Devakshi FF:The Memory of Us Epilogue Updated on Pg 70 - Page 49

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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ...Doctor...

Hi there!

I had my eye on this FF since you started writing but exams made me wait. I finally read all 9 chapters in one go & to say that this is amazing would be an understatement.
You write so beautifully, it's almost like watching a movie. You gave a really nice touch to the cliche memory loss track. I like the fact that you didn't try to portray it as something melodramatic and over the top but took it slow and made it look real. Kudos to you for that!

Now this is going to be a very detailed comment but what the hell, I liked it too much to let go without expressing what I felt through the story.

I really liked the initial chapters where Dev is shocked to know about Sona's amnesia but handles it like a mature person and doesn't leave her side, that was something I was expecting from Dev in the show.

Secondly, I like how Ishwari finally took hold of her emotions and decided to take this opportunity to set things right with Sona. It was slow but eventually she realized, that's enough for me. And the fact that you kept it real, not pushing her character to the point of being an uber sweet MIL who force feeds her daughter in-law and giggles with her makes it perfect.

Thirdly, I liked how Sona rediscovered her relationship with with each memory. It was like falling in love with him again, rebuilding their relationship, starting afresh just like Dev wanted. I'm glad you didn't make it look like it was an obligation for her to fall for him again, she had her doubts but eventually she fell for him. Very natural. Also, her finding out the baby was heart wrenching but at the same time, the fact that she didn't acknowledge Dev's pain was a little disturbing but you made up for that so no complains :)

Lastly, Dev! This is the Dev I want in the show. A man who can fulfill his promises, stand by his words. Yes he ignored the obvious tension between Sona and his mom but in the end, he's also a human, he can't solve all the problems but he can at least try. The way he handled Sonakshi after the accident, after the miscarriage and after she remembers about their baby, all emotions on point. Very beautifully penned. I'm glad that he told her about his resentment and how he felt when she made him feel incapable of being a father. That must have hurt so much. Poor baby but thankfully he talked to her about it, that is important.


Okay I'm done 😆

Please write more,

P.S.- Won't say no to an epilogue :P

Oh my, Thank you soo much for taking the time out to write such a detailed review. It truly means a lot😊
This show got me this forum and the members on here encouraged me to write. I was always enamored by the chemistry of the leads, right from the very first promo. I'm really overwhelmed by the response I've got.
I tried my very best to stick to the characters that were introduced to us and not to the way they seem to be behaving these days. The Dev I saw after Sonakshi's accident was so mature. Oblivious, but mature. I tried to retain him. All the faults and complaints I have with him currently on the show, I try and make up for it in my story. Glad to know it resonated with so many members.
Also, the point about Ishwari not being the over sweet MIL- that was intended, since I feel that is how it would be eventually. Even if she whole heartedly accepts Sonakshi, she can never be the super cheesy MIL.
Once again, Thank you so very much for your lovely words. I'm touched😊
Will try to post an epilogue soon😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Khusharni

That was so beautiful..and I'm truley heartbroken it's done 😭 I love how the fight wasn't really a fight and how this time Sona was calling out to Dev.

Please post an epilogue!!!!

Thank you so much, my dear🤗
Will try and post an epilogue soonish😳
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: rasika_DS

Malvikaa the first lines of your post itself made me sentimental that this is going to be the last part

You know right that you are a gifted writer⭐️ Its not at all easy to make the readers feel the emotions so easily like you do. ❤️Every line and every word in your chapter has its own importance.

Coming to the last chapter, it was damn emotional. When Sonakshi bid goodbye to Ish, my heart came to my mouth. Thankfully she wanted a break just for few days.

The Dev-Sona conversation was so so beautiful, heartwarming and emotional as well. I loved how Sonakshi made him take the load off his heart. He took out the resentment of the whole year and it was much much needed. He did not get even one fair chance while Sona could always take out her frustration on him. My heart goes out to Dev more in this chapter😊 You deserve to be a father..This was required to assure him after he lost the faith in himself. Their conversation made me cry.. honestly. Finally they swam together and survived❤️

And the last para made me smile and laugh😃 Loved how you connected the end with the beginning of the story👏 And I am still not over the chapter, heart is still full of emotions.

Thank you for giving us this amazing story dear. It was a masterpiece⭐️ and will always be in my favorite list❤️

And puchnewali baat hai..we want an epilogue dear😳

Rasikaa my fav🤗 I love you!! You're always there to read and comment and encourage even my lamest post and you have no idea how happy that makes me.
I'm so happy to know you liked the last part. Since it was the last one, the expectations were running high and I was afraid to disappoint. I'm overwhelmed to see the response.
I'm glad to know you could connect with the little details I tried to incorporate, in Ish's behaviour and Dev's as well.
Thank you will not be enough to tell u how much your support means to me, so take a hug instead 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: rash2222

amazing stuff👏👏... it is such a perfect ending to the beautiful story... totally loved it...

mail to our cv's they should use it... atleast we will be saved from what we are watching right now...

do write more plz can't wait for your new story😳😳

Oh that's such a huge compliment dear😳 Thank you soo much🤗
I agree, we all feel so disconnected to the show right now, that's why I could update so soon, I just had to make up for the disappointment I felt for the show, in my story.
I'm glad it resonated with you😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: gmgi

Absolutely brilliant. This story of yours will remain close to my heart no matter what they do with Sona n Dev in the show. I am going to miss looking forward to your updates. The ending made me so happy and contended. They will have their HEA, whatever comes at them. Please start a new one dear.

Thank you so much Geena🤗
You've been a constant support throughout and you dont know how thankful I am for your constant encouragement and appreciation. I know I sound like a sappy person who keeps getting sentimental, but I have only this outlet to let you guys know how much your support means to me😳
Will post an OS or something soon😃
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ARCH21

Malvika - take a bow! You have weaved in the pain, the loss - of the baby and of the person you love, blame - towards yourself & towards the same person you love, the internal struggle and then waking up enough to your partner's struggle, and then finally remembering that all that matters is how much you love this very person...

I was misty eyed and smiled at the same time. You have captured the emotions so beautifully and with the backdrop of so many missed opportunities in the show, I felt glad seeing these 2 the way we all expected and sad at what they are made to do in the show...

Loved the fact that Ishwari understood why Sona blocked Dev in her pain... because she found a reason/an outlet for the anger/disappointment that was pushed down within her from all the times Dev didn't stand up for her during Ishwari's insecurities... This is the Ishwari that is so relatable - human but aware.

Absolutely loved how the memory loss gave them a second chance but nothing was just shoved under the carpet... it came back to all in bits & pieces and gave everyone a much needed second chance to redo their reactions, acknowledge the pain, let go and finally breathe again...

I have been on the road last 2 days and conferences kept me busy. Have not seen the episodes this week but the first chance I got, I clicked on your story... I have said this before - your writing is visual but the way you capture emotions is so natural. From start to this lovely end, you kept all 3 in character and the reactions, reasons and relationships are fitting to how the characters progressed till about 70 episodes of the show...

Would love an epilogue but better still would be another take on the Dev-Sona story... BUT the day you decide to write professionally, I expect a PM 😊

Much power to you ...!



You're here, you're here!!! 😃😃
It's a different feeling when you get appreciated by someone you look up to. I have always admired your critical analysis of the subtle elements of the show. I know you understand the intricacies of the characters so well, and to have you appreciate my effort is just an amazing feeling!!
This is one of the best compliments ever - taking the time out to read my story instead of watching the episodes. I'm humbled.
I tried my very best to keep all the three as relateable as possible. It was especially tough with Dev, specially because I expected so much from him on the show and was mostly left disappointed. Everything I felt the Dev on the show had it in him, but we weren't able to witness, I tried and incorporated in the FF. I'm glad to see I more or less succeeded in trying to convey what I intended.
Once again, a thank you would not suffice to convey how much your encouragement means to me, so here's a hug instead🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
Beautiful part... All of it made sense... Just great.. And yes an epilogue is definitely wanted... Looking forward to that...
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: Malvika07


You're here, you're here!!!😃😃
It's a different feeling when you get appreciated by someone you look up to. I have always admired your critical analysis of the subtle elements of the show. I know you understand the intricacies of the characters so well, and to have you appreciate my effort is just an amazing feeling!!
This is one of the best compliments ever - taking the time out to read my story instead of watching the episodes. I'm humbled.
I tried my very best to keep all the three as relateable as possible. It was especially tough with Dev, specially because I expected so much from him on the show and was mostly left disappointed. Everything I felt the Dev on the show had it in him, but we weren't able to witness, I tried and incorporated in the FF. I'm glad to see I more or less succeeded in trying to convey what I intended.
Once again, a thank you would not suffice to convey how much your encouragement means to me, so here's a hug instead🤗



You flatter me 😃 but thank you for your kind words.
The one thing I had admired about the show (when it started and progressed) is the clear, subtle storytelling & characterization. This has rightfully attracted an intelligent audience that expects quality entertainment. I made a post once about the makers respecting the audience's intelligence (something I can't say about many others on TV) but they seem to have really gotten carried away with their own creativity. It's an art to know when to rein in.
It is refreshing to see almost everyone critiquing how the character graph is moving into extremes (unlike many forums where the fanbase just showers praises irrespective)...
Like their characters on screen, the makers made promises and seem to be breaking them. While I don't know how the characters redeem themselves but if this drama trick doesn't garner TRPs then the makers lose an intelligent fanbase & hv nothing to show for it...

But while they are trying to find their way, you have managed to capture the essence of the 3 characters. Insecurity, guilt, pain, blame, anger, loss, joy and sharing all this or running away from any of it is what makes relationships real but the how is equally important as the what...

BUT when you love something, it shows and you love your writing. You enjoy it, that's why you can bring out the finer nuances... I actually love how you convey the expressions, subconscious actions, sleep induced eyes, body language - tightening of the jaw or placing his cheek on her belly says so much more than shouting out the words...

Sorry, I delayed but it's crazy land out here 😃 and nope, why torture myself with the episodes in the little time I have when I can read a much better story 😊 and imagine Shaheer & Erica performing it... Time well spent 😃

🤗 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: ARCH21



You flatter me 😃 but thank you for your kind words.
The one thing I had admired about the show (when it started and progressed) is the clear, subtle storytelling & characterization. This has rightfully attracted an intelligent audience that expects quality entertainment. I made a post once about the makers respecting the audience's intelligence (something I can't say about many others on TV) but they seem to have really gotten carried away with their own creativity. It's an art to know when to rein in.
It is refreshing to see almost everyone critiquing how the character graph is moving into extremes (unlike many forums where the fanbase just showers praises irrespective)...
Like their characters on screen, the makers made promises and seem to be breaking them. While I don't know how the characters redeem themselves but if this drama trick doesn't garner TRPs then the makers lose an intelligent fanbase & hv nothing to show for it...

But while they are trying to find their way, you have managed to capture the essence of the 3 characters. Insecurity, guilt, pain, blame, anger, loss, joy and sharing all this or running away from any of it is what makes relationships real but the how is equally important as the what...

BUT when you love something, it shows and you love your writing. You enjoy it, that's why you can bring out the finer nuances... I actually love how you convey the expressions, subconscious actions, sleep induced eyes, body language - tightening of the jaw or placing his cheek on her belly says so much more than shouting out the words...

Sorry, I delayed but it's crazy land out here 😃 and nope, why torture myself with the episodes in the little time I have when I can read a much better story 😊 and imagine Shaheer & Erica performing it... Time well spent 😃

🤗 🤗

See, you proved me right with your reply. Told ya, you always manage to capture and articulate all our feelings towards a particular track. I was waiting for you to make a post about this. Like you correctly pointed out, this show has managed to garner an intelligent audience that expects better from the makers. They were doing so well, then suddenly the drama quotient increased. I attributed it to the TRP race, but then now they are just going in circles. Even the dialogues are getting repetitive. Mom- Son keep romancing each other, Sonakshi keeps telling Dev to stop troubling, Dev refuses to listen, Ritwik keeps repeating his 2 tarah ke log, Bijoy keeps getting mad at Ishwari.
I can only hope they are reading our reactions and will take steps to improve.
Once again, Thank you soo much for the very very generous words. You're right. I do love it. I discovered writing recently, after I joined the forum, so somehow I will always have this show to thank for it. I do love writing, but what keeps me going is the response I get from awesome readers like you. It just feels so good to see your efforts being appreciated.
Once you get a little free time, I do hope you make a post on the current track and any other observations that you might have. I would love to read it.🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago

Originally posted by: princesspipi

Beautiful part... All of it made sense... Just great.. And yes an epilogue is definitely wanted... Looking forward to that...

Thank you so much dear😳 I'm glad you enjoyed it all coming together at the end. Will try to post an epilogue soon😃

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