FF:Pyaar ka ek un dekha ehsaas(prt-7,updt on pg14) - Page 4

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Posted: 16 years ago
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oh pari tht was 2 gud .....sorry for the late reply ...but juss got time to read ur fic ........tht was gud work .....post the next part soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: Bugger

oh pari tht was 2 gud .....sorry for the late reply ...but juss got time to read ur fic ........tht was gud work .....post the next part soon

no probs dear and thansk for ur comments
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: ghtk1

pari,plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz forgive me hun.u pm me and i couldnt give u a reply.actually yesterday my pc server was so slow that i couldnt even prpperly open IF.so sorry jaan.and regarding ur update well what can i say hun.it is one of the best sequences that i have ever read.simply superb.i completely loved it. and not to forget that u should be a script writer.love u sweety.

oh dear don't be sorry at lest u read naa dat enough for me and der pzl i'm not as good in writing it jsut wat i feel i 'd writtn in words , i'm not as good with words.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: namita25

...pari.....a big hug for you sweety🤗🤗🤗saachi mein mazaa aa gaya.....and plz update soon

ohhhhhhhhhhhh tank u so much a big huggie to u toooo for ur comments 🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
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very intersting dear ,waiting for ur next updatte

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Posted: 16 years ago
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pari i loved this scene amazing amazing amazing i know for sure neha , makers will use this scene they should to make serial interesting, it was very very well written read both parts now keep up the good work
iw as able to picture everything ...now eagerly waiting for part 3 ...😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Part 3
Who aur koi nahi balkii RAJVEER hi tha RAJVEER jiska pichle do dino se kuch ata pata nahi tha, jis ka kranti do dino se paglo ki tarha intazaar karrahi thi RAJVEER ko ase dekh kar woh haran rah gayi
RAJVEER - KRANTI ki baaho main girpara RAJVEER ko goli lagi thi kandhe par aur kafi chote bhi lagi thi aur kafi khoon bhi bah choka taa KRANTI ka halka GUlabi (light pink) rag kaa suite RAJVEER ke khoon se bhar gaya tha?.
AUR FIR???
K: aaaaaaahhhhhha!!!!!!!!!!! (Kranti chelayi)
RAJVEERRRRRRRR rajveer ohtooooo ankhe kholooooo yeh!! Yeh!!!! kyaa huya, TUM teek to hoo!!!! RAJVEER anhke kholoo!!
RAJVEER ne aankhe kholi aur uske same jo chahra tha , use dekh kar use sookun mila kuki yeh wohi chahra tha jise , jise who humesha apne paas dekhna chahta tha , apne dil main rakhta tha , aur chatatha ki jab bhi who apni ankhe band kare to yehi chahra uske paas ho aur jab apne ankhe kole tab bhi yehi chahra uske saamne ho. HA who aur kisi kaa nahi balki KRANTI ka chahra tha jisne uske chahre par halki se mudskurahat bikher di, is bath ki parwaa kiye bager ki who jakhmi hain, takleef main hain use goli lagi hain, kranti ka chahra dekhte hi maanu us ka sara dard gayab ho gay tha
KRANTI ne RAJVEER ko utaya aur bistarpar bitaya
R: ahhhhhh!!!!!!!! Ahhhhhhhhh (rajveer ko dard mahsoos huya)
RAJVEER dard se karr raha tha , kafi takleef main ta aaj se pahle use it na dard nahi huya tah aur hota bhi kese aaj se aaj se pahle us main desh bakkti ka yehsa jasbha jo nahi tha par is dard main bhi ek sukuun tha jo use ho raha tha??
K: RAJVEER tum teek to hoo yeh sab kese huyaa HAA!!!!! tum tum do din se kaha the aur tumhe yeh GOLI kase lagi !! Tum betho main abhi DOCTROR ko ph. karti hu
KRANTi ki annko main aanso the aur kahi sawaal bhi the gabraht ke mare use kuch samjh nahi arah tha ki who kay kare, Tabhi RAJVEER ne KRANTI kaa haat pakar liya
R: nahi ehhhh DOCTOR nahi !!!!
K: kyu nahi tumhe goli lagi hain bauth choote aayi hain khoon bhi bahraha hain main doc. Ko bulane jaarahi hoo tumhe Doc. Ki jaroorat hain
R: mujhe DOCTOR ki nahi tumhari jaroorat hain!!!!!!!
Kranti ne raj ki taraf dekha
R: emmhhhhhh ,,, (Rajveer fir karrya dard se) mera matlab hain agar Doc aye ga to police ko pata chal jaye ga ki main main yehaa hun aur bach gaya hu,, Isleye goli tumhe hi nikalni paregi !!!!!! ahhhhhhhhhhaa!!
K: police ko, bach gaya hu!!! Yeh sab kya kah rahe ho!!!
R: abhi kuch bhi samjaane ka woqt nahi hain , abhi jaldi karo aur goli nekaale ka intzaam karo. Ahhhhhhhha!!!!!!
Kranti ne rajveer ke chare ko apne haatho main liya aur kaha:
K: main ! main kesi mujh se nahi hoga main kese nikaalu gi goli pzl raj mujhe doc ko bulane do
R: kranti plzzzzzzzzzzz baat ko samjno tumhe hi ko likalni hogi aur koi rasta nahi hain mujhe tumpe pura barosa hain tum karlogi
Phir kuch dher ke liya kranti aur raj ne ek dosare ko dekha kranti ke haatho main raj ka chahra tha aur aur raj ne kranti ke haato ko pakar rakh ta raj ka dard aur kranti ki bebasi saaf nazar aarahi thi
R: jayo aur choori (knife) lekar ayoooo jaldi jayoo!! KRANTIIII jayoooooooooooooo!!!!!! (Usne joor se kaha)
Kranti raj ko wahi choor kar daurthi huyi rasoyi ghar (kitchen) ki tarf gayi aur choori( knife), paani aur ek bartan aur baki ka saamaan lek kar apne kamre main aa gayi
KRANTI kamre main aayi aur us ne darwaja andar se band kar diya !! aur apne almari (cupboard) main se FIRST AID box nikala kar RAJ ke saamne beath gayi aur sara saaman bed par rak diya, Kranti ko samjh nahi aa rah tha ki kya kare,,
goli nikale to kese nikle aaj se phle usne yeh kabhi nahi kiya tha uske haath kaap rahe the. Kaapte haatho se usne bare hi dayaan se aaram aaram se raj ka kurta utaara aur jakham (wound) ko dekha aur raj ke seene (chest) par haat rakha. raj ne uska haath pakra aur kaha???..
R: Jaldi karoo!!!
K: rajveer main fir se kha rahi hoo yeh mujh se nahi hogaa
R: hoga! ab socho mat tum kar sakti ho.
K: mujhe bauth daar lagrah hain , bauth dard ho ga!
R: tum karnti Kari hone saath saath ek KRANTIKARI ki biwi bhi ho aur daar rahi ho, tumhi ne to kaha tan a yeh raah itni aasaan nahi hogi!!!! Eeeeeeeeeeeemmmmmmmmm!!!!!!!!!! (Rajveer ki ek aur Dard Bari karr) abhi to yeh sirf suruwaat hain yeh daard to kuch bhi nahi abhi to bauth bare bare daard sahne hain, ahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!! Yeh Dard to bauth choti cheez hain. Mujhe bhi to is Dard ka maza lene do.
Kranti ne raj ki taf dekha aur raj ne kranti ki tarf
Fir kranti ne bina waqt gawahe goli nikalne ka fesla kiya
Pahle kuch cotton ki madad se jakam ko saaf kiya taki goli ko theek se Dekh sake aur fir laalten (lamp ) ki madaad se choori ko garam kiya taki goli nikaal sake (so dat it does'nt cause septic) fir jase hi usne choori ko raj ke jakam pe raha tabhi raj ne kranti ke kande (shoulder)
Aur ek haat ko kar se pakarliyaa
Kranti ke aankho main annsoo the usne raj ki taf dekha us ki takleef us ka Dard,,,, manu jese choot use lagi hain par is ka asar KRANTI par ho raha ho
Karnti ki ankho main darrd saaf dekhraha ta KRANTi se RAj ka darad nahi dekha Gaya aur us ne jaldi se goli nikal suru kiya
R: ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!
Aur aakher kaar goli nikla gayi. Goli nikalte wakt darad ki waja se raj kranti ke gale laga huya tha, use kas ke pakra huya tha aur is baar kranti ne bhi use pakar rakha tha ,,, kaafi khoon bhi nikal rah tha
kranti ne khoon ko rookne ke liye cotton lagayi par khoon ta ki rok hi nahi rah raa who khoon rokne ki i koshish karti rahi raj ka khoon itna bah chukka tha ki uske ke kapre , haath par bhi khoon lag chukka.
phir usne jakham par achi taha se pati bandhi , pati karte waqt kranti ki aankho main aansoo the aur raj kranti ko dekh raha tha yeh dosari baar tha jab raj aur kranti ek dusare ke itne paas the aur phir kranti ne bhi,, halki si bigi tedhe nigaaho se raj ki taraf dekha , us waqt kranti ki ankho main use sirf aur sirf pyaar nazar aarah tha who pyaar jis ke liye who nazane kab se tras raha tha
kranti ne nazare chura li usne ne dekha ki raaj ko maathe par bhi choot lagi hain .us ne raj ke maathe par bhi pati ki, lekin raj to bas us ke hi taf dekh raha ta manoo jese us ko sab kuch mil gaya hoo..
K: ek bath puchu sach sach jawaab doge?
Raj manu sab kuch bhul kar ek alag hi duniya main kho gaya tha,, pyaar ki duniya main, kranti ke pyaar ki duniya main
K: tumhe yeh goli, yeh chote, kese lagi, kaha te tum pechle do dino de, kisi ke saat the? Mujhe kitne fikar ho rahi thi? agar kuch ho jata to?
Kranti ne dekha ki raj us ki traf dekh rah hain par kuch jawaab nahi deraha
Kranti ne raj ko sapne se jagaya aur kaha:
K: kaha ko Gaye?
R: tum main!!!!!!!!!
Kuch pal ke leye dono ki nazre ek dosar par teki fir kranti ne nazare jooraa kar preli aur saaman utanme lagi yeh dekh kar raj ke chare par ek pyaari se muskaan agayi.
R: kab tak sach se baago gi kranti?
K: kay matlab?
R: matlab!!! tum samjhi nahi yaa samjana nahi chati?
K: bauth raat hochuki aur tumhe aaram ki zaroort hain tum soo jaoo.
Raj ko choot lagi thi isliye kranti ne use soo jane ko kahaa aur raj bhi ek ache bache ki tarha soo gaya aaj kafi dino ke baa raj ko sukun ki neend aayi thi , lekin kranti ki aankho se najane ned kahi kho gayi thi manu raj ki yeh haalat dekh , uske jakhm dekh who darr gayi thi pahle baar use raj ke kho jane kaa darr lag raha tha ki achanak us ki nazar raj ki peeth ( back) par parhi us ki peeth par bhi jakam the who uthe aur bistar par jaa ke beath gayi aur us ki peeth par haath ferne lagi ki achank us ki aankko se aansoo nikle lage pir paas hi rake first aid box main se dawaa nikaal kar is ke jkhmoo par lagane lagi aur fir us ki peeth ar sar rak diya aur pata hi nahi chala ki ab roote roote us ki aankh lag gayi aur woh soo gayi
part 3 end
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ok thats it for today
this is for all my dear friends those who like my previous post hope u all like it and i hope this tetuty u like it coz this time i try to make a long update on only for u..
and there is lots more to come
so guys pzl read and give ur comments , feedback , suggetion, critisium. 😊
Edited by pari29 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Pari

Splendid part dear. 👏 Bahut acchi likhi ho dear.

I could see the scene in front of me and also RK's pain and feel it too.

Good to know that K is realising the pain that R is now suffering in the hands of the police.

Hope you post the next part soon.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanx pari muaahh very nice it is a dream scene yaar with so many emotions dear very nice i loved it yaar d concept was good muaah n good night as its midnight n i msupposed 2 study i just took a break 2 read ur story n loved it bye😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: poetic

Pari

Splendid part dear. 👏 Bahut acchi likhi ho dear.

I could see the scene in front of me and also RK's pain and feel it too.

Good to know that K is realising the pain that R is now suffering in the hands of the police.

Hope you post the next part soon.

@ poetic thanks u dear i'm glad u liked it
@ tetuty thanks a ton dear i'm glad u liked it and yes go and study now , study is also importand dear. 😊

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