DARK KNIGHT- A SwaSan FF- DELETED- AN- PAGE 1- PLS READ - Page 48

Originally posted by: coolgal270

Shruti,

Finally I am here..so sorry for late response!! I Know, I am like the last person to respond to last 2 chapters..but couldnt really do it before! Sho shorry!!

Havent read the next chapter because I really wanna put down my emotions for the chapter 6 & 7 first...Then will read your next update! 😆

Ch 6:

Ragini is so clever...Has very slyly made Laksh doubt both Swara and Sanskar...Ohh! She is CleVer!! Loved how you mentioned she secretly wondered how HER painting will look in the hall! Totally conveys the Glory she is after!!

Arrgh! Now she is plain Evil! Throwing Swara in the path of danger.. Glad our hero saves her in time...fury menacing from his eyes..Loved how Swara, even in her drugged state, could make out the differencein the touch & 'feel" of 2 masked men..One trying to harm her..and the other as her savour!!

Poor Swara...evreyone doubting what her drugged mind clearly comprehended. I am glad, she still is sure though abt what she saw, even if there is no proof!

Oh! Ragini is too clever for her own good..She understands from the death of that soldier that there is more than meets the eye in respect to Why sanskar thwarted her plans.. Hmm...

Ch7:

Loved the difference you portrayed between Swara liking Sunlight and Rag more of a night person! How very apt!!👏

Ouch! Totally get why Sanskar would move away from the window and let her get hurt..and Also, why she would feel hurt in the first place.. One of those moments where both are right but in pain.

It is def kiind of hurting Sanskar to do this to her...

that line abt Ragini : The gradual transition between evening to the pitch black of night, had always appealed to her.. Whoa! I can read so much in this line...is this not where she is heading right now...from a person who has a festering hatred for swara in her heart, but has been just tolerating it for years & not doing anything about it coz she has to pretend to the world just how 'good' she is...to actually start working on it to ensure that wound is completely removed? She IS moving from 'evening' to 'night', Isn't she? I loved it Shru!! Absolutely marvellous!!👏

Oh How she traps Sanskar! That moment where both swaSan eyes are locked onto each other in absolute shock...Amazing!

How Swara thought that Sanskar is going to hurt Ragini and rag could be an innocent victim but got a shock of her life! Sigh..sweet, naive girl...feel bad for her..but also glad that ragini is unmasked in front of her now...

Swara is so going to doubt Sanskar and how he must be a traitor, but eventually, will see the light of the day!

Ragini, so IYF! Haa, the kind and just gentleman behind that ruthless facade couldnt harm Swara! He wont, he cant!

Ooh..he takes her with him...Oh How i love this..

you know Shruti, I am a die-hard fan of historical romance and this scene is giving me so many ideas...SO many...He is takin her on a horse!! OOH!!!! I love it..I love the horse-riding scenes in romance novels..makes my dil go Hmmm...😳 There could be so many err 'situations' with this scene..i would love if you write them!!😆

Ragini is surely going to proclaim she had doubt on Swara's char and that Swasan eloped!🤢

Oh WTH! I dont care... They are alone and Away from everyone's eyes .. a scenario I have been hoping for months to actually happen in our show!!

I love you for writing this FF shruti! Plus it is so brilliant, It is magic!!

Love, Sumi!

Originally posted by: piccola1

Brilliant, Shruti ! 👏

I realized that I had been holding my breatg all thru Chapter 7, only when it finished ..what a stunner this was !

Res for now - Couldnt but rush to share my delight with it. But will wait to use my laptop for a "real" reply...

Originally posted by: Meself

Chapter 5

Okay Shruti I have to tell you this, as much as I love your scribbles I love the title to your fictions as well! Seemingly they hint at all sort of danger that might be lurking around the corner itself and that my sweets is a treat in itself! So the chapter is all about the role reversal that happened between two sisters who until a short while ago were standing at two polar ends of the spectrum. Swara has taken up the role of a docile yet strong protector while Ragini is bursting with bubbles of pure joy or so it seems...

Since adversity has befallen in the strangest of circumstances ever, in strange manners the true colors are spinning out. Swara was always the deep one, made up of steely spine and a nave heart...which I believe is both her strength and her undoing. On the other hand you have Ragini who is shallow to an extent that you might be able to see through the very fabric of hers but she hides it well with an innocent face and forced demeanor. It's only now that they true selves are being slashed and brought out in the open!

Sujata's assessment of the situation was very apt in this update. I remember in the series it was shown as though Swara belonged to an alien species for the kind of uproar that followed was beyond me. At least in here there is a more subtle acceptance of all the events that have begun unfolding themselves. So Ragini had seen the true colors of this Prince and he was forced into making her an ally...things are taking a sharp escalation and we all know that it is going to end in a messy situation where the innocent would be questioned and the culprit would be saved.

There were two things that really struck me hard. One Sanskaar was somewhere very sure that Ragini isn't all she seems to be. He made her an ally yes but there were a few cards he had been holding close...way too close for anyone's liking, maybe he knows the Medusa that hides beneath this sylph like silhouette! And of course Ragini...unlike the series, she is an intelligent nemesis here! Oh! The more I talk about her the more I feel agitated for this could be one character that could have been iconic but no, poor script and even poor performance have really let it all down! Anyways I love the way you've left subtle hints about what is to come and what more can we all expect from this drama.

I am sorry for this short comment but as much as I want to I am unable to pour in more! All of a sudden there loads of works that have come over my head and I am scattered trying to pull myself into action! It is going to take a bit more of time before I can be here like old times! Until then Shruti, loads of love!

Originally posted by: ll_megha_ll

Omg didu...

Love you...love you...Love you...love you...Love you...love you...Love you...love you...Love you...love you...

Love you...love you...Love you...love you...

Love you so much didu...

Finally aapne meri.baath maanke ek ff shuru kiya...

You are awesome...

Wonderful...

Mind blowing...

Uff main.to speechless hoon...

What a beautiful parts...

Loved it...

Continue soon...

Thanks for the pm

Sorry main individuals parts main comment nahi kar paayi...

Because zayada commnets abhi ni kr paa ri...

Abhi fully recovered nahi.hui hoo...

Haddi to judh gayi but abhi haat.main strength nahi aayi...doct ne kaha time lagega...

At least 3-4 months

Originally posted by: butteru

hey Shuru .. 🤗

finally i'm here .. i read the intro n 1st part of ur FF .. seriously loved it Raja maharaja type story uff 😳 n my Sawsan in 18th century tht something new totally hatke .. loved the concept you know i'm a big fan of historic fictions n yes yes yes my fav Suju is also thr 😆 some people never change

The prologue is amazing .. i'm really impressed by ur writing skills tooo good👏 .. like the way u introduced the characters .. specially Janki she is alive in this wowww

I really wanna knw wht happnd to my cutey Sanky why he is in tht cage type room aur us k liaye mujeh agey parhna hoga .. ill try to read other parts soon 😳

love u

xoxo