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Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

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Shru...go to sleep!! It's 2.30 in the morning there!! 😆

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Hey Shru my dear...🤗 🤗

Sorry it took me a while to Un-res, I had some commitments to kiddo to attend to yesterday 😊 Children's park and play area. Had a blast! 😉

Coming to chapter 7, as I mentioned in my brief comment yesterday, I just loved it, my dear. Like I said, while all the preceding 6 chapters were lovely in the sense of adapting the serial plotline, with your customary research, hard work and the "Shru trademark" intensity 😉, this one re invented the plotline altogether, to a large degree. Fascinating! You know how much I love historical plots, with M M Kaye being one of my favorite authors. So this one really was a lip smacking treat for me.

Aside from the plot progression itself, I liked the metaphors you wove into the narrative. Swara's attachment to water, struck a chord within me as I am a water element zodiac sign myself 😉, and had conceived Swara as a water sign, in my Elements series. I agree with you completely, it certainly does depict her character very well, her capability of clear as well as deep thought, her adaptability and gentle fluidity, her giving nature. But there is that other side of water as well---the one we get to see when the river rushes in enraged spate, sweeping all before it. Wonder if you will show us this side of Swara as well? 😊

I would love to see this, Shru. If you have scope in your tale for a tempestuous, raging Swara contemptuously sweeping aside those who attempt to exploit and bind her, or the persons she loves...please do so. 😊

I loved your subtle but marked delineation of the differences between Swara's and Ragini's essential natures, too. Swara loves the sunshine--warm, bright, clear and transparent. Ragini, on the other hand, loves the twilight---the bright glare of day giving way to the subdued, shadowy hues of twilight! Lovely, so lovely. I agree with you completely here, Ragini's pressures of always having to conduct herself within the constraints of expected mores, of "perfect" behavior demanded of a princess, must have been stifling for her. And finally, all that proved too much to contain within herself, especially with her violently bubbling jealousy and intense emotions behind that facade of docility and meekness! I just loved this portrayal, I had explored in my way, the pitfalls of Ragini's cossetted, orthodox upbringing always demanding perfection from her; and I loved to read your take.

The chapter itself moved at a very taut and brisk pace. Sanskaar's emotions of disappointment and confusion about his own reactions to Swara's smiling greeting at the beginning. 😳 His defenses are crumbling, slightly at first, but steadily, nevertheless. He may convince himself all he likes, that he just wants to stay away to prevent suspicion from falling on her after he leaves, but it goes much deeper, and he is introspective enough to know it, as well! 😊

Ragini was just so conniving and sly here. As I'd expected, she doesn't just want to satisfy herself with having, in all likelihood, swayed Lakshya away from Swara, having planted considerable doubts in his fickle mind. She wants to just pluck out Swara, whom she deems a veritable thorn in her flesh, and fling her away! That whole facade of playing the loving, accepting sister has chafed at her inherent jealous, insecure, possessive nature for much too long.

My God, she actually engineered Swara to go in her stead to Sanskaar's apartments, to catch Sanskaar unaware when he was no longer pretending to be insane, and force him to silence her! What a cunning, evil genius this person is: she wants to use him as a cat's paw, to eliminate her own half sister, and is actually disappointed when he does not follow through.

The entire stretch of SwaSan's shocked reactions to each other was superb. And try as he might, Sanskaar felt tremendously pained by her obvious disgust of him, when she thought he was no better than a traitor, didn't he. 😉 Like I said before, his defenses are still very much up, but they're crumbling fast!

So he uses her as a hostage (Swara could never have realized, but I'm perfectly sure, that had she raised an alarm, he would never really have harmed her. He just couldn't!), to retrieve the part of the map, and some other package, from Shekar's apartments. Wonder what was in the other bag? BTW I'm sure he had planned the rebellion/ insurrection by his loyal friend Pawan Kumar, on precisely this night, so the number of guards would be less. Smart man, our Prince Sanskaar! 😊 (Or should I say, Princess Swara's Prince Sanskaar? 😛) What was great here also, was how quickly he worked out Ragini's machiavellian masterstroke. He realized that even if he had merely trussed up Swara securely, bound and gagged, Ragini would have consigned her to death and laid the blame on his door. He was compelled, really, to take Swara as hostage, to protect her, even more than himself!! I am so gleeful, still, that I predicted this before. 😆 😉

And then came the truly heartbreaking part of the update. Swara, so concerned about Ragini's safety, begging Sanskaar not to harm her, but realizing with a chill of almost incomprehensible dread, that her sister was the one who planned to have her killed! She was so pained, so shattered by this, Swara couldn't even react, could she. She just went into a shocked, almost uncomprehending state. And Ragini herself, far from showing even a modicum of shame or remorse, looked positively irritated that Sanskaar hadn't done away with Swara as she'd hoped. She had the temerity to shoot a look of pure hatred and loathing at Swara, her cherubic mask slipping at last!

I loved the way Sanskaar confronted Ragini here. Princess Nagini and Princess Snake! 😆 Nice and very apt descriptions! And I liked the way Ragini's smug and sly smile faltered in the face of Sanskaar's granite faced expression and menacing grin. She knows she's gained herself a formidable foe.

So now Sanskaar has taken Swara with him, I'm sure they have considerable mistrust and confused emotions between them to tackle. But couple of things I'm very glad for. One, she's realized he was the masked person who rescued her from that vile man who was trying to molest her, so she knows he felt genuine concern and anxiety on her behalf. And second, she knows that he has rescued her again from the certain death her sister had planned for her. That might at least soften her antipathy a bit, though not fully. 😛 Let's see how long it lasts, and how long Sanskaar keeps convincing himself that she doesn't affect him too much. 😉

Shru---I have a distinct feeling Kavita is alive...and you will bring her back just when SwaSan seem to be resolving some of their MU. 😭 I hope that I'm as wrong in this prediction, as I was right about the hostage bit, and Ragini's motive bit. 😉 And I wonder who saw the whole SwaSan ---Ragini interaction from that distant wing of the palace? Annapurna? She seems to have some genuine affection for Swara. Is this the same person Sanskaar spoke of earlier to Ragini; who could ensure that Ragini took Swara's place as Lakshya's bride?

Love you for making my weekend special with this chapter. Now please, please squeeze in time for Chapter 8 and give it to us the soonest you possibly can. 🤗

Originally posted by: Sakkiyah

Awesome update. Really loved it.

In the update I really loved the swasan parts. It was a real surprise for me. Sanskar was waiting for ragini and she sent swara to sanskar's chamber.

Ragini is a naagin. Sanskar called her right name.

But swara was really surprised by this new sanskar. But she believed that he can't harm some one.

Ragini, only want swara's death. She doesn't deserve a sister like swara, who always wanted to protect her from all the evil.

It was really a sad moment when swara wanted to save her sister from death. For that she was ready to sacrifice her life.

Sanskar saved swara's life.

Waiting for your next update

Originally posted by: a_uma

totally loved both chapters 6 and 7... 👏👏👏.. Your FF is enthralling me more than the ongoing serial on TV.. its far better to get lost in your beautiful words .. than seeing weird incidents and maasi's antics.. and thats the absolute truth.. 😳😆

Surprising twist... Swara came to know about Sankar's truth.. she was bound to sooner or later... but the way she learnt it suddenly was stunning for her... wonder what she will think of Sanskar now..😲but I am more eager to know about the secret convo between Sanskar and Ragini, just before he left on his mission..

evil Ragini has added her own twist to Sanskar's mission.. kill Swara / leave her to be killed, or take her alongwith him.. of course he choose the latter course.. can't wait to see what happens next. ..

Originally posted by: sneharay

Superb updates..👏

Originally posted by: foresight

res for 6 and 7

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chapter 6

I liked how you have portrayed the Ragini's plan and more importantly subtly shown how Ragini always had the mask on of what she is vs what she portrays. While she drugged swara, that was never the major plot. she knew that someone like Laksh would be more impacted if he believed swara was of loose moral character and prove to dalliance with other men. that would more likely make him call quits on the relationship and she played it in her own style in vague hints pushing him to draw the picture she wanted him to.

but fate can have different plan in mind. she bribed one of the guards ...i feel in a way showing her lack of planing at the same level as her soon to be adversary Sanskar. Her plans clashed with Sanskar's and that second part was a beauty. Ragini played her game, had all the pawns put in the right place, but then sanskar stepped in, with his concern over swara pushing his initial plans to the side. he couldnt see her being mistreated, he took care of the guard and then took care of swara so gently and with so much care. and swara felt it even in her drowsy state. what beautiful connection.

loved the last interaction with sanskar and ragini. she is out there trying to play games. he may not always see through her sinister plans initially, may be because of what he saw her as, but he still can exert his power. she sometimes forgets who he really is ...being a bit overconfident in her own plans and plotting. she gets small wins, before she is made to really who is really the boss

chapter 7

wow! what a twist. ragini tries to force sanskar's hand based on what he told her. and sanskar realises it the moment swara walks in. he realises what ragini has in store for swara and the extent to which she is willing to go. ragini underestimated the ability of sanskar to strategise, plan and think on his feet. he has been trained for this all his life, i don't think even her sinister mindset can stand tp make much impact.

what i liked in this one is again how you have shown the difference between the two princesses, both in terms of their water scene as well as their love of day and twilight. ragini's mask is further unveiled here and how beautifully. that is the real situation isn't it, she is not someone who is like the queen or thinks like one. she pretends to behave like one to not let anyone what she truly is and to reach her aspirations. swara on the other hand, despite her free spirited avatar is actually the true queen at heart...and then how could she be with the flippant and brattish prince who is never capable of being the king instead of the knight who was always destined to be.

i loved how you had sanskar turn the tables on ragini in the end. and even beautifully how you unveiled the reality of ragini with swara. through her own words and actions and look rather than anything sanskar said. swara would have never believed it unless she saw the harsh reality herself.

ragini has now raised the alarm. she is going to let everyone know for sure that sanskar wasnt mad and swara knew and they were having affair and in it together. i am so sure...and that is why they were spending time together. both branded as traitors now. laksh in his anger will marry ragini. the question is will AP, who sees herself closer to sanskar, trust him to be the traitor.

and even bigger question, who was the person who saw them and ragini. i don't think they will reveal it just yet, but i wonderful, may be wrongly if it is janaki. or is it a completely new character? will that person try to help them regularly in gaining entrance into the palace to investigate the truth and find the sword...or worse could this be the person who plotted against sanskar in the first place and will not have ragini as a unwitting ally, should they need her.

you are a wonderful writer and you have a way of conveying so many nuances subtly through your words. had fun reading both parts.

Originally posted by: Meself

Chapter 4

So the most dreaded aspect of the story finally makes an appearance! This undoubtedly was the phase that forced every character to come into light. This light had forced everyone to shed their masks and be true to their soul calling. Lakshya in his fickleness set things to go about a chain reaction and it lead to righteous destination though after having crossed a disastrous and catastrophic turn. I remember once in our literature class my teacher had been discussing about character traits and he had said a very hard hitting truth that remains with me. A person can only be as dark as they have always been. Ragini was always this bad, pretending to be good while coiling with unquenched hatred in her. Sanskaar's plan and its execution only forced her to come to light showing the true material that is made of and of course it also showed the reservoir of strength and perseverance that Swara held within herself away from scrutinizing gazes of everyone. I loved, loved the transition that you have brought about in the key players as of now.

So Lakshya rants that he wishes to marry Swara and not Ragini and hell seems to break loose. As expected Rana Durga Prasad Maheswari is too taken by this docile yet strong Swara and wouldn't want to let her go. Barring Annapurna( which was predictable) everyone is rooting for a relationship that is but forbidden for she seems to belong to someone else that we readers are so aware of! *flips her hair* I am fabulous or what!!!

The unfolding of the later actions did not surprise me much but what did shock me was Annapurna chiding Rana Maheshwari. What was that veiled reference to women being the weakness of Maheshwari men? Was she talking about Sanskaar or big daddy Maheswari himself?? God you need to let this cat out of the bag soon!! So Annapurna sends for the Saamant's and like an ancient prophecy hell is slowly taking over the seemingly spring land. And Ragini today shows her true face, the one that was hidden from the world over. Why is she so full of venom is what I cannot understand? There are people who are indeed better than we can ever be, Swara is a personification of all things of the same order...why is it so difficult for her to actually agree to this fact?? So Janaki sets things right by cajoling Swara into a nuptial that she hates to begin with...hmm...and no one raises an alarm here...interesting again!

The ending note of the story where Janaki explains the curse of being a royal queen was something that really pulled me out of whatever hazy breeze I was caught in. Why am I still doubting Shramishtha is beyond me but I cannot see her as a all so noble soul here. Shramishtha didn't really protest the way a soul mother would. She grudgingly but gladly accepted the unfair treatment meted out to her soul child...I don't know Shruti but this doesn't really feel right. And that ending where you compare Janaki with Draupadi and Shramishtha with Subhadra...I am sorry I see more of Uloopi and Chitrangada here. Draupadi was Arjun's love and life while Uloopi and Chitrangada had to fight it out and finally accept each other not so happily. This equation is molding itself in the same manner. I am still holding my cards for Shramishtha. She has a dark streak hidden somewhere I tell you!

And Sanskaar is a massive player here...even though he might not govern the rules of the game at this moment, victory is his for he knows how to let the pawns make their move. He feeling sorry for a collateral damage but he is pushing that counter check to the funeral pyre nonetheless. All I can say is: GAME ON!!!

P.S. Wait for me to come up with 5,6 and 7!! Come on Shivi!!! You can do this!!!!

Originally posted by: mystery75

ohhh god what ashocker this is???????

cant think of any words to describe this chapter

ragini is sooo cunning and evil... cant deny this that i just adore this evil layered PRINCESS NAGINI

ahh the traitor prince sanskar... i so so want him his mind his instincts his threats his reflexes everything the unknowing concern protectiveness the goodness... cant get enough of this warrior

yayyy... he made his mermaid princess his hostage 🤗

two scenes i just love in this chapter were one: the scene in the start where sanskar control the situation by making swara do what he wants and... i could perfectly imagine all of it happening in my mind clarely👍🏼

two: the confrontation b/w sanskar and ragini in front of swara in the end their dialogues the whole setup and even though swara didint have any dialogue still can imagine her each and every expression her confusion and shock of her life that she is seeing in front of her eyes Swara's head was darting between them both. Shock held her immobile and she was trying to make sense of what she was hearing.👏

awesome chapter cant w8 for the next😛

Originally posted by: Sanya17

omg wht jst hpnd u r right this ws a shck fr me i didnt expected this i thought sanskar will be out fr his work fr sm day ragini wd be instigating every1 against swara n sanskar will return whn ragini will try to kill swara bt princess nagini as sanskar calls her 🤣 is too sharp she plnd to kill swara using sanskar
bt sanskar took her with him i thot sanskar will go fr a shrt tym n gonna return soon didnt expctd tht he will tak her with him bt i jst realized its impact swara with sanskar away means we wont hv to tolerate swalak n swara will be away n prtctd frm her dear sis nagini at d sm tym sanskar mission too gt sv n along with all of tht a lot of dreamy swasan scenes a big hug to u fr this wndrful twist n sparing us frm swalak sanskars one mv of tkng swara wid him slvd mny prblms
whtever hpnd hd md swara cnfused bt i think the rlztn tht sanskar svd her tht day n sanskar raginis cnfrntn hd made her realise tht there is more to wht meets the eye
prt 7 its truly amazing hats off to u 👏