SwaSan OS 'Earth'

First Previous

Page

Next Last

Frequent Posters

vaishnavi77

@vaishnavi77

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#81

I have been a silent member enjoying the stories out here. But, some stories are such that it would compel one to compliment to just let know how impact-full it has been! This is one such and i couldn't resist commenting.😛

This is one of the best pieces i have read so far, literally and figuratively😃👍🏼. The essence of how we humans are indeed a blend of the 5 elements albeit each of us having one of it a little more. In pursuit of understanding the chaos within us, we humans as naive as ever forget what we are!

The detailing to characters and why they are so. Being who they are, unapologetic ally! 👏
Maybe u should write for Air/Wind and Space/Sky as well - together on Swasan and their life! (i know it's a finite series and this u have posted, to be the last one. Yet, i cannot stop from wishing more)

The last few lines on how Earth and Water being so different characteristically find purpose when come together. The lines on their symbiosis⭐️ and the entire conclusion just just stole the words of me! Beautiful and thank you for giving such a good series to read.

P.S - just read that u are working on Sky!!! Hopefully, Air would gush in soon as well. I am sure the wind will favour you 😊

Edited by vaishnavi77 - 9 years ago

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: rithika2012
hi dear.. thanks for the pm..
i read all ur parts of water fire and now this earth..
i just all those.
i really love the way u write. love it totally
to say about this i just love how swara and sanskaar were strong and didnot fall for any attempt.
we can never see such strong characters in the shows because of the over dramatisation and for trps. happy that we got to read it here.
please keep writing more on swasan and do pm me.

Thank you so much Rithika. 😊 Very glad you liked the portrayal of the characters. BTW I just came across your OS. Am reading that, and will comment on your thread.

Quote

Looks like you are new here. Register for free, learn and contribute.

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#83

Originally posted by: vaishnavi77
This is one of the best pieces i have read so far, literally and figuratively😃👍🏼. The essence of how we humans are indeed a blend of the 5 elements albeit each of us having one of it a little more. In pursuit of understanding the chaos within us, we humans as naive as ever forget what we are!

The detailing to characters and why they are so. Being who they are, unapologetic ally! 👏
Maybe u should write for Air/Wind and Space/Vacuum as well - together on Swasan and their life! (i know it's a finite series and this u have posted, to be the last one. Yet, i cannot stop from wishing more)

The last few lines on how Earth and Water being so different characteristically find purpose when come together. The lines on their symbiosis⭐️ and the entire conclusion just just stole the words of me! Beautiful and thank you for giving such a good series to read.

Hey Vaishnavi...Thanks so much for reading and leaving this lovely comment! 😊 Am so glad you liked the character portrayals. Sanskaar and Swara are really Earth and Water, aren't they? Different yet mutually interdependent and totally meant to be! 😊

I am, in fact, working on "Sky" now. 😊 I did intend this to end with a trilogy, but lot of readers were asking me to extend, so am making it a quartet. I might make it a quintet, with "Air" to come later, but I am frankly not sure about that. "Sky" should be up the coming week.

Quote

vaishnavi77

@vaishnavi77

Inactive

Posted: 9 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: CogitoErgoSum

Hey Vaishnavi...Thanks so much for reading and leaving this lovely comment! 😊 Am so glad you liked the character portrayals. Sanskaar and Swara are really Earth and Water, aren't they? Different yet mutually interdependent and totally meant to be! 😊

I am, in fact, working on "Sky" now. 😊 I did intend this to end with a trilogy, but lot of readers were asking me to extend, so am making it a quartet. I might make it a quintet, with "Air" to come later, but I am frankly not sure about that. "Sky" should be up the coming week.

Looking forward! 😊

Edited by vaishnavi77 - 9 years ago

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: vaishnavi77
Looking forward! 😊

Thanks dear. Shall pm you once up.

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: Ashakalyani
awesome yaar...loved it

Thanks so much 😊

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: mjhtfan8
It was a lovely story. I enjoyed reading it. Please do continue writing stories. Thank you for the PM.

Thanks for reading and dropping this comment. 😊

Quote

Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#88

Originally posted by: RUQAIYA10
Hello Viji😊

Finally managed to steal some time to read your update. I am traveling so busy finishing off assignments, work, packing

What can I say about Earth. Everybody has said so much😊. You really are an amazing writer. I know I know I have said it before and you have heard it so many times but you are so so so good.

What I particularly liked about Earth is how perfectly you have etched out Sanskar's character. The flashback with Kavita and his attachment to AP sans the umblical cord. It is true that sometimes relations are not all about blood but love and affection. These emotions are not confined to biological relations and they arise out from the very core of our intrinsic nature. I think such is Sanskar and APs bond. even though she may lean towards her offspring the fact that she does care for Sanskar can not be put aside

The Earth and Water analogies are very apt for Swara and Sanskar and you have incorporated the elements in to their characters really well. By the way I am an air sign any thoughts on that?😉

Please keep on writing more stories. I have become a big fan of your work😃🤗

Hey Ruqaiya..

In addition to my last reply on your lovely comment--thanks again for that 😊, I just anted to say that I am now writing "Sky". I originally intended to stop as a trilogy after "Earth" but a lot of readers asked me to continue. So "Sky" will be up the coming week. Nice to know you are an air sign. I do hope, to possibly do "Air" sometime later. But not sure when. Will surely try my best! But in meantime, will PM you when I post "Sky". 😊

Quote

kaku17

@kaku17

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#89

Viji 🤗( I believe that's your name and hope you wouldn't mind me calling you by ur name)...what a brilliant piece of work..⭐️...I know I say this every time and sound like a broken record, but what to do...you write so so beautifully that I really fall short of words to praise you...😳

I loved loved it, but I guess that's an understatement...😛...the entire story was beyond beautiful, but what caught my attention was the footnote I believe where you explain the symbiosis between earth and water. I was bowled over by that and it set me thinking.

I know I will going be a bit off track, so please bear with me 😛...I was thinking if swara is water and sansku is earth and they fit the characteristics to the "T"...then what is Ragini...she intrigues me...swara is one straight jacket character, but I feel ragu has layers and it makes her intriguing for me, at least...(though am in no way supporting her deeds )

Can Ragini be classified as a "fire" sign...somewhere I feel yes...fire radiates light, gives warmth, helps as a medium for survival, in a different way than water, it also nurtures, but if unchecked it causes destruction and when it rages beyond control it burns down everything to ash...Ragu b4 her transformation was like that only...she was a nurturer, though timid but still had the strength when required ( especially when she stood up to DP and singlehandedly announced and accepted before the whole society without batting an eyelid, shumi as her mum and swara as her sis...)...she radiated warmth when she cared for sanskaar when he was acting mad despite the knife which was pointed at her and after...and then she hurtled towards abyss with a jet speed in a similar fashion when fire starts raging, it gets difficult to control...

and if my chotu sa understanding say that Ragini is "Fire" then what is "lakshya"...air..?...fire requires air (rather oxygen) to burn...if we cut off the air supply fire dies down...like air which flows freely without inhibition, lucky is also like that...mostly he is also aimlessly wandering just as air flows without any direction...none can channelize air...when its gently we feel and enjoy its breeze, but when it rages it also causes destruction, though not at the same scale as say fire, or water or earth...

would be really grateful if you could answer my queries...I know its not the right medium, but still...sorry about that...

ah and yes I am still waiting for the story regarding ragini's redemption and its synchronization with swasan...see I have not forgotten...😆...though I will not pester you as ragini's portrayal needs more sensitivity than swasan and it can be emotionally taxing as well...but still would be waiting...how mean I am lolz...😉

Quote

Sharon

@Sparkler8

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#90

Viji, the way you have brought the elements of nature close to these characters is commendable.

The way Swara stood up against Annapurna and DP's approval to their relationship were the high points for me. Sanskaar and his attachment to his Badi Ma yet the way he chose his love when he saw her favoring Laksh was something i an desperately waiting for in the show.

Thanks for the amazing work and I look forward to reading Air for Lakshya and Wood for maybe Sharmistha.. just a request. :)