Beneath The Surface - An IshRa SS | Last Ch - Pg 28 - Page 26

Originally posted by: Bruce_L

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Aani, personally I felt there was no need to leave an author's note since I can understand there was no inspiration for you to go to the depth of Ishita's character and write more about her.
Its just the beginning, there's much time left to show Ishita's character in detail (I believe!) so lets look forward for some sort of that to happen in the show which may inspire you more to write about her, hopefully.
Coming back to this topic;
Got your point which you've expressed in the last part of this OS in particular.
Aani I have a different thought and some views that is so contrary to yours.
Its not the right place and time to discuss. Some other time if situation permits.
But But, let me tell you any of above couldn't stop me from admiring your way of narration ...
This was one more fab OS of yours !!!
PS - Aani, you can call me Kavitha or continue calling me Bruce 😊

Originally posted by: afsanaanjum

Hey there Aani, do pardon me for being pathetically late but yes like i said I'm lazy as hell. 😃
Read 3,4 and 5 together. Here are my views:

No need for apologies Afsana I am late myself in replying to you as well 😳

Part 3 : Yes, parents do end up erring at times hence the duty taken up by the eldest of the lot to rectify veritably. That is what Raman did being the eldest and what his wife did was to assist him. The portrayal of the fact that any human who is reticent when it comes to acknowledgement is actually indebted to the other to a huge extent in his heart - amazing. Love you for this. He accepts the truth to himself which he never will in public. That speaks volumes - "Self-acceptance". Many are vociferous while acknowledging facts but they never truly feel it from within. Wonderful. I would then say it is OK if you don't express and feel it then.😳

Parents indeed may not intentionally do so, but yes I do believe they err - they are humans after all and the reason Raman takes not only the responsibility, the onus to set things right isn't merely out f an obligation he feels as the oldest of the lot but because he feels genuinely a remorse so overwhelming that the only way he can find some semblance of peace is only by setting the wrongs right as much as he can. I believe self- awareness is the key to peace or any sort of distraught we face in life. A man who can accept things for themselves, can accept his role in how they shaped up and is willing to do what it takes can only attain things important in life 😳



Part 4 : Aaah here comes the protagonist who is chivalrous, strong, sturdy - possessing all the qualities a man should who surreptitiously keeps an eye on his wife for whom he feigns hate!😆
My my, could this get any better? YES! It actually did! They come across an acquaintance and they end up reminiscing the past. He starts to ponder over his wife's status quo which was presumed to be hunky-dory. Never had he seen her pallor. The knight in him vanishes to reveal the benevolent, compassionate man "Beneath the Surface". What an epistle Aani! I admire you now!😳

You're not in front of me so sending you this : 🤗

thank you Afsana 🤗 Raman is a whole box of contradictions and that's what makes him so amazing as a muse since you can actually have a lot to play with - he can be the most insensitive, most ruthless man there is when he wants to be but at the same time the part of him that he wants to tamp down - which he would rather never expose again in his life - comes to the fore when she comes into the picture... and he cant help that so yep he is awesome in that way.

Originally posted by: afsanaanjum

Back again.😛
Now lastly bu not least :

Part 5 : Here comes the tormented guy who is also a husband and feels bedevilled by his wife's reclusive aspect regarding her own turmoils masked with an amiable frontier. A pleasure to witness a man with a strong foothold and mind set-up to being sympathetic and befuddled by the hullabaloo in his mind and heart!

The way I see it - Raman is already befuddled to quite an extent by Ishita recently - with his growing attraction for her, and his stance that he never wants to be ever attached to anyone in his life - not allow any woman to make him vulnerable... he is there but yep, watching this side of hers, one which he never expected off her in his wildest dreams it agitates him beyond words...he cannot help but want her while he doesnt want to want her as well - but amidst this, the most important thing to him becomes her pain, which he never knew existed - and somehow now that he does he wants to help her because somewhere down the line she has begun mattering to him😳

Then he takes an initiative which people will term as "sensible and mature" and that is the hand of friendship. To stand by through thick and thin, and let the audience use their imaginations till they are sated and feel its time for the epilogue!😳
I guess I can write more on this but i should stop now!😆

Friendship in a marriage is to me the most vital thing, like Friedrich Nietzsche has been quoted saying It is not a lack of love, but a lack of friendship that makes unhappy marriages.😳

One more thought : the way you depicted the inception of a life-long relation deserves and applaud.👏 Anything good always starts with friendship. That's exactly what you did Aani. (Would love to know your full name though.)
The finale definitely evokes the respect, admiration and also the dominance of mind over matter when it comes to friendship on a personal level.😳

thank you so much for saying this Afsana 😃 as for my name... will pm ya 😳

Now coming back to your style of writing. Commenting on it is unnecessary nowadays but yes, acknowledging it is possible right?😃
The best part of your methods is the quotes, which you use as an overture or maybe a prologue at times. You do know to hit the right chords and you know the instrument you master. Hence, that helps you in polishing what you do. The quotes, the quotes, the quotes! I have bookmarked it!😆


☺️ I am out of words, all I can say is thank you for these kind words of appreciation. And also for appreciating the quotes 😳 - as an avid reader I love to explore various genres of books but find it fascinating when an epigraph sets the tone of a chapter/volume of a book or the book itself entirely - giving away the gist of the story and yet revealing nothing... the context is a given but the content - it becomes a mystery which excites me and hence the use of them, Also its good to see another quote lover 😊

Lovely piece of work. Desperately awaiting some more now.

P.S : Thanks a ton for the PMs. I know I'm late but you have forgiven me already.😆 Hence, no more apologies! Pretty please don't stop writing in this forum. Waiting for the next time when i see another PM from this girl hidden in a riddle(-Ek Paheli-)! - Worst possible humour i know!😆

😆 😆 No don't worry the humor is not at all bad and I do hope the show never stops fascinating me so that I may also always write on it as much and whenever I possibly can,

Originally posted by: gupta.aditi20

hey aani..

sorry for not commenting earlier... i was not well...

so now coming to this part...

i have just one word for it... BEAUTIFUL... seriously this part was beautiful...

just the simplicity... of this part with a little bit of realism.. has made this ss a magical one...

the awkwardness of not sharing things right now..felt so right...

i mean its so amazing the way you have written...

not so emotional... and not too much of strangeness... just PERFECT...

and yes... i can totally understand about not able to write about ishita's past... hope cv's would sho some lght on that matter too... but not right now...

already there's so much on plate...

and hope that light doesn't come right before confession... it would be damn predictable... that they'll confess in anger...

but yes back to your ss...

it was a lovely ending...

i do hope you'll write more... because there is so much depth in what you write...

lots of love..

Originally posted by: MysticRiver

well written...

Originally posted by: fraser

finally one ss down from reading list.. amazing aani.. i just loved it...
perfect ending for me as i don't want their further romance or nok jhok hope you got what i mean here...
you altogether present raman prespective here thank you for that because somewhere i find if you present it from ishita view than story had more emotional breaks specially where raman n his ex concern and the drama off adi too set something there...
finally somewhere raman know what his taunts does to his wife and her extra expression face too volumes with something
throughout the read out i was like awww with all the scenerios...
thank you for the good reads

i an here with a mission...
knows what is it...
it sures one has to find it...
but don't know how to find it...
words are short...
i got to find this..
experience is the key to this...
let it go is the answer of this...

thank you once again