Posted:
Hi there!
I had my eye on this FF since you started writing but exams made me wait. I finally read all 9 chapters in one go & to say that this is amazing would be an understatement.
You write so beautifully, it's almost like watching a movie. You gave a really nice touch to the cliche memory loss track. I like the fact that you didn't try to portray it as something melodramatic and over the top but took it slow and made it look real. Kudos to you for that!
Now this is going to be a very detailed comment but what the hell, I liked it too much to let go without expressing what I felt through the story.
I really liked the initial chapters where Dev is shocked to know about Sona's amnesia but handles it like a mature person and doesn't leave her side, that was something I was expecting from Dev in the show.
Secondly, I like how Ishwari finally took hold of her emotions and decided to take this opportunity to set things right with Sona. It was slow but eventually she realized, that's enough for me. And the fact that you kept it real, not pushing her character to the point of being an uber sweet MIL who force feeds her daughter in-law and giggles with her makes it perfect.
Thirdly, I liked how Sona rediscovered her relationship with with each memory. It was like falling in love with him again, rebuilding their relationship, starting afresh just like Dev wanted. I'm glad you didn't make it look like it was an obligation for her to fall for him again, she had her doubts but eventually she fell for him. Very natural. Also, her finding out the baby was heart wrenching but at the same time, the fact that she didn't acknowledge Dev's pain was a little disturbing but you made up for that so no complains :)
Lastly, Dev! This is the Dev I want in the show. A man who can fulfill his promises, stand by his words. Yes he ignored the obvious tension between Sona and his mom but in the end, he's also a human, he can't solve all the problems but he can at least try. The way he handled Sonakshi after the accident, after the miscarriage and after she remembers about their baby, all emotions on point. Very beautifully penned. I'm glad that he told her about his resentment and how he felt when she made him feel incapable of being a father. That must have hurt so much. Poor baby but thankfully he talked to her about it, that is important.
Okay I'm done 😆
Please write more,
P.S.- Won't say no to an epilogue :P
Book Talk
Kyunki Saas Bhi Kabhi Bahu Thi 2
Debate Mansion
