasure to see her persona here. Wonder why it took her so long to get him released though? 2 years or near unbearable torture, and 1 year before that, imprisoned while awaiting trial. I just loved the way she firmly asserted herself over Bagri...the way she says that her husband may be the King and the commander of the prisons, but he cannot be everywhere...in which time she can easily make Bagri disappear!! Wow, such menace!

Looking forward to Part 1 as soon as you are able to get some of the workload off your back. 😊

Originally posted by: Vaibhi.

One more amazing piece from you 👏

I can't say properly actually how much I liked the concept... I can't express it in words..

I am imagining the characters and it's so mind blowing..

You know magic, I must say this ..

Just beautiful...👏

Originally posted by: --Anna--

Reserved. You know why I am late 😆

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Shru,

What a wonderful first chapter again left me begging to read more! Please continue soon!

I am loving Annapurna's character and I find her so interesting. I like how she assesses situations and people before passing any judgement. She notices everything and there is something about her that I can't put my fingers on. She is smart and shrewd and I think I am going to love her character in this TS.

Hahaha! You have described Swara perfectly. Her exuberance and her liveliness is so well defined. But I do think that there is more to her than she lets on and I felt that in SwaSan cosmic interaction. Looking forward to understanding her character more!

Love the little SwaSan cosmic connection. Ofcourse, there is no surprise that the man is our Dark Knight, Sanskaar - who wants to play games with Lakshya and his fiancee. I loved how you showed him to be distracted by our little joyous Swara. Loved how they felt each others presence and how even though they could not see each other actually, they still caught on each other's presence. It was so beautiful! 😳

Cannot wait for another chapter!

Love

Anna

Originally posted by: bwvianna

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Wonderful chapter 1. Introduction of the Gadodias and a SwaSan moment! 😊 Loved your character portrayal and description.! I really liked how you have shown that Swara is everything that Sanskaar lost-innocence and happiness. Very well put.

Awaiting the next update. Please update soon :)

-V

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

interesting update

Janki is the part of the story, i am eager to read more about her and her role in the story.

The charcater of swara and ragini and their contrast with their birth mother was very well written.

Thanks for the Pm.

Update next chapter soon

Originally posted by: coolgal270

Shruti!!🤗

I LOVE it!! I seriously do!!

The way you have described the eye-lock..ooh! I felt goosebumps rising!! Absolutely marvellous.. I am still reeling from the impact..

Will reply in detail later!!

Just that it is one awesome update!! Thanks for the PM!!

Lots of love,Sumi!