'Mom with U' ' Maa Oo Maa'page 80 - Page 9

Originally posted by: sri_4

hey bhoomi

great poem again

loved it

its really penned down well emotions of a lover ..they loved eachother,,their sweet memories..

hmm.sad hope their parents have accepted their relation..lttile did they knw theri dter is gonna die for him

but i do knw half of the love stories do have this ends in real life too..n am really sad for it..

Tumhari Sharmati Ankhen , dil mey halchal machati thi,
Jab tum muskurati dil mey khushi bhar jati thi,

Tumhara baat na karna aur rooth jaana yaad hai,
Mera Pachas uthak beithak kar manana yaad hai,😆

Meri Kamyabi ke liye vrat kitne kiye hai tumney,😳
Mere kadvahat bhari zindagi mey shahad ghola hai tumney,

Jaat-paat, samaj unkey liye sabsey jaroori tha,
Hamara Sacha gehra pyaar unkey liye gair mamuli tha,😭

Ek pal mey meri Duniya khatam hogayee,
Apney jeevan ka Anth kar😭 tum yunh sogayee,

Tumsey pyaar aur tumhara intezaar aaj bhi kar raha hoon,
Tumhari rooh us tare mey bassi hai, jissey roz baat kar raha hoon. 😭

great again!!

good wishes

sri:-)

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool

wow bhoomi a really nice one i liked the way he describes her and her emotions

Originally posted by: mahaklovesmayur

aww di..........what an emotional poem!!!!!!! it was so touchy......first i was smiling when i read him doing sau uthak baithak........then i cried when i came to know that she is dead......but this is a problem in our society......i don't believe in love........but i think that it should be free from any caste......i mean these upper caste lower caste relationships are made by us......an not the God.......so why to believe in that?????? i hate such people who discriminate between people.......what special factor have they got??????? only money! rest all have same two legs, two hands, one mouth etc........i hate such people who do this.......
me and my family are high society people.....but we never do this......i mean ....i think that the people who do the discrimination are very bad.....are not humans........
but the poem was excellent.....yup......true love does suffer due to caste.......i do have sympathy for him......i cried through the entire poem.....
loved it to bits.....
thanks di for writing such a poem.......
it was very emotional..................

love,
Mahak

Originally posted by: sanju_veni

hey great poem n a touchy one
thanks for pm

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid

Awe Bhoomi....it was so touchy!!! Feeling so sad for the couple....ek k bina to dusra adhura hai na....so its soooo painful!!! Very beautifully written n it touched the heart.

Wel, guess I am again fast to comment....kya karu tumhare poem ka naam hi itna attractive tha....I knew it wud be again a beautiful piece!!!

Rishta Bin Naam Ka


Akele zindagi mey kuch kami thi,
Kabhi Kabhi Ankh mey nami thi,

Tumhari Mithi Baato ney hamesha Mujhe chua,
Mujhe pankh aur naee udaan ka ehsaas hua,

Saath kaam kartey Accha lagata tha,
Tumhara Saath aur pyaar sacha lagta tha,

Apni patni se Tumhari bantee nahi thi,
Uski aur tumhari soch miltee nahi thi,

Tumney Vaada kiya hamarey rishtey ko Naam Milega,
Mujhse Shaadi kar Rishta Ab sawalon mey nahi ghirega,

Hamara Rishta har maryada paar kar chuka tha,
Tumhara pyaar mera Sansaar ban chuka tha,

Kuch mahiney baad tumharey ghar khushiyaan ka Agman hua,
chonki jab pata chala tumhare betey ka janam hua,

Tumney kaha shaadi ko ab nibhaney ki majboori thi,
kya karoon wah ek pal ki kamjoori thi,

Samjhi tumney kafi kuch chupaya tha,
jaana mujhe jhoothi kahani batakar phasaya tha,

Kahati kya gumsum se rah gaye,
Umeed hamaree Ab bah gaye,

Tane sabkey hum sah gaye,
Armaan sarey Ab dhah gaye,

Akele zindagi mey kuch kami hai,
Ab bhi Ankh mey nami hai.



...............Bhoomikauttam