ArHi OS: Every Breath You Take

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BlueMystique

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Posted: 13 years ago

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arisai

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Posted: 13 years ago

Lol Ridz, first let me just get this out of the way- it really isn't over until the ending's happy for you and this warms my "leave-them-suffering-and-wallowing-in-misery" heart. 😆

THIS is the kind of behaviour I wanted to see from Arnav. Some semblance of acknowledgement that he KNOWS how badly he hurt Khushi. I always expected him to let her go after he discovered the truth, unable to forgive himself. I knew Khushi would forgive him and I expected her to persuade him that she understood why he did what he did.

I just... the line where he says he would kill anyone who dared to do something like that to his sister- it reminded me of the time when they first met at the fashion show and Khushi asked what would he do if someone said the same thing's about HIS sister as he was saying about hers.

This OS is what I wanted Arnav and Khushi's story to be like post-revelation.

Instead... we get the freaking Old Lady Traffic Police and Bed-Cricket. I'm all for ArShi scenes- I just want some sign that Arnav realises what he did was wrong and his fault and that he NEEDS to feel guilty- not guilt-trip Khushi.

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@PersieV

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Posted: 13 years ago

So I'm late I know!

Don't kill me! You have so many res's to edit as well LOL!

Awwhh what an OS! The little boy scene was so cute! That made him realise and he said sorry and let her go ...

After that I thought no wait Khushi will forgive him and will stay but she said she needs time and went.

That was a big no even I know she needed space. I thought she wouldn't go back

But then hey what's Arnav for ;)

He stalked her LOL!

And she obv knew awww!!!

Loved it SS

Mwahh love you too MUCHO

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Cytherea

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Ridzz.. OMG that was sooo sweet.. I absolutely loved the OS

The little kid at the temple was soo sweet and Arnav's realization had me go- FINALLY

I'm so glad that he realized that he hurt her and he let her go

I would've preferred it if he did some grovelling but this works too

He stalks her?! I should be creeped out but this is Arnav we're talking about *Sigh*

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jeej

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Posted: 13 years ago

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/62215900

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un.complicated

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Posted: 13 years ago

Apologies!

I usually don't reserve and not edit, so I'm really sorry!

It's nothing personal - of course!.

Just finished reading it! I loved it!

Great OS, you portrayed everything beautifully! The emotions were great and realistic.

I loved the fact that Khushi wanted her own space for a while - but of course, Arnav being Arnav, just stalked her. 😆

And the scene with the little boy who wanted Khushi to be his Di was super sweet!

Well done! 😊

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Posted: 13 years ago

Loved the OS

It was so cute the boy thing

He stalked her to get her back

Loved it

sorry for the late reply!

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Aashifa

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Posted: 13 years ago

ahahha! 🤣 got it babes! ;)

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Comment - I dont know which number. Time : - 23:02.

Now this is what Arnav should be like! he should really understand the depth of his faults and regret deeply. The bucking basshole! If it were up to me I would guve this fictional chqracter a left and a right. Honeatly. But you have bought a wonderful shade off his too be regret beautifully. And I cant spell anymore -_- dont look at me like that okay. I am just too tired.

Her doubt and naivety was bought up fantastically. :D His feelings and thw point regarding his aiater was so well put because we can very well imagine him throttling the offender but for Khushi? he would probably think about it like a milllion times.

A marvelous come back Ridz

Love You.

a a s h i f a

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Sona

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Posted: 13 years ago

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That was so, SO beautiful. I am crying a bit now, and it was nothing short of perfect.

The Raakhi part, Khushi and Ashu, that was so wonderful. The fact that the little kid wante dto protect her, was so sweet, admirable.

And when Arnav turned the whole thing around about the same thing happening to Anjali, I was astounded, really. I mean I knew the Raakhi part would hold some significance but this, never expected. This idea, was refreshing, in every aspect.

And then the part about forcing his love on her, so bittersweet. The hug, the way you've written it, I'm sure everyone would've imagined it in front of them. Aarrgh, I'm running out of words to describe this OS, it's so beautiful.

The way you've written about him missing her, following her every move, those parts had so much intensity. The contrast of what he saw her doing and the realization that he wanted to do those things with her, his silent dreams, exquisite writing.

The OS was beautiful, and the best part is it had this brimming intensity, so I'm going to go read it again. Thank you!:)

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inspiringstars

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Really loved it, I would really like the show to progress in such a mature way...but I know thats not happening.

I mean, after all that Arnvav did, its natural for her to take some time off, live alone and think about all this...and then probably give him a ssecond chance

Brilliant dear...I loved it!

P.S I love this song to bits!