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Posted: 10 years ago
Kiran, Ann, Riya, saleha, manny, jaya, harshika anuraj, Megha, Priya, deepika an I m sure sakeena will join u soon, you all make me go crazy with ur words
I know I write just about ok, but u all mke me feel I do sometimes touch a cord somewhere, but this is overwhelming me
I can't reply, coz I m speechless
The exceeding amount of love that u all have shown towards BIshq makes me forget every other pain or problems in my life
Thank you will fall short, just to let u all know that u just made my day
Every word is priceless for me
Touched by ur love
Can't thnk you enough
Love u all
Sim
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Sometimes its just silence that haunts yes ...when we try to run away from the inner voice of our souls...a pain that no one wants to feel...a hurt that no one sees...yes ..a breaking point ...

Words that have the power to heal ..silence that has the power to break ...this and the next chapter were the most closest to my heart ...as we seep towards the last part of the periclimax ...from then on 4 chapters and the story ends...

I will miss it ...it was my maiden venture ..and thanks to ur love i have the courage to write more ...made so many friends, heard so many complements ...that i am speechless ...

This 2 chapters were the best to write ..I learned something new ...and thats why I loved it ...compared to other chapters maybe it dosent have a shine since it waited to debut for 5 months, but these is pure words ..pure feelings ...I still love them

Dedication: Chapter 42-43, to two people...Ann this ones for you, my best work ...as a little gift ...to the person, a friend i respect the most in this literate world. You have,are and will always remain my inspiration...and I know u have waited long enough to read this. Just about no one can interpret the feelings woven in this story as you though ...the writer within me ..always seeks for more ...

Second, the the only man I can ever type just my imagining a face ...so angelic his portrayal was that it compelled me to write ...my muse ..my inspiration. Someone who changed the way i feel and write ..who made me better ...the man who I will never meet or even be able to tell what he means to my small world . Some form of love dosent need labels, dosent need reciprocation nor acknowledgement. Am proud of my adoration for him...a virtual bond that sometimes is more potent than my real life sweetheart. My Zain is with me...yet this man who emoted so well that he pushed me to tell u his tale...Harshad ...this ones for you ...stay blessed ...

And to all of you ...

Hang on ...

Love

Sim

Chapter 42

Chupan-Chupaiye...

She stopped her car and got down ...straightening the ghagra, the mozdi ...its heaviness was wearing her off...once again adjusting the Oodhni ...now pulled down to hide almost half of her face.The lips with a dark shade of maroon lipstick quivering for a moment...the adrenaline rising ...finally she will see him ...

She closed her eyes ...to make a quick wish ...Ya Allah ...uski hifaazat karna ...aisa koi manzar mat dikhana jisse mera bharosa tujh par se dagmaga jaye...agar maine kabhi teri sach dil se ibadat ki hai...pancho waqt nammaz ada ki hai...toh tujhe uss har ek sajde ka vaasta ...mere Zain koh meri baho mai lana...

(Allah is sufficient for me and He is the Best Helper)

"Has -bi -yal-laa-hu wa ni'- mal wa-keel" as she read the dua for the time of distress and took her palms over her face ...to say Ameen...the confidence rising with every step

Rehmat khuda kar zara ik dafa

Dil dene ka keh zara falsafa

Ye naacheez ik cheez uski maange hai tujhse

Musafir ye dehleez uski maange hai tujhse

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata?

Pataa kar.

Main uske bina be-pata hoon

Be-pata be-pata be-pata hoon

she waited ...and the small Bluetooth on her ear finally came alive ...

Aaliya ...humari baat gaur se suno...aage 10 minute ke doori par ek khandar sa bangla hai ...tumhe waha jaana hai ...dibba lekar ...

humare information ke mutabik who 7 log hai ...aur shayad Zain bhi hoga ...

Humari ek search team woh SMS mai aaye huae address par gayi hai...par jab tak humein who cheez nahi milte hum in terrorist koh hirasat mai nahi le sakti...

tumhe unka dhyaan batana hai ...agle do ghante tak...tumhari ghadi mai humne timer set kiya hai ...joh humare control room se connected hai ...humein jaise green signal milega ...hum raid marenge ...

Zain jaha hai usse dhoondo, waha pahuchna ...aur tab tak in logon ka dkyan batana ...samjhi...

The instructions were clear..as fear mixed with an unknown courage and urge to protect him engulfed her ...she smiled ...and put the phone and Bluetooth aside ...

again checking the fully loaded gun, it had taken her three hours to learn to hold and shoot it ..the concealed weapon ...was a part of her secret purse ...that she hoped they would never search...

she picked up the humongous lunch box ...the police had arranged them from the caterers ...food enough to feed 10 people...

She got the signal ...and started walking towards the old bungalow, the weight of her dress and the big lunch box almost straining her arms...as she placed the ghoongat further down and put the lunch box on her hips ..the thumka so petite , that the cops watching her ...also smiled ...she looked gorgeous ...

The view cleared to a old rusted gate enclosing a bungalow...deserted for several years...she hoped that the police were right ...since she couldn't see any human being around ...no sound ..only the barren crunchy leaves and her anklets giving a background score ...

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata...Pataa kar.

Main uske bina be-pata hoon ...Be-pata be-pata be-pata hoon

The bungalow was built during the British era ...the iron gates screeched when she opened and closed them...She had no contact now...her phone and Bluetooth were away in the car ...

she pulled down her ghoongat further...low enough so that she would not stumble ...and walked towards the door ...when in a sudden flash of a moment she felt a gun on her waist ...her breathing stopped ...as she didn't turn back ...

Ruko.....a mens voice held her at gun-point ...Kaha chali ...

As Aaliya spoke ...very sweetly ...Ram Ram sa (greetings)...Falso khulo dikh gayo(gate was open) ...to aa gayi...her modulated extra feminine voice seduced his senses...

Khaano Khaliyo kai (did you eat your food)...she asked him with her mock Marwari tone...

Kaale toh koi aur lugai aayi thi(yesterday some other lady had come) ...he asked suspiciously, still pushing the gun on her petite figure ...

ha sa ( yes) aree who toh mari Maasa thi (she was my mom) ...Aaliya crooned tensed ..

The women he was inquiring was currently sitting in a police van ...away ...their clue to reach the den

Chauke(ok) aavo sa(come in ) ...he told her to step in ...as he kept the gun back and pulled out his mask ...and walked ahead ...

As Aaliya walked behind him ..pulling up her ghoongat to see her surroundings and lift her legs over the corroded and dusty steps ...again praying ...the moment they entered the main door...after several knocking as the secret code ...she pulled her disguise again ...the heart thumping louder now...

She looked inside the smelly and deserted big room ...it was in ruins ...she walked slowly towards the small gathering of people...their voices were all too familiar ... As they abruptly stopped chatting looking at her legs ..the eyes lewdly scrutinizing her shapely calves ...

Tu kathi se aayi (Where did you come from)...the taller one walked very close to her ...as she froze, in her old memories ...

She didn't speak as she was re-introduced ...aree Ganga ne bataya nahi ki uski pase koi chamak challo hai ...pehle bol deti ...as he bite his tongue ...and licked his lips suggestively ...

She stood still being examined ...ae ..tare ne talshi toh li ne is chori ne ...the heart now jumping in defense ...as he came closer ...and moved his hands around her waist ...as she moved a bit ...to hide the weapon ...the fist tightening to give him a punch ...the control on her anger diminishing ...as his hands moved over her arms brushing along her bosoms ...intentionally ...she looked down ...

As he laughed ...Choki laage ..chori , Tu ghani futri dikhe( you are very beautiful)...

par taro chehra kahi dekha sa lage hai mane...jara ghoonghhat toh utha ...(I have seen you somewhere, pull your veil up)

Aaliya ...got scared and she laughed ...Dhatt...ki Sa ...ghungto utarar se pan ghani paiso lago che ( to pick the veil, I charge a hefty price) as they all whistled ...

Tharo naam kaain hein (whats your name) ...

Bijali ...Alliya said adding a melody to it...

Chokha ...ghugario jaise toh taari avaz hai ( you sound like a musical anklet)...as they all sat around her to eat the dinner ...

Aree dabba toh khulo...aur yehi par baitho ...they almost said in unison ...admiring her celestial beauty as Aaliya continued smiling shy ...the lips pouting a bit more than required now...

She sat cross legged on the ground avoiding their prying eyes, trying to see her face...

She opened all the food and served them ... Dal baati with gate ki sabzi and aromatic churme ke ladoo..tantalizing their taste buds ...

Ahhh...jemo(eat) as she served and passed on the plates ...the food disappeared and heavy burps appeared ...in no time ...as she realized Zain was not around in the room ...maybe he was not with them

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata...Pataa kar.

Main uske bina be-pata hoon ...Be-pata be-pata be-pata hoon

As one of them picked the leftovers of his plate a bit of rice and a bit of curry and handed it over to Baban, who had walked with her from the gate to take down for their capture...

Kunkeda ne aapi des (give it to the silly man), the words hit her heart with a blade ...as she forced her anger down again ..he was with them ...and he was still hidden from her view ...

Continued...

Edited by Zainedil - 10 years ago
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Continued...

The chatting and laughter increased their decibels ...as she assured all of them had eaten including Baban, who was a very poor eater ...as she was wading time now ...she was at peace ...she had to find Zain before the police arrived ...

As she started chatting with them ..when they came too close to her ...she spoke

Aree wah aaj toh uparwale ni Ghana Ghana dhanyawad ( I should thank god today)

...Meri toh bachpan se sapna tha ki kisi qaidi koh dekhu...Maasa bata rahi thi ...ke taar paas koi qaid hai ....( my mom was saying you have a prisoner)

They all stopped talking and looked at her with dead silence...

Toh ...yeh baat kisi se kahi toh nahi tune(you haven't told this thing out)... their leader spoke in anger ...

Naasa ...mari itni juraat( I wont dare to)...par ek baar dekhna hai ...dekh saku ke ...she asked ...uneasily

Ubho .(stand)...as she stood up ...that very second ..mhare paase aana dekhkar usse ...Aree Baban le ja isse ...dikha de usse...

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata...Pataa kar.

Main uske bina be-pata hoon ...Be-pata be-pata be-pata hoon

Aagto (hurry)...Baban held a metal door open leading towards the basement ...she walked in fully knowing that she had to extend her stay till police comes ...

It was dark and humid, as Aaliya lowered her head to enter towards the underground basement ...She could smell burnt fire around ...she would finally see him her heart was getting restless...

Accha sun...bahut akdu(proudy) aur vendo(mad) hai woh...baat mat karna ...mai tareko andar le jaunga ...par usse pata na chale...Baban spoke slowly as though showing his prized catch ...

Thhek sa (Ok) ...she said still concealing her face further...

Ek baat poochu tare se...she wanted to gain his confidence ...

Pooch na chamak challo ..tari avvaz sunne toh mai apni jaan bhi de du ..taare vaaste ...as he came closer...she moved back scared ...

Tareko Hindi aati hai( do you know hindi)...

Haa ...aati hai ..pooch kay poochna hai ...(ask whatever you want to ask)

Woh ..kun hai ...(who is he)

Pata nahi ...

Toh uthae ke kyu laaye ...

Aree ...Vela hai ...uske paas humara ek phone hai ...he came close ..shhh..kiise batana mat ...hum school mai se laaye the usse ...aur uski woh khoobsurat heroine koh ...

Oh toh who bhi hai uske saath ...do do log aree baba re baba...the eyes exaggerating her tone

He laughed ...yeh kya honeymoon suit hai...isne hi kaha tha uss raat ...usse ghar chodo ..phone de dunga ...bawlo manus ...

Tezz kyu befiqr mann dhundhal ke melu aaye

Lamho ki iss bheed mein

Mujhko pal de fursat ke

Madmast kambakht fiqrein dikhaye...

Oh itraaye

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata...Pataa kar.

Main uske bina be-pata hoon ...Be-pata be-pata be-pata hoon

Toh phone mila ...she asked in a serious tone

he laughed again ...aree thenga mila ...

yeh vedo manoos ...pata hai ...humse khana mangvaya ...phone aur chloroform ki bottle bhi ...khud behosh kiya usse ...humei kaha tha ki sabot lakar do ki who ghar pahuch gayi tab doonga phone...

Dhamki di tarre koh as she controlled a small giggle ...thinking how smart Zain was to fool them

Aur hum ...rahe sabke sab budbarg (fools)...chod aaye usse waha ...

saboot bhi diya ...paper mai tasveer aayi thi ...tv par news ...

par beero(brother) ...phone toh door ...baat karne koh bhi tayar nahi hai ...as he spewed some bad words for Zain ...

Uske vajah se yaha abhi tak atke hai hum...ab nikle kaise yaha se ...pehro badayo hai unhone ...as he continued talking

Ajeeb aadmi hai ...us raat jab hum uske mashuka koh lene aaye, to baiji ne kaha thoda aur chloroform sungao ...kahi uth na jaaye...are yeh pagal daud pada hum par ...

chod hi nahi raha tha ...itna kaskar uska haath pakda tha ...hum chaar the aur who ek ...pagal hai pagal ...baiji toh uss rat chup baithe ...bole ek baar phone aa jaye phir niptenge saale se ....

As Aaliya looked down at her hands the scratch marks ...he still tried to protect her ...even after giving her away ...the tears dropping on her hands now ...

Toh chod kyu nahi diya usse ...she controlled her gait and anger

Aree ...usne humein dekh liya hai ...ab kaise jaane de ...

par kahi bhagne ki koshish bhi nah karta ...khana dete hai toh khata hai...nahi dete toh maangta bhi nahi...jais usse kuch mil raha ho humse ...

Pakka Musalman hai ...namaaz padta hai ...har roz...usse dekh kar lagta hai ...ki jaise humare hi intezaar kar raha ho ...

kabhi kabhi humei usse darr lagta hai ...kyunki who kabhi cheekta bhi nahi ...aaj tak uski dard wali ahh nahi suni humese kisine ...tough manoos che ...

Aaliya looked down tensed ...she was anticipating a quiet Zain ...but was scared to ask Baban what all they have done to break him ...

Baban turned towards another darker area below the stairs and walked briskly to reach a cellar ...a barbed door ...with a big cold and damp floor...littered with food packets ...

The smell was nauseating, she slowly pulled her ghoongat and hid her face in the dark so that Baban would not see her ...

she had started crying now ...as she had realized ..maybe the Zain she was about to see ...will be unbearable to her heart ...but she had to be alert for his safety and wade more time ...

Aaliya looked intently when Baban opened the gates ...two locks ...he opened with a bunch of keys ...the cellar that was used in olden days to store wine ...was freezing

...a small oil lamp sat at the corner of the room...hung loosely from a half broken nail ...and a small window...on those high cellar walls would have been the only respite of breath of fresh air ...

With great difficulty Aaliya controlled her urge to rush ahead and hug the small figure resting on the floor...as she saw him sleeping on the floor ...

she pulled the veil up to see him properly ...the eyes bleeded to see him ...as he moved a bit hearing the footsteps ...breaking the damp muteness of the dark hell that he was staying in ...

Aaliya stood still to see what a wretched man looks like ...when life turns its back on them ...when love turns into hatred...when silence grips its arms of despair ..when running away ...binds you more towards the darkness ...

Bas ik khayal uska dil ki fitrat badal de

Dil dene ka keh zara falsafa

Hai chaha usey shiddaton se yun toot kar ke

Woh kyun na mila muddaton se yun rooth kar ke

Khudaaya tu bata

Kahaan uska pata? pata kar.

Main uske bina bepata hu

Bepata bepata bepata hu

Khudaaya tu bata: Kahaan uska pata?

Pata kar.

Main uske bina bepata hu

Bepata bepata bepata hu

Zain ...the name silently slipped from her lips ...as he turned back ..almost knowing that she was looking at him ...smiling ...her heart crumpled in her eyes ...to see a man ...so lost in darkness that her belief in Khudda was shaken ......Ya Allah ...the words spoken on seeing him ...as her gaze fell on his shadow...a crawling pain now wriggling through her spine ...

Aaj pata chala ...humein ki pyaar kya hota hai ...

Jab dil kisike dard se pehle... aahe bharkar rota hai...

Palat kar dekh mai aai hu tere paas...

Bina tere adhoore hai mere har ehsaas...

SIM

Pre-cap: A confrontation ...a battle ...a fight ...a bullet ...a death ...a story yet to be told ...


Edited by Zainedil - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Res!
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Firstly Sim, Sorry for not commenting in the last few chapters, I'm out sick...
Secondly...The Story!

Aaliya.
It seems someone is off with a bang, her brain has unknowingly been cured by the fact of loosing him...it's weird that sometimes the cause is the cure...she was put in a dilemma of 'Rhea' because she had lost him back then... And now the same way this time once again she's lost him but this time it became the cure to her brain...

Aaliya is character full of self respect, trust and 'Love' she is a soft hearted person that at the end lets go of all bad times and is always ready to accept what life, what Allah has in plan for her...

This time maybe for Zain her rules changed, but the truth is that her self respect was hurt, and the damage was a bit tougher to repair. But yes it's 'Love' we're talking aboit and this feeling has a million emotions a million ways to express! Unknowingly maybe you never want to show what you feel but the fewest of words explains worth a million!

One thing I'd want is that Aaliya should realize Zain's love for her in actual terms, and I really want her love to go way stronger! So the next time she things a hundred times before she puts her Love through a test...

For her search, well that's for you to write and us to read...

One thing.
Love.
At times when we don't express and let our heart out...we then face a situation where it seems 'If we would have back then, we wouldn't have been here...'. Being through that we understand that expressing means all...it's the words that heal. Maybe the other person dosent accept...but atleast the heart feels that it spoke. Atleast there's no guilt...

Sometimes it might happen that we fear because of rejection once. But until you try like Zain...you will never find out what's on the otherside...

Sim.
This story is a priceless love story...what makes it so alive is the 'Love' you've added in it to make it a lovestory!

It seems so real...and as I always say it's a mirror to a unknown story...

I'm marveled with you!
Edited by zayacrazy - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
another amazing update...
so aaliya finally reach to her kit kit...
nd I hope she will save him as well as herself...
bt precap scared me...
curious to knw abt next...
Pls update ASAP...
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Posted: 10 years ago
Awesome blawsome updte Sim!
Okay okay, i know blawsome is no word but bhaavnaao ko samjho, shabdo ko nahii!!!
Hehe, i am becomming funny... but actually i loved the chapter...
Aaliya is off on her mission now! Yoohooo!!!
She is gonna get Zain back...
Amazingly written...
Haa! That use of Marwadi language was amazing! lLike, i dnt know the language so much, but i can at least understand if someone is talking in Marwari... And i loved it completely!
It brought a perfect essence to the terrorist feeling...
Hats off!
Very excited for the next chappy...
pls continue soon...
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Posted: 10 years ago
Great update. Finally aliya found zain poor guy how much more will he suffer. Aliya did a good job getting to zain but they are still in danger. Cant wait to read zains reaction to finding aliya there the poor guy did so much to get her out and she puts herself in danger to find him. They better be ok lol Cant wait for the next chapter.
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Wonderful update
Wonderfully written
Finally aliya found zain I wonder how he is
I find it some where feel its zains cure aliya
It thrilling excited to know what s next
Do continue soon
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THere is something about BI Ishq that goes beyond words , it just can't be tell ! It just bring alive Emotions of the characters in readers , in us , literally everything can be felt her fear apprehension her fear of seeing him in a unbearable state yet finding him being her biggest cure her Zain , this is the best FF on Zaya that I have read ! Hats off Sim !
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Posted: 10 years ago
loved d chap...truly amazing... I loved that marwari lang ;) ...u hv written it so perfectly... aaliya found him ...really excited for d next chp ...plz cont soon

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