Mini FF Bk2:My Beautiful Disaster(Last chapter,pg85,April 26)

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Posted: 13 years ago

#61

amazing update. Beautiful piece of writing. Loved it

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Posted: 13 years ago

#62

Originally posted by: Pavi.Dravid119
Me first 🥳 🥳

Tanzie when u were replying to everyone in Book1, it was morning n iw as continuously refreshing the page n then later in this thread Tanzie reserved n i was waiting for it 😃 Sorry Mandy 😆 U n Indu r habitual to be the first ones unlike me 😛 Dusro ko bhi chance do nah 😉 Im glad you got the 1st place dear 🤗

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What do i even say !! Am speechless ... Am really proud that i started reading this FF even if i was late ... Tanzie i love u ... If ever Abhay & Pia portrayed humans, i would want this mini FF to be story line i mean it 👏 👏 👏 The update was definitely a sad one and a chill ran through my spine thats y i didnt unres my comment jus after reading it because i jus couldn't write .. I seriously i felt terrible n my heart was crumbling as i was reading n that could happen only because u penned it down beautifully Tanzie ... Pia has now become a tigress and am loving it ... I really really feel for both Abhay & Pia ... Fate plays dirty games 😡 And poor Dami 😭 She couldn't even file a complaint Donno whem men will stop thinking of women as toys 😡 Im so glad you know I started this FF.. many information in this piece are from actual reality and it happens in real life powerful ppl manipulate their powers and ppl like Dami and even Abhay who wants to leave the life of crime get crushed within the dark for not being strong enough... Abhay and Pia will meet within next 2-3 updates.. 😳

I repeat, the update did make me sad but i loveddd it as it was yet another masterpiece from u 😃

Take care Tanz 🤗 thanks a lot sweetz... 🤗

Originally posted by: mandy1024
Pavi!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 😡 Looks like I have become greedy 😈 when it comes to having the first res in ur FFs Tanzie 😆 esp this one, this being my fav in the forum 😳 Let Pavi have the chance this time Manasa 😆
Now even after penning down such an amazing piece of update u still feel my writing style is better, well I honestly dont know what I can tell u 😛 There is no way I can even dream to write something like this thats's brutally realistic n at that same time so painful 😭 Gosh u make me cry all the time 😡 But I love ya for that 🤗 Doubt if any other writer in this forum can ever write anything that can remotely suprpass this magnificent piece of writing ⭐️ I dont care if u again say I am exaggerating 😛 but I simply loved this update to the core n well I cant even say how much. I liked it more than any update of this FF ever(Yep it beats even the passionate one by miles 😊) It takes a lot to pull off something thats realistic n barbaric but u make it seem effortless each time 👏 The way u emphasise on the minutest of minute details is commendable 👏 YES YES YES you embarrass me to death all the time with your exaggerating comments 🤓 It was very high on emotions I know. I thot people will get bored to it but im glad no1 did and they loved it. it was important to show the realistic side of this world..

So Pia in her femme fatale avatar 😃 So loving this action oriented Pia I tell ya 😉 Wish Abhay could see his girl now 😆
Pia decking up as a cheap call girl was portrayed realistically. Loved the way u emphasised on the way she chose to mask herself in tacky attires. Loved this bold Pia who fearlessly held the woman at gun point whereas Abhay found it hard to do it despite the fact that he had done numerous times in the past. Pia on the other hand has become a tigress ro save Abhay n her unborn whereas Abhay now finds it difficult to go back to his dark past as Pia showed him the light 😳 Brilliantly portrayed. U had mentioned earlier on na that Misha spotting Abhiya will play an important role here? Waiting for that twist actually 😃 Yes Misha will have her part when she will discover Pia is hiding in NYC for 4 months.. so u get the hint.. abhiya will meet after 4 months of Pia arriving NYC ...and Abhay will be indeed shocked to see the dangerous side of Pia...
Post her encounter with Dami Pia got to know that Abhay never lost a part of humanity though he had been a ruthless assassin 😃 I hope this eradicates her insecurities regarding Abhay's love for her
It was ironic that Abhay thinks their dream of having grand children will never turn out to be true n he wished Pia could be the mother of his kids when she is already carrying his child
Coming to the last bit, it was beautiful ⭐️ Now she wont doubt Abhay for a moment.. and I knw it was indeed very sad.. i felt like crying writing it...

Irony of fate: Destiny mocking them. Playing dirty games because the killer has thrown his gun away but the angel has picked it up. Because she has to set the killer free for her soul' what an irony fate plays..!!
It was so amazing. Gosh, did u pen it down? 😲 It was brilliant 👏
SUPERB UPDATE! 👏👏👏👏👏👏 thanks a lot.. yes I penned it down myself 😳 Infact I started writing as chapter name China Town but as I proceeded I saw its irony of fate and when i wrote the lines in the last i decided the chapter name must be changed 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: flora212
WOW...THAT WAS FABOLUS! SO NOW PIA IS ON SAVING MISSION... WELL SO SAD FR ABHAY!! HE EVEN DOESNT KNOW THAT PIA IS GOTNG TO BE MOTHER OF HIS CHILD! ABHAY ALWAYS HAD HUMANITY... AND I GUESS PIA IS NOW MORE DETERMINE TO BRING OUT ABHAY FROM THAT DARK WORLD ! NOW EAGER TO KNOW WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN IN NEXT CHAPPY??? WILL PIA MEET CHAND?? UPDATE SOON...

Thanks a lot Naf. your emos are so cute but i love the kitty emos more 😃 Yeap Pia will be more determined to bring Abhay back and her actions will shock all of you and Abhay the most. Next update Chand will meet Pia.

Originally posted by: ..dishu..
what a brilliant update Tanzie. the way pia and abhay are both fighting fate as well as the world to make sure that the other one is safe, is really heart-wrenching.

Thank you Dishu. 😳 their pain will ultimately lead to their freedom..

Originally posted by: Mohit-deewani

Tanzie , Wat an brilliant piece of upd yaar , simply amazing dear 👏
This ff Is my fav ff seriously and I m a fan of your writings , you show the feelings of each and every character soo soo well Serously 😃
The update was thrilling as well as painful
Seeing piya I felt like woah the tigress is awaken . Serously love this determined and bold piya , the way you showed her getting dressed in tacky wears and heliding dami at gun point was awesome . A preganant girl managing all alone in a big city roaming in cheap bars and dangerous places to find her love ,seriously I salute her for this . Abhay on other hand is sooo changed and I love this change , felt reall bad for him and wat a fate , the killer who used trap people in the room is now trapped in the same room and the way he couldn't shoot anyone was shown awesomely , the way you described how abhiya missed each other was very beautful tanzie 👏
And really feel bad for dami , but unfortunately this is reality of world
And the last line you wrote , was soo beautiful true Serously I kept reading tat line agai and again
Please conti soon tanzie 😃

Thanks a lot dear. Well life is tough for Pia right now. Abhay has changed for good but when he will heard Pia is looking for her he will turn into the killer again to keep her away but anyways, it wont work.. I always wanted to make this story realistic so I wrote any hardcore stuff.. will update soon 😳

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Posted: 13 years ago

#64

Originally posted by: --Rashu--
Congo for book 2 *hugs*so pia on mission aww for abhay she will go to that danger world searching for him...fab update...tanzie
P.s how r u long time no talk ...miss u

Thanks Rashu *hugs back* yes she will shock all of you with her actions and Abhay the most... miss you too.. its long we haven't talked true.. we r all scattered...

Originally posted by: luckdiya
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painful updt tanzie
hats off 4 piya...she hs been tkin a huge risk 4 abhay
& i really proud bth of dem
he (abhay)saved a grl 👍🏼 it shws dat he hs a golden hrt
awesome updt 🤗
thx 4 pm :))

Sorry for the sad updates. it will last for another 1 or 2 and then Abhiya will meet again. 😳

Originally posted by: Monami_50
Thanx 4 update Tanzie apu.Poor pia.She truly is in a mess.Looking 4 Abhay is really dangerous,but she hasnt lost hope.Next chappy seems scary,everyone knows about her mission to find Abhay.Hope they dont harm her.

Thanks dear. and she will be in more mess when she will find Abhay and he will turn into a killer again just to shover her away. they wont harm Pia only because she is the daughter of the Master.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#65

Originally posted by: Divya6696
First of all.. Congratulations for book 2..!!!

Awesome update.. the cruel irony of fate.. playing dirty games with Abhiya.. sad..
and now.. everyone will know the truth except Abhay..? Great..!

Please make Abhay know the truth soon..! I hope Abhiya fight out the situation quickly and be together.. forever..!

Update Soon..

Thank you. 😊

glad you liked it. Noone will tell Abhay but even when he will know Pia is looking for him he will refused to go with her because of he wants her to be safe.

Originally posted by: ilove99
My god tanzie!!!!!!it was sadist update till now!!Abhiya are just too shattered from inside!!and dami's poor fate was heart wrenching!
Just perfectly said the last line!!Its really irony of fate!
And the precap-everyone's gonna know about pia except abhay only:(

Thank you meera. I know it was a sad update and unfortunately saddy will remain for another 2. Both are sad but not broken. Abhay will eventually know about Pia but he will be a killer again only to keep her away. but he wont knw about the child then.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: -juhi-lily-
my god tanzie!!! such a brialliant update i m running short of words to praise u now it was just awesome...!
poor abhiya😭
i feel really soory for demi poor girl😭
continue soon thanx for pm😳

Thank you Juhi. Just endure this sad updates for a while because now its not gonna last long.

Originally posted by: smdosi
Wow!!...that was just wow! Fab...you've written and expressed both Abhay and Piya's pov so well...thanx for the pm and update soon...

Thank you. glad you liked it. 😳

Originally posted by: Cute_Gal
awesome update..
piya on a mission 2 find abhay.. I hope she finds him soon,
continue soon..
thanxx for d pm.

Thanks a lot. She will and then Abhay will refuse to go first

Originally posted by: bookworm-ALS--
Excellent update tanzie! My fav part was Piya threatening Damii with a gun. Fabulous!

Thanks Shreya. Glad u loved it. 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: Alicia2001
wow great story plz update soon
it's an amazing story to read
thanks for the pm

Thank you. 😊

Originally posted by: mahi4ever
Fantabulous post tanzie 👏
u had portrayed da irony of da situation very beautifully.

Thanks a lot for liking it 😊

Originally posted by: Abhiya_Visu
Tanzie like always outstanding update
I just love your works
Thanks for the pm

Thanks so much Shivani. 😳

Originally posted by: MS-meghasharma
fab update.the title was so apt 4 d chapter.it was indeed courageous f pia to hold dat women on gunpoint even though she was shaking wid fear & abhay he jus couldn't hold d gun in his hand.abhay is repenting on all d things dat he has inflicted upon his victims,dat part was heart renderin. it was outstanding bt d precap sounds scary.m sure d guy who held her hand would recognise her. Mre troubles ahead 4 pia in her search mission.hope sum1 would help her.

Thanks a lot Megha. It was to show how they have both changed each other and though destiny has separated them the mark they have left on each other is immovable. The guys will find her soon but they wont be able to harm Pia since she is the daughter of Master.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#68

Originally posted by: anjali0111
fantastic update!!
liked i very much. you protrayed the reality n darkness of mafia world brilliantly.
feeling bad for pia n even more bad for abhay..he has to go back to that dark life.
waiting for chand's reaction when he will come face to face with pia

Thanks Anjali. glad you liked it. I wanted to make it realistic so Im glad everyone liked it. 😊 Chand Pia encounter will be interesting..

Originally posted by: trishnawaliya
o! tanzi u r rite irony of fate our karma come bck to us... i knw both r suffering badly and most important thing i like in ur ff is this pia who show true color of women in luv and she can go any extent to protect her love, i love d tigress in dis angel who pick d gun thrown by her assiassn lover to protect him and i appericiate abhay 4 not let himself to engulf by darkness he is nt able to kill any inocent. u knw wat mujhe updt padhne se phele daar lag raha tha ki aab kya hoga bt nw me happy
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Thank you Trishna. Pias action will shock everyone soon and mostly Abhay. She knows by heart Abhay has a good heart so she will go to any extent to have her back., same way, Abhay will let himself drown in darkness to any extent only to keep Pias life safe.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: cutesukirti1987
What an Update Tanzie!!! Which adjective i shud use? I m practically at a loss 4 words!!

Every emotion,every situation was described beyond perfection! 👏 I cud feel d helplessness nd pain of Abhay 😭 i mean every thing was surreal!When they showed him d video of crying piya with her dog,her loneliness her pain was eating his inner soul.

As title said it so well,what an irony! While Abhay was mentally apologising 2 piya 4 not being able 2 fulfill his promise nd esp his own wish of having a family wid her,Piya was fighting like a tigress 4 him n their baby!!!
Loved d femme fatale avtar of Piya,she has become fearless 4 abhay while abhay which means fearless is being surrounded by fears!
Last part,i just loovvveeddd it!
Piya feeling proud of being mother of Abhay's child.well this will inc her dedication,desperation nd determination 2 bring Abhay bak frm dat world of living deads!

Precap has just increased my desperation 4 d next update.so d irony n bad fate of abhiya continues as everyone will know abt her cep Abhay!
Hope she remains safe along wid d baby!

Thank you so much dear. their pain will make them stronger and their longing will make them come closer again. 😳

The irony of fate situation was to show though destiny has separated them but they are imprinted in each others hearts. Pia will take more irrational actions which will shock everyone of you and mostly Abhay.

im afraid you will have to wait another 1/2 updates for Abhiya meeting... and no1 will harm Pia because she is the daughter of the Master.

Originally posted by: DonIsback
awesome update. i have no words to describe how i felt.. pia courage is amazing.. abhiya is to good and there love is so strong..

Thanks so much Prati. 😳

Originally posted by: Rmuk
Tanzie I don't know what to say? What are u? How u manage to give such thriller update each time? I am just out of words!!!!
This update was hell painful, but yet beautiful!!!!
I feel so bad for abhay, piya and that girl dami too. Poor soul, that ruthless men are😡
Really what a irony of fate, I just love those lines at last. The way u potrayed everything only a god blessed writer like u can do.
I loved each and every part of this update. so piya in save abhay mission now, and will see the real mafia world now. Precap seems interesting, plz update soon.
once more amazing, brillant, awesome, superb and beautiful update. U just made me cry, dear but loved it!!!!!

Aww.thanks a lot dear 🤗 real mafia world is much ruthless. they wont let their enemies alive until they really need something from them. need over and kill.

thanks a lot for such huge compliments... trust me I dont even deserve them 😳

Pia will take more irrational actions which will shock everyone but it will bring Abhay out finally/