WAQT....updated (360 degree Review) pg14

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Hey,

This is not a fiction! So, please, Moderators dont shift this!

Its my friend and myself are trying to fiddle up a story.....so its not like a proper fiction!

Cheers,
Rumela & JIV

"pooja???...pooja uth na..pooja??"
"kya huanaina..sone de na.."
"pooja ek baar bahar to dekh..."
"kya hua hai yaar..kal woh mucchad ki drill hai...sone de na.."
"pooja agar aise hi chalta raha na..to drill to kya...kuch bhi nahi hone wala kal"
"kyu network jam kar rahi hai...apna message clear kar na.."
"pooja aisa toofan meine to ambala mein nahi dekha ab tak..at least kma ke in do saalon me to nahi...itna bada toofan..dekh to ..jaisi hawa waisi barish.."
"kya??"

it was true..this was one of the worst storms they had witnessed..they had never witnessed such a storm..such incessant rain in ambala before...

"oye kaidi...usool...bahar dekha..lag raha hai..kma bhi toot kar gir jaega..dekh to.."
"areh baap re..e aisi chali to apun ki to vaat lagegi..."
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"is waqt kaun miss call de raha hai..mein dekhti hun"
it was an orderly..
"cadet naina singh...aapke liye phone hai.."
"mere liye???raat ke 3 baje??"
"ji han...major rajveer ka phone hai.."
"RAJ VEER SIR??".....
NAINA RAN DOWN AT TOP SPEED THRU THE CORRIDOORS OF KMA AND REACED THE TELEPHONE....SHE WA
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Posted: 17 years ago
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yes i read it before too plz continue .. its awesom
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it's interesting 👏 . plz do continue.
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hey jivora
good start.....
pls do continue..
we are waiting for the next part
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Posted: 17 years ago
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hey plz continue
yeh pehle bhi likha tha na????????????
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"kya???kahan jaa rahi thi???"
"tu??"
"han mein..woh kuch tha.."
"mere paas waqt nahi hai.."
"par tu is toofan mein jaa kahan rahi hai..OYE...." he rushed out after her..
she managed to reach the north gate hiding behind trees ..bushes and constntly saying"chup kar.."
the rain lashed against her face...the cold ambala winds racing at top speed...
suddenly she came to a standstill ..how was she to go...how..
"huff!!huff!!..oye ab to bol de..is toofan mein..sia jungleeo ki tarah kya kar rahi hai...dimag kharab ho gaya hai..ter.."
"tujhe gaadi chalani aati hai??.."
"oye gaadi to nahi..lekin han.. bike pe to..zaroor.."
"bike chalani aati hai..to chal..."
"OYE...EH..KAHA????"

they drove at top speed sometimes dangerously...aftr all
"itna kyu peeta hai tu..dheere aalekh AH..."
"eh apun tere ko kuch hone nahin dega.."
"jaanti hun..lekin mein is waqt unhe kuch hone nahi de sakti..."
waqt...time was running out..his words still raced across her mind..
there was so much to say..to ask..
she knew there had beent ough times but y did he leave like dat..with just a little note...


naina..
i hope jo wishwaas meine khoya tha..woh aaj wapas mila hai mujhe..TUMHARA WISHWAAS...
i leave the red box with u..
mein jaa raha hun...navin ki khatir hi jaa raha hun..aur han..
agar nahi lauta..to mr.gehlot se meri khoj karna..
cadet singh..believe in urself..

and today was another stormy night...
that night the storm had been inside her ....but today it was on both sides...
how did he suddenly return...had he foun a clue to that one last link in navins mureder..
had he got wat the red box wanted ..wat navin wanted..
and most importanatly....WAS RAJVEER SAFE???...

"tujhe pata hai na..hum sahi raaste pe to jaa rahe hai na?? "

"eh naina..dilli se kma ane ka ek yeich raasta hai..apun ko aur koi raasta nahi pata.."

"aur mujhe yeh nahi pata ki sir dilli se hi aa rahe the ya nahi..."

"tu ghabra mat...apun dono sir ko dhoondh lenge..himmat rakh naina.. "

"han..."{par himmat hi to nahi ho rahi hai...how will i face him..oh god...i hope woh thik hain...}
as the speed of the bike increased ..naina's heartbeat increased...

somewhere raj was clinging on to dear life...if only...if only they had more...TIME....

"AALEKH JALDI...WAQT NIKAL RAHA HAI HATHON SE...JALDI..."

"HAN NAINA..APUN JAA RAH HAI...TU DAR MAT NA..APU...."

"AAAAAALAEKH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!AAAHHHHHHHHHH"

"Dekh Naina", he said trying to calm himself, "apun is waqt piyela nahin hai.....tu fikar mat kar.....is waqt agar unhe dhoodhna hai.....to apun dono ko accident se bachna hoga......"

"Ohh.....", Naina broke into tears.....his voice ringing in her ears.....'Believe in yourself....because I, believe in Cadet Naina Ah' Singh!'......ohhh......how could she......she.....accuse him.....pain him.......for a murder........aur woh sir mere bharosa chahte the...........sirf.....bharosa.......

......today Naina was rushing in the middle of a dark scary night to rescue her mentor......her confidant......her.....not Naveen's friend..............but it wasnt so simple to analsys....................

Branches of trees swooshing into them, every now and then, bike almost slipping in sticky road.....at times becoming very slow and splattering mud......the what frightened the soul of even the rough and fearless Aalekh was the night.......it looked spooky......dar.....not a star visible......not one.....no moon......just darkness.....the headlight of their bike illuminated the intensity of rain in front of them......
"Naina, hum ab Dehli - Ambala road pe hain.......toh ab jana kahan hai.......bataya kuch sir ne?", asked aalekh. The sound of wind and splattering rain was so loud that he had to yell from the front seat to Naina, sitting just behind him.

"Nahi...........par woh.....network kharab.....kuch bhi sunai nahin......ohh....Aalekh, hum kahan dhoondhen ge?", something in her was scared......scared of loosing him.....of never seeing him again.............loosing something very dear.....precious.....priceless............no.....dont think....she told herself!

She thought back....on what he had said on the phone.......

"Naina.....Sir ne phone kiya tha?"

"Haan............"

"To phir aage jaana padega....."

"Huh?"

"Arre Naina.......woh Dehli se aate waqt....ye sab area main mobile kahan chalta hai.....Army Camps hai na.....civilians ke cell nahin chaenge.....to agar Sir ne phone kiya....to woh abhi woh....woh....Sona lake ke pase honge....."

"Sona.....Lake....??"

"Haan...............", and he sped up his bike.

....they raced on...fighting all odss..shiver running down their spine at each strike of the winds..
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t was their race against TIME....
both knew they wud have to face the odds once they reache KMA..again..but now none of their hearts feared that...

there was only one name that came to naina's mind now..that bound her heart..
"RAJVEER...."
"naina...apun aa gaye.."
"kya??"
"han apun lake aa gaye naina..."
thay got down from the bike...thwy were there finally...it was a situation both had never faced...
they had reached their destination..but still seeemd to be lost..
"kahan dhoondhenge hum aalekh..??"
"dekh naina jo bhi hai apun dono ko saath rehna hoga kyunki.."
thay were shouting so that they cud hear each others voices...
"kya???"
"saath...saath rehna hoga...hum alag nahi ho sakte...samjhi??..toofan zabardast hai... "
"han..chale??"
"chal..."
facing them were three ways...a wide empty road...which seemd to stretch endlessly..and on two sides..the dark jungle..each side looking more sinister than the other..

but today..there was nothing stopping naina..yes..she had to reach..him....at any cost..
she had to fight time...

..it was a help that naina had used her timely sense and had taken a few little thing wid her..wich included a torch...adn some basic first aid...
the torch guided them though it cudnt withstand the storm and was glowing very dimly...

"naina yeh torch chalne nahi wala hai..."
"pata hai isliye to hume jald se jald pahuchna hoga..kuch dikhayi diya??"
"sir???!!!RAJVEER SIR????R U THERE????"
"CAPTAIN SIR???"
"ALLEKH ....MAJOR RAJVEER..."
"APUN KA CAOTAIN SIR ICH HAI...RAJVEER SIR???"
the trees swaying seemed to be giving them a good combat...as if preventing their intrusion into their habitat..but ..naina and aalekh fough ton untill..
"AALEKH....WOH DEKH....WOH KYA HAI????..CHAL AALEKH..."

an abstract dark shape lurked behind the trees a little distance wawy..
naina's breathing became heavy...was it...was it HIM????

she tried to move faster but..
"AHH!!"
"NAINA....DHEERE...SAMBHAL.."
her foot was stuck in betwwen a huge slit in a fallen log...
aalekh worked on it furiously...and finally her now aching feet was out...

they stumbled to the spot to find ...
"ARMY KI JEEP????..YEH ZAROOR UNHI KI HAI AALEKH..."
AS IF BY THE CALL OF FATE..THE TORCH WENT OFF THAT VERY MOMENT AND THEY WERE PLUNGED INTO DARKNESS

.."OH GOD..AB KYA KARE AALEKH..."
just then a bolt of lightening illuminated the scene...aalekh looked up
"ab to yehi sahara hai..."

they strained their eyes and looked around the jeep...

another bolt of lightening..
"NIANA..IDHAR..."
naina ran to him..."KYA>>>KAHAN.."
"AREH YAHICH DEKH THA MEINE..LAGA HAI KUCH...WOH BIJLI CHAMKI NA ..TAB..."
"KAHA AALEKH...KYAAAA?????"

a third bolt of lightening..
"AALEKH..WOH.."
thy moved a litlle forward...very cautiously as the it was a slippery hily ara..that tumbled into a pretty deep cliff...

naina kneeled down...she was tring hard to locate the area where she had seeen it..
she started feeling the ground with her hands...the mud...the gras...oh shit...she had seen ti...
then naina's hand brushed against something a litlle soft..something more human...

another timely bolt of lightening..

"AH..SIR???!!"

it was a human all right...it was rajveer's arm wich was jutting out from some where under the jeep...







Edited by jivora - 17 years ago
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plz plz plzcontinue its mmarvellous
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continueeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee i loved its awesome
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"SIR??"

"SIR??"

Their voices gave way.......Naina had touched him.....or was it something else......no.....it cant be.....but....if it was him.....we was probably crushed under the weight of his jeep......

"Ohh......", Naina couldnt bear anymore.....but she struggled on.....

"Ruk ja Naina.....kuch karna padega........."......it was impossible.....the two of them couldnt lift up the jeep.....or pull him out......and the worst of all, the darkness....it didnt allow them to get a clear view of the situation.......

"Kya karein?"

"Aalekh....", something stirred in her mind.

"Hmmm?"

"Bike......bike le aayein....."

"Yahan......Naina yeh to slope hai.........'

"To...."

"Huda......main......theek hai....par tu yahin rehna.......yahinch!"

Aalekh sprinted towards his bike......and Naina sat down near Rajveer....to try and sense life in him.....to check whether there's any movement.....is he still even remotely in his senses......

....she knew she was expecting too much......he had passed out when he had called her......his voice full of pain.........she hoped.....hoped.....against hope!!

When she felt Aalekh come back.....

"NAINA...."

"AALEKH.....MAIN YAHAN HOON.....JALDI KAR!"

And he came there ......switched on the lights of his bike.....that was quite adequate for the two cadets to get a view of the situation......

......After struggles for an hour and a half.....they could free the scarred, injured, and unconscious Rajveer from the jeep.

"Ab?"

"Ab....inhe infirmary yah fir city hospital le jana padega........"

"Magar inhe bike pe nahin baitha sakte......nahi chalne wala distance hai......kya karein?"

"Hmmm......ek kaam kar, tu jaa.....KMA.....aur Dr. Shalini ko bata.....woh zaroor kuch karegi.....fetch help!"

"Aur tu......yeh Captain sir to hosh main nahin hai.....tu akeli?"

"Haan.....main yahin hoon....Sir ke pass.....tu jaa......"

"Naina.....hil na mat yahan se....."

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It had been nearly an hour since Aalekh had left......but the rout back to KMA....was itself one and a half hour long.....so it was still quite some time for him to arrive.........

She sat there.....Captain Rajveer.....lay motionless.....under pattering rain....under that tree......

.......suddenly................

She heard some rustling nearby.....was it an animal.....no........cannot be.........this jungle doesnt have any.........she heard footsteps..........

Naina alarmed........someone was already following Captain.........could it be them?.........

.........she pulled Captain near her....and made him stand.....lean on her with great difficulty....she moved swiftly to nearby bush......then to another......slowly after 30minutes, they came near the lake.....at a place perfectly hidden in the bushes.....and an old rock formed likeliness of a cave.....she pushed him inside.....to save him from chill and rain..........

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It was obvious Aalekh hadn't found her......as she had moved from the place they had promised to meet............it was hours since the friends had separated...........

No sign of help....and no improvement in Rajveer.....exception of a few slight movements.......made Naina go pensive........worried..........scared!

It wasnt anything.....but she thought he needed treatment.........he was in pain...........why does this always happen to him.......loosing his friend......then having to shoot him.........then Naina didnt trust him........then that fatal accident.........and now.....this..........why did he get most of the pain..........she couldnt see him like that.....with occasional utterance of pain.....

They lay there....in that cave....

naina had the first aid kit with her still but...the cotton the bandages were nearly soaked...
naina took out the bandages however and somehow managed to wrap a few wounds...
rajveer trembeld again..
"sir??.."
"uh!!!..huh??!!!..nain.....pani....pan.."
oh god...where was she going to get the water from...
they were in the middle of nowhere...and now water..

sona lake...
yes sona lake...
but how cud she leave rajveer alone here..no she cudnt go out to fetch water...

naina took out a ball of cotton and stretched out her hand...
the rain was lashing out with all its might...
the cotton was soaked in no time...

naina sat down beside rajveer and lifted his head to rest it on her lap...
she squuezed the water out of the cotton....the drops of water were like fragments of new life to rajveer...
his throat was dry...he was tired ...fatigued...

...
naina looked at his peaceful face...there was an unexplained tranquility..
a tear rolled down naina's cheek..and it fell on his face...
no she cudnt sit here looking at his bruised tired form..
naina tried to get up but ..rajveer held her hand...

"woh nirdosh hain...kuch..nahi kiya...meine....meine nahi maraa...woh..naina...naina..."
"sir??..sir mein yahan hun..."

he gripped her hand tight...naina had an instinct to protect him..
it seemed a lost child looked for comfort..and at the mere mention of her name the fear gripping his heart seemed to settle down..
a serenity took over..

naina put her arm round his neck...and she pulled him close..
and like an insecure infant rajveer clung on to her...in her arms..close to her heartbeat he found solace...

.it had been ages since aalekh had set out to search for naina
accompanying him in the army jeep on the road a patient dr.shalini...
t
he storm seemed to be in two minds...for a few seconds the winds rested and then all of a sudden they lashed out as if they were to bring a city to its end...
the rain cotinued its reign...it felt the clouds were to shed their load one last time...

the night grew darker and the cave beame colder...
naina held rajveer colser still...shivering...trembling...but protecting him..
rajveer slept heavily unaware of the storm...one seemed to be inside him though..an unexplained storm wich compelled him to suddenly wake..and move closer for support..

aalekh was angry at naina for having left the place..he wandered alone...lost in the jungle...shouting out their names..
the spare torch in his hand was announcing its end...no..he cudnt affor o be lost again...not wen naina needed him...but why did she have to move away...


meanwhile in the cave a now tired naina waited....it seemed endless...
rajveer in the crook of her arm...naina cud sense a slumber overcome her...
the little light of the lightening seemed to slowly dim out as naina feld her eyelids becoming heavy...

she had to be there for him...protect him..he neede her...rajveer sir...rajve...

"naina??.."
"huh??han???sir!!???sir aap??sir aaap khade nahi ho payenge dont try sir.."
"no naina..hume yahan se nikalna hi hoga..woh..woh mujhe dhoondh rahe hai...hum..dono hi mare jayenge naina...cmon lets go..aaah!!!"

rajveer had tryd to move forward but his acute pain got better of him...
"sir.."in a raflex naina's hands moved forward to support him..
somehow after the slumber rajveer lokked fresher..but was it possible..

"kya dekh rahi ho cadet. singh..we have to move...plzz come on.."
"yes sir...chliye..dheere..sir...SIR DHHEEERE.."
rajveer had tripped again..
"shhhhh!!chup ..v cant afford to make a noise.."
"sir kya yahan se nikalna thik hoga???aalekh hume dhoondh raha hai jungle mein.."
"no cadet we cant stay here..uske aadmi har jagah faile hain.."

they walked with great difficulty as naina supporting rajveer cudnt walk properly..after all lending support to a strong young man like that wasnt an easy task..

they had coverd quite a stretch of the jungle..
"waise mein kitni der behosh tha??.."
"kafi der tak sir..mein aur aalekh raat ke sade teen baje yaha ayye the...aur ab to subah hone wali hai..it may be around 6 am sir.."
"meri ek phnoe call par aise a gayi???"
naina stopped..
he was looking at her as if questioning her..asking her why she gave him all that pain and now why today did she come running to save the same man she had accused of her brother's murder..
"meine naveen ko nahi ma..."
naina had put her hand on his lips..
""mein....mein jan.."
swish!..thud!
"sir..woh.."
shh..i thnk wahan koi hai...oh..shit hum jungle ke beecho beech hai..naina we have to hurry for cover..jaldi naina..fast.."

suddenly the graveness of the situation dawned on them..they were aboyut 20 steps away from a bush...20 steps away from life..they hurried..if only...they cud reach it in time...
if only they..
BANG!
"SSSIIIRRR!!!!!!"


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Posted: 17 years ago
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itna suspense create kardiya....yaar agey bhi toh likho...

anyway, loving it

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