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Posted: 12 years ago

#81

Originally posted by: khwaishfan
hi thanks 4 da pm n superb updates! well written

thanku so much khwaish for lookin in and liking it dear...😃

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Posted: 12 years ago

#82

Originally posted by: SwastikAshNi
Read both two parts Ana-Selfless Ashu and Responsible daughter but determined lover NNidhi-perfect AshNi wala feeling.Can't wait to see how their Love wins after so many big big hurdles-loved the progression of the OS

hehe...
thanku so much swastik...
glad you get that ashni wala feeling...😉
and happy to see you liking the flow...hope end will be justified also😃

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#83

Originally posted by: deepa17
Ana.. Was just able to read it.. There is no way you can think of leave writing asnhi stories .. Could feel their pain...

Jaldi se update karo

thanku deepa for liking this os...
update will b here in sometime😊

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Posted: 12 years ago

#84

Originally posted by: aardhan
Wow Ana, beautiful continuation. 👍🏼

You drew us all into this Ashni world where there is strife and turmoil. This time Ashu;s thought are so well etched. His worry for Nidhi, then hesitation to see her when Anji called but finally forcing himself as he has no option. Liked how he cared for her and made her promise to look after herself. Liked this Nidhi as well, she is more attuned to Ashu here. And this time was he the one who broke the relationship and made Nidhi promise not to see him?

He wants her to agree to marriage! 😲 Thank God Nidhi stopped him. Very gripping OS Ana, nicely describing their pain. So will they be out of their misery soon, will they reunite? Hope you ahve a happy conclusion in mind! 😃

thanku so much aardhan
am so happy to see you noticed those small things yaar...
yup...I changed there characters a little cause i love strong girls...😃
am happy you are liking till now...
n just hope the end will justify you all😳

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Posted: 12 years ago

#85

Originally posted by: bc123456
Waiting for a happy ending

its coming in sometime😃

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Posted: 12 years ago

#86

Originally posted by: Suvika.
update kithe hain Ana???

hunay thori dair main andi ey :P

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Posted: 12 years ago

#87

Originally posted by: jyothi_cool
amazing os ana

thanku so much jyothi😃

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#88

Originally posted by: TANHA_H
amazing and fantastic oneee

thanku so much dear😳

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#89

Originally posted by: tinsel
Fantastic OS!👍🏼

thanku so much dear...😃

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Col. Verma's POV:
(A sorry on my part as most dialogues are repeated...but it was necessary...so plz bear)

"Main...bahir..." I heard the words as soon as I received Anji's call. I took the call in the middle of the night in a panic state thinking that may be, there something wrong with Nidhi, But Anji's voice confused me...

"Anji...Is everything OK..? Anji" I called out to her but heard no response...

I waited for a few minutes with bated heart and was about to cut the call when I heard a voice saying "Nidhi..." in an affectionate tone...and I know who he was.

So Anji called Dr.Ashutosh to the hospital to meet Nidhi and that to at my back...

But then, why would she call me if she has to keep that as a secret? I wondered but didn't cut the call as I earlier intended to.

"Kyun apne app pe itna zulam kar rahi hoo...Khud ko or mujhe kyun is dard se guzar rahi ho..." The pain, the helplessness, the aggression...all was hearable in his tone.

"Kia tumhain lagta, tumhain is halat main dekh k main tumse dour...aram se reh paoon ga" Have I missed to see there emotional attachment before or is it more evident on phone call.

"Agar mere bemar honay se, main appko khud k itnay kareeb mehsos kar sakti hoon...tau aisa hi sahi" My baby's broken voice, hit my hears...A lump formed in my throat to hear her cough and then her words. Was I wrong to her?

He talked for a few seconds and with each of his line, my heart sink further, thinking about the actions, I did to make them stay away. I was still feeling remorseful, when he said

"Maine tumhain mana kia mujhse milne se...tau mujhe kaho...jo bhi bura bhala kehna hai...likin apne baba...apni bua se matt laro...unhain takleef na do Nidhi...Main apne baba ko khoo chuka hoon...likin ye main hargiz nahi chahta k meri wajha se tum apne baba ko...apne parivar ko kho do"

And that was the last straw that enhanced my guiltiness to its brim.

I regretted. I regretted badly about the decision I imposed on them.

But what about the world...I couldn't ignore them either.

Nidhi and Ashutosh's love for eachother was dripping from each word, they were uttering...

I was surly blinded by my own faith to see the powerful emotions of love, they had for eachother...May be thats why Anji made this call to make me hear and realize it because I know, by seeing them right now, All i would have done is push Ashutosh away from my daughter in anger.

"Wada karo...Agay se aisa kuch nahi karo gi...khud ko is takleef main nahi dalo gi"

"Ji..."

"I am full now..." Nidhi said, making me realize that he actually made her eat something today. After days, she ate anything as I have been keeping an eye on her eating habits.

"Nidhi...Aik or wada karo gi..."

"Kia?"

"Tum apne baba ki marzi se shadi..."

"Please Dr. Ashutosh..."

"Mujh se app aisa koi wada na hi lain tau accha hai jiss ko main kabhi poora na kar sakoon...Agar app ko wada doon gi tau phir mujhe ye wada nibhana ho ga or chahy kuch bhi ho...agar mera naam kissi or k se jur bhi jaye tau mera jism, meri rooh...mera dil...kabhi uska nahi ho paye ga...or ye meri taaf se na-insafi hogi...Please mujhe is gunah ko karne ko na kahiye...App se pyaar karna, mera apna faisla tha...or main apna ye faisla apnay akhri dam tak nahi badloon gi"

And I cut the call, Not able to bear anymore.

So thoughtful, so selfless.

My heart swell with pride of my daughter's choice.

A man, who doesn't think about himself even for a bit and was continuously worried about the relationship crisis, me and my daughter were having.

I sat down on my rocking chair where I used to sit holding a sleeping Nidhi in my arms in her childhood. I used to caress her hairs while thinking about her future. How she would get married and how perect of a husband, I would choose for her who will shower my daughter with her unlimited love and will keep her happy.

Wasn't Ashutosh that same man?

His love was unlimited that he was even ready to sacrifice it just to see her happy.

All through the night, I keep wondering about these two and didn't realize when sun-rays spread out in the darkness, putting light on the things which were enveloped in darkness, till just a few moments back.

And I felt, that I also was brought into the light today.

It was drizzling outside as moonsoon was on its peak...but even that was enough to clear my vision...

From my eyes and from my mind

"Arre...Yog...Itni subah subah kaise jag gaya? Soya nahi kia" Bua came into my room, may be by seeing the open door.

"Bua...agar raat ko sou jata tau meri beti ki khushiyon ka kaun soochta"

"Kia howa yog...Kuch howa kia?" Bua got concerned.

I turned around with a sigh and holded my hands together, trying to get a grip on my guiltiness.

"Nahi bua...abhi tak tau sub theek hai...likin mere haathon bohut galat ho sakta tha" I sat down on the bed and bua came and sit beside my.

She put a hand on my shoulder, prompting me to speak.

"Yog..."

"Bua...Main soch raha tha k hum kaise itnay khud garz ho gaye k hum apni khushiyoon k liye, apni beti ka balidan denay ko tayar ho gaye...

Nandini ki mout k baad, aj tak meri sari zindagi bus Nidhi ko khushiyan daynay k liye hi rahi hai...Likin jab, meri usi Nidhi nay apni zindagi ki sub se bari khushi ko manga, tau main usko na day saka...I disappoint her bua"

Tears started to fall down from my eyes thinking that I proved out to be a failure as a father.

"Ye kaisi baat kar raha hai tu Yog...Nidhi ki agar khushi ki wajha jayaz hoti tau main khud uska saath deti...Likin jo usnay manga...wo usko kabhi nahi mil sakta" Bua was getting hyper.

"Aur app ye kaise keh sakti hain bua k Dr. Ashutosh uske laik nahi..." I bounded back

"Tujhe ho kia gaya hai Yog...Us Doctor k liye kal raat tak tumhara bhi yehi sochna tha...tau aik raat main aisa kia howa k tum dar gaye" Bua get up and taunted me.

"Apne sahi kaha bua...Main darr gaya... Darr gaya k meri zindagi ki sab se bari daulat mujh se chin jati agar main Nidhi ko Dr. Ashutosh se dour kar deta"

Bua raised her brow.

"Iska kia matlab hai Yog?"

"Main aj he Dr. Ashutosh k ghar ja k unse Nidhi aur unke rishte ki baat karoon ga" My determined voice must have shocked bua as she looked daggers at me.

"Tu aisa kuch nahi kare ga Yog...warna mera mara howa moun dekhay ga" Bua warned.

"Tu kyun apni saari izzat ko khak main milana chahta hai...kyun sari duniya k agay apni naak katwana chahta hai" Bua said helplessly.

"Izzat tau meri khak main tab milti bua, jab Nidhi or Dr. Ashutosh bhag k shadi kar layte...Aur kaun si duniya ki baat kar rahi hain app...Agar kal ko Nidhi youn hi boki reh k aik din mar jaye gi tau tab bhi duniya nay yehi kehna hai k pyaar k naam pe jaan day di...kamzarf baap ko beti ka khayal nahi aya" Bua was speechless.

"Sahi poocho bua...tau aj ehsas ho raha hai k Doc. Mathur ko kaisa laga hoga jab Nandini or maine bhag k shadi ki thi" Putting my hands in my pants pocket, I just tried to visualize the state, Doc. Mathur must have went through and to be true, just imagining it gave me goose bumps.

"Aik beti, jiss ko bachpan se pal poos k itna bara kia ho...jis k liye itnay armaan hoon, itnay sapne sajaye hoon...Wo beti jo baap ki puri duniya ho...wo jab baap se moun palat k apnay pyaar k saath bhag jaye...tau us baap k pass kia bacha hoga bua" My heart tore as another thought hit me with a great force.

"Sahi mayine main tau bua, Nandini ki saari takleefon ka zimedar main hi hoon...Na wo parh likh paye...or na hi apni zindagi ko us tarhan khushi se jee paaye jaise agar Doc. Mathur us k saath hotay, tau wo jee paati...Mere saath bitaye uski zindagi sirf guilt se bhari thi...Is baat ka guilt nahi k us k baba uski khushi main khush nahi...balke is baat ka guilt k us nay apna baba ka sir jhuka diya..."

"Likin Yog, is baat ka Nidhi se kia taluq hai...Tum dono aik hi umar k thay...18 saal ka farak nahi tha" Bua once again tried to argue.

"Taluq hai bua...agar Doc Ashutosh Nidhi ki umer k hotay tau shayad wohi karte jo maine us waqt kia tha...abhi tak Nidhi ko bhaga k lay gaye hotay or shadi kar k sukhi jeevan beta rahay hotay wo dono is waqt...Likin ye umar ka fasla hi hai bua, jiss ne Doc. ashutosh ko itna mature banaya hai k wo waqt ki nazakat ko samjhtay hain...Chahy unke pass koi rishta nahi, koi apna kehne ko nahin tabhi wo in rishtoon ki qadar karte hain...Har cheez aik thali main paroos k kissi k saamne rakh di jaye tau us cheez ki qadar nahi hoti bua...likin mujhe lagta hai k inh dono k azmaish abh bus bohut howi..." My tone of finality finally broke Bua's hard demur.

"par Yog...ye bhi tau sooch na k shadi kuch waqt ka safar nahi...umar bhar ka saath hota hai...or Us Doctor ki umer..."

"Umer se pyaar yaan shaadi ka koi layna deyna nahi bua...nandini meri umer ki thi...likin phir bhi maut umer ko dekh k tau nahin aye na...Or jaise mere liye Nandini k saath bitaye howay wo thoray pal zindagi bhar ki khushi ban gaye...main janta hoon k ye dono bhi har pal apni zindagi jiyein gay"

"Or Duniya..." That was the last argument from bua.

"Duniya se mujhe kia layna Bua...Meri duniya bus meri beti hai...or uski khushi k agay, mujhe is duniya ki sab narazgi manzoor hai...App nashta banwaiye or shagun ke saaman ki list mujhe dijiye...Nidhi k ghar anay se pehle, main chahta hoon k ye sab baat hum ja k Dr. Ashutosh se kar ayein...Ta k is baar jab wo ghar main kadam rakhay tau uski ankhoon main ansoo nahi...balke khushi ho"

Bua nodded feeling helpless. I know she wasn't fully happy but from which side I was seeing, I know, happiness was filled in her coming life.

Ashu's POV:

I took a deep breath after coming out from the hospital and God knows, how hard of a task that was after we shared that breath-taking kiss that turned my words upside down.

My hands itched to hold her fragile body in my arms, my lips were trembling from the thrusts of her tounge, my mouth still tasted of her, my legs were wobbling, my eyes filled with tears, my ears were unable to hear anything other than her moans that I even ignored Anji's calling voice and my heart, pumping my blood with a double speed. But still, each of my organ was feeling immense pain.

Pain to be getting away from her.

I leaned onto my car and took deep breaths. A cry of helplessness escape from my lungs making me realize that I was crying.

Crying over my poor fate. My helplessness.

My first love, my life was slipping from my hand and I couldn't even grab it.

I was still lost in my pain when Ranganath called me.

Catching up my breath and making my voice steady I answered it.

"Hello Dr. Ranganath"

"Sorry to disturb you sir...but abhi abhi abhi aik drunk and drive accident case aya hai...patient male hai...Gari palat gaye thi tau thora head damage howa hai...We were thinking if you could come and check" He explained.

"I am on my way..." I cut the call and thank God for this distraction. Atleast for tonight, my mind would be pre-occupied.

Getting into car, I left for KGH..

It was around 7 in the morning, that I stepped back into my house.

Hiraman Kaka offered me tea but my body was too tired to.wait for it for rejecting the offer. I get into my room and fall on the bed.

Around 10, I felt a poke on my shoulder that make me wake up.

"Kaka...Kia howa?" I asked kaka who was looking at me with an confused expression.

"Beta, Col. Vema aye hain...Tumhara pooch raha hai" Just the mention of Col. Verma, jolted me out from my bed.

"Col. Verma?" I got worried.

Has he get to know that I went to meet Nidhi last night in the hospital and is not happy? Are my fears of meeting her coming true?

I rushed my hands through my hairs.

"Kia kahoon main unhain...?" Kaka asked, breaking the trance of my thoughts.

"Unhe bithaiye kaka...Main dus minute main fresh hoke ata hoon" Kaka nod and left but I was hell worried.

What if he will get more strict on Nidhi or worse, took her out from Lucknow...What will I do then?

My hands and feet were getting cold.

But thinking to face everything for Nidhi, I braced myself up.

She has been suffering alone from so many days, even weeks. She hadn't given up on THEM so how could i take a back seat.

I took out my formal yellow T-Shirt that Nidhi has given me on our picnic trip along with jeans.

I have wore that once, going out of my way, just fo make her happy and today, once again, I would wear that to fight for her happiness. Her love, her strength would stay with me through this face off today.

I brushed my teeths, splashed water on my face, changed into my jeans and shirt and ran a quick comb through my hairs before I went out.

Col. Verma was patiently waiting for me. Kaka was aaking him for some water or tea that he rejected gracefully with his army antics.

I rubbed my hands on my jeans, sent a silent prayer up to the God and went near him.

"Good Morning, Col. Verma" I wished him. He quickly stood up and gave me a hesitant smile.

"Good Morning Dr. Ashutosh...Sorry subah subah appko disturb kia...Apke kaka nay bataya k app subah hi ghar wapis aye..." I shooed my hand.

"No problem sir...Please bethiye..." He took the seat and I follwed him down on the one seater.

He was rubbing his hands just like me...As if looking for a word how to start. But then I saw a determined look on his face and he turned to me.

"Dr. Ashutosh...Main nahi janta main ye baat kaise shuru karoon...Par main aj apke pass aik bohut he ahem wajha se aaya hoon" He started and my heart sink.

Is he going to say that they are leaving the city or is going to ask me to leave city for Nidhi's sake...Or worse, he has fixed Nidhi's wedding and asking me to stay away from her by all means. Though were barely in contact exclude last night.

"Ji kahiye Col. Verma"

"Ashutosh...Kabhi kabhi hum zindagi main kuch aise faislay lay letay hain jo bazahir tau humain sahi lagtay hain...par jaise jaise ye waqt guzarta hai...humain patah chalta hai k hamare faisle kitne be bunyad or khoklay hain"

And I was confirmed that he was referring to us and our love, calling it a mistake. My breath hitched as I realized where this discussion was leading us. I bowed my head down, waiting for the worse

"Maine bhi aik bohut bari galti kar di...Ap dono k pyar ko galat samjh ke" My head snapped up. I was shocked.

another part on its way...
and that will be loved filled so plz wait for it... :)
Do leave comments as I was realy feeling awkward writing about Col.Verma POV...

Edited by ..oneOone.. - 12 years ago

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