FF:Broken Dreams&...Part 18C Pg 147 06/07 - Page 3

gr8 start pls do contin soon...........

Abhilasha.....great start.. 👏

I'm very curious now...why they got married, why their friendship turned sour after marriage, why Jai is behaving that way, what's wrong??? now before I crack my head, please give us another update 😉 😊

Originally posted by: divan

I love a story with a raaz...wonder what happened in the friendship for Jai to turn cold...poor Bani, no one to share her sorrows with. She is not sure she loves him, but hun you must if you are yearning little bit of love from him.
Dii... i think it will take a long time for her to realise... 😛

Tony...noticed the change in madam. afterall he is our fav Tony... 😉 wonder where he vanished in KS 😡
Can't wait to see what happens...👏 Thanks

Originally posted by: divya_123

hmm nice startimg. 👏 👏 thanks 😳
i wonder whats the reason behind jai's such behaviour 😕 working on that 😛

continue soon 😃

aur ek baat if you dont mind could you just increase the font size. its fine this way too but it was more better if the font is abit big 😃 Thanks for telling 😉

Originally posted by: tam2

Interesting start....JB are married and have some sort of Hubby wife relationship...then why is Jai behaving like this...Is there someone else in his life... 🤔... Nope... A big Definite No.... I hate triangular love story...😡

would love to know how the story will progress further...

well do cont soon... 👏 👏 👏 ...
Thanks for reading 😳

Originally posted by: pptm469

Looks like Bani is being punished for something again.. Wonder what it is?? WOW.... Claps for you for ur fine guess 👏 👏 👏
Do please continue.
Nice start...
Looking forward for more!!!

Originally posted by: JAN_SA

Hey There,

Great start 👏 👏 👏 , what's up with Jai , poor bani 😭 . Please continue with regular post 😉 😆 .
working on that part... i cannot promise very regular update... 😳

Lotsa luv

J

Originally posted by: kitkat_2002

interesting...... so much like jai to turn cold without sayin a word...
but i hope the broken dreams will be mended 😊 its gonna take pretty long time 😛

like the way u write Thanks 😳

keep writin

tc

Originally posted by: koolgal

hmmmmmmmmm
wonder wats wrong with jai 😕
but it was a nice start 😊
do cont. soon
i will be waiting 😉
Thanks Lina 😳

Originally posted by: jeenal20

PLZ CONT SOON
GR8 PART Thanks 😃
WANT TO KNOW THE REASON WHY JAI IS BEHAVING LIKE THIS

Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey
gr8 start... Thanks 😳
wonder why jai is behaving like this to bani...
cont.sooon

Originally posted by: ridhijai

Great start.
liked it.
awww...poor Bani 😭 😭 😭....all sad don't what went wrong...way Jai is behaving like that...paining for her best friend wants to know why he is being so cold to her....awesome.... thanks 😳
looking forward to the next part...wants to know why Jai is behaving like that towards her.
plz cont. soon

Originally posted by: siumi

Hey abhilasha!!!
awesome begining man!!! its full of suspense, JB marrige doesnt look alike a normal one, poor Bani shes so sad bcz Jai doesnt talk t her the little hope that she had, hat even is broken now...
g8t ff!!!!!!!! Thanks 😳
cont soon dear 😉 😃 😃 sure
Sukh here 😊

Originally posted by: khushboo2006

Abhi great start dear.....already loving the storyline...felt bad for Bani....so JB's marriage seemed was not working well.....can't wait to see how the story unfolds....please do continue soon 👏

Thanks Khusboo 😃

Originally posted by: RANJANA_RRJ

Hey Abhilasha,
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR FF🥳
Thanks 🤗

Great start and thank you for the PM.
I really want to know what happend between the two.
This is not fair. Why did you stop?😕 Actually I dint know what to write next 😃
Sorry, I can't handle suspence that well so if you don't update in the next two days I will bug you for an update. U r most welcome 😆

Bye
Ranjana

Originally posted by: culgal86

hey gal...................

nice startoff................ Thanks 😳

wats wrong with jai...............

update soon

Originally posted by: btkr

wow... made ur appearance soon.... welcome... 😆 just kidding 😉
Awwww, feel bad for Bani, that was humiliating and hurtful....so what is Jai's problem? 😡 Exactly... i am confused too 😕

Good part, Abhi..

Originally posted by: bdev

Wow, what a start to a ff. But, a very bad place to stop 😭. I feel bad for Bani, and really want to know what made Jai so distant.

Please continue soon. Sure... thanks for reading 😃

BD

Originally posted by: moonlitnight

Congo on ur 1st FF 😃 Thanks Tropa 😳
so..ermm..what is the raaz?? why is Jai cold??poor Bani 😭 😭 working on that... to present jai in a greyish way but with more amount of white 😆
interesting start 👏 👏 👏
plz cont soon

Originally posted by: nir_jaanu

first of all.
congrats.. on ur first ff.
second.
omg.. that was really good.
Double thanks 😛

u have to continue soon like tom.
please please pretty please

Originally posted by: amiee

wonderful beginning pls cont soon...........
Thanks for reading 😊

Originally posted by: j&b84

gr8 start pls do contin soon...........
Thanks for reading 😳

Originally posted by: niruba

Abhilasha.....great start.. 👏 Thanks 😳

I'm very curious now...why they got married, why their friendship turned sour after marriage, why Jai is behaving that way, what's wrong??? now before I crack my head, please give us another update 😉 😊
I am already breaking my head.... 😆

Thanks static_chaos23 for reading.... and those hundreds of people who opened the topic 😛... thank you that you ppl considered to open the topic... 😉

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Part 2

Bani woke up just before dawn, the next day. She missed the dinner as always. She looked at the sky. The dawn was just breaking. She looked at the table clock she had placed near her. It showed 5:30 A.M. It's time to wake up, she told herself as she tried to get up. She neatly arranged the things which were lying around her – the sketch book, pencil set, erasers, folders, mobile and many other things. She folded the mat on which she was sleeping and secured all the things into the mat and folded again. Before folding, she looked at the incomplete sketch she was doing the last night. It depicted a girl standing on a terrace watching the sky – whether she was talking to the stars or was she longing for a shooting star? She sighed and folded it into the mat. She placed the things near the window and entered the room slowly. She first peeped into it. She noticed that Jai was still sleeping. If she knew right, he won't wake up before 6:30 A.M. She went to her cupboard and opened it making a minimal sound. She took all the necessary clothes and towel and entered the bathroom.

She hung her clothes on the hanger and stood for few minutes quietly. She then brushed her teeth. Then, she stood under cold shower. She needed it. She thought about the previous day. She had woken up late. That too, after sharing the bed with her husband for the first time since their marriage. Jai was more or less ready to leave for office. Today…. She sighed. Today was like everyday. Even yesterday was like everyday. Only she did not realize it. By the time she realized it, her hopes and dreams were crushed and she fell down flat on the ground all alone again. One part of her mind was raising a voice insulting her that she had let him touch her. Her other mind consoled her. She did not know whether her eyes shed any tears. If so, all the tears went with the cold water. She turned the shower off and wiped with the towel. She dried her hair as much as possible and dressed herself. She put her wet clothes into the laundary bag nearby and came out of the bathroom making no noise as usual.

She clipped her half-dried hair in a clutch, placed a pinch of sindoor in her forehead and wore the Mangalsutra in her neck without looking at herself in the mirror. She went to the balcony and fetched her mobile from the folding. She then left the room and went to the garden.

***

Jai woke up when his alarm rang. He switched the alarm off and sat in the bed. He wiped his eyes and looked around. There was no trace of Bani. He looked at the other side of the bed. The day before, in that place, he had seen Bani sleeping. For the first time, they had shared the bed since their marriage. His mind floated back to the days when she used to come to his home when she was young.

It was when she was 9 or 10 years old that she came to his house first time. They had newly shifted to Aligarh. They were something like neighbours, back-door neighbours. They shared a common wall in the back of their house. She first came across Krishna, his mother by climbing the wall and sitting on it. During first three days, she would smile at Krishna and watch what Krishna was doing in the backyard without saying anything. As soon as she would hear her mother's voice, she would jump down and run into the house. On the fourth day, Krishna came near the wall and asked what her name was. (His mother had described the way she reacted to the whole family that evening during dinner.) Her face broke out to the most widest smile ever and said her name proudly, "Bani".

Krishna asked her what she was doing on the wall.

She grinned innocently and said, "Aunty, Mujhe bahut achcha lagta hai!"

Krishna asked, "Kya achcha lagta hai?"

She giggled as she said, "Aise chadkar baitna!" she said carelessly.

Krishna asked, "Tumhari ma ko pata hai?"

She shook her head to negative. "Meri ma ko pasand nahin."

"Toh phir aise nahi baitthe. Agar gir jaati toh?" Krishna said affectionately.

"Nahin giroongi. Aunty, main thodi na khadi hoon. Main toh dhyaan se baiti hoon. Kaise giroongi?" Krishna looked at the girl unbelievingly. "Ab dekhiye naa, meri ma mujhe bahar hi nahin bej rahi hai. Kehti hai, is naye shehar mein kho jaoongi. Isliye yahaan baitkar apna time pass kar rahi thi" she said in a naughty tone.

"School nahin jaati, kya?" Krishna asked as she made preparations to wash the clothes.

"Ab nahin. Ab tak admission nahin liya. Papa try kar rahe hai. Ek hafta toh lagega." She said after calculating.

When Krishna started washing the clothes, Bani watched the way she was washing sitting on the wall. After sometime, she asked, "Aunty, aapka naam kya hai?"

Krishna smiled at her, "Krishna"

"Achcha naam hai." She complimented.

"Pata hai, mere ghar mein, main, meri maa, mere papa, aur meri didi rehte hai. Sab hamesha kuch na kuch kaam mein busy rehte hai." She sulked.

"Achcha???" Krishna said while listening and washing.

"Kya main aapki madad karoon?" she offered.

Krishna stood erect and frowned at her.

"Aap gussa mat ho. Maine socha ki roz aap akele hi yeh kaam karte hai… toh… toh maine socha ki thodi madad karoon. Agar aapko nahin chahiye toh, bata dijiye. Gussa mat hona." She said little seriously.

Krishna smiled at her affectionately, "Aisi baat nahin hai. Tum chote ho na. Jab badi hogi, tab yeh sab kaam karvaoongi. Teek hai?" she consoled her.

"Mere ghar mein bhi yehi kehte hai." She sulked again.

"Kya kehte hai?"

"Yehi ki main chotti hoon…." She pouted.

Krishna laughed a little and said, "Tum chotti hi toh ho."

Bani protested, "Nahin. Main dus saal ki honewali hoon. Main badi hoon."

Krishna didn't want to drag the topic, "Achcha baba, tum badi ho. Khush."

"Haan." Bani said with a bright smile.

Hence started their conversation with badi-badi, chotti-chotti baatein. Krishna once invited her to their house. She did not say whether she had informed in the house or not, but she became a regular visitor to their house. Though she comes nearly every day, she never ate much in their house as if it is rule. During the weekends, she used to stay the whole day over there. She went to her house, only for having food in the afternoon.

Jai noticed a small girl in their house after he came from his work in the evenings. Both of them did not speak with each other in the beginning. They would stare at each other as if they were perfect strangers, but they met nearly everyday. Only when one day Jai smiled and acknowledged her, she responded and spoke with him just like she used to speak with the ladies and elder people of the house. As the days passed, her affection for Jai increased a lot. She always called him by his name. Jai felt different. At 25, he was used to being called 'bhaiyya' by his sister, Jigyasa, later maama by Anu, Jigyasa's five year old daughter. So Bani calling by his name made much difference to him. She used to make him do the things she wanted him to do. She used to go for a 15-minute cycle ride sitting behind him in the cycle all round the town, nearly every day. She made him buy bhel-puri and samosa for her and munch it offering the remaining to him. It was Jai who would clean her mouth and her dress. Jai would gladly do all she would say. He started to become so fond of her. She was like a pet to him. During week-ends, when she used to sit beside him and watch the movie in the afternoon, she always fell asleep keeping her head in his lap. It was he, who used to make her lie in a proper position.

But ever since their marriage, though they had rights to share their bed, they never slept together in the same bed, except the day before. And today, as usual, there was no trace of her in the room when he woke up. What no one knew was that he never goes to sleep every night without saying sorry to her picture. The small girl who used to make him buy bhel-puris and samosa with full rights is not even uttering a word in front of him, now. If any one is to be blamed for that, it was either him or, as usual, the destiny.

He got up from the bed and looked around the room. There was no hint of her presence in the room. Sometimes, he wondered whether she unpacked her things after she shifted to the room. All her things were contained in a single small cup-board. Nowhere in the room, could anyone find her things in the room other than the cupboard. Till now, he never knew her favorite place in the room was the balcony. He then started with his daily chores and started to get ready for the office. Today is Friday, he thought as he entered the wash room.

Thanks for reading 😳

Interesting update, sad and sweet at the same time.

Sad because, Jai did not even bother to find out where she was before she went to sleep.😭

Sweet the convo between Krishna and Bani and how Jai got to know her. 😊

Funny he misses her not in his bed in the morning...but we will find out why he says sorry to her picture and not to her face. 😕

Hey Abilasha,
it was a interesting update, what happened was to much drastic that made them like strangers to each other,
do continue soon 😊

great part 👏 👏
i wonder what has happened that it has changed Jai and Bani's relation in such way 😕

continue soon

Abhilasha,

Very intriguing, the friendship culminated in marriage and also consummation, now come the regrets, poor Bani, looks like she is stuck between a rock and hard place. Like her sketches...

Please continue soon!

gr8 part 😊
really loved the flashback 👏
hmmmmmmmm bani and jai were frends.....then wat happened 😕
plzzz cont. soon 😊