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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 3 - continued after the scene NA created on mehendi day ...

Neelam Aunty, Dhruv and Simran came home angrily... Neelam aunty was raging with anger ... she had her fist clenched ... she sat on the sofa and dhruv and simmi stood there ...

she told her servants to get her water... she drank it ... and put it away...

Simmi went into flash back remembering all that rajbeer said ... she thought he never loved me ... and i continued loving him... she made a weeping sound and ran upstairs ...

NA- Simmi - Neelam aunty stood up

Dhruv- Mom let her be... she needs to be alone

NA- That bloody preeto ... who does she think she is... aur woh rajbeer dekha tumne usnai saab ke saamne mujhe humilate kiya... how embarrasing ...

She banged her wrist on the wall

NA- Ow ... she had a red mark on her wrist ... it was paining badly
Dhruv came close...

Dhruv- Mom apki haath mein toh chot hain... mein davai lekar ata hoon

Dhruv came back with a cream and put it on her wrist...

Dhruv- You'll feel better with this mom... the pain will go ...

Dhruv looked at his mom ... he felt angry at rajbeer ... what kind of friend is he ... how dare he do this to his mom... i mean there's a way of dealing with things and mom she should have atleast not made a big scene ...

Dhruv- Mom go sleep now good night ... we will talk tomorrow

On the other hand in preeto's house everyone was sitting quietly ... meeta was still in her yellow sparkly dress sat next to pankaj ...
everyone was shocked what happened ... Preeto was crying ... and so was beeji ...

Rajbeer- Beeji , Papaji mujhe maaf kar dijiye ... mera iradaar ap ko chot pochana nahin tha... meri waja se ap saab ko aaj yeh din dekhna paara ... sorry meeta and pankaj ...

Papaji- Rajbeer puthar tu kyun maafi maang rahein ho... is mai tumhari koi galti nahin hain ... par tumne kabhi bataya nahin ke tum aur preeto ek dusre se pyaar karte ho... aur tum preeto kyun nahin bataya...

Preeto- Mein koi pyaar vayaar nahin karti ... Preeto ran upstairs... Rajbeer went after her...

Rajbeer- Preeto ...

Beeji- Usse rehne toh puthar ... tohra gabbra gayin hain ... neelam behnji ne toh haad kardi ... itni batamizi se baath koi karta hain ...


Papaji- Par tum log chup chup kar kyun mil rahain te ... tabhi toh neelam behnji ne aisa kahan...

Beeji - Koi Galti nahin ki preeto aur rajbeer ne... dono ek dusre se pyaar karte hain ...

Papaji- Matlab ke aap ko pata ta aur aap ne mujhe nahin bataya...

Ishu- Chupe rustam rajbeer... waise bhi humein idea tha ke tum aur preeto...

Bani- haan jaise rajbeer bhaiya preeto ko dekh te hain ... saab ko toh hint mil gaya ... haha

Beeji- Chup karo ... yeh waqt nahin inn bato ka... itni baari baath ho gi ... meeta ki mehndi ruk gayi ...

Rajbeer- I'm so sorry pankaj meeta...

Meeta- Tum kyun sorry ke rahe ho ... tumhari kya galti hain...

Pankaj- Haan Rajbeer yeh uss dayan ki galti hain ...

Beeji- aisa nahin kehte ...

Meeta- Toh dayan hi hain woh ... puri shaam karab ki ... woh akele mein toh bhi ke sakti ti... saab ke saamne zaruri tha kya

Rajbeer- yeh main soch rahan tha... jo unke maan me tha mujhe se keh sakti thi ... agar mein simran ko pehle bataa deta ke mere dil mein kya hain ...

Papaji- Jo huya so huya ... ab agai kya karna hain baad mein sochai ke... sab so jao...

Rajbeer- main chalta hoon ...



And with this he left... so much happened he thought to himself...
if i didn't go to preeto in the first place this would have never happened ... neelam aunty wouldn't humilate preeto like that ...
now even dhruv is angry with me and so is simmi... if i told simmi the truth this would have never happened... neither would her mom be angry... if i knew simmi loved me i would have told her before so all the misunderstanding she had would go ... i need to talk to her and sort things out ... is this suddenly why preeto didn't talk to me because she found out about simmi ... did simmi tell her to stay away from me ... no she wouldn't do that ... Neelam aunty must have said something...i will never forgive her ... i need to know the answers...
i will call preeto ... no she's not able to talk yet ... i will meet her soon ... i hope she's okay ...


Edited by xxAqeelahxx - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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It's not good as the ones before but i'll try and make the next one interesting
Edited by xxAqeelahxx - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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😊


Edited by xxAqeelahxx - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wah Wah...Pankaj calling NA dayan was highlight 🤣
Nice story aqeela continue yaar ...loved reading and was laughing so hard when Pankaj said dayan
Edited by rajpreeto - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow Aqeela, Tum bade chupe rustum nikle hain yaar...Nice job

Seriously , i was so laughing when Pankaj called Dayan 🤣 and Beeji saying neelam behnji ne toh haad kardi ... itni batamizi se baath koi karta hain ... 🤣

Ab tak FF"s mein NA ko tumhari tarah kisine handle nahi kiya...Loved the way you showed evil her place..👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow... 👍🏼
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Posted: 13 years ago
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very well done yaar...👏...👏..👏...

NA ki to laga di...😆 😆 😆

i love ur dialogues...very clean & apt...

keep it up...write soon...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow Aqeelah you done a wonderful job. Loved the way you portrayed NA evilness. Also loved the dialogue when Rajbeer tells NA that Preeto is his love etc. I was also laughing when Pankraj called her Dhayan. Keep writing. 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Very well written and loved the way you showed Evil witch her place. NA ko waat Laga diya tumne

Good job dear ...Absolutely Loved it 👍🏼
Edited by gowrisa - 13 years ago

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