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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: KawalArora

Hi Shruti it was as usual ur best work n u r my fav no 1 n thanks for pm and coming to story update it did so much in terms of secret what happened to prince sanskar n also how Ragini is jealous n again u showed cosmic connection between swasan overall a very nice update


Hi Kawal! Thanks so much like always- am humbled to be your best from a bunch of very talented writers on this forum, and very touched too as your far more generous to my efforts than I am myself:). I was aiming to cover a fair bit so glad you felt it did. More will follow soon xoxo
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Sakkiyah

Awesome update my friend. You unfold the mystery behind sanskar's behavior. The cosmic connection between swasan was awesome. Ragini's jealousy was clearly visible today. Waiting for your next update



Thank you so much for this sweetie, happy to read you enjoyed it and I'll deliver the next instalment as soon as possible X
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Will UnRes once I read it.

I am so so so so so Sorry Shru. 😭😭😭
Though I saw all your PMs, I couldn't read it dear. Just got away with Exams and now, This SwaSan Fever has stuck me. I am only imagining SwaSan everywhere. Couldn't bring up my mind to do anything. I am CRAZY. Right? I know. 🥱

And you already finished 3 parts. 👏
I have to read it all in one go.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: lucky.m

<font size="2">awesome update shruthi👏👏
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<font size="2">So Sanskaar's past revealed..lost his love, Map and labelled as traitor ..sad 😕.. Wonder who was real culprit..</font>

<font size="2">Sanskaar struggling with his conflicting emotions towards Swara ..amazingly penned down ..You have perfectly captured the essence behind each character as they are in SR their portrayal in this series👏👍🏼</font>

<font size="2">Looking forward for next update😊

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Hello dear! Thank you very much indeed for your kind words about this part, am so pleased it appealed to you. As the real traitor- I will soon move the veil from that in stages but it's such an involved puzzle it might never fully unravel till the end:). So thrilled you like the SwaSan developing pull! I'll start on the next chapter later today and as soon as done will post it, perhaps it will slip to the week:). Oh and pls can you tell me your name so I can acknowledge you properly? Apologies if you've told me and I've forgotten! Best wishes
S
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: maaneetfan

Sorry Shruti for neglecting to comment on chapter 2 and u posted part 3 too!

Reserving this for now...will post my comments on both in a short while

Love Tas



Please don't stress at all Tas dear! Take you time, much more to come still anyway! Lots of love for this X
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Posted: 9 years ago
Wonderful Update Shru 🤗... I am really grateful to you that you are giving us such an amazing gift in the
form of a beautifully written story...
Sanskar character , his past ..his behavior ..everything is so interesting and Your writing made it easy to imagine ...
Ragini's jealousy is visible now ...
Swasan connection is also there which made the story just outstanding ...
Thank you for PM Shru...
Will wait for the next part
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Pinkylibbi

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I am so so so so so Sorry Shru. 😭😭😭
Though I saw all your PMs, I couldn't read it dear. Just got away with Exams and now, This SwaSan Fever has stuck me. I am only imagining SwaSan everywhere. Couldn't bring up my mind to do anything. I am CRAZY. Right? I know. 🥱

And you already finished 3 parts. 👏
I have to read it all in one go.


Hey Swathi! How are you? I hope your exams went well? Best wishes for that! Oh please don't worry dear, whenever you comment it will be much awaited and appreciated. Hope it doesn't disappoint! Speak to you soon xx
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Shru! 🤗
I just finished reading the last two parts and this is getting more intriguing by the day...
Coming to part 2 first, I loved how you described Ragini, I could totally imagine her with all that grace and elegance. And the way you brought out the difference between Swara and Ragini's personalities through their music 👏. Oh and I was quite intrigued with the pattern the 4 of them have fallen into, Swara and Ragini - Ragini and Sanskaar - Laksh and Swara and Then our prince and princess 😳 Prince Sanskaar, that sounds SO GOOD 😳!
And has it already been a year since Annapurna rescued Sanskaar from prison? 😲 How long have the Gadodias been with the Maheshwaris then? 😲
And now to chapter 3, So finally we know what happened to Sanskaar and Kavita! Oh god I do feel a twinge of pity at Kavita's fate but I can't bring myself to think what would have happened had Sanksaar drunk from the intended goblet 😕. And it's too early to say if it is Laksh or no, I have this feeling it wasn't him.
And needless to say I loved the whole garden scene! And when you mentioned the sprinklers, I knew what Sanskaar would do and he did just that 😳😆 And it was really easy to imagine THIS side of Sanskaar, the mad and childish one, all thanks to the discussion Anna, Lanny and me had on the group last night 😆😆! That Sanskaar is SO CUTE and I could so see him jumping and showing the exuberance of a little kid. 😳
And Swara, what do I say about this girl! You've captured her and her liveliness brilliantly in this part 👏 So she runs and stands in the water's path again, why am I not surprised? 😆 And ew Laksh is affected by this sight Swara 🥱. But the surprising thing is Sanskaar is too. 😉😳 And he has the urge to shield her from the lusty gaze of a certain other. 😉😳 The cracks in the walls Sanskaar has built around him seems quite evident to me. And our boy has NO idea that the chaos he is talking about has already begun and he is right at the center of it! 😉
And Ragini, she's one confusing and mysterious girl. As they say, the overtly quite and coy ones are usually the first to turn into the backstabbing ones. And this holds very true in Ragini's case.
I'm so intrigued by this chapter, eagerly want to see what Sanskaar has in store for Swara. Can't wait for the part when they have their first proper interaction and the scenes after that 😉
And as always, I could very well see the whole scene play out like a movie before my eyes and I loved what I saw!
Update soon Shru! Waiting! 😳

Lots of Love,
Yukthi.
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: The.Lannister

Chapter 3:

New chapter! Yayy!!

That title😳 I guess it is not just for the cracks that are beginning to appear in RagYa relationship but also for the breaking down of the barriers Sanskaar has carefully constructed around himself.

Kavita & Sanskaar's relationship here begs the question which is most usual in such cases: What does he see in her? 😆 She appears too very shallow & his affections, I won't call it love, seem superficial as well, since throughout that conversation he appears preoccupied with the map, key & enemies. Also, after four years it looks like it is the loss of his credibility that has affected him more than losing Kavita in that manner. Also, Kaveri's story: why will a person from Sanskaar's kingdom tell her something about their Prince when the success of the elopement can bring more shame to the Prince & his family & thus be of advantage to the enemy

Oh I could just see Swara's face when he threw those flowers He can be a real jerk at times, but the guy is focused 😛

You might have checked our convo on WA. Yesterday Anna, Yukti & me were drooling over a mad sunny from the past episodes. So imagine my delight in reading this scene where he turns on the fountains & is dancing about 🤣 It was so easy to imagine Varun doing this 🤣 And then in his usual observant ways he studies the effect Swara is having on Laksh, Ragini... & lastly on himself too😳 That urge to bundle her up in a blanket away from lustful eyes😳😳

That line about chaos reminds me of Baelish & Sanskaar sure seems to channel some of the man's cunning. "Chaos isnt a pit, its a ladder." 😈 & the chaos has begun 😈

Waiting for the next chapter!


Shruti my love 🤗

Firstly I want to give you extra special hugs for the title comment!!! You are so attuned with me to this story that when I read that I was grinning ear to ear! Absolutely spot on and no one else has really picked up on that so far although many may have of course registered the reference. Fractured is on many levels and Sanskaar's cracks are significant as it remains to now be seen when the walls will come tumbling down and I sort of don't know myself either!

Hmm- Kavita- it was what I have previously written about Sanskaar and Kavita by allusion in FFs- a love from a young lad's perspective, who no matter how brilliant a statesman or solider, would have still been beset by the usual feeling that age inspires in the romance department I guess. And in that setting, I thought Kavita fit- she was brought up to be seductive and also she herself is very young and enamoured of the dashing Prince. Truth be told, it must be the show's fault as I had originally envisaged a more mature and shyer Kavita but that didn't fit for me and perhaps it's because the Kavita on the show so irritated and annoyed me as you know. For Sanskaar yes the loss of his honour was the main underlying feel there but he doesn;t know that. In his head he's lost the love of his life- when something gets snatched like that from you, you glamorise it I think and view it with rose tinted glasses. Time and circumstances have not tested their love so in his head she is sacrosanct and more so as his code of honour is so extreme that he feels that she died because of him and he failed there. Kaveri- her saying what she did made Sankaar consolidate his belief that it was Lakshya as like you say who else would it be as the alternative would have caused more shame so he is sure that Lakshya did that and at the same time prevented the elopement. Also, there is something of note in the dialogues by Kavita which refers to some further hidden facet concerning her and Lakshya 😉.

Ahhh yes Sanskaar can be harsh but we like that don't we? And here its a harshness that rebounds on the boy! I loved the and Sanskaar phase too- was hooked by VK in that time and only watched occasionally for him. I had seen part of the convo and it made me grin like mad to realise that you would later be reading this chapter with the madness played up so much so am super pleased you liked those antics. Also pleased the whole SwaSan interaction there came out like how I so wanted it to with Sanskaar's turmoil about Swara becoming more and more apparent.

Big hi5 for our beloved GoT reference! Ah Petyr Baelish- never directly thought of that in connection with Sanskaar but yes the quote especially is perfection! Mmmwah. I see a lot of Jaimie and Tyrion combination in Sankaar myself, we have discussed the Lannister traits we so like applicable there and I find him the best mix of those two:)

I still haven't started on Chap 4 despite best intentions so will make sure I do tonight:)

Lots of love and thanks too mmmwwah

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