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Originally posted by: chandanagimsy

Omg amazing...loved it can't wait to read more...

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Originally posted by: Meself

Firstly thank you Shruti, for that little mention before the smooth rolling of an amazing chapter. And what invoking start to tale that is all drenched in revenge, politics, love, betrayal and of course blood. Empires, big or small, they thrive on lie, deceit and secrets that are never to be kissed and told. We got an excellent glimpse of that bygone era. True the queen cannot command the kingdom at her will, but she surely commands the king! And Annapurna is cut from the very cloth that can make the formidable quiver. Ideal queens are those who love with pastel hues and reign with an iron fist, Rani Bai saa here is the ideal cutout of faint notion. No wonder the fortress is secure under her militant administration! I have to give you the credit for making me completely forget Sankaar, this update belonged to the formidable Annapurna Maheshwari.

Another interesting facet of this woman has to be her innate ability to assess things in their correct and pre-defined order. Sujata only noticed the fact that Shekhar married Shramistha, an outcast to their otherwise pristine and elite society, Annapurna saw Janki's intricate detailing of a well laid plan. It's not always that you come across such razor sharp brains. Another thing that bowled me over was a plain and direct evaluation of Shekhar Gadodia. She knows he is not capable enough, nor he has any military dash that would help the Maheshwari survive the political turmoil of the land but nonetheless she is bringing him under her wing as a potential collateral damage. One whose demise would cause no pain, and one who would provide them with a safety valve in the form of that docile Ragini. What calculated move Bai saa!

While this chapter establishes Janki as a formidable force who has taken Swara under her command, to me she really is nothing but a shadow. From what I can decode it is Shramistha who is greater force. The easiest way to make a hero out of someone is vilify the one in competition. I don't know why but Shramistha seems to be swearing by this golden rule. Ragini is too perfect, to a point that her perfection is nothing but a useless decor of the living room...Swara on the other hand as the spunk and if I may dare the fierceness of a queen who can invade any battle and force the enemy to retreat. Shramistha, to me, is that knife that slowly penetrates and then waits to slowly but steadily cut every vital organ in the body and then make it bleed from within. I have no idea how write I am here but the initial surfacing gave me the...I don't know...feels?

And of course Swara. I think its too early to make a comment on her, but I am guessing she has layers and layers in her persona. And it will unfold one by one causing enough ripples in the still water to turn it into a massive tide! And Sankaar already shares a cosmic connection with Swara? Interesting, very interesting! I am hungrily waiting for more, especially now when I know Sanskaar is planning to breach the security perimeters!

P.S. It is 19th century story, a time when alpha females such as Rani Lakshmibai, Maharani Jeejabai and Sharan Kaur existed. All brave, bold and deathly beautiful...Swara too belongs to this generation...so can we have a naive, bubbly but fierce blade wielding woman in her? I'd get my dose of adrenaline if I see her on a horse with a naked sword in hand!!

P.P.S. If its you Viji who is reading this, then I am sorry for not posting my comment on Dyut Parva. Its just that its based on an epic that I love with every fiber of my being and I want to put up a detailed comment! And Sakura I have just begun with Ice King and its going to take me a bit of time to reach you Frost Knight!

Originally posted by: Lavender_Love

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Shruti ...A brilliant update once again. I am not gonna go in details about your writing... because like always you have cast your magic spell on me and I was totally lost... 😳 Coming to the real content... So we are finally meeting The angels and demons of this story... loved the title... I am liking Annapurna ... she is an interesting character I am looking forward to see how and what her role will shape into.
Swara... lolz... you described her so perfectly... I can imagine her like that... spilling out of a carriage and looking and still laughing... told you you write so amazingly... 😉😉
Sanskaar... gihehehe... our devil boy want to stir trouble... amazing... looking forward to read how...😆😆 and poor guy... Right now he have only caught a glimpse and he is distracted... what will happen when they will meet... so looking forward to it...
Coming to my most favorite part of this update the cosmic connection...we have that in show too but you made it more impactful by your words and make it more amazing by further extending it to their eye lock... So first impressions have been made up by both... now I am looking forward for more...
Love you
Nitz...

SwaSan's first meeting, even if not face to face but with some distance...

Lovely introductory start this part 1 dear Shruti...so it was mainly to bring the Gadodias to the Maheshwaris...I like the way you have drawn a character sketch of each one of them...Sujata will be Sujata lol!!! Also the stark difference between both Swara and Ragini...wow so we have Janki alive in this one...she seems really nice in this in fact more than Sharmistha I feel

Sanskaar is celled up in his own house too?? He seems mentally okay by his thought processes but burning in some sort of revenge plan sply against his own brother!! Laksh apparently is going to fall head over heels with Swara right so will this sanskaar create a DEMON of an already serious Ragini???

Can't wait to see where this will go!

Thanks for the pm dear...love Tas

Hey Shruti

Shruti
chapter ~1 is very interesting.. 😊
you have involved both janki and sharmistha..
Annapurna's character is well defined
i love the way you have described the first meeting of swasan...
Waiting for the next one
love
simi 😊

chap 1 is brilliant. i liked it specially the way u introduced the characters n wat connection u showed between swasan in first meeting it was awesum. superb part n as always loved ur writing

I dozed off typing a comment last night :)