Arshi OS: Flirting With Love Part 2 pg24 3/23

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ara_000

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Posted: 12 years ago

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sammy di 🤗

i should thank u for mentioning my name here specially 😊

i am glad dat u have alwaz loved my comnt 😳

love ya ❤️

take care 😊

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anera

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Posted: 12 years ago

#112

hey just read this os very beautiful
love ur style i can imagine all the place and people arshi meet
now going to read next part

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#113

I want more flirting action...

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

#114

And more BankeLal he is too funny...

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Your thank you note was so endearing ...thank you for writing it...

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Posted: 12 years ago

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Happy BankeLal to you...

Sami, it was superb, funny and naughty. Loved the way you incorporated the poems into the story.

Loved a flirty Khushi, knowing that her obvious flirtatious behaviour is making him uncomfortable and she senses that and being naughty continues ...but then he asked for it so it was fair.

Loved how Arnav was getting embarrassed not expecting her to pull off this flirting thing so proficiently and with so some confidence, looks like she called his bluff...and that too in front of Aman...ha ha ha..especially the part where Aman enters with his snack and sees her in his lap and is surprised and and awkward...ha ha and Khushi enjoying their obvious discomfort and instead of toning it down she takes it up a notch higher...

The dressing up in an almost backless blouse , her strategically exposed stomach she has everything planned perfectly, he getting excited with the sight and touch of her back and dinner with the family the footsie, wanting to take his wife back to their room to devour her rather than what was on his plate.

Loved the date, Banke thinking at the end that she was shy with his touch and thinking the date went well to Sheetal's totally contradicting view and experience of the same eventful evening was hilarious. Felt like they were talking about two separate evenings.

Glad she realises that Khushi is a nice person..

You did a wonderful job with both couples. You kept them true to their characters and spun around them a super story...the visual effect was hilarious too, Sheetal's disgust with the paan bouquet and her discomfort at the dhaba the ambience and food.

Maybe next OS can be of Khushi and Sheetal meeting for coffee and some naughty revelations and plans..

Edited by vandana.sagar - 12 years ago

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Mints23

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Posted: 12 years ago

#118

Hahaha!! Sami and Vandana... I love this flirting and I loved this gift!! Thnak you Sami for this lovely dedication and I can't tell you how special it is to me as it is combined with Vandy's lovely poems. Atleast you got her to write poems for your OS, if not an OS itself!!! Lets take baby steps and we shall succeed one day in making her write!! 😆

Absolutely enjoyed how Khushi openly flirted with Arnav in his office. Khushi Kumari Gupta Singh Raizada, never backs out of a challenge... and neither a punishment. I am surprised that Arnav actually managed to survive the entire day with Khushi teasing him with her words and physical touches... Kya self control hai!! Wah!! 👏

And this bevakoof Sheetal is back with poor Bankelal!! She actually managed to convince him to go out with her!!! Vandy... the poem on Bankelal and his paan's bouquet is superb. It is one of the best from you... I swear. I am excited to see this comic style of writing from you. Even the poem of the Dhaba is brilliant... and I think you an Sami should definitely team up in this kind of combined writing!! 👍🏼

Loved how Khushi tries to flirt with Arnav in front of their family and Arnav understanding his wife's shatir dimaag... acts nonchalant. Unfortunately for him, even the slights of her touches are enough to arouse him. No wonder he wants to finish his dinner n their room... and his idea of a dessert is defiantly what Khushi has in mind! 😉

I am glad for everything that happened to the devious Sheetal. She deserved it and more. It was a hilarious thought of Baanke Lal trying to kiss her an then in the end actually shoving a pawn in her mouth. What a disaster it was for that woman... and how thrilled I am to see the failure of her plan!!

And then finally Arnav admits that Khushi has successfully flirted with him throughout the day... and can't wait to get her into their room for their delicious dessert treat. Sami, if you do not want us to demand the extension of this story, then why do you have to write so beautifully? Because now I am craving for more!!! 😳

Sami, this is just an inspiration... for you to continue this series... Hope you like it!

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chitra

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Posted: 12 years ago

#119

Wow!!!
Bankelal at his best!!! How could I miss this one?? 😆

I loved this story but I did wonder how in the world ASR did challenge Khushi to flirt with him??!!
I was thinking- does he even know what he is letting him in for...
Khushi kumari Gupta Singh Raizada might do Sanki things, but Arnav really asked for it this time. The events that followed were just so much fun! Never one to back down, she takes him up on the challenge and definitely manages to fluster not just her dearest husband, but also the unwitting spectators to the ummm...execution of her plans!

Did Arnav really think he could resist his wife at all?? Haha!

Then you had to bring in Bankelal and his poetry was simply beautiful - loved how you brought in the Sheetal angle - her discomfort at the dhaba - the ants, the rough bench, the oily food- everything was spot on! And the date ends not with a kiss as she clearly was dreading, but a mouthful of paan 😆 😆

What can I say about the poems now? Vandy's poems were perfect
and the poems just seem to flow with the story perfectly. Fit every scene so well, and depicted his thoughts with just the right mix of humour and love. Blended seamlessly into the story and just perfect - loved this jugalbandi that you have created for Mints. In fact the story and poems read as if they were written by one person. V- finally your writing debut in a story!!! Beauuutifull!!!

What a gift, M- vandy's poems as part of a story!
Happy birthday!

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Edited by chitrajay - 12 years ago