PhAb FF|Living The Dream-LastPart pg.12

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mimi_s

@mimi_s

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#61

. His tongue teased out her parted lips while his hand slowly removed the sari and he covered her with himselfWOW👏👏...covered her with himself...this line was absolutely mind blowing...even a proffesional writer would b proud of it😊,,,,,,so I was rite...theres no party and we FINALLY gt shelter scene part 2😉😉...and Anu it was worth the wait...so beautifully written really...wish we could see it on screen...

Inside was a beautiful black pen with her name inscribed on it. Phulwa looked at the pen a little amazed and disappointed as this was one gift that she may never be able to use.

Its grt that u made Abhay gift her a pen and nt some expensive girlie stuff...really nice gesture😊

Ek kaam tu theek se karte nahi hain...chale hain humein padhanein.' She murmured to herself.

Was Phulwa trying to hint at something particular...or was it a genral comment😉😉...pls explain

She looked up as little drops of water fell on her face. Rain

WOW barish bhi aagaye...GRT😳...Barish mein to romance ka aalag hi maaza hai 😃

'Abhay?' She asked in an uncertain voice, as he continued to charge towards her with a serious look unbuttoning his shirt.

Honestly if the CVs had atleast given us this shot atlest on their SR...

Anu love u and a big hug...lovely update...as I said ...worth the wait

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thiku

@thiku

Navigator

Posted: 13 years ago

#62

Phulwa and Abhay on a date good, we have not got any of such scenes, only one drive scene is the one and only one scene we have to see them two together outside...

Her eyes welled up with tears and his own face held a distressing emotion as he remembered the times he himself had insulted over the fact that she was not educated. That's why he felt she should be educated so later in life she would never have to face the same situation again. So she could always walk with her head held high and nobody would ever be able to put her down for any reason. He wanted to turn her weakness into strength.

Oh love this idea, even though in the last epi they showed Phulwa could read now we missed how she got literate who teach her and all. This was also a very much awaited movement in the PhAb life. Ur soo great to bring this here.

'Lo phir tu hogaya kaam. Ek kaam tu theek se karte nahi hain...chale hain humein padhanein.' She murmured to herself.

Are are Phulwaji konsa kam apke pathi teek se nehi kar rehehe?? Phulwa trying to challenge Abhay????

He knew well what affect he had on her so continued to come closer and nuzzled against her face. Moving down he placed light kisses on her neck and shoulder while Phulwa just closed her eyes. A little smile started to play on her lips when he kissed her at that moment stealing the smile from her and it spread on his face. She returned the kiss with greater fervor and his hands moved up her back. Breaking the kiss he moved back smiling and asked her whether she still had any complains? She lowered her eyes as a deep flush crept up her face.

That is our real ACP Abhay Rai Singh, who knows what to do at each point of to make himself up than the opposition.

She looked up as little drops of water fell on her face. Rain.

Oh ho Anu you incorporated rain also, wet abhay ans Phulwa and then the shelter?? 😕 😉 So you are already set to give us a jatka.

Kiss and heal.' He whispered leaning in and then kissed her under her ear. She closed her eyes as a strange sensation ran through her body making her want to giggle at the same time sending shivers. His tongue teased out her parted lips while his hand slowly removed the sari and he covered her with himself.

These lines are simply good 👏 😳 He taken the bullets fr her so she is responsible to heal it... 😉
Well written Anu... 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏

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Ameres

@Ameres

Stunner

Posted: 13 years ago

#63

Originally posted by: mimi_s
. His tongue teased out her parted lips while his hand slowly removed the sari and he covered her with himselfWOW👏👏...covered her with himself...this line was absolutely mind blowing...even a proffesional writer would b proud of it😊,,,,,,so I was rite...theres no party and we FINALLY gt shelter scene part 2😉😉...and Anu it was worth the wait...so beautifully written really...wish we could see it on screen...
Wow, thank you so much for the lovely comments. Truly flattered. 😳
Lol, yeah. Honestly I was in double mind whether to include the shelter scene or not but in the end decided to put it in anyway. Thanks again.
Same! Its like one big sore thumb. ;((
Inside was a beautiful black pen with her name inscribed on it. Phulwa looked at the pen a little amazed and disappointed as this was one gift that she may never be able to use.

Its grt that u made Abhay gift her a pen and nt some expensive girlie stuff...really nice gesture😊

Ek kaam tu theek se karte nahi hain...chale hain humein padhanein.' She murmured to herself.

Was Phulwa trying to hint at something particular...or was it a genral comment😉😉...pls explain
Haha, Abhay gave the answer na and removed all complaints. 😆
She looked up as little drops of water fell on her face. Rain
WOW barish bhi aagaye...GRT😳...Barish mein to romance ka aalag hi maaza hai 😃
Yes! Like Ajay said...water and romance...kuch alag hi maza. ;)
'Abhay?' She asked in an uncertain voice, as he continued to charge towards her with a serious look unbuttoning his shirt.

Honestly if the CVs had atleast given us this shot atlest on their SR...

Anu love u and a big hug...lovely update...as I said ...worth the wait
Aww thank you so much! Really your sweet words make me so happy! Please stay the same! Lub ya! *hugs*

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Ami

@beebutterfly

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#64

OH Anuuu! Talk about modesty! This was one hell of an update. Oh Gosh loved it. The perfect end to a perfect FF👏👏👏

From where do i start?😆

Her eyes welled up with tears and his own face held a distressing emotion as he remembered the times he himself had insulted over the fact that she was not educated. That's why he felt she should be educated so later in life she would never have to face the same situation again. So she could always walk with her head held high and nobody would ever be able to put her down for any reason. He wanted to turn her weakness into strength.

I loved this bit here. It's so touching really. Remembering the time when he had been cruel (there's no other word) to her, the fact that he thinks back at that and realises other people might think the same of her just shows how much he changed and really he can't bear to see her being considered inferior to anyone.

He really did turn all her weaknesses in strength.*sigh*😍

Laughing at Phulwa's lack of confidence on Abhay's ability to teach her. They are really too cute❤️

Still holding her by the waist he pulled her in closer again, kissing her shoulder he slightly turned her around so her back was to him. Slowly he tugged at the straps of the blouse with his bare teeth, loosening the knot at the neck.

☺️Ooh, this was like HOT moment, With his teeth? Gosh, this is way too sexy😳

His face loomed above hers, a few drops of water still dripping from his hair. She closed her eyes unable to handle his intense gaze, which unnerved her yet excited. He bent down and kissed away the water droplets from her face to her neck, she turned slightly and he untied the knot finally.

beautiful! Haye, im totally ☺️. Just imagining Abhay doing that is ooff!

he closed her eyes as a strange sensation ran through her body making her want to giggle at the same time sending shivers. His tongue teased out her parted lips while his hand slowly removed the sari and he covered her with himself.

I'm sighing away at the pure PhAbness of this scene while ahem blushing again😆.😍 loved the bold😳😳

You killed with this one Anu. Sacchi there could not have had a better conclusion to this FF. You started slow with simple moments between man and wife to end at the moments we like most😉😆 Great great great!🤗

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Ami

@beebutterfly

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 13 years ago

#65

Anu?? This was not the end? Ooofff!! Can't wait for the nxt then😳 I'm already excited!!!😃

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Ameres

@Ameres

Stunner

Posted: 13 years ago

#66

Originally posted by: thiku
Phulwa and Abhay on a date good, we have not got any of such scenes, only one drive scene is the one and only one scene we have to see them two together outside...
I know, I always wanted to have more sweet scenes like these where they just sit down and talk. Drive epi the only epi. :(

Oh love this idea, even though in the last epi they showed Phulwa could read now we missed how she got literate who teach her and all. This was also a very much awaited movement in the PhAb life. Ur soo great to bring this here.
Thanks! Glad you liked it. If only the show had lived for some more time we could have gotten better scenes like these.

Are are Phulwaji konsa kam apke pathi teek se nehi kar rehehe?? Phulwa trying to challenge Abhay????
Haha, yeah. She gets a thrill out of it. 😉

That is our real ACP Abhay Rai Singh, who knows what to do at each point of to make himself up than the opposition.
Oh ho Anu you incorporated rain also, wet abhay ans Phulwa and then the shelter?? 😕 😉 So you are already set to give us a jatka.
LOL! Shelter scene tu ana tha. You know how crazy I was for it. 😆
These lines are simply good 👏 😳 He taken the bullets fr her so she is responsible to heal it... 😉
Well written Anu... 👏
LOL! exactly! He did that for her so she needs to make up to him na. ;)

Thank you so much for the lovely comments!! Muah!

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Ameres

@Ameres

Stunner

Posted: 13 years ago

#67

Originally posted by: beebutterfly
OH Anuuu! Talk about modesty! This was one hell of an update. Oh Gosh loved it. The perfect end to a perfect FF👏👏👏
Thank you, but its not the end. 😆

From where do i start?😆
Start se start kar na! 😆

Still holding her by the waist he pulled her in closer again, kissing her shoulder he slightly turned her around so her back was to him. Slowly he tugged at the straps of the blouse with his bare teeth, loosening the knot at the neck.

☺️Ooh, this was like HOT moment, With his teeth? Gosh, this is way too sexy😳
Woh kuch bhi kare, I find it sexy. 😆

You killed with this one Anu. Sacchi there could not have had a better conclusion to this FF. You started slow with simple moments between man and wife to end at the moments we like most😉😆 Great great great!🤗
Thank you so so much for the encouraging words but sorry you to bear some more as this is not the end. Two three updates more. 😆

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salma.f

@salma.f

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#68

@Ameres....i hope you won't mind criticism as you have written it criticism is welcome ..well i might be the first one here to do it ..i have been a silent member of this forum..read many of your SS, scenes you want ..you can a be a good writer ..your way of expressions , lines , choice of words ..is awesome but can i ask one question please don't mind why sexual thing is given importance in story...😕.is it really that necessary to show two people passionately in love 😕i think it becomes lust.. ...passion of love doesn't come with kisses or sexual activities ..but with something actually done for each other ...through words , through actions...which made feel like look like yes they are in love .pardon me for my criticism again but your version of Abhay Phulwa is completely different from what we have seen in show ..true lovers . here it looks to me like somewhat lusty possessive couple 😕.pardon me for my cirtcism but this your FF is certainly going in another direction and again pardon me this is a public forum don't you think such FF'S should be written in here ... extremely sorry for my cirtical comment .if you feel bad

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Ameres

@Ameres

Stunner

Posted: 13 years ago

#69

Originally posted by: salma.f
@Ameres....i hope you won't mind criticism as you have written it criticism is welcome ..well i might be the first one here to do it ..i have been a silent member of this forum..read many of your SS, scenes you want ..you can a be a good writer ..your way of expressions , lines , choice of words ..is awesome but can i ask one question please don't mind why sexual thing is given importance in story...😕.is it really that necessary to show two people passionately in love 😕i think it becomes lust.. ...passion of love doesn't come with kisses or sexual activities ..but with something actually done for each other ...through words , through actions...which made feel like look like yes they are in love .pardon me for my criticism again but your version of Abhay Phulwa is completely different from what we have seen in show ..true lovers . here it looks to me like somewhat lusty possessive couple 😕.pardon me for my cirtcism but this your FF is certainly going in another direction and again pardon me this is a public forum don't you think such FF'S should be written in here ... extremely sorry for my cirtical comment .if you feel bad

Wow, why am I not surprised to see a newbie finding my work offending? 😆

Salma- No I'm not minding at all in fact I'm quite amused to see that you made an account just today so you could comment on my post? Flattered really. Yes, criticism is most welcome, as I believe it will just help me realize the mistakes and do better next time. So thank you for doing that.

Coming to the issue, so I will try to answer all your questions as best as I can. Firstly you asked is it necessary to show two people passionately in love? Well, you are asking my opinion so I would say no, it's not necessary but it is needed. AbhayPhulwa are a married couple that too who only recently got a chance to settle down in life and to be with each other so I believe any couple would be having some passionate moments. Physical intimacy is a part of a relationship especially if you are a married couple. And if Abhay lusts for Phulwa, or she desires him I see that as a normal thing for they are in love and a married couple so um...it will be quite natural to indulge in such activities. It's not like they are doing something illegal or immoral.

Yes, words and small gestures can also convey a lot about feelings. Maybe I didn't elaborate much on them but did try to show the care, concern and love they have for each other. As for true lovers, haven't they proved their love for each other enough times in the show? I was just presenting a situation where they have less of problems and hurdles and more time to enjoy with each other. Though I tried my best to incorporate other elements other than romance but I guess they failed to make an impact on you. Sorry.

Like you said, this AP is my version, this FF, story will be different from what we have seen in show because this is how I imagined the story moving forward. I don't know which direction you were hoping to see the story move forward, but the little imagination that I have I had imagined somewhat like this.

Lusty Possessive Couple. Hm. I believe the word 'lusty' came because of the last update but possessive? Oh, that previous update! Wow, you sure have been keeping tabs. Frankly, I don't think they are possessive neither have I tried to show them like that except for one particular scene. Even there I tried to redeem Abhay by making him realize what he was doing. So honestly I don't see them as possessive much. As for lusty, this is because of the last update right? Well yes, a bit of overdose of romance there you can say but before that it wasn't much so...lusty? :S

I understand that you are trying to say that I failed to retain the characters essence, extremely sorry for that. I have no intention of making AP something else of what they truly are; I love them as they were in show and will always do. However here according to the situations I have tried my best to bring them out but still if you feel I have not done justice then...my apologies.

Public Forum. Okay now this really makes me want to laugh as well get annoyed. No no, not on you but this whole public forum issue has been raised before but I'm quite confused as to how this rule only applies to the Phulwa forum and not to other forums on IF? I'm not taking name of any show/forum but there are forums where posts or SS with high amount of romance are posted daily and nobody minds. People actually shower them with likes and comments. I'm not saying that it's right or wrong but such posts have been made before in different sections so...really the rule baffles me. Wish somebody would explain it to me.

Sorry for this extra long post, was not intending so but I felt you had raised many questions and I felt responsible to address them all. I hope I may have been able to clarify some issues. I don't think this will change your opinion about my FF or me, but still hoping that after this you would hold less animosity towards me. And not just you but others too who have a problem with my writing and posts, if reading this will be less bitter afterwards. Hope nobody takes this post offending too because again I'm just trying my best to answer the person here.

Honestly I never had the intention of hurting anyone through my posts and I'm feeling bad thinking that my words have hurt someone. My heartfelt apologies to all those whom I may have offended unintentionally. And don't worry you wouldn't have to bear this for long as I'm ending my FF in a day or two so you guys wouldn't to have see this extra offending post here for more time. Hope this makes someone happy.

Peace out.

Edited by Ameres - 13 years ago

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salma.f

@salma.f

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#70

@Ameres ...hmm i extremely sorry to make my account today.😕..well your post didn't make me my account better get this confusion out of your mind first.. because i made my account today to post my comments on uttaran forum..there i made my post first so i don't know which thing you are so amused at first...😕it will be better to get to know about others and then get amused you made account today for my post .😳.infact i am quite confused at your behavior at if i created my account here just to criticzie you😕are you taking it as it is .😲...and if you write all type of critcism is allowed so better be ready to take it ..otherwise better not write it ...i guess there might be many silent members of IF too its not necessary all are members 😕

@physical intimacy ..coming to your issues well i wrote its not necessary every time physical intimacy ..comes if i am not wrong your story started with it then again same thing 🤔 isn't is so ?well if you wrote criticism is allowed then in story showing same thing twice thats why i wrote it will become some sort of lusty relationship..and the way you are presenting it and you agreed with it he lusts after her..there is difference between lusting and desiring

physical intimacy might be important part of relationship ..but whole relationship doesn't depend on it only thats why i wrote it like you are depicting

@public forum perhaps you might be a grown up there might be kids too even in shows they don't show it to this limit because they show them as public shows especially colors i appreciate it for this ...waise i am a grown up must say felt it wrong to pubicly write it and but i guess i can't make all people understand.. ..its not your fault today's youth had made it something fun they only write such things as their FF'S which they fail to see on TV and btw somethings need to be private ..they don't need to be told publicly..tell me one thing i don't know whether you are married or not ..if you are then will openly tell people about your SR ..then laugh at all this public forum issue ...why somethings need not to be discussed openly...😳and do make your adults read all your FF's and then come and tell me how much they liked these what you are writing openly...😳

and i didn't say your FF's fail to make any impact on me but i guess you felt really bad .otherwise i appreciated your writing skills too many points ...because i spoke to you in really good way polite many times apologising but your way sorry to say extremely like i pinched you..did i say anything to you...? i guess that criticism part you wrote is only for writing not for acceptance ..🥱i guess people becomes writer but forget the critics ..even film ,shows , novels all have critics ..i guess all teams behind it behaves like you if someone disapproves their writing not taking it into consideration why they wrote it and what i need to improve in my story taking those points too in consideration but make statements like you have made ..i am off ..i am offending people o yeah a newbie criticized me ...great...first time seeing such behavior of a writer ...

heartfelt apologies if i hurted you...but seriously now a days are not those days to make anyone say you are doing wrong bache .khair keep writing who am i to say anything ..i just wanted to say you are good writer you can write good things too very well leaving this only this everywhere ..because seen you and your friends writing this thing many times and proudly calling yourselves besharam bache...now this is leaving very good impact of you on others..yeah now a days calling your self besharam is also a fashion...cool keep it up..leaving good impact openly

peace out ..keep writing what you want...no mood of fighting heart felt apologies won't see me ever on your FF...because i really don't want to offend people felt what is right wrote my opinion...

Edited by salma.f - 13 years ago

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