Arhi FF: Kalarikkal House (Thread 2 link posted)

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Hello lovely readers,

Firstly, thank you for stopping by to check out this FF/SS.  If it's to your liking, please do stay and contribute (we are a talkative bunch), but if not to your liking, well... (you know what to do J).

I have been writing FFs for a bit now, and I have realized that there are some ' shall we call them 'suggestions' ' that are good to put forth and get out of the way so that we can make this experience as enjoyable as possible for all of us.  Admittedly, many of these are to make this easier for me ;), but I do hope you can cooperate.   

Onto the Suggestions:

A)    Please Do Not ask for longer chapters.  At times I write 5 pages, at times I write three paragraphs, but usually they average to about 2-3 pages per update.  I update at least once a week (for some of my stories, more often), so hopefully this will not pose a problem.

B)     Please Do Not ask for specific scenes (i.e., More scenes on couples that you like!).  I have tried to be the sort of writer who accedes to such wishes, but have found out the distressing truth that I am not (alas!).  So, I request you to refrain and let me tell the story as I wish.   

C)    Please Do Not ask for updates if you do not comment other than to say, "Update please!"

D) And lastly, I have to address the growing number of buddy requests.  While I am flattered and thankful, the PM-ing is a bit of a torture for me as I can only do 20 at a time and I have 4 ongoing stories.   Thus, I have decided to do the following. 

- I will only accept buddy requests from readers who have commented (read comment, not like) at least three times on any of my threads. 

- I will delete readers from my list who have stopped commenting for a month or more as I will assume that you have stopped reading my stories and do not wish to be bothered with PMs. 

- There are a few readers who offer their comments via PM to me; while I quite enjoy your feedback, I request you to post it on the thread itself, as my PM box tends to become crowded as is.

 Even though it doesn't seem like it at times, I do read every single one of your comments and cherish them.  I show my gratitude by usually updating more often than to leave a note saying 'Thank you".  I hope you will take that manner of Thanks instead of my "Thank you's" anyways J

Lastly, I do encourage you to comment.  In the past, the best FF threads I have had (i.e. REEL, The Oldest Story, Love and Despair, Eden) have all had healthy and prolific discussions on the characters, situations, and the like with my readers becoming quite friendly with each other; they have become something of a reader group that travel together, I have noticed, even checking in when a key member is missing for a few days.  That sort of camaraderie and engagement is the greatest muse for a writer and the best reward as well. 

Thank you for taking the time to read this long(a$$) intro.

 

And now, a warm welcome abroad,

 

-Devi     

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Hello Everyone,

  This is a short series (Edit: 8/3/12: It turns out that I don't know how to write SHORT stories!!!  It's now 17 chapters and I have not even covered a whole day!!) based on IPKKND.   The setting is a bit different from the show, but the characters of Arnav and Khushi are still somewhat similar to that of the show (Arnav more so than Khushi). 

 

-Devi



Chapter 1 
 - In An Unknown Land

Chapter 2 - Kalarikkal House

Chapter 3 - The Condition

Chapter 4 - What Do You Know of Us Anyway?

Chapter 5 - Murderous Witch

Chapter 6 - Violence Begets Violence

Chapter 7 - Ruminations

Chapter 8 - Stillness

Chapter 9 - Umikiri

Chapter 10 - The Incident at the Pond

Chapter 11 - Kashi Chechy is a... Puli

Chapter 12 - Nalan's Lie

Chapter 13 - A True Disappointment

Chapter 14: You Owe Me

Chapter 15: What More Could I Want?

Chapter 16: A Memory of Something That Never Was...

Chapter 17: Shivan

Chapter 18: Shavathaalam

Chapter 19: Two and Two


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Chapter 1 – In an Unknown Land

 

"Oh come on!  Money makes the world go round, Aman."  He said into cell in English before he switched back to Hindi.  "If the offer we made is not good enough, up the ante some more."  And then switched right back to English. "I am not taking no for an answer.  And that's that!"

He ended the call and just as he pulled up his emails, the car lurched to a stop. 

"Did I just lose reception?"  He asked out loud before looking up and around.

"Where the hell are we?"  he asked after a moment, looking around.

There were fields of green all around him.  

Were these paddy fields??

"Sorry sir, the tire is punctured."  The driver said before opening the door and getting out.

"The tire is punctured after you drove us to the f**king boonies!"

He wished he had his own driver with him.  But this was Kerala and he was here for just a week to make a sale on a piece of land that he had been looking to acquire for years with little luck.  He had been assured by the party mediating the sale that they had finally convinced the last family holding onto their ancestral property here that it was in their best interest to sell.  He had heard that the family had fallen on hard times anyways, so it was only been a matter of time before he expected them to agree to his more than generous offer for the five acres of land they owned.  Kerala was an incredibly lucrative tourist spot and an exclusive resort-spa with a bit of their traditional Ayurveda, healing massages, and the works would make a nice tidy package to lure NRI's and foreigners.  But the business of land acquisition was cut-throat in Kerala with so much politics behind it that he hadn't been able to touch the market for years.  The idea to acquire a large piece of land from one or two families that still held land handed over from generation to generation had come about several years ago.  It had required a great deal of planning with discreet sources for the last five years for this particular deal to come about.   One of the three families owning the twelve total acres that he hoped to acquire had sold the land willingly; most of that family had been gone from India for years anyways and they had merely held onto the property for the sake of a great-aunt who had lived there.  They had sold the house and the land as soon as the woman had passed.  That had been three years ago.  The property adjacent to it had belonged to a family whose only son had died in an accident two years ago.  They had wanted to leave behind the memories of the empty house and they too had sold within a short period of time after their son's death.  The only remaining property that he needed was the one belonging to a Govindan Namboothiri.  They had said no to his people three years ago and continued to say no to date.  But now that he had the other two properties and his goal was so close to being realized, he would not take no for an answer.  And thus he had come down here to get the deal closed himself.  He would get the family to sell to him one way or the other.  And if that required intimidation, threats, coercion, or worse, so be it.

He opened the car door and shook his head in annoyance when he saw the muddy road. 

"This is bullshit.  What the hell is this, cow dung?"  he yelled out even though he knew the driver was likely not listening. 

His assistant, Ravi, had come down with some sort of stomach bug last night and hadn't been able to come with them on this trip.  Arnav thought now that he should have just postponed the trip instead of trying to do this by himself.  He didn't speak the language here even though the locals seemed more than capable of speaking Hindi. 

When he didn't hear from the driver for close to five minutes, he sighed in impatience and finally opened the door once again to get out of the car.

His Cole Haan's were not going to survive paddy-field mud, he was sure; he didn't care so much about the shoes as much as the annoyance it posed.  He wanted to be back in Delhi; this place, while it may have its earthly charms, just didn't agree with him with its bugs and its muggy weather and spans of open green pastures.  He had too much of the city in him to ever feel comfortable in this much... silence... 

He got out of the car, closed the door, and leaned against it, fighting the itch for a cigarette.  It was a habit that he had kicked a long time ago, but the urge came back at times like this when he was annoyed or agitated.

The weather was so muggy that even the light breeze in the air didn't help and he shrugged out of his vest and threw it in the car through the rolled down window.  His shirt was sticking to him within minutes and he thought of getting back into the AC-ed interior of the car.  He had had a meeting in Ernakulum this morning, which is why he had put on his regular office-wear, although now he thought that he should have taken the time to go back to his hotel room to change into something more heat-friendly rather than hopping in the car right after the meeting to travel more than two hours to get here.

He walked around the car and looked down to see the driver still fiddling with the tire.  He was removing the punctured one, even though there was no spare to be found.

"Where's the spare?"  Arnav asked.

"In the trunk."  The driver answered.

"Why is it not out?"  he asked.

The man got up and walked back to the trunk.  He opened it and stood there for a moment before walking back to him.  When he stood there without saying anything, Arnav rolled his eyes.  "What the hell is it now?"

"The spare's missing, Sir."

"The spare's missing?"  he asked, his tone incredulous.  "Are you kidding me right now?"  he asked in English, but the man tilted his head in confusion.

He threw up his hands in annoyance and stalked off a distance away, pulling out his cell.

Of course, there was no f**king reception in these boondocks!

"What the f**king hell!"  he said out loud as he looked around.

Aside from a few workers that he could see in the paddy fields at a distance, there was no one else to be found.

He stood there for a moment to get his annoyance under control before he turned back to the driver.

"Alright, how far is the house from here?"

"Sir?"  the driver asked.

"The house that we are going to!  How far is it from here??"  he asked, rolling his eyes.

Seriously, the world was run by nincompoops! 

"2 Kilometers, sir." 

"2 kilo...!!! Are you f**king with me right now??"

The man blinked in confusion but said nothing else.

He stood there fuming for several minutes until the driver asked, "What should we do now, sir?" 

"How far do I need to go for cell phone reception?"  he asked instead of answering the man's question.

"I don't know, sir."

He shook his head and walked away.

"Do you know the way to get to the house?  The exact way?"  he asked.

The driver shook his head.  "We'll have to ask, sir."

"Ask who?"  he almost yelled in frustration.

There was a pause while the driver didn't answer, but then said, "Let's ask her."

"Who?"  he asked without bothering to look back at the driver.

"Her."  The driver said again and then heard it.

It sounded like the chiming of bells.  Soft bells though, almost like... anklets.

He turned around then and saw her.

She was coming from a distance still, wearing a long skirt, a sari blouse and a long shawl wrapped over both like a sari.  He had seen several women wear this here and had heard that it was called something like "half-sari".  He remembered because he recalled thinking that that made perfect sense –the thing did look like half a sari.  She had long hair that was in a plait that she had pulled to the front and she was swinging the tail end of it round and round and round as she walked towards them.

Great!  A local!  He just hoped the chick was like the rest of the population here and understood Hindi.  Although, she had a total village look, so it was still doubtful.

"Mole... (A loose translation would be "beti")  He heard the driver call to the girl when she was within earshot.

When she turned in his direction, he asked, "Ee Kalarikkal veedevideyannariyamo?" ("Do you know where the Kalarikkal House is?")

She paused in front of him. "Orichiri dooramundu.  Entina chetta?" ("It's a bit of a distance.  Why, brother?")

"Ee sarinavade vare onnu ponam."  ("This Sir wants to go there.") 

Arnav saw them both look at him and he nodded briefly in acknowledgment, keeping his annoyance in check.

"Eyakkentha avide karyam?  Kandittu ividunnonum allannu tonnunallo." ("What's his business there?  He doesn't look like he is from around here.")

She said turning back to the man.  Arnav wanted to tell them to save the idle chit-chat for later and to see if the chick knew where the house was, but he held his tongue for the moment.

"Saru Delhi-yil ninnu vannatha.  Athallathe enikku prathyekichonnum ariyilla."  ("He came from Delhi.  Aside from that, I don't know much.").

 "Alright, let's get a rush on this.  Ask her if she knows the house or not. Otherwise, we will have to find someone else."  He said now, his impatience breaking through.

He saw the girl raise an eyebrow at his tone but then she looked back at the driver as the driver asked, "Molu njankalkonnu vazhi kanichu tarumo?  Ee car-inte oru tire keeri poyi"  ("Will you show us the way?  One of the car's tires got torn.")

Arnav saw the girl shoot him a look before she turned back to the driver and nodded.

The driver looked at him and nodded.

"Innu mazhakolundu.  Vegham nadakkan parayu aa manushanodu."  (It's going to start raining soon. Tell him to be quick about it.")  Arnav heard the girl say to the driver who in turn looked at him and said in Hindi, "She says it's going to rain soon, so we'll have to walk fast."

"That's f**king great!"  he muttered under his breath before he told them he was ready.

The girl walked ahead of them and the driver followed suit and he followed behind them.

Her pace was fast and he found that his shoes truly were not made for the uneven muddy ground.

"Hey!  Hey!  Slow down!"  he yelled out and when the driver turned around, but the girl kept going, Arnav asked in annoyance, "What the hell is her name?"

"Molde perentha?"  (What's your name?") the driver asked.

The girl didn't slow down, but yelled over her shoulder.  "Kaveri.  Pakshe ellarum enne Kashi-nna vilikkane."   ("Kaveri.  But people call me Kashi.")

The driver turned back to him and answered, "Her name is Kashi."

"Khushi?"  he asked.

The driver looked confused for a moment, but then he nodded.  Arnav thought he heard the man mutter something like, "Ivide Kashi avide Khushi aayirikkum.  Aarkariyam."  ("Kashi here might be Khushi there.  Who knows?"), but he ignored him.

"Khushi?  Hmm... I never knew Malayalees had names like that."  He muttered to himself as he followed the two, cursing Govindan Namboothiri for making this so difficult for him all the way.

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Edited by -publicenemy- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
It is very nice...Update soon 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
damn good! this introduction really rocked. arnav gettin stuck in rain accompanied locale of kerala having no knowledge of the language. on top of it his terrible temper! n then comes kashi. but for arnav she's khushi!!omg!! arnav is abt to get more irritated wid her n at the same time attracted. i guess evn if he doesnt knw malayali she may be knowin hindi. well this will be an interestin story to look out for..
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Posted: 11 years ago

This sounds interesting, have to accept you have a vivid imagination and you write really well. I wonder how you manage it though, three stories with regular updates and now this, not that I am complaining, just complimenting your writing and time management abilities.

First Tamil now Malayalam next the other two south Indian languages, good too, one of it is my mother tongue. I sure will enjoy reading it.

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Nice one! Malayalam is my
Mother tongue, so could relate very well to the setting of the story. Could u pls pm with updates, would be great! Many thanks!
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Posted: 11 years ago
i started jumping the moment i saw u started a new ss.. n now i am speechless at what you ge written as malayalam is my mother tongue too..

the kashi-khushi part was awesome..

i am a great fan of your lavender series and i will be looking fwd to this one too, devi..
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Posted: 11 years ago
adipoli...bakki vegam update cheyumo??...i can't wait yaar
i luvd the concept...😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hey,i'm a malayalee.so u can imagine hw happy i'm to knw arhi's story in kerala backdrop.looking forward to it.
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The title caught me😃...will be looking out for the updates😛!!!!