New OS~Mend my broken Heart(part3*pg16*Oct17)

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srija

@-srija-

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Posted: 13 years ago

#121

Superb tanzie.
Haseena doing yoga classes he he he
piya got the idea from TVD ha ha ha.
Liked the part where haseena tried hard 2 control her thirst n control herself frm attacking piya.
Aww...abhay sang 4 piya,so sweet.he surely knows how to mend piya's heart.

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--Siva--

@--Siva--

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Posted: 13 years ago

#122

Tanzie.. It was a very beautiful ending.. I've no words..!! You are such a wonderful writer and You are proving it each and every time!! 🤗

What an ending it was.. So smooth yet so powerful in terms of love.. The conversation between Abhay and Pia with love but still with anger made me mesmerized in their love..

Pia is very brave in this OS.. She drank the herb just in case if anything happens to her.. All because she got to see Vampire dairies.. She's crazy!! And Abhay's reaction to it..😆 I loved each bits..

Thanks for the PM Tanzie!!

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heena mehta

@heena_mehta

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Posted: 13 years ago

#123

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hey tanz seriously u should go n put some ideas in cvs brain , they r badly in need of it!!

i reli enjoyed reading ur version of this track!!

ur os was dedicated to pia n u took out best frm her character, bt it doesn't mean, u didn't do justice to abhay's part, u did dat also very well!!

i reli loved d way u av written abt haseena's n alina's fight wid their inner self, dat was something reli appreciable!!!👏👏👏

abhaiya part was beautifully written!!i

n best part was pia's xplanation of her reckless act to abhay!!👏👏👏👏👏, u av defined it well dat love is all abt trust!!

dat vampire diaries part solved two purposes,dat my confusion regarding dat herbal potion gt cleared n it added some humour to d story also!

dat was a lovely os n seriously it didn;t bother me much dat u left alina's part open ended, like i was feeling when we were dicussing it!!

luv u loadss hun😳

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shivanirajput

@shivanirajput

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Posted: 13 years ago

#124

i m extremely sorry
i don't know how i forgot to comment on the first 2 chapters
bloody exams are really messing up my head big time
anyways the os was fab
i wish cv's will steal ur idea no offences meant😆
but seriously i also wanted it to be alina in this way we can get rid of many of the problems all at once
the best part was abhiya reunion in the end it was so emotional and so romantic
but abhay sang for pia😲 this is not fair yaar i m planning this for an upcoming update of my mini ff
anyways u are far more smarter than me and has written it quite well may be i will postpone that idea for a while now
thanks for pm and keep writing

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Ume Salma Kakal

@sunflower52

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Posted: 13 years ago

#125

Amazing update. Hope something like this happens in the show.

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Disha

@FantasyFan_8

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Posted: 13 years ago

#126

Amazing Tanzie. Thanks for reminding the pre-leap incident when Pia had protect the Raichands' secret, though she had almost broken up with Abhay

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cuteteddy

@cuteteddy

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Posted: 13 years ago

#127

awww tanzie it was awesome n the song was also beautiful ! i luved it n what were u all talking in bengali ? r u bengali ?

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inafa amjad

@princessark

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Posted: 13 years ago

#128

all the parts are amazing... i am completely touched by this OS...

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Rumki

@rumki34

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Posted: 13 years ago

#129

Tanzie superb update.liked it.u made abhay sing good.would like to see this type of abhay in show.

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Neetz

@.Jane..

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Posted: 13 years ago

#130

Why couldn't damn Kekta Maiyya hire YOU as the scriptwriter for the show?🤔

Seriously, I wish you and Dishu were the show writers. We would've never lost our PKYEK to this garbage they currently show then

Coming to your OS, the highlight had to be THE VAMPIRE DIARIES!🤣.🤣.🤣 (which has caught my interest again from the past two episodes and HOW!🥺). I mean, seriously, I really don't blame Abhay, man! How can Pia see all this in a SHOW and think it's the same as reality (OS wali reality). Seriously!🤣.🤣.🤣

But I love how Pia was the HERO here!😃

Thanks for the PM! I wish this wasn't the last part but all good things come to an end. If they don't, they drag and become crappy😆.😆

Do write more OSs! I don't need the show on the TV to live AP if I keep getting such awesome stuff here on the forum by you people🤗