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Posted: 18 years ago
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...and u know wat also makes it realistic amrit?

its not a typical boy meets girl story...because although they both like each other they took ages saying it because of thier respect for each other as well as their families and who they are.

...and also they haven't done nething irrelevent in thier relationship even tho u can see that they love each other so deeply...
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Posted: 18 years ago
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OK I'm writting the next part now

but it might take some time so please be patient....😊

....work in progress...

sorry guys internets got some problem today dats y i'm taking so long...but i'll try my best to post!

Edited by dude068 - 18 years ago
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Diwali Special-

Special thanks to Amrit & Anku…who provided me wiv the info on diwali

Ok…so Sumit has spent most of the night dreaming up schemes to get back at kk…😈 ...he's really excited and cant wait until tomorrow….finally he falls asleep still thinkin of kk ❤️. On the otherhand kk has been asleep for ages….( 😆 )…with this thought in mind that the quicker she sleeps the quicker tomorrow will come.

The next moring at kk house-

Kk and her bhabi (I think priya) are sat on the steps outside their house…making beautiful rangoli patterns.

Kk: well bhabi aaj to hum ne kamal kar diya itne khoobsurat rangoli hum ne baniye hai koi bhi dehke impress hogayega 😃

Pr: acha to yeh kis ko impress karne ki koshish ho rahe hai 😉

Kk: (blushes) mein to bus wasse hi keh rahi ti 😳

Pr: aur mein bhi tere baat wasse hi sumaj gaye…(puts her hand on kk's shoulder) hamesha kush rahe 😊

She gets up and goes inside…

Kk: iss ka mutlub hai key bhabi sub kuch sumaj gaye…ab aane wali waqt mein bhabi hi mere madat karege…yes!

Back at Wadwa House (don't ask!....lol)

Su has made such a mess of his room in tryin to find the perfect outfit for the evening.

Su: aaarrgghhh!!!! Kuch bhi nahin acha lagta…yeh sub nehi kuprey bhi nahi…kk to mere taraf dehkege bhi nahi…to kya tu ab aeise hi gayega…doond kuch jaldi kar!!!

Confused 😕 he comes out of his room and goes towards kul & veenas room. He stops in the doorway. He sees kul giving his gift to veena. 😳 Su turns around a walks a few steps he puts his hands on his head

Su: hey baghwaan….pehle kam pareshaan tah kya? 😡….ab mein yeh gift kahaan se laoon???? 😵

He has an idea he takes out his mobile and rings his friend Aditya.

Su: hey sumit bol rah hoon

Adi: hi…bol kya kam hai

Su: kya kam hai mutlab?😲

Adi: dehk su tum hamesha usse waqt phone karta hai jub koi kam ho…😳 chal ab jaldi se baata dey! 😉

Su: acha sun…(he tells aditya to go get a beautiful & expensive necklace)…aur haan gift wrap wagaara kar lehna..aur ek baat aur us pe likhwana…Luv u always Sumit ❤️ sumaj gaya?

Adi: baap re…to baat is hadh tak poonch gaye hai…😛

Su: dekh adi mujhe tere pasand par yakeen hai isleye tujhe se key raha hoon 😳

Adi: acha teek hai lahta hoon

Su: thank u so much adi, bye! 😃

Su: yeh problem to solve hogaye ab kya pehnu…(goes back into his room in a dilemma)

Later on in the evening-

Kk and her bhahi has really outdone themselves…the decoration looks absolutely fabulous. Lights, candles, diyas everything is awesome. 👍🏼

But in the Wadwa house it's a completely different story…every1 is in the corridor dress very smartly waiting to go…except one person…yep u guessed it sumit

Kul: sumit jaldi kar na!

Su: (in his room) aya papa!

Kul: kitne dare se are ho lehkin abhi tak ponche nahi ho 😆 (mocking him)

Ve: (to kul) aap bhi naa…giving him a stern look 😳

Finally su steps out of his room…he's wearing a gorgeous Blue grey embroidered kurta sherwani…❤️

Kul: looks at him and laughs and so does Veena 😆😆😆

Su: (wonders) yeh haas kyun rahe hain…itna acha to lag raha hoon

kul: tu usse baata dey 😃

veena: nahin aap usse baata dein 😳

(both continue to giggle)

Su: Ma…papa chalein humey dare ho rahe hai 😎

Kul: acha…ab hamare wajah se dare ho rahe hai? 😡

Ve: chaleye…(draggin kul) 😊

In the car…kul and veena at the front and su on the back seat

Kul and veena keep exchanging looks and motioning each other to look at su. 😆 😆 😆

Su: (not taking any notice of them jus wants to get there) ❤️

They finally arrive. Kk's family greet them but kk is not there…there all greeting su but he is just trying to find kk.

Kk steps out of the crowd and comes to the entrance…shes wearing a Dark purple lehenga choli and looking extremely beautiful…su is jus gazing at her completely lost ❤️. Kk steps up to greet su's parents she does so but wonders why every1 is laughin so much 😲. She looks at rahul…priya…kul…veena and then finally at su. Then she realizes why they are laughin 😳. She feels so embarrassed for him.

As soon as everybody disperses she grabs su's arm and takes him upstairs to her room.

Su: kya tum bhi mujhe ghar dihkane key chukar mein ho? (laughin) 😆

Kk: (in a hurry) sumit tumne…(to herself) oh forget it isse to khud bhi nahin pata..bilkul bhuddu hai 😳

In kk's room

Kk: su tum yeh apne jacket utaro!

Su: (surprised) KYA? 😲

Kk: (looks at him sternly) utaro! Abhi…😳

Su: (smiling) par kyun? 😊

Kk: mein keh rahe hoon na isliye…😳

Su: (thinking mischievously) lagta yeh sherwani ney akri kamal kar dikhaya…good choice su 😃

Kk: utare rahe ho key nahi? 😡

Su: (naughtily shakes his head)…nahi 😆

Kk: (comes closer)…to phir main hi utar dehte hoon…(shes getting really frustrated with him…for not understanding)

Su: (holding her hands…extremely happy) 😆ab itne bhi jaaldi kya hai?😉

Kk: (knows what he's thinking) jo main keh rahee hoon who to tum sumaj hi nahi rahe 😳

Su: (looking into her eyes) kya nahin sumaj raha? 😃

Kk: su tumne kaprey andehrey mein pahne tey kya? (she starts laughing loudly) 😆 😆 😆

Su: 😕 lets go of her hands and his cheeky smile fades…he goes and looks in the mirror and sees that he has worn his jacket inside out 😲 …he gets really embarrassed and looks down 😳…biting his lip with a little smile on his face he turns and looks at kk. 😳 😳

Kk: still laughing at him: ab sumjhe?....she shows him her thumb 👎🏼and runs from there. 😆

Su quickly takes off his jacket and sorts it out…then goes back downstairs 😳

this was only the 1st dose guys..😉. The next one is coming up very shortly! (hopefully if the internet doesn't play up again) 😳

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Posted: 18 years ago
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wowwwwwwwww hina gr8 part.....loved it
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Part 2-

As su reaches the bottom of the stairs he sees everybody is getting ready for the pooja and even kumkum is there. 😛

Su: (to himself) ab mere baree kk…ab to bilkul bhi nahin choroonga…badla lehkar hi rahonga 😈...

He goes and joins everybody else…kul and veena look at him still smiling 😊

Su: (looks angrily at them) 😡 Ma…Papa aap bhi naa…ghar per mujhe baata suktey tey

Kul: lehkin beta tuhje to aane ki jaaldi thi…to kaise baata tey! 😆

Su looks away and kul & veena are still amused by the situation

Su: (thinks) kumkum ab pata nahi mere bare mein kya soch ti hogee…hogee na karab mere image….

The pooja starts…su is standing near his parents and kk near her brother…neither can see each other properly. 😉

Su leans back a little to see past all the other people…then a little more back. 😆

Kk looks around for sumit then looks at her brother 😳...he's busy concentrating on the pooja so kumkum takes a few steps back..😆..but even she cant see su properly so she moves a little bit more backwards

Both r talking to themselves ( )

Su: yeh kk kyun kahin nazar aa rahi?

Kk: yeh sumit kahaan chala gaye…kahin naraaz ho kar ghar to nahin chala gaye (stop herself from laughin) 😃

Su: yaar sumit yeh kk bhi tujhe kitna satati hai (smiles to himself) 😃

All of a sudden su bumps into some1

Su: tum? 😕

(yep its kk) They whisper to each other so that they don't disturb ne1

kk: tum yahaan kaise aye..😲..tum to wahaan bilkul aage khade tey (both are right at the back now)

su: tum bhi to wahee ti…who actually tumhe doondtey doondtey yahaan tak ponche gaye (smiles cutely) 😊

both look at each other and laugh quietly...😆…Su is about to give her a hug when he glances over to rahul. Rahul is looking around for kk. Suddenly sumit diverts his attention towards the pooja.

Kk: are tumhe kya achanak hogaya? 😕

Su: looking straight ahead whispers: tumhare bhaiya is taraf dekh rahe hain! 😳

Quickly kk puts her hands together and joins in the pooja. Rahul has seen all of this but pretends not to. He turns and smiles to himself. 😆 😆

After the pooja finishes kk walks off to help out. Su see kk is helping to give out mithai to everyone. Purposely he goes and stands in front of her. 😳 She moves to the side and he also moves to the side. She tries the other side but he does the same thing again.😳

Kk: raasta choro sumit? (shes blushing now) 😳 😳

Su: erm…nahi 😛 (grins cheekily at her)

Kk: hato naa maine sub ko mithai dehney hai

Su: aur mujhe?...mujhe nahi milige kya? 🤔

Kk: (puts the tray out in front of him) acha lo…

Su: (looks at the tray then at kk)😲…aeise tori kisko mithai kilatey hain!

Kk: acha…to phir bataeye kaise kilatey hain 😊

Su: yeh pakro (gives her the mithai) aur isse rakho (puts down the tray)

He comes closer and stands in front of her.

Su: ab khalo!

Kk: (blushes) Sumit plz? 😳

Su: he goes closer and holds her hand…he brings it closer to his face…looks like su's goin to get his own way?!!! 😉

Ra: Kumkum…kumkum….

Kk: (stops her hand) bhaiya bhula rahe hain…(she gives him the mithai in his hand and hurries off)

Su: hhhmmmmm….kya hai yaar? 😵 kuch kiya bhi nahi…pehle se hi usse bhulaliya? 5 minat aur intazaar nahi kar sakhte tey kya?

He watches kk for a while…then decides to go outside for a while…for some fresh air. Kk is free from her duties now and she searches around for sumit but doesn't see him newhere….

Kk: Uncle apne sumit ko kahin dehka hai?

Kul: haan who tori dare pehle baar gaya tah

Kk: acha…thanks Uncle!

Kk goes outside and sees sumit sitting on the bonnet of his car…he's looking at something in his hand. She goes from behind and hugs him tight…he looks up at her and smiles...😊...she see his still got the mithai in his hand. (aww)

Kk: Sumit…

Su: hmm? (smiles a little)

Kk: yeh lo…(takes the mithai from his hand and feeds him it)

Su: (also feed her the remaining mithai) is smiling a lot now 😃

They both hug real tight….😉

After a while they hear fireworks going off.

Kk: (stops hugging him) chalo sumit maine patakon ko dekh naa hai (pulls his arm.)

Su: yehein par baat kar dektey hai naa jahan tumhare pyare bhaiya na ho (he laughs) 😆 😆 😆

Kk: (slaps his arm) Bhaiya key bare mein kuch mutt kaho! 😛

Su: Actually mera nahi mann kara patakon do dekhne ka

Kk: acha to kya keh raha hai tumhara mann?

Su: key mein…tumhare liya apna pyar izhaar karoon

Kk: acha?

Su: nods

Kk: aeise to mein nahi maano gi!

Su: kya…😲 aeise to mera yakeen nahi karoge?

Kk: nope…tumhai sub key samne kehnaa parega? 😆

Su: to teek hai…par agar maine kaha…tumhai bhi kuch karna parega….

Kk: 😕 kya?

Su: u have to hug me..real tight…sub key saamne…to shurt lagee?

Kk: (thinks for a while) erm acha teek hai…chalien? 😊

Su has an idea….he smiles playfully to himself….kk and su are standing quite close. Everybody is busy watching the fireworks…you can hardly hear nething in the racket.

Su looks right and left…

Su: kk kya sub yahein hain? (has to shout in her ear) 😃

Kk: looks around (doesn't really think much about y he is asking) haan sub yahein hai (screaming back at him) lol 😆 😆

Su: to phir suno….KUMKUM I LOVE YOU!!!!

Kk: tries to hush him thinking every1 can hear 😳

Su: (laughing crazily) keh diya na?!!!! ab mere hug?....😃 puts his arms out

Kk: (realizes nobody has heard in the racket) nahi yeh cheating thi

Su: arre yeh kya baat hui? U have to give me a hug means keh u have to! 😒

Kk: nahi..tumne cheating ki…😛 she pushes him away and runs and stands near her brother. Rahul puts his arm around kk's shoulder. Su watching kk…she sticks her tongue out at him 😛…knowing he can't doin nething whilst shes with rahul. Su gets a lil angry. 😡

Su: (to himself) cheater mein nahin tum ho! Ab aage dehko madam hota hai kya? Yeh hug to mujhe chahiye mutlub chahiye!!!

oh ho! n diwali still hasn't quite finished 😆...ran out of ideas..so plz sum1 do the honors of finishing off diwali...n rememba su needs a hug 😃 and some revenge 😈 and also to give his gift to kk....abhi bhi itna kuch rahta hai...😆 😆 😆

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Posted: 18 years ago
#76
it's was awesum henna 😊
so here's my turn now

su thinking what he can do to take revenge from kk...just then he see akshat (kk's nephew) playing with crackers n he has a solid plan 😉
su to akshat - hello beta..aap yahan kya kar rahe ho
ak - patakhe chala raha hoon
su - aap mera ek kaam karoge
ak - kaam????
su - haan...bas chota sa...aap mera kaam kardo phir hum dono bade wale crackers chalaenge
ak - sachi...aap mere saath patakhe chalaoge..papa mujhe nahin chalane dete
su - papa ko kya pata k akshat ko patakhe chalane aate hain..main aap k saath zaroor chalaoonga...mera kaam kardo
ak - kya
su - aap ki jo bua hain na...
ak - kaun bua 😆 😆 😆
su - kaun bua kya...kk tumhari bua nahin hai
ak - wo..wo to meri didi hain...unhone mujhe kaha hai k main unhein didi kahoon
su - accha...jo bhi ho...aap kk se jakar kaho k sumit uncle k haath pe chot lagi hai aur unhein dawayee nahin mil rahi..wo aap k room mein hain..aap ja k dedo
ak - ho...ho...main unse jhooth kahoon...
su - aapko crackers chalane hain na
ak - haan
su - to jao unhein bolo....
ak - ok
su stopping him - and don't forget it's a secret b/w u n me
ak - secret....
su - yes....now go

kk was standing with rahul...akshat pulls her dupatta n takes her away
kk - kya hai akshat
ak - wo jo aajkal hamare ghar bahut aate hain na 😆 😆
kk - kaun
ak - jo saara din aapke saath rehte hain
kk - sumit
ak - haan..wohi..unke haath mein aag lag gayi..unka haath jal gaya..dawayee laga do...wo aapko bula rahe hain...jao room mein ( he spoke like a robot 😆 😆 😆 )
kk - kya...wo theek to hain na
ak - haan 😆 😆 😆 nahin...aap jao jaldi

kk rushes to her room..see su standing with his back towards her
kk went close to him...sees his both hands..they r fine
she was worried
su - yes...ab pata chala mujhe kaisa laga tha jab tum mujhse door gayi thi
kk shouting at him - phir se mazzak....tum hamesha aisa kyun karte ho
su - tumhein sabak sikhane k liye...
kk - aaj k baad main kabhi tumse baat nahin karoongi
su went away from him..he wasn't watching kk
su - to mat karo
kk - i'm serious sumit
su - i'm serious too...
kk - sumit main chali jaoongi
su - to jao...waise bhi jaogi kahan...wapas to phir yaheen aayogi...tum zyada der tak mujhse door nahin reh sakti..i know..
when he stopped giving his lecture n turns back..kk was not there
su - kk...
as he was in kk's room..he could see the main gate of the house...n he saw kk going away
he rushed downstairs with his full force to stop kk
kk has gone a long way where there was nobody except silence..su came huffing n puffing n grabs her hand
su still huffing - kk...tum..ghar se..bahar kyun chali ayee
kk crying - tum hi ne to kaha tha chali jao
su - wo to tumhein chidhane k liye sweetheart 😳
kk - jaanti hoon..lekin kaha kyun
su - accha ab galti ho gayi....i'm sorry
kk - main tumhein maaf nahin karoongi
su - mujhe maafi leni aati hai...
he holds her tightly and gives her a big kiss 😳
su - ab maaf karogi...
kk still can't beleive what he actually did..
kk - sumit..yeh kya kiya
su - dance...tumne dekha nahin 😆 😆 😆
kk - stop joking..n slaps him slightly on his face
su - haye..ek baar aur
this time kk slaps him harder n runs away...su chasing her
after sum running...su managed to grab her and moved closer n closer to her..
kk - sumit..dekho aage mat aana
su - kyun...
kk - koi dekh lega
su - is sunsaan jagah pe hamare siwa aur koi nahin hai
kk kept on moving backward when she came to a dead tree
su puts his arms arounf her so that she cannot move
kk - sumit tum ..
su - ssshhh..
he brings out that necklace
su - ye lo..tumhara gift..
kk - oh..how sweet..
su - i know i'm sweet
kk - i was talking about the necklace
su put that necklace around her neck
kk - yahan pe sheesha nahin hai...
su - tumhein kyunchahiye
kk - mujhe khud ko dekhna hai
su - to meri aankhon me dekh lo..ur looking gorgeous
kk - haye main mar jawan..kya baat hai aaj bade romantic mood me ho
su - bas aese hi...
kk hugs him tightly
kk - sumit..main bhaiya se kya kahoongi jab wo is necklace k baare main poochenge
su - keh dena maine diya hai
kk - pakka...
su - are jab pyaar kiya to darna kya...
both hug each other...suddenly su remembers that akshat might b looking 4 him 4 bursting crackers..
su - oh no..
kk - kya hua..
su - aaj meri khair nahin..
kk - kyun..
su tells kk what he said akshat to do
su - ab yeh na ho ki wo rahul se jakar pooche ki sumit kahan hai
kk - to kya hua agar usne pooch liya
su - wo rahul ko batade gaa k maine usse kya kaha
kk - acchha...abhi to bade sher ban rahe the yeh kehkar k pyaar kiya to darna kya..to av kya hua
su - now stop this kk..agar rahul ko pata chal gaya to kahin wo tumhein mujhse milne se na roke
kk - to kabhi na kabhi to unhein pata chalna hi hai
su - lekin main khud use bataoonga
kk - kab
su - right time par..ab ghar jaldi calo

there at kk's house...su's far came true
akshat went to rahul - papa sumit uncle kahan hain
ra - pata nahiun beta ..tumne kyun poocha
and he tells the whole 'ram kahani' to rahul
ra - accha to yeh baat hai...
just then sumit came rushing...kk was not with her..she was coming slowly
su - are akshat aao hum patakhe chalayein
ak - chalo..
he took akshat n says to kk to handle rahul
kk went to rahul
he didn't asked anything...kk releived
he saw that necklace but didn't asked
ra - kk tum yaheen thehro..main abhi aayaa
kk - theek hai
ke went and asked priya to talk with kk about sumit
priya said ok she will talk to her as soon as every1 goes

diwali still hasn't ended 😆 😆 but continue guys..
Edited by amrit23 - 18 years ago
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Hey guyz might not be able to write today...coz its EID!!!!! YEY!!!!

...but i'm not lucky enuff to be able to celebrate it probly i got like 5 lectures today so im off to uni 😭 (yes on eid day) 😭

Neways great work amrit mazza aa gaya perfect ending (well almost ending) to diwali...

...now u guys plz continue coz i've got a huge work load this week...as there is exams next week.... 😕

...so sorry if i'm a little inactive 😉 hope u understand

ps: amrit im leavin u with responsibilty of this thread..teek hai? 😉

Edited by Henna042 - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
#78
happy eid henna 😊
u concentrate on ur studies..i'll take care that our fanfic doesn't get inactive 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hey guys....how did u find the diwali scenes?!!!

Plz do comment...

Coz it does take extra time writing up these special scenes jus 4 u guyz...😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
#80
henna
i was wondering no1 has commented on our fanfic..r they reading or not 😕

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