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RAONE8

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Posted: 9 years ago

#211

Awesome story👏

read all parts in 1 go

n it has bcome one of my favorites

really liked ur set up of old times, of prince n princesses n big mysteries!!!!!

u have described d 4 leads well

really loved d singing scene as well as d fountain scene

i love d bond swasan share here

i feel laksh is innocent...well waiting for d mystry to unfold

cont sooon

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Sanya17

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Posted: 9 years ago

#212

I lvd lvd lvd it so much the witty yet protective sanskar revengeful yet nvr crossing d line wants to tk revenge fr all d pains he hd suffered yet cudnt hurt an innocent I lvd that sanskar sooo much n swara d sweet innocent good soul at the sm tym intelligent, nt ignorant of what is happening around her I lvd this swara sooo mch l WS seeing all these happening while readin l felt really bad when rd d flashback Sanskar hd sfrd so much continue soon

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--Anna--

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Posted: 9 years ago

#213

Shru 🤗

I did not realise that I had missed Chapter 2 as I went through the TS. 😲😲 Where am I lost these days? 😆

I loved how you have played the Sanskaar Ragini interaction in Chapter 2. Him calling her Dulhan Dost is so adorable - just like the dupatte waali dost. 😉 Annapurna clearly is very happy that Ragini and Sanskaar have built a rapport.

Loved - absolutely loved the Swara Sanskaar dynamic in chapter 2 as well. I like how they both react to each other oddily though I am quite sure Sanskaar was taken aback by Swara. Sanskaar trying to avoid Swara was the cutest thing! 😆 Absolutely loved how you are showing Sanskaar affected by Swara right from the start. He seems to be feeling things that he should not and I wonder how this is going to play out. The musical evening was beautifully described and such a pleasure to read the effect of Swara's music. 👏👏👏

Again Laksh has been perfectly described - but seriously reading him as 'Prince' Laksh had me laughing so hard! 😆 I was suddenly reminded of Laksh in the serial and I could not see him as a prince. But Prince Sanskaar can be SO very dreamy! 😳 Though, Ragini and Swara both are so fit to be the princesses. 😳

I ABSOLUTELY LOVED Chapter 4! Absolutely loved it! I dont think I have words to describe how beautifully and well carved out Chapter 4 really is. Right from the beginning when Kavita and Sanskaar interact and when the whole uproar over the map and the key happens and the reason why Sanskaar was sent to the dungeons under Bagri - beautiful! 👏 Though, if I am to guess, Kavita is still alive too right? Why would Kavita talk to Lakshya and Sanskaar not? This had me thinking - so just asking.

Also loved the scene between Swara Sanskaar Laksh and Ragini. You have managed to capture Ragini's emotions very well. 👏👏 The hidden coldness and hatred that Ragini has for Swara is so apparent and I can feel the chills. The flower scene was a small part of the story but it really tells a lot about Ragini and Swara so I absolutely loved it! Sanskaar's madness is absolutely adorable! Even though he is rude, he is focussed and I like that in a man. 😈 Sanskaar is definitely feeling a lot more for Swara now and even though I feel that he knows what his game plan is - he is going to be hurt in the process too. Swara and Sanskaar's underlying chemistry is the most thrilling part of this chapter. Swara's liveliness and the way she lives life is so well described. 👏👏 I understand why both the guys would want to be with a girl like her. 😉

I absolutely love this mad Sanskaar. He is harsh, he is rude, and yet he has a side to him that I cant wait to read more about. The chaos has just begun and we are ready for it! 😈

Absolutely loved it Shru! Do continue Soon!

Love

Anna

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#214

Friends, I have just posted Chapter 4 as the week may be manic and I may struggle to update much! I will make up for it by the time Friday arrives but hope the present update helps until then.

RAONE8, Sanya and Anna- thank you so much for the kind comments! I want to reply properly so as I am absolutely drained now and likely to talk more nonsense than usual 😆 please bear with me until tomorrow and I will respond in my lunch break from work if not before!

Thanks all and look forward to the feedback like always!

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bones123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#215

Super stuff...so well written !! It's an amazing read.

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#216

Originally posted by: bones123
Super stuff...so well written !! It's an amazing read.

Hello dear! Thanks so much for this! I hope you will keep reading, have just posted a new chapter:)

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bones123

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Posted: 9 years ago

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Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11

Hello dear! Thanks so much for this! I hope you will keep reading, have just posted a new chapter:)

On it now !!

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SIMI

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Posted: 9 years ago

#218

Chapter -4
Shruti..
Hmmm its quite similar to original track..
But i like the bonding between janki and sumi
then i like this swara who does not want to be with the prince laksh
sanskar will use ragini as his pawn to hurt laksh by hurting swara...
But a part of him is attracted to swara...
I think we will get that twist in next part
update soon

love,
Simi 😊

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#219

Originally posted by: RAONE8
Awesome story👏
read all parts in 1 go
n it has bcome one of my favorites
really liked ur set up of old times, of prince n princesses n big mysteries!!!!!
u have described d 4 leads well
really loved d singing scene as well as d fountain scene
i love d bond swasan share here
i feel laksh is innocent...well waiting for d mystry to unfold

cont sooon

Hi dear! Thank you so much for this! Wow- it's one of your favourites already? That pleases me no end! So happy to read your take and ah- you don't think Lakshya did the dark deeds Sanskaar is framed for? Well, you shall soon see:)! Hope you will read Chapter 4 I just posted and let me know! Best wishes,

Btw: please remind me of your name? 😳

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tootiefrootie11

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Posted: 9 years ago

#220

Originally posted by: Sanya17
I lvd lvd lvd it so much the witty yet protective sanskar revengeful yet nvr crossing d line wants to tk revenge fr all d pains he hd suffered yet cudnt hurt an innocent I lvd that sanskar sooo much n swara d sweet innocent good soul at the sm tym intelligent, nt ignorant of what is happening around her I lvd this swara sooo mch l WS seeing all these happening while readin l felt really bad when rd d flashback Sanskar hd sfrd so much continue soon

Hey Sanya! Thank you so much dear for liking this so much, you made me feel so happy. You are very right about the turmoil Sanskaar is in, his revenge warring with his underlying principles that are part of him, even if he pretends not. I have just posted Part 4 and more chapters will follow soon:)

Best wishes,

Shru x

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