Take my breath away: ShiVi FF - Page 88

Part 6

You light my fire

So it all starts with raavi and Dev. It has always been like that but suddenly the idea seems so wrong to raavi.

The way you have described Shiva's thoughts is beautiful. He is attracted to her badly, but knows very well about how inappropriate it is to have such sinful thoughts about the woman who is supposed to be your brother's wife.exploring their physical attraction to see where it goes seems too scandalous him.shiva for me as a character has been someone who is true to his morals,a family man who respects his brothers and bhabi. And this part screams that.

And then you focus on raavis thoughts highlighting her inner turmoil and finally the soft voice of shiva " are you? "

Another beautifully written update. 💞

Originally posted by: Pixiepadhi

Part 5

I will read and comment on each update separately because this is a masterpiece.i am way back on this and want to read each and every update what I have missed.

I love how you get the core of shiva and raavi's character so perfectly.

Them always up for a challenge, aren't they?

And the gol gol baatein!

Sigh! These two

The swimming lesson was so on point.him manipulating her and dobi raavi not getting it till the last moment.i love such stories which have physical intimacy draped in emotional conflicts and this is one of the best written stories of this genre which I have come across so far.

They are not doing anything exactly, but it's so sensual. Just them being near, even without any contact convey the tension they have between them.and that is the impact of your writing.

Krish as usual being a spoilsport in the last moment. Shiva being surprised why is she not fighting back? is she ok with whatever insane thing is going on between them?

Loved it ❤️

Thank you! I truly appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment on each update! 🤗

I'm so so glad you think I've gotten their characters right. No matter how many people tell me this and how many times, I feel validated each time I hear it because I've based these characters only on the research I've done on the show, and from what I've gotten from people who watch. This tells me I've done it right!

The swimming update was just one way to show their one-upmanship. They are both fiercely competitive and they both want to win and are willing to stoop to anything, even cheating, to ensure the other does not. It's kind of like a very delicious, sexy foreplay, isn't it? 😉

Thank you for pointing out the sensual moments. Physical attraction plays a very important part in ShiVi's bonding and I think relationships that have a healthy dose of both the emotional and physical do really well!

It takes Raavi a while to catch on that she's being subtly manipulated but once she does, she's having none of it! 😆

Thanks again for reading!

Originally posted by: Pixiepadhi

Part 6

You light my fire

So it all starts with raavi and Dev. It has always been like that but suddenly the idea seems so wrong to raavi.

The way you have described Shiva's thoughts is beautiful. He is attracted to her badly, but knows very well about how inappropriate it is to have such sinful thoughts about the woman who is supposed to be your brother's wife.exploring their physical attraction to see where it goes seems too scandalous him.shiva for me as a character has been someone who is true to his morals,a family man who respects his brothers and bhabi. And this part screams that.

And then you focus on raavis thoughts highlighting her inner turmoil and finally the soft voice of shiva " are you? "

Another beautifully written update. 💞

Dev and Raavi are looking like a go here. Raavi hasn't mustered up the courage to refuse Dev and Dev has actually said yes to Raavi. So all the contemplation makes sense here.

Okay so at the gym , Shiva sees Raavi in her state of undress and it's turning him on. He's angry at her for making him feel this way when he shouldn't be (like you pointed out - it's inappropriate for him morally because his family is important for him)

So there may have been some confusion while reading the dialogue because I've put in a lot of thoughts in between the two pieces of dialogue from Shiva and Raavi (I tend to do this a lot, and need to cut down on it! 😔)

Here’s how it would be if this were a screenplay.

Shiva: You know you're not allowed to dress like that in here! (he's alluding to the fact that she's in her sports bra)

Raavi: And you are? (She's hinting at the fact that he's topless too)

Then they dress up slowly, and that adds to the already heightened sexual tension.

I hope that makes it clearer how those two pieces of dialogue follow one another? I'd be terrible at writing screenplays 😆

Thanks again for the detailed comment! ❤️

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Thanks, Hinna! 🤗

I find her to be very serious at least ever since she has been married to Shiva!😆

I hope we get the long awaited consummation scene

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Thank you! I truly appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment on each update! 🤗

I'm so so glad you think I've gotten their characters right. Now many how many people tell me this and how many times, I feel validated each time I hear it because I've based these characters only on the research I've done on the show, and from what I've gotten from people who watch. This tells me I've done it right!

The swimming update was just one way to show their one-upmanship. They are both fiercely competitive and they both want to win and are willing to stoop to anything, even cheating, to ensure the other does not. It's kind of like a very delicious, sexy foreplay, isn't it? 😉

Thank you for pointing out the sensual moments. Physical attraction plays a very important part in ShiVi's bonding and I think relationships that have a healthy dose of both the emotional and physical do really well!

It takes Raavi a while to catch on that she's being subtly manipulated but once she does, she's having none of it! 😆

Thanks again for reading!

@bold you dont watch the show?

I have been a regular viewer of this show for more than 200 plus episodes, but I still don't understand the character and their actions sometimes. Kudos to you if you have got this accurate shivi touch without regular viewing.its so right. 👏👏👏

Originally posted by: Pixiepadhi

@bold you dont watch the show?

I have been a regular viewer of this show for more than 200 plus episodes, but I still don't understand the character and their actions sometimes. Kudos to you if you have got this accurate shivi touch without regular viewing.its so right. 👏👏👏

Nope don’t watch it. I began writing ShIVi since a forum friend asked me to adapt another one of my stories to fit them, and then went from there thanks to the reception I got here! 😳

Thank you for the validation! 😳

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Nope don’t watch it. I began writing ShIVi since a forum friend asked me to adapt another one of my stories to fit them, and then went from there thanks to the reception I got here! 😳

Thank you for the validation! 😳

Be sure to Thank the forum friend on behalf of me 😍

We are so desparate for stories, because most of us feel the show doesn't do justice to the amazing backstory the characters have and doesn't explore deep into their emotions.and such stories? Thank you.

PS- I am onto reading your next update

Originally posted by: Pixiepadhi

Be sure to Thank the forum friend on behalf of me 😍

We are so desparate for stories, because most of us feel the show doesn't do justice to the amazing backstory the characters have and doesn't explore deep into their emotions.and such stories? Thank you.

PS- I am onto reading your next update

Prats, this one is for you! Though I dunno if I deserve it!

But I see so many stories on this forum! More than I've come across in any forum in recent times!

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Ye wale story ke liye bas itna hee plan hai!

Baaki - dekhte hain if I will write more ShiVi!

Dekhte wekhte nahi apun ko maangta hai content.

Mujhe nahi pata...likho kuch...A rendition of a novel maybe?

Something re-imagined on Shivi?

Oh how I'd love a retelling of TVWLM

Originally posted by: LizzieBennet

Thanks, babe for the extra long comment! I love all the little details you point out like what you enjoyed about the update! It's very rare I get reviews like this! So thank you. Really. 🤗

Apan ko jitna action do kam hai...apun ko chahiye aur. 🤪

If next one is the last I want an epilogue too. Main hun greedy. Shamelessly.

She wanted Shivi to resolve their differences, yes, but her constant reprimanding and counselling ONLY raavi to take every step for her relationship irked me. Not to mention the meddling. She acted as if its a project of her, her little baby Shivi, that she gave birth to and wants to succeed. It wasn't wrong just felt too weird because she was supposed to LOVE RAAVI to the moon and back.

K3G babe. Yeh ladkaaaaa Hayyyeee Allahhh.

Awww Shakti...My baby Shakti in a Saree. Now I understand. Sorry for pestering you lol.

Is it just me or the pink lehenga has a very regal and old is gold vibe to it? The kadhaai seems majestic. Not a common design. I don't know.

IKR?! The bike would have been too risque for my anxiety driven heart. 😆

Tho matlb next mein hi we're getting the water one too>???? ☺️