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I AM NOT GOOD IN RIGHTING FANFICS.BUT PLZ DO READ THEM AND TELL ME ABOUT YOUR VIEWS.EAGERLY W8NG FOR YOUR COMMENTS,LIKES WOULD BE MORE THAN ENOUGH.

CHAPTER 1
Since khirad came back from nudrat's engagement ashar's attitude was changed.He wasn't talk
ing to her and was constantly ignoring her.She was extremely tensed due to his strange behaviour.
Next daywhen he came back from office khirad was there to greet him but he didn't respond and
said her to brng his food in room.She was hurt,his rude behaviour left khirad teary...She served him
food but he didn't even cared about asking her about it."dekho kese chabad chabad kha rahe hain koi parwah
hi nahi hai biwi ki,,,biwi ne subha ka chai ka cup pia hai..tab se in ke liye bhooki bethi aur inhe parwah hi nahi
hai.""khirad tum ne kuch kaha""hun...nahi nahi to mein nee kya kehna hai.""acha to phr yeh khana le joa
mujhe aur bhook nahi hai.""jee acha."Since then he didn't talked to her...whole night he was busy on his
laptop and khirad was angry on him..she wasn't sleepy at all but had to sleep.Finally she slept ashar was
still working.It was around 2 or 3 when suddenly khirad woke up,she sat down and was sweaty.asher himself
got panicked."khirad,,r u okay..kya huwa""pata nahi aik dum se...dil ghabra raha hai mera.."Abrubtly she
ran towards the washroom...her vomitting had again started,she didn't knew why,,she came back
feeling dizzy,ashar held her and supported her,"r u okay,,,mein doctor ko phone krun""nahi mein theekh hun
ap bus windows khol den..mera dil buhat ghabra raha hai."he opened the windows and sat by her stroking her
hair.He was himself worried for her although he was angry with her but still he cared for her.He though while caressing
her hair:"This girl always make me mad.Pata nahi kab is mein maturity aii gi.bilkul khayal nhi hai ise apna.hadd hoti hai yaar mein zara sa naraz kya huwa is ne to apni care hi karna chod di hai.mein bh to galat hun mujhay is ke sath is tarahn baat nahi krni chahiye th,I should apologise to her.mein jaanta hun keh mein khirad se kitni mohabbat krta hun lekin yeh shakk jealousy meray dil aur damag dono ke sath khel ri hai..."

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Loved it! i swear...
Tell you what no one ca be good at fics when they start writing!
improvement comes with time! Go on you have that thng which can take you far...
write more! i am glued...
Update soon!

Posted: 11 years ago
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Beautifully written! 👏

Continue soon! 😃

Please PM me when you post the next chapter!

P.S.: Small suggestion, Please use a dark color for text! It's easier to read! 😳

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