Take my breath away: ShiVi FF - Page 87

Ok finally some mature content for my besharam dil! Yay!

OMG the surprise guest...maine kabhi socha hi nahi...the housekeeper who Shiva fooled makes a comeback!😲 I loved this unexpected twist! Much betterthan Disha turning up!😆

Raavis convo with her had me in splits!🤣 I wish she had this kind of personality in the show man!

And then Raavi teasing Shiva reminded me of the beginning of this story...where theyre practising to ride a bike!😆

My fav part was the game they played...I LOVE games which end in romance☺️ I wish they continue the game again in next part!

The end was hot...cant believe you just left us in the middle like that😭 I hope it continues with a hot sizzling passionate chapter!

So now 3 more are left from the bucket list? This bucket list is so interesting!

Originally posted by: VaishnaviG

Actually I missed it and if the update is very hot then I am tongue tied and I really don’t know what to comment 😆

I don’t what happened but least week I was very lazy to read long updates and even to comment thats why I took a week to comment on Inayaa’s story 😆I have my board exams around the corner so just busy with preparation .

But to tag me from next time and now in the next update I atleast want a heavy make out session and bit of touching here and there 😉☺️if deed is not going to happen soon

Koi baat nahi. Hota hai.

I just find the whole tagging thing really intrusive that's why I don't do it. I figured those who want to read will read anyways. But then I didn't get any views or likes on the latest update isliye desperation mein tag kar diya! 😆

Will tag you from here on (which is only once cos it will be the last update! 😆)

Heavy make-out session toh hone hee wala hai. Aur kuch ho na ho! 😉😆

Originally posted by: prernapewdie

My poor shiva boy. 🤣🤪

I am so much in love with these two munchkins. 🤗

Aww thank you Prerna! And yes, Shiva deserves all our sympathies in this update! 😆

Originally posted by: Suparna2210

Oh wow Lizzie! The last update has me speechless! A Raavi in control is just what was needed and girl did you pull through! Bringing in Mrs. Singaporia back was a stroke of genius! Even her characterisation was apt! And the way you described the scene after! I could feel the air change and me as well! And the seduction! The way Raavi knew what she wants and is doing everything for it is amazingly heartwarming! The fun elements were also amazingly done!! I’m sad that this will end soon but I cannot wait to reread the whole thing in one go! Waiting for update!

Hey Suparna! I'm glad you thought Raavi in control is what is needed because what else will the girl do when the love of her life seems hellbent on running away from her?

Thank for mentioning Mrs. S and her characterization. She might possibly be my favorite side character OC that I've created! I'm glad you could feel the chemistry and the air changing, and I'm so humbled (and flattered) that you think this story is worth re-reading!

Thanks for dropping in a line!

Originally posted by: RainbowChaser

Dear lord in heaven, what was this !

I could feel the chemistry seeping through every single word.

You are magical with your Words❤️

So I was right about Mrs. Siganporia

And the cliffhanger will take me to.....

Can't wait 🌺

Hey Anuradha! Thanks for reading and your generous words about my writing!

You were right about Mrs. S! 😆

Thanks for reading!🤗

Originally posted by: Foxii

Raavi is in Love❤️

She admitted to Dhara... go get him Raavi👍🏼

She did give Shiva a hard time😆

You stopped when it was getting real hot....

#7

Can’t wait for the next part

loved it so much

Raavi has been in love for a while now, she realized it in the last update! 😳 Yes, but admitting it to Dhara was a big step forward for her. It shows she's committed.

Thank you! 🤗

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Koi baat nahi. Hota hai.

I just find the whole tagging thing really intrusive that's why I don't do it. I figured those who want to read will read anyways. But then I didn't get any views or likes on the latest update isliye desperation mein tag kar diya! 😆

Will tag you from here on (which is only once cos it will be the last update! 😆)

Heavy make-out session toh hone hee wala hai. Aur kuch ho na ho! 😉😆

Why last update ? Uske baad dusra likho gi na ?

Originally posted by: IshqKaRang

Okay, I read it again (coz why not) and I’ve finally rebooted enough of my functionality to be able to comment.

Love you for re-reading! 😳

First off, how on earth do you do this??!! How do you write so well, that despite the fact that they aren’t even doing the act, it all feels so darn unbearably hot and sexy? I mean, seriously, you got me hot, bothered and breathless at some point there.

Wow! Yes. Thank you! I aim for this because I'm a voracious reader (especially romances) and I love scenes that leave you breathless with anticipation and wanting more - more than actual consummation scenes. So if I've managed to do this in my own miniscule way, then I feel I'm doing something right!

Secondly, I love Raavi! This is way way way better pay back for the mess the Kaddu created of their first kiss. She is teasing him and teasing him and teasing him some more and the poor chap is helplessly being toyed with. I offer my not so sincere sympathy to a certain part of this Shiva’s anatomy 🤣

By Kaddu I'm guessing you mean Shiva? Why that particular nickname? I'm curious! 😆

And yes, that part of Shiva's anatomy is taking torture of the highest form right now thanks to Raavi's teasing. 😆Girl knows exactly what she's got and she's not shying from flaunting it!

And my oh my! Raavi’s bucket list is sure naughty. Making out in motion, eh? Nice! Go Raavi, go! Call the shots coz doesn’t look like Shiva will at this point. But you never know, maybe she has gotten him to the point where he all his control and overthinking just snaps and he takes over. Either ways, I’m dying to know what happens next.

I think the latter might be true. After taking so much torture, I think our man is ready to snap. Raavi girl you don't know what's coming for you! 😆

Penultimate chapter? But there are more things in Raavi’s wish list - the heavy making out while in motion, picking out the decor, then the ones on the wishlist we haven’t even got to yet. We need all of that!! Will Shiva ever get a chance to tease her? When will they finally succumb to their desires? I can’t survive without knowing all this! I’m serious!

The decor selection was a plot device to get them both in the truck so they could fulfill the make-out in motion one. Only numbers 4,8 and 11 are left now, and they will be revealed in the next one (the last one) but idk if we're gonna see Shiva actually fulfilling them. I'll have to leave you guys wanting something right? 😆

Please please please update soon and the longer the update, the better 😉

P.S: Rockstar writing skills. I bow down to thee. Please accept me as your no. 1 fan!

Damn girl, you making me cry! 😭

This might be my favorite comment! Thanks so much, Neet! Fan or not, your words are validation to my writing. So thank you. Truly.

Originally posted by: VaishnaviG

Why last update ? Uske baad dusra likho gi na ?

Ye wale story ke liye bas itna hee plan hai!

Baaki - dekhte hain if I will write more ShiVi!

Part 5

I will read and comment on each update separately because this is a masterpiece.i am way back on this and want to read each and every update what I have missed.

I love how you get the core of shiva and raavi's character so perfectly.

Them always up for a challenge, aren't they?

And the gol gol baatein!

Sigh! These two

The swimming lesson was so on point.him manipulating her and dobi raavi not getting it till the last moment.i love such stories which have physical intimacy draped in emotional conflicts and this is one of the best written stories of this genre which I have come across so far.

They are not doing anything exactly, but it's so sensual. Just them being near, even without any contact convey the tension they have between them.and that is the impact of your writing.

Krish as usual being a spoilsport in the last moment. Shiva being surprised why is she not fighting back? is she ok with whatever insane thing is going on between them?

Loved it ❤️