Take my breath away: ShiVi FF - Page 86

Originally posted by: VaishnaviG

This was hell hot Riya🔥

I love how Raavi teases him ☺️

Now a days you don’t tag me 😒I am katti with you

Thanks Vaishu! 🤗

You haven’t liked or commented on the previous updates so I thought you stopped reading! 😳

I usually don’t tag anyone- it’s just people forget otherwise and no one was reading - that’s why I tagged some people 😳

Don’t be katti 😒

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Thanks Vaishu! 🤗

You haven’t liked or commented on the previous updates so I thought you stopped reading! 😳

I usually don’t tag anyone- it’s just people forget otherwise and no one was reading - that’s why I tagged some people 😳

Don’t be katti 😒

Actually I missed it and if the update is very hot then I am tongue tied and I really don’t know what to comment 😆

I don’t what happened but least week I was very lazy to read long updates and even to comment thats why I took a week to comment on Inayaa’s story 😆I have my board exams around the corner so just busy with preparation .

But to tag me from next time and now in the next update I atleast want a heavy make out session and bit of touching here and there 😉☺️if deed is not going to happen soon

My poor shiva boy. 🤣🤪

I am so much in love with these two munchkins. 🤗

Oh wow Lizzie! The last update has me speechless! A Raavi in control is just what was needed and girl did you pull through! Bringing in Mrs. Singaporia back was a stroke of genius! Even her characterisation was apt! And the way you described the scene after! I could feel the air change and me as well! And the seduction! The way Raavi knew what she wants and is doing everything for it is amazingly heartwarming! The fun elements were also amazingly done!! I’m sad that this will end soon but I cannot wait to reread the whole thing in one go! Waiting for update!

Kar dala maine comment 🤡

Dear lord in heaven, what was this !

I could feel the chemistry seeping through every single word.

You are magical with your Words❤️

So I was right about Mrs. Siganporia

And the cliffhanger will take me to.....

Can't wait 🌺

Raavi is in Love❤️

She admitted to Dhara... go get him Raavi👍🏼

She did give Shiva a hard time😆

You stopped when it was getting real hot....

#7

Can’t wait for the next part

loved it so much

So Riya,(found your name while reading some comments here, not going to call you Lizzie anymore😆) the latest update made me speechless, dumbfounded whatever you want to call it. I read the update last night before going to bed (I live in the US) and finally got my thoughts together to comment now. The scenes are still playing in my head and that is the impact the update left on me.

Raavi has taken matters in her own hands and rightly so as Shiva has gone into sacrificial mode. But the way she is slowly bringing out his feelings while playing the same game he did with her. Mrs. S showed up and the way both escaped from her clutches was hilarious. The dance and the game, Raavi is winning him over and making him loosen up a bit. The dessert tasting session was HOT😆

You description of their costumes is making me imagine them in those attires😎

The way she closeted him in Dev's room to claim her loot and made Shiva realize what a fool he has been to avoid her or sacrifice all along. She indeed played him but with good intentions though😆

Krish and Dhara have been behind them, but Dhara being a sweet heart is helping Raavi achieve her goal 😆

And the final battle in the truck, her 7th item in the bucket list😆 can't wait to read how Shiva reacts.

Raavi hands on won in this chapter and Shiva did not realize who he was messing with😆 It's her day and he better understand that there is no escape route from this but to accept their relationship❤️

I can't wait to read the next part, hope its coming soon😆

P.S: I am in love with your Shiva and Raavi❤️

Originally posted by: EuphoricDamsel.

I just have a few words to say after channelizing my inner Dev and going on and about it like 'MAINE KAHA THA WOHI HAIN!' I was confused between two things it could have been Mrs. S or it could have been a random Mohalle-Wali-Aunty. I was some how veryyyy sure it wasn't Dishu,

That dialogue should have given it away. Kahan hai meri chipkali? Its had to be Mrs. S! Why would it be Disha?

Umm okay not that its her business but why she so snarky to my Raavi Baby though? Do I need to punch her? Maybe not but meh-

She's smitten with Shiva so maybe she doesn't like Raavi much? Also, she's judging her for jilting Champak. But maybe- just maybe- all that snark was just for show! 😆

Oh this one's outrageous. Truly outrageous. I don't think she knew anything, she was just being persistent but I like the fact that you've kept it sort of a mystery about whether she knew or not (or I might have read wrong because I was half asleep lol) Why did Shiva look shocked though when she explained what's wrong with Champak? Wasn't the surname he created enough for this creative improv vomit? Because what else should she have come up with that surname? 🤣

Yep, you didn't read wrong. I was hoping to sort of leave it a mystery as to whether Mrs. S had caught on to their facade or not! About Champak- I think Shiva was more taken aback at the fact that Raavi would boldly voice it to someone like Mrs. S. But he didn't know at that point what else she had in store for him! Vocalizing Champak's problems was the least of them! 😆

How are we supposed to know if this one performs adequately or not? Hamara writer hamko action hi nahi deta hai, kaise pata chalega humko?

Arre itna saara action diya iss chapter mein phir bhi complaints? 😆

[Just a clarification if I haven't already told you : 95% of the fandom fantasizes then with the wall its something we all have been manifesting unconsciously until people noticed and pointed it out. Me. I'm people.] 😆

I knew there was a laughing fit upcoming, simply because I'd been having my own for the whole scene. Not kidding. The whole conversation gave me a throwback to the first chapter and the innuendos ka pitaara I haven't gotten over.

I'm so glad this took you back to the first couple of chapters. Tbh, I was planning Mrs.S ka re-entry much earlier on in the proceedings. Now I think this was perfect cos it's time to wind up and she nicely sort of bookends the story!

Just a special appreciation for your Dhara here. This is what I expect and wanted from her in the show which we never got. Here she was sensible, with a wish to meddle but also know her positions and consider the boundaries created by Raavi. I loved it.

Idk what the Dhara in the show was supposed to be like but I thought she was supportive of ShiVi?

Don't mind but I kind of imagined my own set of songs. I literally can't help it. I'm incorrigible. Goriya re was the song of Juhi Chawala & Jackie Shroff right? Or am I misunderstanding it? Anyway...I played my own here. Actually PLAYED and paused and listened. Guess the song?

Idk, let me be honest. I sort of gave up on the songs. I kinda have overthinking fatigue by now. Mapping out tiny details can be exhausting especially when I have been putting out updates back-to-back like I have. So feel free to imagine whatever song you wanted them to dance to! Was that Mehndi lagake rakhna? Or the one from K3G - I forget that one. And yes, Goriya re from Aaina - Jackie and Juhi!

YIKES! There you go my reaction.

She did wreck him. Oh, poor boy. But-...Serves him right! I'm a little cruel that wayyy. 😈

We too Shiva. We too. We didn't expect her to go this far either. We feel you. But we happy about your plight. 🤪

I figured it was payback time for Shiva after putting Raavi through an emotional wringer! 😆

I came up with the title 'Wrapped around your finger' cos Shiva was literally that in this update, but then this scene brings a whole new different meaning to it and I'm so proud of myself rn, ngl! 😆

Lemme go listen to the Police song and the Cranberries one right away! 😆

The pallu was so diaphanous that it didn’t cover anything. Her sleeveless sequined corset blouse was clearly visible.

Okay I'm gonna pester you for this one. I simply am failing to put an imagination to this. Blank..I don't know whyyyy though. Its perfectly described and everything but I still am going to ask you to give me a link / picture / anything that gives me an idea exactly what she was wearing because I might have been so giddy after imagining him staring at her intensely that my brain went blank. LOL.

This is what I imagined Raavi wearing. This ensemble except in pale green.

And this outfit for the sangeet. Shiva didn't stand a chance!

And this one for the reception except in Lavender

“What the devil are you wearing?” he murmured with a touch of irritation. “This saree should be illegal! Do you know how every hot-blooded male in this place was looking at you?”

HAYYYYEEE MERA JELLY AAG BOI SHIVA KA SLIGHT VERSION AAYO REEEEE

THIS. I so wanted this. Oh, how I loved this. The devil part? Made me JUMP. Think what you may I'm not exaggerating in any way whatsoever. This was terrific. The one dialogue made my heart jump. AM I stupid?

No. No. You're not stupid. Are you kidding me? This dialogue made MY heart jump and I wrote it! ☺️

The strap pulling was something I never expected it was a tantalizing surprise. I adored it. Sexy / Subtle / perfect. Just perfect.

☺️☺️

I lost it when she kissed the earring. LOST IT. IT WAS SO SEXYYYY. Completely mad. Utter mad. But Oh the subtle stuff you've written.

Thank you! Yes, I love putting in subtle sexy moments such as these!

Same Krish. Same. Hum Bhi Kabse yahi intezaar kar rahe ki when will they get a room? Liz ko bolo pls koi. AB tho Krish is also hinting it. 🤪

Krish is hinting it because I made him hint it! 😆

Yuppitty-Hoppity-hoooo-Taran-Taran-Taraaa-Pumpaara!!! 🥳

Okay I remember being confused about how they'll get into this situation and how was this possible on a bike but HEEYYYHOO you made it so natural. Trust me, it didn't feel out of nowhere, which I thought could have been the case. So So So So lovely. Muuaawhhh. *Chef's Kiss*

I'm glad you felt that it didn't come out nowhere. I thought initially to have them make out on the bike because the bike is their thing, yanno? Then I thought Shiva will not be a equal participant if that were to be the case (He would have to keep his eyes on the road! 😆 and his hands on the handlebars! So yeah, this truck thing was born! And they get to have privacy too which is sone pe suhaga!

I screamed when you stopped there. No shit. In frustration of course. I wanted to read it. In the flow. Bht hot hota...You end on cliffy. Imma sad. I NEED THE NEXT ONE. CHAHIYE MATLB CHAHIYE.

PLS PLS PLS PLS PLS UPDATE SOONISH. ME DYING HERE.

Yeah today's gonna be busy so Idk if I will get any writing done. But this next one will be the last. Yeh toh pukka hai!

PS : I don't know what 8th is or if it is from the list you sent me but if the one which involved water (Nymph) isn't there can I shamelessly request you to write an OS on it? Because YAASSS That would be a killer thing to read and the forum WILL go mad over it. Trust me!!

Yeah, well, I'll take your word on it. Tbh my first update (the one with the innunedos) got like 50 likes but it's been dropping since so I think there's some sort of inner clique or something here which I think I'm missing out on cos I don't watch the show or participate in the EDTs.

And FYI, the one you mention is one of them, but number 8 is something quite different (I didn't share that one with you!)

Thanks, babe for the extra long comment! I love all the little details you point out like what you enjoyed about the update! It's very rare I get reviews like this! So thank you. Really. 🤗

Okay, I read it again (coz why not) and I’ve finally rebooted enough of my functionality to be able to comment.

First off, how on earth do you do this??!! How do you write so well, that despite the fact that they aren’t even doing the act, it all feels so darn unbearably hot and sexy? I mean, seriously, you got me hot, bothered and breathless at some point there.


Secondly, I love Raavi! This is way way way better pay back for the mess the Kaddu created of their first kiss. She is teasing him and teasing him and teasing him some more and the poor chap is helplessly being toyed with. I offer my not so sincere sympathy to a certain part of this Shiva’s anatomy 🤣

And my oh my! Raavi’s bucket list is sure naughty. Making out in motion, eh? Nice! Go Raavi, go! Call the shots coz doesn’t look like Shiva will at this point. But you never know, maybe she has gotten him to the point where he all his control and overthinking just snaps and he takes over. Either ways, I’m dying to know what happens next.

Penultimate chapter? But there are more things in Raavi’s wish list - the heavy making out while in motion, picking out the decor, then the ones on the wishlist we haven’t even got to yet. We need all of that!! Will Shiva ever get a chance to tease her? When will they finally succumb to their desires? I can’t survive without knowing all this! I’m serious!

Please please please update soon and the longer the update, the better 😉

P.S: Rockstar writing skills. I bow down to thee. Please accept me as your no. 1 fan!