RajPreet - Afsana Pyaar Ka - Page 2

Originally posted by: gowrisa

Very well written and loved the way you showed Evil witch her place. NA ko waat Laga diya tumne

Good job dear ...Absolutely Loved it 👍🏼

Thank you so much ... i feel good about myself... ive never written a story before... just read em... :)
and thanks everyone for ur lovely comments...!!! love you all :)

you guyz liked the word dayan... haha i don't know if pankaj would say that but i wuld ... haha😆

Part 4 - Rajbeer going to NA house and Preeto sisters

The next morning Rajbeer went to get his answers from simmi ...he knew that he might not be allowed in if Neelam aunty was in but it was worth taking a risk... he knocked on the door and Neelam aunty opened it... damn he thought ... she was gob smacked to see him

NA- Tum!!

Rajbeer- Mein simmi se milne aya hoon

NA-Simmi ko... no way ... humari humilation kar ke bauth khush ho ge na...

Rajbeer- Nahin aunty ... main kyun khush ho ga ... mujhe bauth dhuk huya...

NA- Acha toh tumhein bauth dhuk laga... ab tumhein samaj mein ayaa meri beti ka dard...

Rajbeer- main preeto ke barain mein baath kara tha... please mujhe simmi se baath karni hain

NA- Preeto my foot... aur tum nahin mil sakte... now get out of my house...

Rajbeer- NO ...

NA- Lagta hain mujhe security guards ko bulwana pare ga ... SECURITY!!!

Dhruv - Mom why are you shouting ...

Then he saw rajbeer... and approached towards him...

Dhruv - What the hell are you doing here...

NA- Beta yeh simmi ke liye ayaa hain ... but i said no... and now he's refusing to get out

Dhruv- Get out rajbeer ... humari dosti katam...

Rajbeer- Par... dhruv ...

Dhruv pushed Rajbeer out ... and closed the door...

Rajbeer- Aise nahin manege ... mujhe koi aur rasta dhoond na parega

Rajbeer looked up and around ... he looked up to simmi's bedroom ... and then climbed up the balcony ... slowly slowly

On the other side preeto was very very upset... preeto had so much thoughts in her head... everything that happened played back in her head like a CD ... she still remembered about Neelam aunty ... and then remembered what Rajbeer said ... he declared his love for her in front of everyone ... she smiled thinking about him because he stood up for her...

Preeto thought Mujhe Rajbeer ko aur hurt nahin karna chaiya... ek phone karti hoon

She picked her phone but then remembered Neelam aunty ... that she would hurt ishu... if she went anywhere near rajbeer and now by rajbeer answereing back Neelam aunty ... it made situation worse...

Preeto thoughts- Tumne aisa kyun kiyan rajbeer... tumhare waja se ishu di ki problem aur barr gi... main apne family ko apna chehra dikhane se sharam aati hain ... sobs ...

Preeto sisters were outside her door ... she locked them out ... since the night ...beeji told them to leave preeto alone but they were worried about their sister

Meeta- Preeto darvaza kol... preeto ...

Bani- Di darvaza kolo . kal raat se apne kuch nahin kaya ..meeta di mujhe bauth darr lagra hain..

Ishu- Mujhe gabrahat hori hain preeto . Tu teek toh hain naa ..meeta kuch kar

Meeta- Preeto tuhje meri kasam darvaza kol

Meeta started crying shouting preeto

Preeto opened the door after a while the 3 sisters went in and hugged preeto

Ishu- Preeto tu teek toh hain naa

Meeta- Kya teek hain dekh roh roh ke kya haal banaya hain chehre ka.. kuch bolti kyun ni apne behno se baat nahin kare gi ??

Preeto- Kya bolu meeta di (crying) main toh mu dikhane ke liak nahin acha hota ke mein marr jati

Meeta- Bakwas bannd kar preeto tu apne aap ko kyun koss ri ho ..tumhari koi galti nahin hain

Bani- Preeto di .. yeh neelam aunty ki galti hain .. mujhe pehli se hi shaak ta ke woh achi bane ka donng kari thi..

Meeta- Woh itni achi dikhti ti aur kya nikli aasli chehra saamne agaya

Preeto- Meri galti hain agar mein rajbeer ke saath na hoti toh yeh nahin hota

Meeta- Chup kar koi galti nahin ki... tum aur rajbeer ab ek ho... pyaar karna koi galti nahin hain ... woh toh neelam aunty ne yeh tamasha kiya.. agar simran rajbeer ko pyaar karti thi toh khud kyun nahin bataya humare ghar main yeh drama kyun kiya uno ne.. Rajbeer ne acha sunaya

Preeto- Rajbeer ne galat kiya ...

Ishu- Kya galat kiya .. apne pyaar ki liye usne yeh kiya

Preeto- Kitni baar kahun mein rajbeer ko pyaar nahin karti nahin karti

Meeta- Hum saab tumhe anndai (blind) lagte hain. tum rajbeer se pyaar karti ho tumhare ankhon mein dikhta hain tum mano ya na mano mujhe paata hain.. dekho preeto rajbeer tumse bauth pyaar karta hain.. itna kuch kiya tumhare liye aur tum ho ke bache ki tara rohri ho.. saab ka saamna karo agar rajbeer saath hain toh kya darr hain..

Ishu- Meeta sahin kehri hain.. chalo rohna bannd karo aur neeche aao.. koi tumse naraz nahi hai

They took her down but preeto was still worried about ishu di Dhruv didn't even come to get her all because of her and rajbeer I'm still not talking to rajbeer she thought but the more I try to stay away from him the more he comes more close..i do love rajbeer but i want my sisters happiness also...

Tohra intaazar karo friends... i will definently show NA her place when she gets a smack or 2 ... from a certain someone :) ... but that will happen when the time comes... i write these parts on the spot ..thats why there's not much story in it...more dialogues haha
but it'll be more interesting soon :)

Both 3rd nd 4th part are nice aqeelah on spot also u didi a good job👍🏼

You guys better not be saying this to make me feel good... tell me honestly if you don't like it ...
do you guys not think that the dialogues are to much??
feels like am writing a script for someone haha...

Originally posted by: sen_madhuban

dialogues are great fun..😃...

dis is d best part..👏...loved d sisters' attitude...👍🏼...all have become sher singh...😎...

dats d way i want in sssp 2...😊...fed up of preeto being d all sacrificing 1..😭...

i need 2 learn dis dialogue/convo style of writing from u..😊...i feel i hav 2 much descrptn..😆

all the story's i have read have more description ... i am really bad at describing ... you have a great talent... i have no idea why am writing in this way lol ... then when i looked at your ff am like woah!!!
thats called writing .. i guess i write in a simple way ...
but seriously if it gets boring or 2 much dialogues then please tell me...
😊

oh wow loved how sister are chiming in to support Rajpreet which we are missing badly in SSSP show... Awesome dear...waiting for next part..

Originally posted by: xxAqeelahxx

You guys better not be saying this to make me feel good... tell me honestly if you don't like it ...
do you guys not think that the dialogues are to much??
feels like am writing a script for someone haha...

Originally posted by: xxAqeelahxx

Tohra intaazar karo friends... i will definently show NA her place when she gets a smack or 2 ... from a certain someone :) ... but that will happen when the time comes... i write these parts on the spot ..thats why there's not much story in it...more dialogues haha
but it'll be more interesting soon :)

Can't wait to see you throw the evil witch out...She is just so annoying in the show