O tere sang yaara (PART 5 FINAL) UPDATED PAGE 13)

srinithi

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Posted: 8 years ago

#31

too good yar👏

meri pari khane nahi de raha hai 😆

loved their convo throughout the update ESP where Avni becomes jealous n they start fighting over whose pet the baby will be😳 it was so cute .

I loved the song you added in between n it was like a lyrical ballad😳

the dress for Avni is awesome

please continue

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Gurveen

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Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Fantastic update
Avni's mood swings and avni and Neil fighting in whose side baby will be was so cute
The end seems interesting
Are they are talking about Neil???
Update soon please

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__VIHU

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Shreya lemme tell you.. The conversations you write between Avneil feels so genuine... I mean i feel like i m seeing them talking...

Neil is so caring.. Just loved the way rushed for her at even small things..

Nishaan and Nishaani... Nice names... I would have asked the reason but you already told that..

Jealous hubby- wifey... So cute..

The way you express their body language is really worth praising...

I'll be waiting for next part..

And again your hindi... Some normal lines also become supercute.. Just loved it... I don't want you to improve upon your hindi...

Lots of love..

Vihu

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Zenab

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Posted: 8 years ago

#34

Lovely update
Beautifully penned
Loved it
Last part is confusing I think Neil is alive

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Somewhatwriter

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Posted: 8 years ago

#35

Originally posted by: AgnesFan
too good yar👏
meri pari khane nahi de raha hai 😆
loved their convo throughout the update ESP where Avni becomes jealous n they start fighting over whose pet the baby will be😳 it was so cute .
I loved the song you added in between n it was like a lyrical ballad😳
the dress for Avni is awesome
please continue

Aww thank you so much yaar... you are being too sweet and dishing out many compliments than I'm worth I think...

😆🤣

I'm so glad you liked the convos and even I loved writing their cute little fights ...

Thank you, I really wanted the song to run throughout the piece so I'm glad you liked that idea I loved the detailing of the top half so I just had to insert a picture of that dress. Of course... I will update asap

much love,

Shreya

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Somewhatwriter

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Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Originally posted by: Gurveen
Fantastic update
Avni's mood swings and avni and Neil fighting in whose side baby will be was so cute
The end seems interesting
Are they are talking about Neil???
Update soon please

Thank you, thank you so much... I was really hoping you all would find it cute so I'm super glad you enjoyed it . About Neil? I don't know? Lets see?... Of course, I'll try not to make everyone wait for so long 😊

thank you again, Shreya

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Somewhatwriter

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: vu1998
Shreya lemme tell you.. The conversations you write between Avneil feels so genuine... I mean i feel like i m seeing them talking...
Neil is so caring.. Just loved the way rushed for her at even small things..

Nishaan and Nishaani... Nice names... I would have asked the reason but you already told that..

Jealous hubby- wifey... So cute..
The way you express their body language is really worth praising...

I'll be waiting for next part..

And again your hindi... Some normal lines also become supercute.. Just loved it... I don't want you to improve upon your hindi...

Lots of love..
Vihu

Thank you so much Vihu, you always know just the things to say to bring a smile to my face, and I think your giving me more praise than necessary today 😆 I'm so glad you liked it all, I really had to think hard to come up with some cute scenarios so I'm glad you liked what I did. I express their body language well? Aww that's so nice, I though that it really wasn't. Thank you for saying it feels like your watching it, that's one of the best praises for a writer, right? Oh no... did I make many more mistakes in my hindi? I'm sorry... You don't want me to improve?😆 oh good... I'm glad of that yaar because I don't know how to...

I'll make sure to update fast, by the way I couldn't find the time to comment yet but your character descriptions for your ff were just so perfectly professionally done, I loved the way you included quotes, it was so original and insightful. your so talented yaar...

All the love,

Shreya

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vidya dasan

@vidz2122

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Posted: 8 years ago

#38

your updatess are alwaysss tooo long ... all writrs must be like u .. i love long updates .. nice updatess 😉 ... i want a hubby like him ..

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__VIHU

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Posted: 8 years ago

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I'll make sure to update fast, by the way I couldn't find the time to comment yet but your character descriptions for your ff were just so perfectly professionally done, I loved the way you included quotes, it was so original and insightful. your so talented yaar...

All the love,

Shreya

Thank you Shreya...

But I m expecting you to read and comment on the first chapter of book 2..

Lots of love for you too darling...

Vihu..

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Somewhatwriter

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Posted: 8 years ago

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Originally posted by: vidz2122
your updatess are alwaysss tooo long ... all writrs must be like u .. i love long updates .. nice updatess 😉 ... i want a hubby like him ..

aww thank you so much... thank you... thank you... yeah everybody wants a hubby like neil right? Oh i just love long updates too thats why i make sure my updates are always long. But thats a lot of effort na yaar? Thats probably why all the other wonderful writers cant manage it all the time... thank you,

Shreya

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